issue144 艺术类，内附很细的中文提纲，各位喜欢互改的牛牛们尽管来拍，小弟定会

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issue144. "It is the artist, not the critic*, who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

正文：

Recently,"starry night”, a piece of oil painting drawn by Van Gogh 110 years ago was sold in a extremely high price after a hot competition, which illustrated how did people appreciated this painter .The fact, however, is that Van Gogh did not succeeded like this at his time and the disputation about him almost continued for 50 years maybe longer, which involved so many critics with different voices that more and more people came to question the traditional painting and a number of new painting styles accordingly generated .Then, is the single artist's one-off creation or the constant criticism of many critics more valuable for our society? Maybe it is hard to answer, but in my opinion, it is critics that not simply give society "value" but the long-term significance, that is,"lasting value".

Admittedly, artists are the coiners of various arts, such as paintings, music, films, novels, etc, which can record the history, discover the truth and represent our lives. By carefully observing society and deeply thinking about the phenomena in people's lives they put their own ideas into works to affect people and do give a lot of value to society. This is not "lasting" enough, however, because it is the continuous interaction, question and classification of critics that make the art works more meaningful and give our society lots of lasting value rather than artists' separately individual creation.

The most important role of critic lies in questioning artists and their works in the unique way of critical thinking with professional knowledge and judging them from different views, which can contribute a lot to the positive development and progress of art. Not only can the constant question and criticism help to pick the false works out of the true masterpieces to restrict artists, but provide the timely feedback to encourage them to think over their works. I believe most classic music fans tend to regard Symphony No.9 of Beethoven as a great work, but few know it's hard experience to the achievement: firstly, it suffered intense question and criticism for the chaotic rhythm by music critics and after deliberating for a long time Beethoven accepted a critic's advice to fill F.Schiller’s poem "an die freunde" in his No.9, and then, a work with true lasting value came out!

Other than the function mentioned above, critics also classify and systematize the separate works in different styles through discovering the multiple meaning and connecting the works with the actuality and history of our society, providing relatively proper standards to choose and convenience for people. Consider, if someone wants to read "the best satiric fictions”, with the instructions and reviews of critics, he/she would make easier choices from the recommended list given by professional critics rather than being tired of distinguishing the masterwork from so many books. At the same time, from the divergence appearing between the past and now criticism on them, he/she may obtain some new ideas. In a sense, only have the individual works been gathered and reconstructed by critics as a integrated framework, they can make lasting sense for society.

In conclusion, artists give society something of value by their works, while by questioning and classifying artists with their works, critics extend the single work's short-term sense into long-term sense and bring a lot of lasting value to our society.

关键词：lasting value 和 value
提纲：
最近，有一幅梵高的画以惊人的高价被拍卖出，人们认为他的画具有极高的收藏价值for collection。然而，在艺术家短暂的生命后，很少人知道这些作品正是通过持续多年的争论才被认可，这些批评与争论同时引发了对传统绘画的质疑，引发了新画派的产生和影响人们对绘画的看法，从而产生了持久的社会价值。是single artist和one-off creation?还是来自一代代constant critics不同的声音和critical thinking带来了如此深刻长远long-term的意义，that is，lasting value？当然是the latter.

1admittedly艺术家是创造者，他们的作品表现社会的美好与阴暗，同时带给人们享受和警示，这种创造活动给社会带来了巨大价值。然而，如果没有有批评家造就的持续的价值评判体系，个体的一次性创作很难产生深远持续的社会价值，也就是说，艺术家不会为社会提供持久价值。同样，批评也是创造性活动。

2批评家的特有的的怀疑态度[critical thinking]能够促进好的艺术的发展和艺术家创作高质量的作品。是一种interaction，通过对作品的质疑与分析，提供feedback启发艺术家的反思reconsider。鞭策urge艺术家为社会提供更有深度的作品。当然艺术家反过来影响批评家的观点，在某种意义上是一种平衡。

3另一方面，批评家的鉴赏能力[Specialize professionally in the evaluation and appreciation of]会将艺术作品与当前社会即历史未来联系起来，从中寻找新鲜的意义和价值。能够使一幅画，一篇小说，一个电影，一种音乐得到comprehensive recognition，以各种标准来衡量evaluate并分析作品对社会的影响，赋予作品更丰富的现实意义。为人们更全面的更清晰的艺术框架，

