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月夜狼歌UID: 187073

最初由 xuli_123 发布
[B][QUOTE]最初由 月夜狼歌 发布
[B]题目是：有人喜欢跟老师学习，有人喜欢自学， 你喜欢哪种？为什么？


之前没看见这个帖子，另外发了一个，麻烦蝈蝈们帮我看看..

以下省略...... [/B]

自己想的句子
翻译过来是：要总结我的观点，可以用这么一个句子：跟老师学习是学习，自学是学习如何学习

sfproUID: 181409

It has been anounced by the government that a new university will be built. Many people have the idea that my community would be a good place to locate the university. However, many others disagree with that. Both sides of the question of whether a university should be built in my community are supported by good reasons.

There are several advantages to locating a new university in my community. One advantage is the creation of a substantial number and great range of employment opportunities; besides requiring architectural and construction workers to create the campus, the university will require teaching, administrative, and maintenance staff on an ongoing basis. Therefore my community would benefit from lowering its unemployment rate. Besides, people will have more choices to make if a new university is established in the community. They can decide which university to study in and what courses to take. Finally, the establishment of a new university means more fierce competition. There is no doubt that competition leads to better faculties and facilities, which make a university more fascinating.

Conversely, some people worry that whether there are so many people to study in the university. If not, it would be a waste of time and money to establish a new university in community. Moreover, people who do not agree with the plan argue that a new university in the community will bring about traffic problems. More traffic jams would take place near the university. That will surely make people inconvenient.

In conclusion, aothough I agree that there may be a couple of disadvantages to build a new university in my community, I feel that the advantages are more obvious, for it could increase employment opportunities, give people more choices and attribute to better faculties and facilities.

第二段中的fierce比较级形式是more fierce吗？

vividodoUID: 84846

to:sfpro
我觉得你的文章结构是很清晰的，不过个人认为disadvantage的理由似乎有些牵强
more fierce恩，是额

vividodoUID: 84846

118.Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

In my opinion, keeping change can bring a lot of fun in our life. In contrast, staying the same make our life single-toned. They are completely different attitudes toward the life. People who enjoy change would not like get along with those people who do not change their usual habits. We can not say which attitude is better than the other, but I just only state my preference here.

Today, our world keeps change all the time. For example, ten years before, no body could imagine the internet would convert our life completely. Now millions of people use internet to work, study, play and communicate.  The number of people who used to using traditional mail or telephone reduced remarkably, because they found internet is more convenient and less expensive than those means. People must learn these new techniques and keep up with change. If a person still stay the old ways, he would waste time and money. I want to enjoy my life in this modern society, so it is best way to keep update with the technology.

In addition, keeping change can make it not only people but also a country to get more opportunity to develop. Never in Chinese history has the attitude of keeping change been more evident than a proverb “If a country were lest developed, it would keep change; if a country keep change, it would become rich and stable.” Our country has developed so fast in recent 50 years, in that we keep change all the time. If our country still persisted in old those impracticable policy, we can not imagine what our lives are.

However, staying the same is not absolutely disadvantage. It is indeed convenient and cheap to use internet, but it is the way which lacks human feeling. With a mail, the receiver could though handwriting of the sender fell the thought of the sender. And with a call, two speakers could though tones and pitches get felling of the other. In this complex world, we can not find a completely perfect thing, and everything has two sides.

Our world keep change every minute, even every second. If you do not want to drop behind this world, you must keep change.

严重超时，也许是不习惯在电脑上敲吧，用了45分钟

gggmUID: 187359

139. what do u consider to be the most important room in a house?Why is this room more important to u than any other room? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

A house usually contains several rooms including bed rooms, living rooms, a cleaning room and even a studying room. By comparing with the purposes of various rooms, the bed room seems to hold a more important position in our day-to-day life.

A well-organized bedroom provides a comfortable environment for rest, which is extremely important and cannot be replaced by any other rooms. As known, sleeping is the basic demand for any human being and bedrooms are the only place designed for such rest. According to a research, human spend one third of their life on sleeping. In another word, people normally stay in the bedroom at least eight hours per day. From the figures above, the importance of a fine bedroom is obvious. I, for example, always want to stay in my bedroom only after a whole day’s tough work. Not only do I love the queen size bed in the bedroom, but also the relax feeling consisted in it. In short, a bedroom is the necessary part involving people’s life rather than any other places.

