issue同主题写作-第三类 8月12-13日

Herio_HKeKeUID: 3657363

105) Claim: Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience.
Reason: People who lack experience are free to imagine what is possible without the constraints of established habits and attitudes.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.


我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  对问题进行分类，具体来说，将imagination和experience具体到一定的情境下进行讨论，分别是你做什么，你需要解决什么问题和你选择的方法。

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
The argument between imagination and experience never gets a cessation ever since there comes a problem and  uncountable methods to solve it. In my opinion, this disputation should be discussed under three situations: what vocation of the troubleshooter is, what kind of the problem needs to be solved and which way is the best one.

主题句1
A career, a job which people may have to take for a whole life, has the ability to change and stereotype a person's thought patterns.
具体例子或细节
the distinction between a painter and a graphic designer works in an advertising company.

主题句2
Wether experience to be a barricade in solutions or not, in some extent,  depends on what type of the issue is.
具体例子或细节
For some  rigorous problems, such as the medical operations, cannot just be settled under imagination without any preparations. Experience is the best way of avoid boggling at emergencies.

主题句3
Besides,  the measure chose of the problem also can decide the status of experience and imagination.
具体例子或细节
a knit which is hard to be untied, ordinary people may try the normal method with experiences again and again,  some people would just cut it in a mind-boggling way.

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑
分类混乱，举例困难。想可以三个分类合一起讲 但是找不到好的表述逻辑


我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写）



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楼层： 59

1）____网友提纲的框架是否合理？
很合理，但是感觉更好的技巧 全面的知识和更容易得到的好资源这三个点的顺序换一下呈递进关系的话逻辑会更强

2）____网友提纲所用的例子是否合适？
很合适

3）____网友开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
不知道没有明确表达观点的语句算不算，只是反着题目说了一下现在怎么样但是并没有说自己的观点

jlu11UID: 3828748

Issue 103
The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.



With innovation drawing more and more concern, it's well-received to us to seek the way of coming out of great ideas. From my perspective, enthusiasm about the ordinary things is a source,and it applies to various areas of the human life.

主题句1
It's universally acknowledged that many outstanding scientists are well-known for their being enthusiastic about observation.Imitation tend to be made through the careful observation of the surrounding things and then result in the emergence of inventions.
-Consider one of the earliest models of airplane
-Italian inventor Da Vin ci often observed the behavior of the bird species
-The observation leads to the invention

主题句2
Besides science, interests in the commonplace things lead to achievements in the area of literature.As the famous saying goes,‘Art comes from life’. As an essential part of arts, literature desires the observation in common life to make progress.
-Consider the famous chinese poem Field Mouse
-Chinese in the Spring and Autumn and the Warring States period suffered from the administration
-They compared corrupt officials to the commonly seen big mice in the fields

主题句3
The principal proves true in other areas of our life.
-Consider the invention of Micky Mouse
-Disney was passionate about life,though he had to live in a garage
-A little mouse there inspired him



关于第60楼：

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
合理。个人觉得结构很完整，也很有说服力。全文两正一让步。

2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
感觉挺合适的，选取自然科学和制造应用两个领域

3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
讲故事的口吻引入，很有新意，但可能因为是限时，出现“depend on”未改成分词形式的语法错误

丽丽酱香饼UID: 3764419

2. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

   Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种：分类，具体来说，将most important characteristics分为政治（不同公民对国内国际形势的关注度）、经济（不同的消费理念）、文化（不同基础教育普及程度）三类。

我的提纲如下

开头段全文：
It is argued that, in order to figure out the most significant characteristics of a society, studying its major cities is necessary. In my viewpoint, to fully understand a society, including people’s political life, consume concept, and basic education, the rural areas are equally important. Because the political, economic and educational institutions in major city are much different from rural areas and even from small towns.

TS1:
People’ performance in political life represents the political energy of their society, and people’ attitude towards political affairs in major cities greatly differ with those in small towns.
eg.1 To understand the participation of presidential election, only investigating the citizens is not enough, because urban residents may have great enthusiasm to express their opinion but villagers just have no interest in either candidate.
Eg.2 Lots of employers and managers in major city care about the politics and they read newspapers and magazines to keep the pace with the times, while farmers and herdsmen live in village pay no attention to the politics since they think that have nothing to do with them.

TS2:
Another important characteristic of society is people’s consuming concept, which reflects the economy level of the society. Obviously, living standard in metropolitan and countryside are worlds apart.
        Eg.1 When people in big city start to investigate large amount of their money in education or stocks, in rural area, people still need to struggle for their food and clothing.
        Eg.2 Citizens begin to enjoy the credit service, while some villagers still have a long way to learn what is credit and loan.

TS3
When it comes to elementary education, which best embodies the education level of the society, barely look into major cities would lead to a big misunderstanding.
        Eg.1 In big cities, basic education is general, almost every school age child will attend school. However, in rural areas, especially poor country, there are many kids cannot afford school.
        Eg.2 The teaching facilities and teaching quality also have big difference in cities and countryside.  

