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Arg 1 Palean Basket unique

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


claim: woven baskets were not only made by the Palean people
data: a "Palean" basket in Lithos, no Palean boats
warrant: Brim River is deep and broad and people could not crossed it only by boats

开头段:
The author of this article argues that the woven baskets were not uniquely Palean for it was not only found in the prehistoric village of Palea but also in Lithos. To support the argument, the author proclaims that Palea and Lithos are divided by the broad and deep Brim River, which could be crossed only by boat. Yet boats have not been found in Palea so far. Although the presence of a Palean basket in Lithos may lead to a presumption that Lithos also produced the baskets, more evidence is needed to be found to access the argument.

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Although it is found that the deep and broad Brim River could have been crossed only by boat, the geologic transformation should be further discovered or explained by scholars to help us evaluate the authors assumption. The width of the river could have changed from the past to present. If the Brim River was broad and inaccessible to cross in the time the ancient Palean people lived, the argument would be strengthened. However, if the River was shallow and did not exist at that time, the author's assertion would not be solid at all.

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Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the ar

Claim: Woven baskets were only made by Palean people.  
Data: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people.
Evidence: Palea is the only place which woven baskets have been found.
Question: Which year/century do the baskets from? What type of character do the baskets have? If they are produced in different years, probably it was handed down generations by generations.

Claim: Other place has ‘Palean’ basket as well.
Data: Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea.
Evidence: Woven baskets also know as ‘Palean’ baskets have been found in Lithos as well.
Question: what was the function of the baskets in Lithos/Palean people’s? Were the function same in two ancient village?
Evidence:  A. a very common container in both Lithos & Palean people’s daily life.
         B. a specific tool
         C. different function in different village   


Claim: Paleans didn’t bring the basket through Brim River. The baskets are originally from Lithos.
Data: The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found.
Evidence: No evidences show that Paleans had been to Lithos.
Assumption: 1. Besides boat, other ways of transportation are also available to pass the baskets. 2. With the same starting material, it is very possible that two villages could produce similar type of items.

Claim: Palean baskets can be made by other too.
Data: Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Evidence: Palean baskets are not only made by Palean.

Introductory:
According to this argument, the author believes that ‘Palean’ baskets are not only made by Paleans but also other people from different village. By finding the baskets in other village, the author assumes that Palea is not the only place that produces Woven baskets. A number of assumptions have been made in the argument by stating that the same type of baskets have been found in Lithos, however, no boat existing evidence shows Palean had been there. These assumptions need to be scrutinized critically to assess the strength of the argument.

Middle 1st:
According the to archeologist’s discovery in Lithos, ‘Palean’ baskets have been found in there as well. By this finding, the author believes that since Brim River is deep and board enough, Palean boat could have passed through it and reached to Litho. However, as the matter of fact there are no evidences show Palean boat had been to here. Therefore, the author assumes that Litho also might ‘Palean’ baskets’ producing place.

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Arg 1 Palean Basket unique

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Claim: The ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat.
Data: The Brim River is very deep and broad.
Warrant: The ancient Paleans could cross the river only by boat because the river is so deep and broad.
Evidence needed:
1.Information about other possible ways for Paleans to crossing the river——bridge, some connections of some parts
2. Is there geographic change from the ancient tonow?

Claim: There was no boat for Palean to cross the river.
Data: no Palean boats have been found
Warrant: The basket couldn’t be sent through the river by Palean
Evidence needed:
1.        some parts of the two sides of river were connected
2.        Lithos might go through the river and carry baskets away

According to the author, the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean because archaeologists found a so-called Palean basket in Lithos across the Brim River from Palea and they believed that there were no ways to bringing the basket cross the river. However, there are some assumptions made in the argument to support the result, we need more evidence about the geographic change in the past, ways to crossing the river and some particularity in geographic condition.