A bedroom is a good place for returning real life as well. Nowadays, by the needs of the rapidly developed society, people have to deal with everything whatever like or unwilling; people have to contact with various people whatever love or hate; and people have to say different words whatever true or feigned. Nevertheless, the last pure land -- the bedroom is the only area that people can live in the way they were instead of disguises oneself in the daytime for various reasons. At the bedroom, all masks can be put off and the heart can have a rest.

All in all, although all rooms included in the house must be considered as a whole and all of them play an important role, the bedroom is more important than the other according to its irreplaceable functions for human and their basic demands.

libraboyUID: 159673

1Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people may think that businesses should hire employees for their entire lives, arguing that the promise of life-long employment can boost employees’ royalty and enthusiastic. However, from my point of view, it is unwise for businesses to hire employees for their whole lives.

First, the market is always subject to change, and every company has to change itself accordingly in order to survive. So it is really difficult for a company to decide to hire any employee for a whole life, because the employee is not necessarily always satisfies the company’s requirement, which is adjusted with respect to the change of the market.

Second, an employee may not wish to work in a company for a whole life. The employee, after he/she enters the company and works for a period, may find that the job is not suitable for himself/herself. Besides, the employees may consider the salary offer by the current company is so low that they would try to find a job in another company.

Finally, in practice, it is unusual for a company to hire employees for their whole lives.

In summary, businesses should not hire employees for their entire lives but hire and fire them according to their needs.

sofanUID: 153987

3.Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.

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As we come to this world. Our parents are the first people we meet. Then , we began to learn walking,speaking, and so on.During our wholelives, we may have a lot of teachers, but the one who accompany us longest is our parents. Our character and lives will be impacted mostly by them. So I support the statement that”Parent are the best teachers”.

Parents’ love to us make the teaching more acceptable.Constantly education from the parents will go on after our birth. When we were babies, they taught us walking ,speaking ,and told us stories. This is important for a baby. As we growing up, more knowledge will be taught by our parents, such as good manners and some customs .So ,our parents are our first and most important teachers.

As time flying ,great expectation will be taken on us. They will tell us how to be a good man and give us their valuable experience which can not learn from class. They will introduce right method to us patiently .I also remember ,when I was a child , my parents will give me a lesson when I take a mistake.At that time ,I have set up a great belief to be a scientist one day .Now ,it become close to me .

In addition, our parents give us more tolerance than criticism.Everyone may take a lot of mistakes ,usually will be criticized by others.But our parents will probably tell us why we are wrong and how to do it in right method next time,especially they give us more encourage. These spirit and knowledge will benefit us all the time.

Of course,teachers in school give us professional knowledge,but the method and effect are different from our parents’.So, in my opinion, our parents give us more knowledge about how to be a great man ,and this will be helpful in our wholelife.

cythia1UID: 148062

Topic 22: We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (someone you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important.

We all work or will work in our jobs with many different kinds of people. A good co-worker can help us work more efficiently. In my opinion of view, I like people who are accommodating, easy to communicate and have team spirit.

Being accommodating is the best characteristic of a co-worker. No one can masters every skill and completes every kind work by himself. Workers in a group are interdependent. When I meet difficulties, the first person I appeal for aid is my partner. It is easier to solve a problem by helping each other.

To be a good co-worker, he must be easy to communicate. During accomplishing a task, workers must exchange thoughts and information. I have worked as a programmer coding a management system for a library. I had to ask my partner for the interfaces and parameter I needed and give him those I completed. Working with a good communicator who understands what you need and your ideas easily will finish the job in a short time.

In addition, team spirit is an important characteristic of a co-worker. Everybody in a team completes a part of the job. To reach the same goal, everyone must shares his knowledge, experience and power.

A good co-worker must be willing to help people, easy to communicate and have team spirit. If everyone in a group has these characteristics, the group will be an efficient group and can reach its goal easily.

biolaymanUID: 165956

In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

In modern society, people live longer than before. It is illustrated by contrasting the average life expectancy of 45 all over the world at the beginning of the 20th century with that of 70 at the end of the 20th century. From the rather increase of the number there should be many factors influencing it.

