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wuwei2668UID: 189816

issue10 Governments must ensure that their major cities recieve the financial support they need to thrive ,because it is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

         As opposed to this statement,i am inclined that the rural areas should get more attention from the governments.We do not have to go very far to see the truth that a nation's cultural traditions is better presvered and generated in rural areas than in major cities.

       First of all,due to impact of globalization and new technological revolution,the cities of the world are being homogenized which resulted in cultural diffusion.Andre MALRAUX says"culture is the sum of all the forms of art,of love,andof the thought."However,latest development of communication technologies and intensive international economic trade speed up the rate of social changes include cultural diffusion and cultural evolution,especially in major cities of a nation such as New York ,Tokyo and HongKong.As a result,styles of dress,food specialities and mode of thought in one continent or a nation is bringing incredible impacts on another one.For example,giving presents to lover on valentine's day has been a common custom not only in western societies but in many asian cities.on the contrary,the situation in rural areas is abolutely different.Comparing with modern cities ,the rural areas,alpine villages for example,tended to be cut off from globalization and modern civilization because of weak transportation and undevelopmented economy,where people still preserve their traditonal life styles,inherit their simple and initial faith in life and abide by old customs handed down from their remote ancestors.in some china villages,the saga of great emperors and warriors are still being handed down from one generation to another by storytellers,the descendants of confucius are still abing by the rules formulated by their wise ancestor.consequently,we could detect a nation's cultural tradition better from rural areas than major cities.

          Moreover,the trend of urbanization is threantening the survival of a nation's cultural traditions .Common sense tell us the characteristics that distinguish cities from rural areas include more freedom and more opportunities;highly specialized services of many types;a great variety of occupations.All the characteristics lead to the constant influx of people into cities from rural areas,and the rural population is continually decreasing.in that case ,the cultural traditions presvered in rural areas loose their inheritors.futhermore,in the struggle to attract corporations and jobs to improve lives more and more rural areas have been offerring "packages' to company which include free land,special services and cheap labor forces.Therefore,silent and beautiful scenes in rural areas will be ,and are being,replaced by monstrous edifices and of dark,narrow streets full of petrol fumes and txic gases,torn by the noises of taxicabs ,lorries and buses,and thronged ceaselessly by great crowds.Obviously,the cultural traditions will become water without source or a tree without roots in that case.The cultural traditions only thrive in the soil of initial cultural environment which can only be found in rural areas.

         From what has been discussed above,we may draw the conclusion that we cannot understand cultural traditions of a nation in major cities.And the rural areas will continue to be the most important segment of cultural traditions.in order to preserve cultural traditions ,the government should never and ever ignore the rural areas
我的第一篇issue,请大家指教

DriverEntryUID: 143979

请先看下下面的文章。

另外最好把文章重新编辑下，分分段，现在我看到FIRST OF ALL之后，后面就找不到了 ：（

对于你的第一个论据的中心句，这个cultural diffusion 感觉有点怪，文化扩散么？哪个文化的扩散？
感觉可以写的更清楚点 ：）

wuwei2668UID: 189816

非常感谢您的指教，关于您的指点，我也考虑过，但我在下文中写的都是cultural diffusion and cultural evolution,而且我也觉得自己也没有能力再展开写，着方面的句子积累的太少了 :(
        我很感谢您，我无论如何也要感谢以下，有什么要我效力的我也会尽力，尽管我还是个菜鸟 :)

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提醒一下以后请注意发贴格式,具体可以看needle姐姐的帖子,谢谢