issue同主题写作-第三类 8月12-13日

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tesolchina 发表于 2017-8-7 14:31
3)    Method of inquiry or development of a field (2, 9, 22,  27, 56, 77, 103, 105,  143)
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ISSUE 2 To understand the most importatn characteristics of a society, one must study ist own major citieis .
Write a Response .... shape your position.
作文提纲：
开头段:claimer提出要研究一个社会的重要特征，就要研究其主要城市，这个提议在一定程度上有一定的道理。但是研究一个社会特点特色有很多的方法，或许一个社会最重要的特征并不能从研究其主要城市当中得出。
正文段1：城市，尤其是主要城市，确实可以在某种程度上展现一个社会的某些特征。
正文段2：但是研究一个社会特征的方法还有很多，而且不能保证研究主要城市的方法就是最好最有效的。
正文段3：一个社会的其他区域，比如乡村，也非常有特色，而且往往更具地方特色。

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3、The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things.（103）

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第1种，by introducing (usually new) concepts。从passionate interest产生影响的3个方面——（专注）投入的程度、涉猎（相关）的广度、（可）持续进行的时间进行论述。

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
The excellent ideas could barely come out without a strongly passionate interest in commonplace things. The concentration of devotion, the wide range knowledge of relevant and the sustainable spending time, which are arose from a passionate interest, are essential to come up with the best ideas.

主题句1
No doubt that the concentration of devotion, derived from a strong interest in some common things, plays an important part in forming best ideas.
具体例子或细节
--influencing the willingness to do such commonplace things
--influencing the eager to do these things much more than expected
--influencing the efficiency in doing such common things

主题句2
A passionate interest in ordinary things could encourage learning wide range knowledge of relevant, then lead to the appearance of best ideas.
具体例子或细节
--influencing the interest in relevant areas
--leading to forming a complete knowledge system, beneficial to broaden mind

主题句3
As the famous 10000 hours rule shows, the sustainable spending time, which correlates with a strongly passionate interest, can eventually bring about excellent ideas.
具体例子或细节
--spending more time to accumulate the fundamental element
--more time, more experienced, more possibility to get a fabulous result

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
这个题目比较抽象，感觉不太好写。思路磕磕绊绊的，希望能找到更好的想法。

我来点评其他网友
楼层：18楼

1）grepph网友提纲的框架是否合理？
作者的意见与题目相反。从题目的观点出发，到提出自己的两点看法。从研究heroes or role models至everyday life、prospect for the future，由小至大，脉络清楚。
2）grepph网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第一个TS中，例子合适，但是能写出与understand the character of a society相关联的逻辑推理或者联系就更清楚。
第二个TS的第一个Example似乎与观点的关系不大。
第三个TS合适，但是最好能有2-3个例子能展开讲。
3）grepph网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
很棒。作者的语言很流畅，读起来特别舒服。

grepphUID: 3814407

122 The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Framework: consider an issue from different perspectives.

Although men and women that are regarded as role models have the character that is accepted and admired by the public, the character of a society is much more complex that can’t be completely understood by examining the character of the nation’s heroes. To have a better understanding of a society, it’s important that we put emphasis on people’s everyday life and the prospect for the future in the society as well.

Ts1: Each society has its own heroes who represent the society’s belief in a certain way, and they can be regarded as role models only if they are good examples for the public to learn from.
Example 1: Mao Zedong. Fight for the freedom of China, concern about the benefits of the public; brave, perseverance.
Example 2: Columbus. America chose him to be the hero, and they made him have certain character even if he did not. So Columbus was kind of a hero in people’s mind and Americans at that time were eager to find such a person to represent the freedom.

Ts2: The character of a society is also closely related to every individual and their feelings about everyday life, for the simple reason that the society is comprised of individuals.
Example 1: When we’re abroad, we should always remember that our images represent the whole country’s image and behave well.
Example 2: Chinese dream. Everyone fulfills their own dream, and Chinese dream can come true.

Ts2: The prospect for the future is part of the character of a society, which influences every decision the country makes and helps to unify the whole nation.
Example 1: China fights for the peace of the world. Help countries that are in need.

