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53) The following appeared in a health magazine.
The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. /Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. /Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. /This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data: Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago.
Warrant: The survey accurately reflects the result.
Evidence: Need more evidence about the survey to decide wether the survey can support the claim. ~survey/ eating habit/ sampling issue.
-Survey:how the survey is conducted; how are the questions designed; are those questions reliable and without any implied directions;
-Eating habits: did the survey ask the respondences their eating habits ten years ago as well as now? how did the result of the eating habit come from? is it from the data of old survey or from the recalling of respondences? for the former, is the old survey reliable? for the latter one, more information need to be shown~
-Sampling issue: region, age, gender
are the targeted respondents representative to the citizens of Forsythe,or are they just from a particular region? did these respondences cover all age group, or just one or two age groups? are people in two genders equally responded or one gender outnumber another? because people in two genders may vary in diet habits.
Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data: there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol.
Warrant: the rapid increase of food products containing Kiran means people’s lifestyles are more healthful.
Evidence: More information is needed to understand the connection of fourfold increase of food products containing Kiran and more healthful lifestyle.
~ kiran/ the food product/ why sales of the food products increase...
-Kiran reduces cholesterol. Kiran is healthful. Fourfold increase of kiran in food is healthful.>>their connection needs more evidences to prove. maybe it is not Kiran but other factors such as good moods that boost people to buy this kind of food, and they feel good, but not actually as good as they imagined.
-food containing Kiran is mainly consumed by healthful people. people who do not consume food containing kiran are less healthful. maybe the kiran food products are mainly brought by less healthful people rather than healthful people. or maybe both kinds of people like it, and it does not have really connections to people’s lifestyle.
-that sales of food products increase may because of other factors, such as market promotion, new favor fashions, failure of the competitors,etc. if it is the case, the survey data may not support the claim.
Claim: The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles.
Data: This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.
Warrant: Reduced sales of sulia means most people take more healthful lifestyle.
Evidence: more information is required
- if less sulia means being healthful
- if reduced sales means that less people eat it or because of other factors(market competition)
- the reason why most healthy people do not eat it is because it is not healthy, not because it just tastes bad, no one likes it.
- people are healthy due to their exercises or healthy conditions or good moods, do not necessarily have connections to the eating diet or one particular food.
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First paragraph:
[summarize the main conclusion]/[refer to the evidence]/[follow the writing instructions]/[develop the framework of this essay]/[a generic version of response to the writing instructions(better to customize)]
According to a health magazine, the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyle. Citing a recent survey data and two sales of two types of food, the magazine jumps to such a claim. However, to justify it, we need more information about how the survey was conduced and designed and the reasons why the sales of the two types of food would have changed. These evidences needs to be provided to access to the strength of the argument.
3rd body paragraph:
[ point out the evidence to be needed]/
[ evaluate the evidence]/
[ explain how the evidence would weaken or strength the argument]
Furthermore, we need more information about the sales of sulia. According to the magazine, most healthy people barely eat sulia. But does that mean people are healthy because they do not eat sulia? That people are healthy may have nothing to do with their eating habit or one particular food such as sulia. The reason why they are healthy may just because they do exercise regularly into their daily routine and have good moods, etc. We need more evidence about the amount of sulia to determine whether having less sulia is healthful. Also we need to consider the sales of sulia. It could be caused be factors that are completely unrelated to people’s lifestyle at all. Maybe the reduced sales is due to the market competition. Maybe sulia as a type of raw material goes high in price, so less and less people buy it and turn to its substitute. If this is the case, the data may not support the claim. Also, we need to further evaluate wether the substitute is healthful to people or not.
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