关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑:
主题句和例子的区分度不够，写主题句的时候容易就代入例子了。如何使思路更清晰呢？

TS1中间段
People’s performance in political life represents the political energy of their society, and their attitude towards political affairs in major cities greatly differ with those in small towns. Urban residents may have great enthusiasm to express their politic opinion because their salary and promotion have strong connection with policy. On the other hand, people in village are apathy since they are less affected by policy. Famers’ yield depend on their land, and the harvest of herdsmen rely on their hunting skills. Clearly, to understand the participation of political affairs in a society, a poll only about the citizens is not persuasive. For example, lots of employers and managers living in major city read newspapers everyday with concentration on political page and talk about related politic news with friends and colleagues in order to seek clues which will affect their professions. While villagers tend to pay no attention to politics since they think that have nothing to do with their life or work. In this case, we cannot get the conclusion that this society has great passion for politic just from the focus of citizens.
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楼层：55

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
框架蛮好，就是第三点有些抽象

2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第三点的例子不够具体，什么city culture呢？

3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？  
指代不够明确
one can understand it——them
the culture behind the society is almost same,——they share the same culture

IbelievingUID: 3744774

Issue 77
The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第1种  支持作者观点通过添加原文的含义，着手点是对the most effective way的解读，on the one hand, the youth reflect comprehensively the contemporary culture, on the other hand, the way to learn about the trends of young people are effective.

写作提纲如下：
开头段：

I believe that assessing the trends of youths is the most effective way to learn about contemporary culture. On the one hand, the young represent not only themselves, but the environment where they grow and their parents, teachers, and relatives. What’s more, they are the most active group of people who always play an leading role of the evolution of culture. On the other hand, it is relatively convenient to collect information about juvenile on the Internet, specifically, searching for Big Data of Facebook, twitter about what they talk about, what they like.

TS1:
Firstly, the youth reflect everything that have ever had influence on them.
Example: what they read is effected by their parents, teachers.
From what they bought when shopping, we could know about the taste of their parents and the peers around them.

TS2:
Secondly, young people usually make greatly attribute to new culture.
Example: the trend of shopping online initiated by those ingenuous young people, as well as sexual liberation

TS3:
Third, we readily get accessed to information of young people’s life by the approach of Big Data.
Example: what the juvenile like and what they talk about are able to be collected on Facebook and Twitter and other app like that.
From shopping website, we could gather the information of what they buy.

感想：这个题目破题点我纠结了很久，我觉得当出现最高级时，最高级应该给予重视。考虑过用第三种方法，但是把contemporary culture 分类也很有难度，但是按我这个思路写的话，中间段展开就比较麻烦了，没有特别具体的例子好写。

长长的冬瓜糖UID: 3817701

我选的第二题


完整题目
2. To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

   Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. 


我写提纲时搭建框架所用的方法是第3种  把the most important characteristics分为
technology level, traditional architecture forms, and unique diet culture.



开头段全文：
The statement that to learn a society's most important characteristics, one must study its major cities is unconvincing, or too absolute to some degree. For different people, the most important characteristics of one society may vary from technology, culture of diet to architecture forms and  so on. Admittedly, some of them just like technology can be reflected well in the major cities of a society. However, other characteristics, such as a society's diet culture and traditional architecture forms, may not present themselves well in large cities than less developed areas like rural areas or small cities in that country.

主题句1
It is ture true that one can learn the technology level of a society by studying their its major cities. Few people can deny the fact that major cities are centers of cutting-edge technology in a country.
具体例子或细节
mobile payment, apple pay; popular in China's big cities; while in rural areas or small cities not widely used (due to less prosperous economy or residents' conventional notion of payment.)

主题句2
However, it would be too naive to only focus on major cities because some other characteristics of a society can hardly be learned merely through its major city. The most obvious example is the traditional architecture forms of a society.

具体例子或细节
courtyard dwelling; dwindle
development in big cities→ demand for increasing number of land→tear down old house→more traditional house disappear, skyscraper instead

主题句3
Also, by only studying the major cities, people can hardly find the most unique and traditional diet in that country.

具体例子或细节
1.在major city人们由于生活节奏快，很少自己做饭，年轻人更是很少学做饭，传统饮食习惯被快餐（KFC, McDonald’s...）取代
2. globalization, each big city have various food from different countries, a society's own diet is less obvious; while in less developed area and rural area, more likely to keep traditional diet




关于这个提纲的写作我有以下感想或困惑 
对于the most important 特征，最重要的特征感觉本身就不好定义啊？要怎么考虑呢

我写的全文 （建议在修改提纲后再写） 



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后面补~

powerfulbeanUID: 3829312

Herio_HKeKe 发表于 2017-8-14 00:41
105) Claim: Imagination is a more valuable asset than experience.
Reason: People who lack experienc ...

有道理，非常感谢!

sweepyouUID: 3559530

I77
The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

I strongly agree with the statement that the youth could reflect every perspective of the contemporary culture. Because of their vigorous nature, they always tend to embrace the new way of living and thinking, without resistance just as the older ones have. By virtue of the power of internet, they can always become opinion leaders and transmit their thoughts quickly and broadly, which makes them the best medium to look into the current culture.

Since the youth are always readily to embrace new ways of living and abandon the outmoded ones, they are the ones to reflect the material aspects of contemporary culture.
-Inclined to live and consume in a convenient and fast way.
e.g.: consume in online shops, ordering food through app
-They also entertain themselves with novel measures.
e.g.: playing VR video games instead of playing cards; chatting with pals of common interests than have a superficial conversation with a neighbor


Furthermore, because of the rebellious nature, the youth also reflect the current culture by revealing new ways of thinking.
-Unlike the older ones, the youth tend to defy the dated opinions from the authority, which makes them suitable subjects to analyze the trend.
e.g.: young political leaders are less conservative


Finally, someone would argue that this measure might ignore some marginalized groups, which may not be true.
-Even some minor groups and sub-culture group could have a say on the internet by its young opinion leaders.
e.g.: LGBT groups, minor ethnic groups and women
-The young may still reflect their parents' way of living, which is also part of the contemporary culture.

这道题能想到不少例子，但是分成几个方面的时候，就非常难，因为例子都是很散的，把它们总结成几个抽象的方面非常需要头脑的清晰。