困惑：1、之所以选择这道题目，就是因为我觉得对我而言它不好写。我尝试让文中vague的观点具体化，但感觉还是远、大、空。不知道对于这种非常抽象的问题怎么具体化更好？写这些内容算不算是讨论敏感话题？
2、组织语言的速度慢，一句话第一遍写的时候总是不理想的，要改好多遍，怎么训练呢？

我来点评其他网友
楼层： 17

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
框架很合理，new concepts展开的很好，3个论证方面都很切题，很有力。
2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
我觉得例子更多地像是理由，这样解释肯定也可以拓展开来讲，但是感觉更明确的实际例子会更有说服力。
3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
我觉得很棒，言简意赅。如果作者希望增加一些，可以引入些background。
以上是我的个人想法，感谢分享！

维和部队_UID: 3791234

2. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

   Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我主要把most important characteristics 细分了一下，分政治，经济，文化三个点讨论。其实我一直分不清那三个框架，感觉都差不多，都是分类讨论的思想。这个算是第1or3种？whatever。还没看这题的范文和其他楼写的，不过我估计这题思路可能都差不多，我也实在找不出什么新角度了。
Intro
When it comes to knowing about a country, people have a tendency to start with some cities in the country. Given that the most significant features of a nation can be divided into three representative parts—namely politics, economy and culture—it is actually reasonable and necessary to study its major cities which can fully reflect these three aspects. Therefore, I agree with the statement that major cities are indispensable research targets for the better understanding of a society.
Ts1
First of all, in order to know about the political system which is the basis of the property of a society, its capital city as the center of politics is necessary.
e.g. When we learn about each dynasty of China history, the capital as the place of power centralization is the necessity.
Ts2
In addition to politics, the economy plays another essential role in the society construction and finial center must be one of major cities.
e.g. NYC for US, Shanghai for CHN, both are the financial center of its society, standing for the advance economic pattern
Ts3
Culture as the soft-power of a country is likewise of paramount importance for understanding a society. At the same time, it is often the case that vibrant major cities are culturally rich.
e.g.  Renaissance culture in Florence for Italy, entertainment culture in LA for US


点评 10楼

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
ts1&2算是双向并列的，ts3想说明现有的社会规范（or想说的是旧观点和旧思想？）是最重要的，这个的论证没有体现。Youth trend的主要特点是新但不完全等同新吧，对立面也不是tradition吧. For example, how does it account for the retro trend led by the youth?

2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
t1的例子很贴切，但是ts2&3缺少立论支持，可能对应的例子也不是很好想吧。

3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
  没有什么语法毛病。前后句的衔接可以再自然流畅一些（coherence & cohesion）。个人觉得铺垫略长。

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2. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

  Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第2种 从不同角度进行论述。对题目进行分析，为了理解一个社会的最重要的特征，必须研究它的主要城市。也就是说主要城市中能够理解这个社会的最重要的特征。那么从哪些方面研究主要城市呢？城市中的经济发展和产业特点能够体现社会的内涵特性；从城市生活环境能够体现一个人的生活理念，而生活理念直接构成了社会特性；城市文化也是大众的文化，虽然不同城市的城市文化有所不同，但同一个社会中的城市文化必有相同点，这个相同点也就是社会特点。

我的提纲如下

TS：
Studying the major cities is a superior way to understand foremost characteristics of a society. Although some people claim that some differences exist between the major cities and rural areas, the culture behind the society is almost same, which is the core of a society. Because the society properties cover politic, economic, environment, culture and so on, one can understand it by studying the major cities from the perspectives of economic, living environment and city culture.

主题句1：
The city's economic development and major industries can reflect the city's main features from which the characteristics can be inferred.
eg:
USA: New York (Financial industry), Silicon Valley (High-tech industry);   
Russia: Petersburg (Heavy industry)
Reasons:
The economic major industries of major cities and determine the national and social industries and the economy, the important characteristics.

主题句2:
The major cities' living environment can reflect the cultural characteristics of society.
eg：major cities in China (higher vegetation coverage), major cities in the USA (building forest)
Reasons:
Urban life environment can reflect a person's life philosophy, and the concept of life directly constitute the social characteristics.

主题句3
The culture of the main cities can reflect the society cultural characteristics.
eg：major cities culture in China & USA
Reasons:
Although the city cultures of different cities are different, the cultures in one society will have the same point, the same point is the social characteristics.


