Argument188 JJ高频,写的我头都大了

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A new report suggests that men and women experience pain very differently from one another, and that doctors should consider these differences when prescribing pain medications. When researchers administered the same dosage of kappa opioids—a painkiller—to 28 men and 20 women who were having their wisdom teeth extracted, the women reported feeling much less pain than the men, and the easing of pain lasted considerably longer in women. This research suggests that kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is required, whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medication. In addition, researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women.

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To prescribe such a pain killer to women and to evaluate all medications on men and women needs more conscious consideration. The study of kappa opioids has somehow indications to the conclusion, but it is lack of evidence.

First of all, the author failed to give us specific details which could seriously affect the result about these men and women. Lack of evidence such as damage level, age, undermine the efficiency of this study. Perhaps the damages of men at the experiments are graver than the women, so the pain of men would be more severe. Or perhaps the men are teenagers and the women are 30-year-old adults, this hypothesis will lead to a fact that the women bear the pains, and the pains of these women are much more severe than they were reported, but the teenagers didn’t bear them in a contrast.

In addition, the feeling of pain varies not only between men and women, but also between individual and individual. Each person has each pain sensitive level. It is possible that the 20 women are low level pain sensitive individuals and the men are in high levels. Thus, it is the low pain sensitive levels not the pain killer or the difference of feeling pain between men and women to make them feel less pain. In the same way, low sensitiveness will help these women felt pain again much later than the men did.

Furthermore, granted that the medicine has more effect on women, to prescribe such a kappa opioids on all pain medication in women needs more consideration. To consider that the wisdom tooth extracted experiment can only affect a low level damage, when the patients have more severe damages(surely more pain) such as bone fracture, to prescribe such a pain killer, which maybe has efficiency only on low level pain, will be a premature action. Moreover, there is no evidence shown that other medicines have more efficiency on men than this one. Maybe this one takes a lot of effect, but it seems inefficiency only because the greater effect on women.

Finally, there is insufficient evidence to conclude that all medications on men and women need reevaluate by the study of only one pain killer's affections on men and women. Maybe pain medications need. However, the majority of all medications have same effect on both men and women more than different. In common sense, there is no different between the effect of a cold medicine, such as penicillin, on men and women. Given the fact that there are thousands of medicines in the world, to reevaluate all of them seems like an impossible mission and will takes a lot of resource.

In sum, the conclusion about the use of kappa opioids pain killer on women and reevaluation of all medications need legitimate evidence such as an experiment on comparable controls and a confirmable difference of medicine effect on men and women. However, the author failed to do that.

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To prescribe such a pain killer to women and to evaluate all medications on men and women needs more conscious consideration. The study of kappa opioids has somehow indications to the conclusion, but it is lack of evidence.

First of all, the author failed to give us specific details which could seriously affect the result about these men and women. Lack of evidence such as damage level, age, undermine the efficiency of this study. Perhaps the damages of men at the experiments are graver than the women, so the pain of men would be more severe. Or perhaps the men are teenagers and the women are 30-year-old adults, this hypothesis will lead to a fact that the women bear the pains, and the pains of these women are much more severe than they were reported, but the teenagers didn’t bear them in a contrast.

In addition, the feeling of pain varies not only between men and women, but also between individual and individual. Each person has each pain sensitive level.这句话感觉不好 It is possible that the 20 women are low level pain sensitive individuals and the men are in high levels. Thus, it is the low pain sensitive levels not the pain killer or the difference of feeling pain between men and women to make them feel less pain. In the same way, low sensitiveness will help these women felt pain again much later than the men did. 感觉有点罗嗦，写紧凑一点会比较好，个人意见

Furthermore, granted that the medicine has more effect on women, to prescribe such a kappa opioids on all pain medication in women needs more consideration. To consider that the wisdom tooth extracted experiment can only affect a low level damage, when the patients have more severe damages(surely more pain) such as bone fracture, to prescribe such a pain killer, which maybe不够正式 has efficiency only on low level pain, will be a premature action. 感觉与前面的论证重复Moreover, there is no evidence shown？ that other medicines have more efficiency on men than this one. Maybe不够正式 this one takes a lot of effect, but it seems inefficiency only because the greater effect on women.这段可以考虑不要

Finally, there is insufficient evidence to conclude that all medications on men and women need reevaluate by the study of only one pain killer's affections on men and women. Maybe pain medications need？. However, the majority of all medications have same effect on both men and women more than different. In common sense, there is no different between the effect of a cold medicine, such as penicillin, on men and women.你怎么知道的？？还是别用这个例子的好 Given the fact that there are thousands of medicines in the world, to reevaluate all of them seems like an impossible mission and will takes a lot of resource.和是否浪费资源没关系吧，这儿只讨论有没有必要去REEVALUATE

In sum, the conclusion about the use of kappa opioids pain killer on women and reevaluation of all medications need legitimate evidence such as an experiment on comparable controls and a confirmable difference of medicine effect on men and women.举例属于细节，我觉得结尾段不写比较好吧 However, the author failed to do that.
我觉得后面几段字数可以少一些，没有必要写那么多，大致意思写清楚就可以了

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不好意思选的颜色好象很刺眼啊
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我也刚写了一篇argument8 有空帮我看看吧
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颜色是有些刺眼.......
maybe不够正式的话,用什么代替好呢?