In conclusion, it is difficult to confirm that the palean basket is not uniquely Palean. The possibility and assumptions discussed above could reduce the certainty and the strength of the argument. Thus, we need to take into account more relevant factors on the argument such as the geographic condition and change from the ancient to the current, the other possible ways to help the connection between Palean and Lithos and some other possibilities.

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Arg 1 Palean Basket unique

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
                                                                                                                                          

Claim: the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Data: archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found.
Warrant: The discovery of Palean basket in Lithos, the deep river between these two village and no remains of boat substantiate that the basket is not uniquely made in Palean
Evidence:
Whether the river was as deep as now or even existed
Whether these two villages interacted before through other villages
What type of material made the boat there can it survived the erosion of time

Intro paragraph
In this argument the author argues that since the Palean basket that is originally thought to exist only in one place was found in Litho, the so-called Palean basket was not unique to be Palean. To support this argument, the author emphasizes that the Brim river between these two places is deep and can only be crossed by boat, and noted that there is no trace of boat. Although the purported Palean basket may indeed be made there, more evidence about the river’s history, trade between villages and the material of boat is needed to help evaluate the real origin of this basket.

Mid paragraph
To begin with, evidence revealing the history of the Brim river is needed to help the evaluation of the author’s assertion that the river has always been deep and broad and could only be crossed by boat. However, this does not receive any support in the argument and could possibly be wrong since the earth’s geological changes happen all the time. Record of the river and the analysis of the sediment laying deep in the river can shed light on our judgement. If the evidence turns out that the river used to be shallow or did not exist at all, then the author’s argument is undoubtedly weakened. Otherwise, it is strenghtened.

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151) Benton City residents have adopted healthier lifestyles. A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. During those ten years, local sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, have increased fourfold, while sales of sulia, a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, have declined dramatically. Because of these positive changes in the eating habits of Benton City residents, we predict that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

A recent survey of city residents shows that the eating habits of city residents conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago.
Claim: Benton City residents have a healthier life than before.
Data: A recent survey
Warrant: Conformity to the government nutritional recommendations means a healthier lifestyle.
Question: Representativeness of the survey
- Standard of the survey
- Details of government nutritional recommendations

During those ten years, local sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol, have increased fourfold, while sales of sulia, a food rarely eaten by the healthiest residents, have declined dramatically.
Claim: Benton citizens' diet becomes healthful.
Data: Local sales of healthy food products have increased, while the less healthy ones have decreased.
Warrant: More sales of health food represents a healthier life.
Question: Other factors influencing local sales
- Nature of kiran and sulia

Because of these positive changes in the eating habits of Benton City residents, we predict that the obesity rate in the city will soon be well below the national average.
Claim: Obesity rate in the city will decrease since people have a good eating habit.
Data: Estimation
Warrant: A balanced eating habit will lead to obesity decrease.
Question:Other factors influencing obesity

Introduction:
According to the letter, residents in Benton City have achieved a balanced diet, thus leading to the decrease of obesity rate below the national average in the near future. This projection is based on a survey of local eating habits and a report of local sales of food. We have to ask a few questions about the recent survey, the government nutritional recommendation and local food sales In order to determine the soundness of this argument.

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Given the positive changes in residents eating habits, we still need to ask the question about the cause of obesity. It is true that a healthy and balanced diet would be conducive to decrease obesity rate. However, it is important to bear in mind that there is a host of factors leading to obesity and an unbalanced diet is only a part of it. Maybe genetic factor plays an important role in most of the obesity cases in Benton. As a results, even if people adopt a healthful eating habit, their hereditary obesity would not be cured simply with a salubrious diet. Therefore, in order to decide whether this positive change could decrease local obesity rate, we should collect more information about the possible factors triggering obesity and question the necessary link between the diet and the obesity rate.

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53) The following appeared in a health magazine.