点评 19楼

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
从政治经济和文化三个角度分析城市反应社会文化是合理的，本文着力反应不同的城市可以看出一个社会的不同的特点。不过我认为这样的思路是第二种思路，就是从三种角度来分析问题。

2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
所有的例子都能论证分论点，例如中国经济特点可以从上海的研究中得到，这个逻辑链条是行得通的。但是中国的普遍经济特点是否和上海一样呢？中国大部分城市并不像经融中心一样，中国大多人口也不在上海。其他角度也有类似的问题。

3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
  语言没有问题。

MorfireUID: 3747042

2. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  分类，具体来说，把重要特征分为：经济（主要城市经济不能代表一个社会）、政治、文化（乡村城市各有不同）

我的提纲如下
开头段全文：
Although people tend to only focus on cities with the most influence when they discuss the society, and indeed those major cities have enormous impacts on a society, it is still imprudent to neglect small cities or countryside in terms of economy, culture, and politics.

主题句1
Granted, metropolises have the busiest currency steam and attract businessmen from other cities to settle their companies there, those minor cities could not characterize the whole society in light of economy since they only sketch the most brilliant part.
具体例子或细节
Especially for a country with large area of rural cities: bad delivery, payment based on cash, agriculture vs service

主题句2
Second, culture is divided into several parts, depending on major cities and countryside. No matter where they come from, different art styles thrive in various part.
具体例子或细节
Cosmopolitan artists have broader horizon. vs. Artist from village have affinity with countryside scenery, and they have more freedom to express their feeling.  Folk music    academic style

主题句3
As for politics, it is true that major cities are the best materials for research; laws and policies have fastest and strongest influence on them.
具体例子或细节
Local government of major cities have more control, and they respond to new policies faster.
In order to manage the big city, they always are strict.
politics based on major cities.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
政治部分不太会写……写着写着又觉得小城市的政治也不容忽视，但不知道怎么说。

我来点评其他网友：楼层： 23

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
合理。
但是不太确定death是否算是ordinary thing

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
我觉得段2的例子有点冗余，讲方法的时候多扣一下 日常 比较好。


3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
literaral criticism（TS1）打错
Even the most radical literaral criticism arises from meticulous observation of and the passionate interest in the commonplace.这句话有问题吧。
use ordinary people as experiment subjects  use不太合适吧，view？

eerri2000UID: 3817309

77 The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Teenagers almost determine the trends of the contemporary of a country. The relationship of contemporary culture and its youth is very close. Thus to understand contemporary culture it’s better to analyze the trends of its youth.
TP1:
Compared to middle-aged stars, young stars have an greater influence on young people. Young people attract the corporations, who will advertise for young stars to cater for the youth to make more profit. The power of these corporations would dramatically affect the trends of contemporary culture.
Example 1. The development of action movie and special effect.
TP2:
Teenagers have more passion and creativeness than the elders, they could reshape culture of certain yield, which in turns determine the trends of contemporary culture of that yield.
Example 2. Justin Bieber learn singing skills from his teachers and then develop his own style. This style then influences the contemporary music since he is one of the most people who attract the majority of the teenagers in this world.
TP3:
While analyzing the youths could give us a good understanding about contemporary culture, it is also necessary for us to investigate the styles constructed by those middle-aged people or even elders. Any culture has its own history and conventions, by analyzing these conventions we could know the origin of new styles, which could help us get a comprehensive vision of these styles.
Example 3: As for the Star Wars movie series, by comparing the first three series and the latest series, we could know the developing progress of these fictional movies as well as the changing of  techniques used in these movies.


这篇是我7月9号考的原题，我基本上是凭着记忆写出当时考试的时候写的一些句子，然后按照提纲的写法列了出来。当时考试的时候觉得这个题目特别不好写，也有点紧张，导致最后句子和逻辑都有点乱。

这个提纲我主要是写出两个支持论点的理由，TP1 和 TP2， 然后立反地写出同样也需要分析 中年代表的作品来更好地分析当代文化的传承（heritage）。 但是感觉这个逻辑有点问题，句子也不是特别好，还望指点。

遠子wUID: 3788646

The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Method: different fields- literature, economics, astronomy

Throughout history, innovations and progresses in different fields enable human being to discover crucial findings and understand the society from distinctive points of view. While adventures and technology advancement in astronomy lead to important findings that gradually crack the riddles of the universe, economists invent new theories to explain people’s ordinary behaviors in the social context. So, one may ask what do these new progresses come from, an interest in ordinary things in our society or a passion about elusive phenomena? I think the answer is not definite; it depends on different fields. I will discuss this issues on three fields: literature, economics, and astronomy.

