issue241 [color=fuchsia]是非功过谁与评说. 第一次限时失败.70分钟啊.痛

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从2004年6月26日18时10分到2004年6月26日19时20分
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An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time.
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The speaker claims that it is people who belong to a later time that can evaluate an individual's greatness objectively rather than their contemporaries. Critics may say the contemporaries hold more objective attitude toward such great people. However, in my point of view, the most objective evaluation of an individual's greatness results from their descendant people who hold a more fair attitude.

Admittedly, some individuals' greatness can also be admitted in their time. The Nobel Prize every year can be a good example. Each year, the Nobel Prize which is honored the greatest academic glory in the world is granted to the scientists who have great attribution to the such fields as Economy, Peace, Literature, Medicine, Physics. It is undoubted that the people who is honored with such prize is highly evaluated by his/her contemporaries. The evaluation can also be seen in other fields besides research. Take beauty competition for an example. Miss globe competition was just held in Sanya China, the last winner was regarded to be of both beauty and wisdom, she was evaluated to be the number one of all the competitors by the judgers and audiences---her contemporaries. However, we cannot draw a conclusion that the contemporaries can judge objectively on an individual's greatness, for there were many exceptions in the history of human.

Many genius in the history of human became of titters or even persecution despite their outstanding greatness. Van gogh, regarded as a talent on painting nowadays, who had created many invaluable paintings such as Sunflowers and Starry Night, ended his life in suicide after struggling with depression and poverty. As the representative of the postimpressionist, he was distained and ignored by the people of his time, his painting was considered to be worthless. He was reevaluated objectively many years later after his death. Another example is Copernicus who assumed that we earth as well as other planets spinned around the sun rather than vice versa, that  Ptolemaic claimed. But a period after his death, this theory was not accepted, the authorities of that time even sentenced 布鲁诺 who carried such belief firmly  to stalk. Of course, we all know that Copernicus was right. Hence from the examples above we conclude that the contemporaries cannot  always give objectively and correctively judgment.

What cause the fallacious evaluation? Many reasons result in  this, I am afraid. First, also the most crucial, it is the greatness of the genius that go beyond the contemporaries' understanding that make them have a false evaluation.  When Einstein generalized into the general  theory of relativity, nearly no one in the world can understand. It is not surprising that it was his explanation of the photoelectric effect that made him get Nobel Prize of physics in 1921 rather than the theory of relativity although the latter seems much more valuable. Last but not least, many inventions were not brought into play until many years later, so the greatness was ignored naturally at that time.

To sum up, from the reasons mentioned above, it is comfortable for me to draw a conclusion that in order to attain a more objective evaluation on the greatness of people, it is more rational to rely on the people's judgment who belong to a later time.


b1. admittedly, 同时代的人也会做出精彩的评价。各种奖项就是对个人成功的承认。但我们必须看到历史上很多天才是在其死后很多年才被人们承认，而遭受了同时代人的嘲笑甚至迫害。
b2.van gogh;Copernicus
b3.为什么会有这样的情况，因为：真理往往掌握在少数人手里，greatness不能被同时代的人们所理解；只有后来人才能站在更加客观的角度评价前人的作品，同时很多前人的部位当代人所承认的设想在未来成为了现实，这就为他们的greatness提供了依据。

eraserUID: 167778

The speaker claims that it is people who belong to a later time that can evaluate an individual's greatness objectively rather than their contemporaries. [U]Critics may say the contemporaries hold more objective attitude toward such great people. [/U]  （这句非但多余而且影响论证）[U]However[/U] , （这个转折同样没必要）in my point of view, the most objective evaluation of an individual's greatness results from their descendant people who hold a more fair attitude.（其实你但可先旗帜鲜明的表明自己的观点，然后稍作阐述和小让步）

Admittedly, some individuals' greatness can also be admitted in their time. The Nobel Prize every year can be a good example. Each year, the Nobel Prize which is honored the greatest academic glory in the world is granted to the scientists who have great attribution to the such fields as Economy, Peace, Literature, Medicine, Physics. It is undoubted that the people who is honored with such prize is highly evaluated by his/her contemporaries. The evaluation can also be seen in other fields besides research. Take beauty competition for an example. Miss globe competition was just held in Sanya China, the last winner was regarded to be of both beauty and wisdom, she was evaluated to be the number one of all the competitors by the judgers and audiences---her contemporaries. （这个例子有点牵强吧？选美小姐谈得上伟大吗？）However, we cannot draw a conclusion that the contemporaries can judge [U]objectively [/U]  （副词应该放在动词前面；可考虑在加个限定词，因为并非全都不客观）on an individual's greatness, for there were many exceptions in the history of human.

Many genius in the history of human（were） [U]became of [/U]  titters or even persecution despite their outstanding greatness. Van gogh, regarded as a talent on painting nowadays, who had created many invaluable paintings such as Sunflowers and Starry Night, ended his life in suicide after struggling with depression and poverty. As the representative of the postimpressionist, he was distained and ignored by the people of his time, his painting was considered to be worthless. He was reevaluated objectively many years later after his death. Another example is Copernicus who assumed that we earth as well as other planets spinned around the sun rather than vice versa, that Ptolemaic claimed. But a period after his death, this theory was not accepted, the authorities of that time even sentenced [U]布鲁诺 [/U] （Bruno 呵呵，他的大名不难记啊） who carried such belief firmly to stalk. Of course, we all know that Copernicus was right. Hence from the examples above we conclude that the contemporaries cannot always give objectively and correctively judgment. （这几个例子有点老套哈！）

[U]What cause the fallacious evaluation? [/U]  （前面应该再加一句，使与上文衔接好）Many reasons result in this, I am afraid. First, also the most crucial, it is the greatness of the genius that go beyond the contemporaries' understanding that make them have a false evaluation. When Einstein generalized into the general theory of relativity, nearly no one in the world can understand. It is not surprising that it was his explanation of the photoelectric effect that made him get Nobel Prize of physics in 1921 rather than the theory of relativity although the latter seems much more valuable. Last but not least, many inventions were not brought into play until many years later, so the greatness was ignored naturally at that time.

To sum up, from the reasons mentioned above, it is comfortable for me to draw a conclusion that in order to attain a more objective evaluation on the greatness of people, it is more rational to rely on the people's judgment who belong to a later time.
你自己再好好改改， 已经很不错啦！

GanymedeUID: 159195

事实告诉我们， eraser是个good people
bow 一个

Michael7UID: 57920

私以为，如果将b3,与b1调个位置，是否能够更好一些。老外喜欢开门见山嘛。
另外，希望b1是个小转折，而非论述重点，放在前面往往容易写多，呵呵。
语言不错，向你学习！加油！

GanymedeUID: 159195

私以为，如果将b3,与b1调个位置，是否能够更好一些。老外喜欢开门见山嘛。

以前都是把admittedly放在b3，但这个感觉放在前面更容易引出后面的两段，所以就…………
呼呼~~
语言不错？真的是谢谢了，来这的几天，我从没奢望还能被评价到这一点
无论如何得努力了，只有20多天了
一起hands

eraserUID: 167778

最初由 Ganymede 发布
[B]事实告诉我们， eraser是个good people
bow 一个 [/B]

大家互帮互助嘛！
其实我还要多多向你学习，你的文章的却已经很不错了。我只剩十九天了，可还一棵椰树都没种下!