The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

claim:Forsythes' people have a healthier lifestyle
data:a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago
warrant:the more closely to government nutritional recommendations means the healthier diet they had which is a part of healthy lifestyle
assumption: the survey is categorical precise
               - the number of people investigated is too small to reflect the authentic situation
assumption:be close to the nutritional recommendation means health nutritional intake
               - even people's diet be more closely to the recommendations, it may just means the eating habits                  turn back to normal condition since the former ones of locals is unhealthy

claim: Forsythes' people have a healthier lifestyle
data: here has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran
warrant: kiran is a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol
assumption: people buy food products with kiran because kiran is healthy
               - the reason why people consume those food products may just is the taste of them rather than the function of diminishing cholesterol.
               - the company which manufacture those products has discounted them to spur demand.

claim: Forsythes' people have a healthier lifestyle
data: sales of sulia reduced
warrant:  sulia is a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat
assumption: decrease in sales of sulia  means increase in the most healthy citizens
               - it could be the futile harvest or increasing price of sulia results to reduction in sulia's sales.
assumption: the most healthy citizens doesn't eat sulia regularly because sulia is unhealthy.
               - normal healthy people still eat sulia
               - frequency of eating sulia also depends on how hard cook it could be and how busy people are. not    regular does't means never.

Intro:
According to the health magazine, local people in Forsythe live more healthier than before. To substanciate the conclusion, the magazine points out evidence that a survey result about changes of locals' daily diet. Furthermore, it also indicates the trends of sales of specific food. These evidences need to be scrutinized critically to assess the strength of the argument.

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On the other hand, the magazine provides the trends of sales of kiran-products and sulia to explain the healthier changes in residents' lifes. However, the sales changes of these items just can represent a little locals' consciousnesses about health as it can be influenced by numerous factors. Besides kiran's healthy function of diminishing cholesterol, for example, the increasing sales of food products containing kiran may also depend on the ambrosial taste of them or just the discounted price, which cannot evince that citizens have a healthier food choice. And no matter sulia is healthy food or not, the reduction in sales of sulia could also attribute to futile harvest of it. In addition, the definition of sulia is vulnerable because the frequency of eating sulia also depends on how hard cooking it could be and how busy people are. Unless eliminate these irrelevant interferences, the sales of food including its products cannot effectively back this argument.

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The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

Claim:The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data:eating habits are healthier.
Warrant:eating healthy means a healthy lifestyle.

Assumption:healthy Eating habits are the most important thing in our life.

Claim:eating habits are more healthy than before(implied)
Data1:Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago
Warrant1:government nutritional recommendations mean healthy eating habits.

Assumptions1:government nutritional recommendations are healthier than personal diet.

Data2:there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol
Warrant2:more food containing kiran indicate that people hava healthier eating habits.

Assumption2: the population of the city keep stable in the past ten years.

Data3: This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Warrant3:what few of the healthiest citizens usually eat are healthy

Assumption3:that healthiest citizens refuse to eat are not healthy.

开头段:
According to the author of the passage,citizens of Forsythe now live a healthier life compared with that ten years ago, based on the fact that the citizens’eating habits are conform to government recommendations,purchase more kiran-rich food and keep away from what healthiest people seldom buy.A number of assumptions have been made about these facts and need to be scrutinized critically to assess the strength of the argument.

第一段:
To begin with, it is assumed that eating in a healthy way means having a healthy lifestyle.While the citizens are doing well in diet,it does not  follow that they have necessarily paid enough attention to other aspects in life.Maybe a large quantity of the citizens are suffering heavy work load and lack of sleep, either of which will contribute to latent disease.
Unless more surveys are available to suggest that the citizens have actually been healthier except for eating habits, the assumptions made here do not hold.

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1)Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Claim: The so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Data: Archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea.
Warrant: The baskets found in Lithos were local product.
Evidence needed: People in Lithos are able to produce such kind of basket.