TS1:

In the Literature field, the most thought-provoking works and literary ideas is based on reflections of human’s experience and the commonplace in people’s lives. It is said that the objective of literature is to record and reflect in human’s experience. Even the most radical literaral criticism arises from meticulous observation of and the passionate interest in the commonplace. Take Balzac’s The Human Comedy as an example. It is a masterpiece in French literature and the pioneered opus on criticizing the entrenched evil of capitalism. The gigantic work comes from Balzac’s reflections toward the ordinary things in capitalism and his own experience. He includes detailed and vivid description of the operation of usury and debitors’ lugubrious situation so as to criticize the indifference and avarice of capitalism in France. The inspiration of this work comes from the commonplace events in people’s lives at Balzac’s period. Besides, two major themes in literature, love and death, are also important elements of an ordinary life. Therefore, the examples above illustrate that the best inspiration in the literature field arise from an interest in the ordinary things.

TS2:
Likewise, in the Economics field, the most important and influential economic ideas comes from observations and comtemplations about the ordinary events and operations. After all, the objective of economics is to understand people’s common behaviors. For instance, the most significant findings in Experimental Economics involves understandings of people’s altruistic behaviors, trusting behaviors, and strategic behaviors in different social context. Economic researchers use ordinary people as experiment subjects to gather data and understand their behaviors. They may also gather secondary data on the Internet to try to discover important insights. Moreover, new theories have also been proposed to explain people’s strategic behaviors in bargaining with a real estate agent, their behaviors in an auction, or their investing behaviors. Thus, we can see that Economists are interested in finding an optimal answer to explain people’s ordinary behaviors.

TS3:
In contrast, the best ideas in the astronomy field are related to understanding unexplained truth that remains elusive to common people. Astronomy deals with complicated problems that are not encountered by ordinary people in their daily life. In other words, finding whether there are other lives on other planets outside the solar system is not an interest of ordinary people, neither are the distinctive characteristics of different planets in the solar system. Astronomical issues are distant, niche, and more focused within the academic field. Therefore, unlike the idea and finding in the Literature and Economics field, the optimal idea about astronomy arises from a passion about elusive phenomena and truth.

ChiuChiKwanUID: 3828648

9.In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我采取的是第二种方法，分情况讨论，一种是创新阶段，而创新阶段又分为把完全没有基础以及把前任的推翻，一种是提升阶段

TS: Whether it is possible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field depends on some circumstances. If at the beginning ,the significant contribution needs making without the past because there isn't any basic. But even when there are preconditions, it is possible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements,after all, not all the past achievement are completely flawless. However, as Newton said,if I have seen farther than others, it is because I was standing on the shoulder of giants. To some extent, it means with the past achievement, it can be easier to develop.

TS1:For the very beginning period, no basic exists and nothing can be relied on but a significant contribution still can be made. Otherwise, the society can't make progress.
example: In the ancient times, people learn to make tools by stone or wood. Chinese created Chinese characters.

TS2: When something contradicted happened and some phenomena couldn't be explained, a new breakthrough means breaking the rules and challenging the authority, just like mathematical crisis. Otherwise, if based on the past, some contradictions happens and couldn't be explained, not to mention a significant contribution.
example：Renaissance, mathematical crisis and relativity.

TS3: For fields that are about to develop, it is necessary to depend on the past achievement to make a significant contribution.
example:  Newton established classical physics system which is based on Galileo and the heliocentric theory


中间练笔(TS 2)：
     When something contradicted happened and some phenomena couldn't be explained, a new breakthrough means breaking the rules and challenging the authority, just like mathematical crisis. Otherwise, if based on the past, some contradictions happens and couldn't be explained, not to mention a significant contribution. For there is no doubt that Newton had created great and classic physics system while Einstein found it contradict to some theories, or couldn't explain some phenomena. Thus, if Einstein just follow the old rules,there will be less significant contribution in the world! On top of physics, as we all know, in the mathmatical crisis, Pythagoras's student found that irrational number exists, which aroused people's fear as well as challenged his teacher and other authorities because it is Pythagoras that proved that there is only rational numbers. If the student just subodinate to his teacher and authority instead of seeking the truth gallantly, math field can't develop and other fields couldn't benefit from math as much as nowadays could. Therefore, it is possible to make a great contribution without the past basi, especially when the previous achievement is probably flawed.