4自然地，不同观点的批评家必然引发社会上人们的争论，争论意味着不同人不同的声音和观点和不同方面的解读，从而从多方面启发人们得到不同的思考和理解do justice to，形成从而提高整个社会的civilization，正是这些不同的声音，可以把世界各地，不同年代的各种各样的人们拉在一起关注艺术，讨论艺术，从而不断的提升整个社会的文明程度。

ZHGsunnyUID: 185312

1: 开头段是不是太长了？这样的开头似乎并不适合GRE作文。 开头段的例子放在正文第一段不是更好？这样，不仅可以使开头显得简洁，还可以使正文第一段的内容更充实。
2：正文第一段让人觉得没有充分展开。
总的来说写得蛮好的，正文第二，三段和结尾都挺好的，值得学习！我也正在写艺术类的，觉得好难哦，写不出什么东西来。

blur13_0UID: 150275

:p
sunny的建议很有道理，俺抓紧调整结构，改好再贴上来给大伙
拍！

俺这开头其实受到一篇官方范文的影响，贴上来大伙看看：

Sample Issue Topic 6

"The best ideas arise from a passionate interest in commonplace things."

SAMPLE-1 (score 6)
Even the most brilliant thinkers, from Socrates to Satre, live lives in time. A childhood, an adolescence, an adulthood; these are common to me and you as well as the greatest writers. Furthermore, many of the great thinkers we esteem in our Western culture lived somewhat unevetful lives. What distinguished their life from say a common laborer was their work. Therefore, what provided the grist for their work? One might say that they were brilliant and this alone was sufficient to distinguish their lives from the masses. Intellect alone can not devise situations or thoughts from no where; there must be a basis and that basis is most common, if not always, observation of the common, of the quotidian. Critics of this idea may argue that these thinkers were products of fine educations and were well schooled in the classics. This, they may point to, is the real basis for their knowledge. I would agrue that although it may be a benefit to study classics and be well schooled in diverse disciplines, these pursuits merely refine and hone an ability each and every person has, the ability to study human nature. Where best to study human nature than in the day to day routine each one of us can witness in him or herself or those around us.

小弟原来的理解：范文的开头努力在从一些常见现象入手，结合例子引出主论点。

小弟原来的解题思路：
通过第一段用例子直接涉及value与lasting value的本质区别，然后针对其提问---自答，按以为这样可以直接抓住读者注意力，提出对题目的直接回答---主论点。
第二段，先让步肯定value，接着再次进一步定义并重申lasting value与critic关系，提出分论点的纲领。
第三四段，分别展开论述由第二段结尾提出的“continuous interaction, question and classification of critics”
最后一段，总结扣题
举例时尽量对照题目提出的：art, such as novels, films, music, paintings

自我评析：
1凡高的例子较满意，后两个例子总觉得不够贴切。
2全文头重脚轻，结尾没有引申升华。
3单词，句式和表达跟牛牛们差远了。。。汗。。。
4这是俺的第一篇，真心希望找到喜欢互改的兄弟姐妹。

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:) 我把原来第一段凡高的例子挪到第三段，给开头减肥。

正文：

Both artists and critics are necessary to our society, maybe it is hard to answer which give us more value, but in my opinion, it is critics that not simply give society "value" but the long-term significance, that is,"lasting value".

Admittedly, artists are the coiners of various arts, such as paintings, music, films, novels, etc, which can record the history, discover the truth and represent our lives. By carefully observing society and deeply thinking about the phenomena in people's lives they put their own ideas into works to affect people and do give a lot of value to society. This is not "lasting" enough, however, because it is the continuous interaction, question and classification of critics that make the art works more meaningful and give our society lots of lasting value rather than artists' separately individual creation.

Recently, "starry night”, a piece of oil painting drawn by Van Gogh 110 years ago was sold in a extremely high price after a hot competition, which illustrated how did people appreciated this painter .The fact, however, is that Van Gogh did not succeeded like this at his time and the disputation about him almost continued for 50 years maybe longer, which involved so many critics with different voices that more and more people came to question the traditional painting and a number of new painting styles accordingly generated . Then, I intend to focus on the question of the topic again, does the single artist's one-off creation or the constant criticism of many critics bestow our society lasting value? Apparently, it is the latter.

The most important role of critics lies in questioning artists and their works in the unique way of critical thinking with professional knowledge and judging them from different views, which can contribute a lot to the positive development and progress of art. Not only can the constant question and criticism help to pick the false works out of the true masterpieces to restrict artists, but provide the timely feedback to encourage them to think over their works. I believe most classic music fans tend to regard Symphony No.9 of Beethoven as a great work, but few know it's hard experience to the achievement: firstly, it suffered intense question and criticism for the chaotic rhythm by music critics and after deliberating for a long time Beethoven accepted a critic's advice to fill F.Schiller’s poem "an die freunde" in his No.9, and then, a work with true lasting value came out!