Claim: it’s impossible for the Paleans to cross the river
Data: The Brim River is very deep and broad and no Palean boats have been found
Warrant: the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat
Evidence needed: 1. the river is deep and broad in the ancient times.
                          2. the boats that could be used to cross the river never existed

Claim: Woven baskets were believed to have been made only by the Palean people.
Data: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea.
Warrant: Palean people made these woven baskets.
Evidence needed: Palean people are isolated.


开头段:
In the argument, it is concluded that the so-called Palean basket were not uniquely Palean. Firstly, recent discovery of a ‘Palean’ basket in Lithos represents that the woven baskets are not uniquely Palean. Secondly, because of the deep and broad river between these two villages and on boats have been found, the basket found in Lithos is impossible to be made in Palea. While the conclusion could be true, close scrutiny reveals that the conclusion lacks critical support and therefore we need more evidence to help evaluate the argument.

中间段:
In addition, we need more evidence to ascertain that baskets found in Lithos were not delivered from Palea. There are two facts given to support the claim: the river between these two villages is too broad and deep to cross without boat and no Palean boats have been found. However, the reasoning process of these facts are not convincing. For example, it’s possible that, in ancient times, the Brim river was not wide and deep as we see today which would be easy for the Palean to cross. Also, the non-existence of boats at present could be attributed to the reason that these boats have decayed during the long period. Thus, we need evidence of the absolute condition of Brim river in ancient times and of the existence of boats at that time to re-examine the claim.

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144) The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data: survey; food sales.
Assumption:  surveys about people’s eating habits and food sales reveal exactly the lifestyles of citizens of Forsythe.

Claim: Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago.
Data: responses of the citizens to a survey.
Warrant: survey shows the eating habits of citizens is healthier, compared with ten years ago.
Assumptions:
Responses of the survey perfectly shows what respondents think about.
Responses of the survey perfectly represent all the citizens.
The questions concluded in the survey shows exactly the eating habits of citizens.
The questions asked in the survey reveals exactly the governmental recommendation.
The factor used to represent the degree of ten years ago is valid.

Claim: Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol.
Data: sales of food products containing Kiran, a healthy elements.
Warrant: increase of healthy food sales prove citizens’ lifestyles are more healthy.
Assumptions:
the increase of food sales means citizens buy more.
the way of cooking can preserve kiran’s function.

Claim: This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Data: food sales
Warrant: decrease in the sales of food, which the healthy people hardly eat, shows people’s lifestyles are more healthy.
Assumptions:
The healthiest citizens’ dietary habits shows whether food is healthy.
Reduced sales means citizens buy less.
下午补上开头段和中间段。

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53) The following appeared in a health magazine.

The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.


claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.

data:
1)Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago.
2)There has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran.
3) Reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.

warrant:
1) A recent survey can show the change of eating habits during ten years.
2)&3) Increase in sales of food products containing kiran and reduction in sulia mean that more and more people choose to eat healthy food.

Evidence:
1) The number of respondents of that recent survey or how much the percentage of them of all citizens of Forsythe.
2) The kinds of food sold in markets is largely the same as ten years ago. Since the government announced nutritional recommendations, the food industries may change their unhealthy products into more healthy ones.
3) The time of the data that the change in sales of food compared by the author is unclear.
4)The quantity of supply of food contain kiran and sulia during ten years is unclear. Because maybe ten years ago, food contain kiran supplyed in Forsythe were much fewer than now and sulia were more than now which can also results the different trends of sales of food.



开头段:
The magazine concludes that the citizens of Forsythe have live healthier. The author shows three pieces of evidence, a recent survey and trends of food in these years,  in order to support the conclusion. These evidence might seem convincing and valid at first glance, however, it is not logical as the author expects. In order to thoroughly evaluate this essay, more additional evidence is needed.


中间段:
The first piece of evidence needed to evluate the validity of that survey is how many people of Forsythe were interviewed and what proportion of these respondents to all residents in Forsythe.
Since the scale of this survey is unknown, it is unpersuasive to assert that citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.