我第一次看到这个题目，先想着分科目，总觉得自然科学类是不是会基于基础，后来想想也不对，比如无理数的提出，然后看到13楼的分类，先觉得还有这种操作？好棒啊！但觉得自己的好像也没错，然而发现还是兜回来到13楼的分类，我不知道我的第三种就是结合的可不可以，怕会不会写的重了还是？求大佬们点评~

关于13楼的点评
我觉得框架很合适，尤其是第三部分的另一种情况，是我没有充分考虑到的，举例很充分，比如中国的很多例子我都没想到，而且语言也很棒,得学习！

SylviaMengyayaUID: 3693199

No.9 In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Framework: 第三种，对past achievements 进行分类，同一领域和不同领域，同一领域又有正面启发的achievements 和反面启发的achievements。

Intro paragraph: I agree that in any field of endeavor, many achievements are made under the influence, whether positive or passive, of past achievements. Positive influence will guide us to the further breakthrough, while some past achievements, which are actually not suitable for present, can inspire us and prevent us from being led astray. However, not all of significant contributions are strongly influenced by past achievements of the same field, some are inspired by other fields.

Ts1: It is true that many past theories and technologies are still suitable for present and these achievements are fundamental to the further achievements within that field.

Human beings are born with a desire to explore the unknown world. Therefore, attention of scientists has always paid to outer space.  Without the successful launching of the satellite, there won’t be the successful landing of the spacecraft, even the man’s landing on the moon. And these achievements push us to  a deeper exploration of outer space such as men's landing on Mars. Fortunately, we have successfully stepped out our first pace. And I am sure we human beings are able to go further.

Ts2: At the same time, there are some past achievements, once regarded as truth, are proved to be wrong or unsuitable for present.
Example:
in the past people believe that earth was the center of the universe,  Copernicus found that what he had observed was uncoordinated with that theory, he tried to revise but found that the sun is the center of the universe.

Ts3: There are also some significant contributions are made by first being strongly influenced by other fields.
Examples:
the emergence of microbiology resulted in the development of magnifier;
the emergence of some multidisciplinary fields results in the strong influence of another field

感想与困惑：
这个题目的论点还是很好给出的，但是例子不好列举，地心说，日心说，等概念都不会表达，还有科学家们的名字……其实列举自己专业的例子最好，只能怪自己学科的历史没学好 T T 。 表达上感觉不尽人意，另外题目中的“first”好像没太强调，不知道是否影响扣题。

点评楼层：20

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
合理，从经济，生活环境，文化来进行讨论。

2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
经济的例子非常合理，国家主要城市的经济和产业特性，往往反映了整个社会的经济特征。
生活环境上，作者说中国城市有higher vegetation coverage，这点我恐怕不能认同，因为中国许多北方主要城市植被覆盖率不如乡村。但是城市人们的生活理念确实引领着社会，特别是当下信息媒体的发展使得城乡同步的更快。
文化上，个人认为在中国，大城市的文化受世界文化影响更多，不能很好体现中国社会的文化特征，而城镇乡村能更好体现中国文化特征。

3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
没看出什么问题，语言很精炼。

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2. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

   Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  将important characteristics 分成经济和文化
思路：
首先指出社会不是铁板一块，不能用大城市特点概括
经济发展状况看来，由于贫富差距大，大城市不能代表一个社会经济发展状况；由于科技发展差异大，短期内大城市的许多高科技产品无法应用到全国，即使可以预言它会普及，但大城市在很长时间内都领先全国（小城市普及后大城市开发出了更新版本，依然无法代表全国）
文化方面，特别在一个疆域广的国家。 一、民族多，文化多元  二、很多大城市太国际化，不能代表原本社会特点了
最后让步,大城市在某些方面有代表性，如政策走向,所以这个statement正确与否要看讨论的是什么特点

开头段全文：A society is so complex that it refuses to be put in a box, that is why sometimes we cannot simply investigate several major cities and make an ultimate conclusion about the feature of this society. For example, the economic growth of major cities is usually unable to reveal the disparity between rich and poor in this country, which, unfortunately, could be one of the most striking characteristics of the society economy. In addition, when it comes to the culture, which may vary from place to place, major cities are definitely not adequate for case study.


主题句1: In many developing country, the economic growth and the technology used has been uneven, comparing rural and urban regions.

