Issue63--大家拍砖的机会又来了，请指教！！！！

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Issue63  第5篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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有保留的同意
1．说现象--确实需要有对照，人们才能感受到文化的存在。
2．真正了解文化需要不仅了解起现状，还应该了解起起源和如何发展的
3．通过对其他文化的了解，有助与我们了解自己文化的优劣，并改善不好的东西
4．说明了解完全不同的文化对我们研究自己的文化，有时是行不通的
结尾---完
作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：42分5秒     531 words
从2004年10月30日22时51分到2004年10月30日23时42分
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To truly understand your own culture—no matter how you define it—requires personal knowledge of at least one other culture, one that is distinctly different from your own.
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The speaker claims that it is necessary for us to know at least one other obviously different culture if we want to truly understand our own culture. There is on doubt that any culture can hardly originate and development solely, so I agree with this claim insofar that we must know at least one other culture which may not distinctly different from our own one.

To begin with, it is a fact that we do not even feel existence of our own culture until we meet another culture. Only through this can we actually feel the atmosphere of our own culture. A Chinese boy, who use chop sticks, cannot image that people on the other side of the world eat by forks and knives before he realize the western culture. He may never think why Chinese use chop sticks to eat. He was just taught to do so and everyone around him use chop sticks as he do. Only contact other cultures can he feel that he is in the orient culture. These above illustrate that we can feel every aspects of our own culture through other ones, which is the first step to truly understand our own culture.

In addition, to truly understand our own culture means not only know what it is like now, but also how it does come into being, through which we can have a deeper understanding of our own culture. Actually, each culture is changing incessant, and not only inherits from previous, but also is affected by other cultures. For instance, Japanese culture is in large part affected by Chinese's, especially the thinking of Confucius, which plays a considerable role in the society of Japan. Since the Confucianism is originated from china, it is necessary for a Japanese man who is studying his own culture to access knowledge about Chinese culture. Therefore, learning other cultures can help us now the origination and development of our own culture, which is conductive to promote our understanding.

Furthermore, knowing other cultures is helpful to understand the advantages and disadvantages of our own culture. Then we can preserve what is good, and improve what is not good. For example, Chinese have not had the idea of democracy for thousands of years. But at the period of 1980--1999, the whole country is impacted by the democratic system of U.S.A. Having had sense of the benefits of this system in development, Chinese people have had more and more intense sense of democracy and the government also has improved this kind of system constantly. Only through incessant reform can a country or a nation be more powerful. Therefore the best way to achieve it is to know diverse cultures.

However, when there exists serious conflicts between cultures, it is not the case. I can hardly image what will happen when a Israelite had studied the culture of Arabia. Maybe there is nothing to help but more and more enmity. So it is unnecessary to know distinctly different culture for truly understanding of our own culture.

In conclusion, while obviously different cultures may not be conductive for us to understand our own culture, it is on doubt that at least one other culture is necessary.

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互相改改？
https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=234161

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The speaker claims that it is necessary for us to know at least one other obviously different culture（似乎修饰语过多，本人认为第一句简洁为好）if we want to truly understand our own culture. There is on (no?) doubt that any culture can hardly originate and development solely, (it is doubtable that any a culture can originate and developed on its own) so I agree with this claim insofar that we must know at least one other culture which may not distinctly different from our own one. (一开头重复了？同一段两句话表达同一意思？)

To begin with, it is a fact （it’s true）that we do not even feel existence of our own culture until we meet another culture. Only through this (what?模糊-虽然我能明白)can we actually feel the atmosphere of our own culture. A Chinese boy, who use chop sticks, cannot image that people on the other side of the world eat by forks and knives before he realize the western culture. He may never think why Chinese use chop sticks to eat. He was just taught to do so and everyone around him use chop sticks as he do. Only contact other cultures can he feel that he is in the orient culture.（only through the contact with other cultures can he realize the oriental culture to which he is attached）  These above illustrate that we can feel every aspects of our own culture through other ones, which is the first step to truly understand our own culture.

In addition, to truly understand our own culture means not only know what it is like now, but also how it does come into being(语法对否？), through which we can have a deeper understanding of our own culture. Actually, each culture is changing incessant (incessantly), and not only inherits from previous (the previous), but also is affected(influenced,词语可稍有变化) by other cultures. For instance, Japanese culture is in large part affected by Chinese's, especially the thinking of Confucius, which plays a considerable （significant）role in the society of Japan. Since the Confucianism is originated from china, it is necessary for a Japanese man (it is necessary for Japanese studying their own culture) who is studying his own culture to access knowledge about Chinese culture. Therefore, learning other cultures can help us now (? know) the origination and development of our own culture, which is conductive to promote our understanding.

Furthermore, knowing other cultures is helpful to understand the advantages and disadvantages of our own culture. Then we can preserve what is good, and improve what is not good. For example, Chinese have not had the idea of democracy for thousands of years. But at the period of 1980--1999, the whole country is impacted by the democratic system of U.S.A. Having had sense of the benefits of this system in development, Chinese people have had more and more intense sense of democracy and the government also has improved this kind of system constantly(此句没看明白). Only through incessant reform can a country or a nation be more powerful. Therefore the best way to achieve it is to know diverse cultures.

However, when there exists serious conflicts between cultures, it is not the case. I can hardly image what will happen when a Israelite had studied the culture of Arabia. Maybe there is nothing to help but more and more enmity. So it is unnecessary to know distinctly different culture for truly understanding of our own culture.

In conclusion, while obviously different cultures may not be conductive for us to understand our own culture, it is on doubt that at least one other culture is necessary.

论证有层次，各段有递进关系，值得我学习！
倒数第二段例子有点牵强，Israelite可以不了解Arabia，但就本题来说Israelite应该了解其他文化。

在语言上作了些修改，如不恰当我们再讨论吧！共勉！

RikkuUID: 170558

谢谢你的修改

语言确实是我的一大弱点，短期我就只有寄希望于比较精确的表达，和尽量少的语法错误了

看得出你的语言功底比我高很多，请多指教了

倒数第二段的例子我主要想说明：但文化完全不同，甚至有仇恨时，

了解对方的文化弊大于利，因此并不是说任何别的文化都有助于我们了解自己的文化

也许我英语表达不清，呵呵

我的e-mail是---zhoulang117@163.com

共勉！