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your middle paragraph is impressive as it is a holistic review on the research structure and how t ...

I didn't except any instructions for my essay for it is flooded by others quite fast. So thank you, thank you for your advice it’s much needed. I feel like to point out the assumptions by the order of the paragraph, since the survey is the first factor mentioned in the article so I just put it at the very beginning .I’ll give it a thought later. And thank u for mention the evidence thing, I totally forgot it. yep! they should provide blood test data or citizen’s shopping list to make sure they tell the truth…

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53) The following appeared in a health magazine.

The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

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Claim:   the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles

Date:    a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago

Warrant: eating habit which is closed to the government nutritional recommendations is more healthier.

Evidence: 1-the result of survey is representative and valid.
         2- the government nutritional recommendations is suitable for every citizen.

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Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles
Date: there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran which help reduces cholesterol
Warrant: the increasing sale of kiran can help people reduces cholesterol which benefit human health.
Evidence: 1- the scientific study result is wildly accepted and valid.
        2- the scientific study is carried out taken human as example, shown eating kiran can help reduces cholesterol.
        3- The number of population keep constant.
        4- selling kiran is used by civics
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Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles\
Date:  trend of reduceing sales of sulia which is a food most healthy people don’t eat.
Warrant:  reducing sales of sulia making people’s eating habit more healthy.
Evidence: 1 the trend is representative and valid. or The origin source of this information is representative and valid
         2 eating sulia is bad for everyone health.
         3 reduction in selling of sulia means that less people eat it.
Introductory paragraph:
As the statement in a health magazine shows that the citizens of Forsythe is leading a more healthy lifestyles than before. Due to the eating habits which is more closely to the one government recommends, increasing selling of kiran which can reduce cholesterol and lower selling amount of sulia which most healthy people don’t eat, the magazine concluded that those facts verify the more healthy citizen lead. However, more extra compelling and comprensive evidences about survey of eating habit, kiran and sulia sales are needed to support the the argument.

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First of all, the magazine assumed that the recently survey which shows a increasing similarity between the eating habit of citizens and the one authority recommends can reflect the more healthy lifestyles people lead. Though the survey exhibited that civic eating habit became more similar to government nutritional recommendations, it doesn’t indicate that citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Maybe the survey result is only based on few people and therefore is not representative and valid. Also the government nutritional recommendations can’t suit to every citizen, the amount meat which old people and teenager should eat is totally diffident. So extra evidences should be given to support the representative of survey and valid of government nutritional recommendations in order to draw the conclusion that citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles

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Arg 1 Palean Basket unique

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Claim1: Woven baskets were believed to have been made only by the Palean people.
Data: Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Polea.
Warrant: Baskests were just decoveried in one place, so that only made in this place.

Evidence needed: 1) There is nothing about woven products(not only baskets) were found. Or even more specificly, the Palean people made the woven baskets.
                          2) more information such about the woven products introduced into the Palean people's life.


Claim 2:Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Data: archaeologists discovered such a 'Palean' basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea.
Warrant:The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found.
Evidence needed: 1) there is no other ways to cross the river, such as bridge, the rocks.
                          2) the river was as big as it is now.
                          3) there is no other influences such as earthquake, wind, or even flu across the river.

Claim 3: There is no communications between the Palean people and the Lithos' people.
Data: The Palean people can't talk or teach Lithos' people, so that they make the woven baskets by themselves.
Evidencen needed: Any historical documents which first reported the two villages.

Intro progress:
According to the 'Palean' basket discovered by archaeologists in Lithos, an ancient village across the deep and broad Brim River, the argument drew to a conclusion that so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. However, the deduction of the conclusion is not sound unless several assumptions, which means we need more evidence to conclude.
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First, the woven baskets discovered in the Palea must be artificated by the Palean people, not learning from others. Though we have evidence that the woven baskets were discovered firstly in the Palea, there still are many other possiblities, such as they learn from other traders even may came from Lithos. The perfect evidence is the  literaly telling the process how the woven could be made into baskets occured to Palean people.  Besides that, the appropriate years the baskets were made also helps us decide who created the woven baskets first.