具体例子或细节:
Example1: In china, cities in the east and south coastal region has developed rapidly, skyscraper built, luxuries popular and children sent abroad to study. If you merely look into major cities like Beijing, Shanghai and Guangzhou, chances are high that you’ll make a mistake about Chinese economic situation. (the west part of china….balabala)

Example2: If we want to do research on the usage of technology, the best way is to group the cities in according to the technology development and select cities from each group. because the big, major cities always apply high-tech first, and although we cannot deny that sooner or later this technology will spread nationwide, when the small cities start using it, the major cities have made the technology refined or even used another advanced one! It still can't stand for the whole society.


主题句2: As for cultural characteristics, several major cities are not typical enough to draw a conclusion.

具体例子或细节

Example1: China is a country with vast land and distinctive ethnic groups. The culture could vary between places. For example, the Han Chinese celebrate the New year on the first day of lunar calendar. But in other cities of western china, the minority ethnics have their own new year.  

Example2: The major cities are generally more international and tolerant, with more foreign immigrants bringing their foreign culture. Some say many international cities like New York, Tokyo and Shanghai has lost many feature belonging to its own nation, and thus they can’t reflect the characteristic of the society.

主题句3: The major cities could reveal some prominent features of the society, because they develop the models and patterns that will be copied and imitated by other cities. But it doesn’t mean major cities are representative of a whole society in every aspect. Whether the statement holds true or not depends on which aspect we are looking into and how precise the conclusion should be.

具体例子或细节:让步时可以加一些表明大城市有代表性的例子

Example1: The new policy is applied first in the major cities, through the major city we can know the trend of a society development.


关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑

1、因为比较熟悉中国所以举的例子都是in china in china in  china 这样会不会不太好…?
2、还有题目中说要讨论这个statement对与不对的情况，我只是第三点举了一个major city 可以代表社会状况的例子，有没有讨论得太少呀，要不要加点儿...

小白，求解答~


我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写）



我来点评其他网友：
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1）提纲的框架是否合理？
我觉得分类ok。
但是你的观点是这个statement不够 convincing，第一点就做了让步，二三点才支持了你的观点，我没有用过这个结构不知道好不好，如果第一点做让步，最好别写太多了吧。

2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
part1 主题句写的是技术上，大城市可以代表社会特征，但是例证却提及有写小城市中技术没有普及，那就是说大城市的技术应用现状无法代表整个社会。那是不是又有点和主题句矛盾了？我个人觉得要么就不写小城市技术没有普及的问题了吧。

3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
没有吧  

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电畅UID: 3760079

The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
我使用的框架是第三种；分类文学领域的文化；科学领域的文化；政治界
        Through classification of key terms in the issue statement

本题关键词： contemporary culture; trend; the most effective way.
TS: The trend of youth can reflect on the contemporary culture mostly since they are the future of the society. Being vigorous and energetic, creative, they can always discard the rubbish in the old culture and develop new ones, they are the owner of the contemporary culture. Nevertheless, it’s not perfectly appropriate to say learning about the youth fashion is the most effective way, especially when it comes to literature and scientific field. Besides, the politic respective among the youth can neither represent the whole national culture landscape.
Ts1:  The literature written or read by the youth are merely immature comments and complaint for lives. Only the older and those with more life experience can write better literature works.
Furthermore, the literature field merely consist of young generation. （没讲清楚，就是说在文学界 年轻一代占的比重很小 无论是作者群还是读者群
        Example: the fast food TV series and novel has been popular among the university and high school students. To claim such superficial work as the symbol or local contemporary would be a ridiculous bias.
Ts2:  Unlike, the literature field in which young generation and the older generation have disparate values and tease. The scientific field the youth and older all has diligent scientific spirit and great ambition. However, we can still not randomly conclude the facet of scientific culture based on the youth. The youth are always too energetic that they might not acquire firm subject basis and an eye for the big picture. The culture showed by the young scientist would be always to thirst for achievement and new discovery, in other word, they pay too much attention to succeed fast.

Ts3: politic youth at least the youth around me don’t even care about the politic so much. Their remarks on the politic election and critical event are always general and in the format of jokes. The politic is dominated by the middle age elite and more powerful group. Thus it not an ideal way to learn about the politic dynamic in a specific area if you only concentrate on the younger civilizations.