First of all, the direct factor of all is food. Everyone in the world has individual sense on it. There are more and more kinds of food , just like vegetable, meat, fruit, seafood and so on, in the supermarket, furnished to the populace as we are and we have more choices to choose any we prefer. A number of high protein-contained food or low sugar-contained food are invented by the many countries’ scientists. And the most important thing is that people pay a lot of attention to the decent and reasonable recipe than before, such as most of the American who considerably prefer the snack food have realized the negative effect on body healthy.

Besides, the modern medical therapy is also helpful for the longevity. The advanced and perfect medical therapy is reached by the ordinary populace ,which the scientists all over the world have take rather energy to invent good and incise instruments and to manage beneficial cure method. As an example we all know, phthisis is a dangerous and deadly disease in the last century, yet with the development of the therapy it can be cured easily now.

The last not he least, the stabilization of economy and society also contributes to the long life of contemporary people with the topic of peace and development in the world now, nearly most of the countries are putting increasingly time and money to develop the economy in such a rather peaceful environment although some fighting in certain areas. The living level is increasing and the condition is graduately getting decent, the river is flowing, the sun is shining, the bird is singing, the flower is smiling and people is dancing. Without the steady social condition, the people will reduce the living span, for example , the people’s average age is significantly decreased after the previous Soviet Union was broke up.

In sum , many beneficial aspects contribute to the longer life span of human being. In my opinion, with the fast development of modern technology, more and more people will make a happy, colorful, and healthy life. .

bnulakeUID: 190507

We always receive thousands of gifts in our birthday and other festivals。 Unfortunately, most of them slip out of our mind but some important not the valuable ones with the time flying. What causes that? As far as I am concerned, among countless factors which influence our memory, there are two conspicuous aspects.
        Certainly no other reason in my view is more crucial than the one as following. A present means a blessing to you, and the important one delivers the best wishes from your friends or your relatives which also contains a comprehension, an appreciation, and an uncommon care. You even can tell the distinction between the similar ones at your first glance. A case in point, in Jane’s birthday at her 18th, she got two sweaters at the meantime, one in green while the other yellow, which make no distinctive difference  judged by the appearance. In fact, the meanings vary significantly for which her favor color is green. A proper gift signifies a true care from a friend in such trivial way. There is no need to say that the former gift will occupy more space in her mind and time.
        It might also be noted that people often cherish the meaningful gifts so that they will not be worn down or even damaged. A gift worthy of the conservation, however, a significant one for certain, will remind you the happiness or others in the past whenever you catch a sight of it. That is no wonder why now more and more people like to send something not only valuable but endurable to others. For example, lovers prefer the diamond rings, as it is an eternal representation, and will not be worn out for the whole life.
        There are still many other reasons that account for the issue, but the obvious ones are stated above. As psychology reveals the more striking the present is, the more impression it will catch in the receivers’ mind.

shingaUID: 191825

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
15:22   
Some people would like to attend a live performance and the others just enjoy the same event on television.  I exactly agree with that the live performance is more enjoyable than a television show.  So, I usually prefer attending some entertainment activities to watching TV at home.  

Generally speaking, watching TV is more convenient and comfortable.  You don’t need to dress up and worry about the traffic.  All what you need to do is to sit back and take the comfortable position.  And then you can enjoy your leisure time and share the pleasure which the TV programs offer.  If you don’t like this offer, you can change the channel and it just take not more than a second.  Finally, you also can turn off the television and enjoy your sleeping rapidly after the program is over.

Although watching TV is more convenient, it stays to be a passive entertainment.  Sometimes, you can get more pleasures as you can taste the entertainment surrounding.  Attending a live performance such as a play or concert, not only can you taste the performance effect, but also you can enjoy more things (for example, the wonderful scene and people’s applause).  Furthermore, you feel that there are the mutual processes between the actors and you.  They make it for you and you really enjoy it.  The feeling is so good and you would not regret for your attending.  

As comparison with the passive entertainment of watching TV, attending a live performance is a positive and passionate entertainment style.  Although, the performance may take more time and isn’t convenient, I prefer going to the live one as it is more enjoyable.  15:55

LeeChristinaUID: 209116

TV 一般在正式的场合 都不用简写的。
event 一般指比较大型的时间哟，如什么总统访问之类的。
把第一话中的and 换成 while ，自带比较的含义
exactly 换成 totally或是abosolutly 呢
总的来说Perfect！！

xy_seUID: 176621

biolayman ，你的长寿那篇文章写的很不好！
1》用词
2》IN SUM后面没有涵盖你的CONTENTION