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53) The following appeared in a health magazine.

The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. /Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. /Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. /This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.

Claim:   The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data:     Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago.
Warrant:  The survey accurately reflects the result.
Evidence: Need more evidence  about the survey to decide wether the survey can support the claim. ~survey/ eating habit/ sampling issue.
-Survey:how the survey is conducted; how are the questions designed; are those questions reliable and without any implied directions;
-Eating habits: did the survey ask the respondences their eating habits ten years ago as well as now? how did the result of the eating habit come from? is it from the data of old survey or from the  recalling of respondences? for the former, is the old survey reliable? for the latter one, more information need to be shown~
-Sampling issue:  region, age, gender
are the targeted respondents representative to the citizens of Forsythe,or are they just from a particular region?  did these respondences cover all age group, or just one or two age groups? are people in two genders equally responded or one gender outnumber another? because people in two genders may vary in diet habits.

Claim:    The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data:      there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol.
Warrant:  the rapid increase of food products containing Kiran means people’s lifestyles are more healthful.
Evidence:  More information is needed to understand the connection of fourfold increase of food products containing Kiran and more healthful lifestyle.
  ~ kiran/ the food product/ why sales of the food products increase...
-Kiran reduces cholesterol. Kiran is healthful. Fourfold increase of kiran in food is healthful.>>their connection needs more evidences to prove. maybe it is not Kiran but other factors such as good moods that boost people to buy this kind of food, and they feel good, but not actually as good as they imagined.
-food containing Kiran is mainly consumed by healthful people. people who do not consume food containing kiran are less healthful. maybe the kiran food products are mainly brought by less healthful people rather than healthful people. or maybe both kinds of people like it, and it does not have really connections to people’s lifestyle.
-that sales of food products increase may because of other factors, such as market promotion, new favor fashions, failure of the competitors,etc. if it is the case, the survey data may not support the claim.

Claim:      The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data:       This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.
Warrant:   Reduced sales of sulia means most people take more healthful lifestyle.   
Evidence:  more information is required
- if less sulia means being healthful
-  if reduced sales means that less people eat it or because of other factors(market competition)
-  the reason why most healthy people do not eat it is because it is not healthy, not because it just tastes bad, no one likes it.
-  people are healthy due to their exercises or healthy conditions or good moods, do not necessarily have connections to the eating diet or one particular food.
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First paragraph:
[summarize the main conclusion]/[refer to the evidence]/[follow the writing instructions]/[develop the framework of this essay]/[a generic version of response to the writing instructions(better to customize)]

According to a health magazine, the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyle. Citing a recent survey data and two sales of two types of food, the magazine jumps to such a claim. However, to justify it, we need more information about how the survey was conduced and designed and the reasons why the sales of the two types of food would have changed. These evidences needs to be provided to access to the strength of the argument.

3rd body paragraph:
[ point out the evidence to be needed]/
[ evaluate the evidence]/
[ explain how the evidence would weaken or strength the argument]

Furthermore, we need more information about the sales of sulia. According to the magazine, most healthy people barely eat sulia. But does that mean people are healthy because they do not eat sulia? That people are healthy may have nothing to do with their eating habit or one particular food such as sulia. The reason why they are healthy may just because they do exercise regularly into their daily routine and have good moods, etc.  We need more evidence about the amount of sulia to determine whether having less sulia is healthful. Also we need to consider the sales of sulia. It could be caused be factors that are completely unrelated to people’s lifestyle at all. Maybe the reduced sales is due to the market competition. Maybe sulia as a type of raw material goes high in price, so less and less people buy it and turn to its substitute. If this is the case, the data may not support the claim. Also, we need to further evaluate wether the substitute is healthful to people or not.

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