issue112 (第三篇）恳请指正，谢谢！

ritchiepanUID: 168957

issue112: "Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."

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总论点：logical thinking 和 exploration emotions 都必不可少，当然两者结合是最理想的。
分论点  1。logical thinking 是我们职业，各学科，日常生活中基本、重要的能力，使我们独立理性地处理事务，避免感情用事
2。explore the emotions 也必不可少，使我们更了解自我，从而控制自己的情绪，否则，心理容易扭曲，即使较强的logical thinking 能力也无法避免让人走极端
3。两者结合是最佳选择，也正是教育的目标。在拥有logical thinking能力的基础上，通过explore emotions去感受自己心灵深处，从而也更能体谅他人，提高交际能力，同时更有充分发挥logical thinking的机会，成为社会有用之人
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I agree with the assertion that it would be more beneficial not only to inculcate students the ability of and logical reasoning, but also to instruct them to probe into their emotions, for both two capacities are equally essential, helping students remedy problems independently and better understanding themselves, as well as improving communication skills so as to become well-being people.

To begin with, the capacity of logical thinking and reasoning is worth emphasizing, for it equips students with the competence, which is basic for one's life, to independently deal with problems or situations in a scientific and effective method. After all, there are many logical rules, widely existing in people's professions, various disciplines, as well as daily life. Consider a profession of football coach for instance. When a match goes, a qualified coach is supposed to be capable of analyzing the intention of opponent's substitution, rather than depending on feelings. And correspondingly, adjusts the players and formation to domain the match and beat the opponent. Also, when it comes to the disciplines in colleges, especially some science subjects, the ability of logical reasoning is indispensable to grasp a objective understanding of them. Further, without the capacity to consider and analyze things logically, people would tend to draw some conclusions only based on their emotions. For example, one who lacks such ability is inclined to mistake others' well-meaning jokes into mocks, thus probably lose some friends. Thereby, the capacity of logical reasoning makes students into thoughtful people, who can solve problems independently and effectively, instead of judging things only by emotions.

Next, the exploration of emotions is another necessary constitution of students' learning. Since emotions, as we all know, arise from the abyss of our heart, through observing and concerning of our thoughts and emotions, we can better know ourselves, then find a suitable way to control our impulses that is possibly dangerous. Take a Chinese student who killed his four roommates for example. He is a benign boy in everyone's eye in his college, and endued with the strong sense of logical thinking which helps him to win some mathematics contests years ago. However, an accidental quarrel with his roommates this year just drove him mad. Through investigating his unexpected behavior, the police get to find that it is his accumulated inferiority complex caused by the gap between poor and rich that made him lose senses. Obviously, there do exists the way to prevent such brutal behavior occurring. In other words, if the student had been taught to explore his emotions frequently, that is, to discover his potential evil will earlier by himself, the logical reasoning ability might have helped him overcome it and substitute it with a agreeable one. Hence, it is worthwhile to pay attention to help students learn to explore their emotions, in order to avoid distortion of their minds.

Of course, the combination of the ability of logical reasoning and the exploration of students minds makes the education attach its goal. Since most of students have already had the basic logical skills, the instructions about exploring their own emotions can be understood more easily. With the better understanding the feelings arising from the abyss of our hearts, also can we better understand  others. Consequently, our communication skills, without which hardly can we gain our success, tend to be improved. Gradually there develops into a more harmonious social environment, in which our logical thinking ability is more conducive to be beneficial to the society. At the same time, students will be cultivated into well-being people, who have great logical thinking skills as well as the full knowledge  of themselves under the combination.

In sum, the capacity of logical reasoning and the exploration of students' emotions are equally necessary to help students deal with various problems independently and discover the potential wills from their sensitivities. And the combination of the two will surely make students approach perfect as well as be qualified for the society.

ritchiepanUID: 168957

自己先up一下吧

paisleyUID: 64183

我认为题目并不是说A好，B也好。而是说，有些人认为A好，而有些人认为B好，虽然它用了个more。所以你的第一段不应该曲解题目的意思，然后说你也同意。还不如说你认为应该综合二者。

不过我本人不喜欢这种折中的写法。很容易流俗，之后就难写出有深度的东西来，写来写去都一个样子。

你的语言很不错！

arise from the abyss of our heart 其实abyss一般做贬义，还不如bottom

另外，感觉你对emotions的阐述浅了一些。如果我来写，我会指出人生并不仅仅在于知识（reasoning and logical thinking），而在于体验，包括对于欢乐、哀愁、幸福、痛苦的体验，也包括在进行逻辑思考时获得的对“智慧”的体验。除却体验的知识是可悲的，人生仿佛空有宝藏而不能亲眼看见，体验的缺席是巨大的憾事。

你可以看看精华区的范文，分析他们是怎么说理的。还有这篇文章里讲的思路，非常值得学习。https://bbs.gter.net/showthre ... =%BD%CC%C2%DF%BC%AD
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你这篇文章，类似的和相关的文章可能有许多前人写过，或者还有范文。你可以搜索一下，对照一下这些文章。 或参照该帖：《在本版找前人作文的方法》http://211.151.90.54/bbs/showthr ... hlight=%CC%E2%BA%C5
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希望你也能多多修改其他朋友的文章。尤其是提点结构上和想法上的建议。因为你不可能每个题目都练过来啊，看别人的题目，自己脑子过一遍,既可以给别人提建议，自己又多了一次训练的机会.为别人服务的人优先得到斑竹的修改哦！

ritchiepanUID: 168957

谢谢paisley！！
特别是关于“emotions”的阐述，使我有更深感悟了
看别人文章也很受启发，一定多多参与到作文互评！