Social media:
意在突出youth的可能的不成熟没有人生经历；易受影响；急功近利 所以他们追随的东西，不能体现当代社会的主流文化


22楼小伙伴选的也是这个题
我觉得题中有一个比较关键点的词是the most effective way-然后小伙伴的解读是 better to analyze （better than what? ；然后teenager 和youth应该不能等同并且互换的？？然后你好像直接是比较中年和青年，老年呢……
然后其实可以细化一下，决定国家的趋势是指？觉得可能有minor 用词方面的不太恰当哈
P.S.我觉得开头段可以提到几个分论点会在结构上比较的清晰会比较好。以及你用的frame是哪一种？
论点看上去有三个 但好像都是在围绕电影和娱乐圈的？ 几个观点差不多可能会给考官逻辑混乱文章冗杂的感觉？？
不知道你考场上写的时候有没有写 但我看到你的outline会感觉很多要交代的关键细节都没写完整（我也老是这样 翻译成中文马上就能看出来了，你可以试一下
我理解了一下你的essay不知道对不对哈
1.        年轻的明星对年轻人有更大的影响力。。。。题目中说的是年轻人的趋势（时尚）可以分析出当代文化。。然后为什么画风一转到 公司势力？是不是有点跑
2.        Passion & creativeness /
3.        让步


题目中是说为什么分析青年的趋势是最有效的了解当代文化的方式。然后你的答案是青少年有哪些重要品质可以影响文化的trend(他好像没有叫我们论述文化的trend
拙见~多交流哈

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The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.



In the long history of our human development, we came up with copious fabulous ideas and constructed  systematic theories in both scientific fields and the art fields. Where did these spectacular ideas come from? I can not help myself asking. The argument holds an opinion that these ideas, these breakthroughs came from our common things. I partially agree with these idea and I want to make a more specific devision about what are these ideas belong to: for wonderful ideas in the scientific fields such as Physics or Chemistry, I agree than the most resources these ideas came from are in our common lives and things, but for the art fields, from my perspective, I prefer that the ideas or the developments mostly may came from the accumulations and the uncommon life experience of  the man of letters themselves.

In Physics, there are many physic rules existing in our lives or things to wait for us to discover.
e.p.:
Isaac Newton discovered gravity.
Edison invented bulbs basing on physical characteristics of things.

In Chemistry, as we all known, everything consists of chemical particles. A lot of chemists found their new findings using the chemical rules through common things which seems normal for us.
e.p.:
Nobel invented explosive material basing on the typical chemical characteristics of particular things.

However, in Art field, those who create outstanding masterpieces, may base on personal uncommon experiences or stories of himself or herself.
e.p.
Khaled Hosseini wrote The Kite Runner which based on some of true experiences of himself. The hero and his fiend in the novel just like the Khaled Hosseini and his brother in the real tough life , their cherished friendship weathered the test of asperity. Real life  experiences gave the writer writing inspiration. Sometimes, writing may come from life but higher than life itself, uncommon experiences deserve much more attention and deliberation than normal things.（写多了点，为了理顺思路）

困惑及心得：
这个statement需要非常丰富的例子以及许多人名之类的，所以写起来比较费力，考场上我自己觉得自己会比较难写。想请教大家到底怎么样积累例子？
另外，第三点我主要想突出不平凡的经历。写完觉得其实文学方面说是来自平凡事物也是可以的，也比较容易写。


我来点评其他网友：
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1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
框架较合理，不过我个人认为，观点和ts不太统一。
如果我没有理解错误的话，作者应该是想要说不同意题目观点（“we cannot simply investigate several major cities”），那么三个ts应该都是不同意只分析主要城市。但是作者在ts3做了一个让步（大城市在政治方面具有代表性），那么我觉得作者真正的意图应该是部分同意题目观点，而不是不同意题目观点。
从我个人的观点来讲，可以写mostly disagree with this statement because经济、文化，but still， there is some rationality about this statement in the perspective of 政治（政策）

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
像作者说的，用了很多中国的例子，其实我认为，就算把中国换成美国也是一样写的（比如贫富差距，文化多样性）等，所以可以一个写中国一个写美国，而且美国的贫富差距可能比中国还严重。
第三个ts（让步段）其实没有提出具体的例子，只写了一个过渡句。不过政治方面确实比较难写，一些政策的名字也非常具体专业，需要做做功课。建议可以写一些历史上的政策，比如改革开放的时候沿海城市先进行改革，他们体现了整个中国改革开放的趋势等。

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
大问题没有，不过第一句的refuse 我表示好像有点不太地道，不是城市主动拒绝一概而论，而是我们不能一概而论，这里有一个主动和被动的感觉，不过问题不大。
另外和第一点提到的一样，我觉得让步理由也应该写到开头段里。

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HelloC424 发表于 2017-8-13 17:27
The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things.

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