Other than the function mentioned above, critics also classify and systematize the separate works in different styles through discovering the multiple meaning and connecting the works with the actuality and history of our society, providing relatively proper standards to choose and convenience for people. Consider, if someone wants to read "the best satiric fictions”, with the instructions and reviews of critics, he/she would make easier choices from the recommended list given by professional critics rather than being tired of distinguishing the masterwork from so many books. At the same time, from the divergence appearing between the past and now criticism on them, he/she may obtain some new ideas. In a sense, only have the individual works been gathered and reconstructed by critics as a integrated framework, they can make lasting sense for society.

In conclusion, artists give society something of value by their works, while by questioning and classifying artists with their works, critics extend the single work's short-term sense into long-term sense and bring a lot of lasting value to our society

blur13_0UID: 150275

;) 真心希望pooh斑竹能给俺看一下，帮俺评估一下我现在的问题所在，以为这是我的第一篇，所以心里很没底！
在真心希望各位大牛，小牛来关注一下艺术类，因为这类题有些难度，小弟也会尽力回改各位的文章！！

imongUID: 140258

看到在这里了呢 okay

我先去吃了午饭 回来给你看看 就看上面那个你自己改过的吧。

imongUID: 140258

看到你积极帮别人提意见也就过来看看咯

其实真正的论证也就是在4 5 两段

第一段的话 提出来value/  more value/ lasting value 而实际上题目所要集中讨论的是lasting value 一下子弄出这么多来又没有适当处理的话 未免自己给自己制造麻烦了

2 3两段讲述的都是事实 也就是陈述事实 陈述观点 但是没论证 也就显得未免空一些。 这个题目Van Gogh例子其实很常用（小心plagiarism?@_@） 而在这里 比如 考虑para3的顺序 是先陈述 然后来个apparently 还是先提出论点 critics give more，然后给van gogh例证支持 哪个更适合些呢？ 这只是一个很初步的调整。这篇文章整体的充实和加强都还有很多提高空间 但仅仅目前的话 是4分的水平吧。

其实想提高真得不难得。关键点悟到了就好 一层窗户纸而已。就好比说过很多次的那个depends一样。

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:) 严重感谢imong的“砖头”！！！
小弟受益匪浅，俺的确弱在陈述与论证的结合上，
不多说了，这就下手改，尽快再发上来给兄弟姐妹们拍。。。

coolblazeverestUID: 189260

网络瘫痪了，拨号上的，回复迟了些;)
写的很好啊，如果是第一篇就有这个水平，那真叫人羡慕了。
问题
1：如果body1 看作让步的话，根据前人经验，应放在body的最后。
2：不太理解你的body2的意义，是对题目的解读，还是对论点的支持，总之没有展开，可惜了
水平有限，供参考

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;)
谢谢coolblazeverest的建议！！
其实对于让步的问题，俺一直有些迷惑，研究范文和开别人的文章，有放在第二段的也有放在倒数第二段的，唉......晕啊，希望牛牛们能给各看法。
第二段我的本意是“外围”段，希望用个例子夹叙夹议的讨论：一方面承认艺术家带来的value；另一方面，强调批评家带来的不仅仅是value而是lasting value！ :p 目标很崇高，可是看了大家的意见，我怀疑自己是弄巧成拙了..............汗................
再次感谢大家的帮忙，今天一直上不了网，所以没有及时“批评与自我批评”，今儿有点晚了，明天俺尽力多扔几个砖头！！ :D

blur13_0UID: 150275

;) 主要集中在前三段的结构上，其他还有不少语病也改了，对了为了避免plagiarism俺又找了个莫奈的例子替换了原来的梵高，这哥俩极像，呵呵。大伙再看看。


修改如下：

Both artists and critics are necessary to our society, nevertheless, in my opinion; it is critics that not simply give society "value" but the long-term significance, that is, "lasting value".

Admittedly, artists are the coiners of various arts, such as paintings, music, films, novels, etc, which can record the history, discover the truth and represent our lives. By carefully observing society and deeply thinking about the phenomena in people's lives they put their own ideas into works to enrich the culture of our society and enlighten people to find more meaning of life.

However, the constant criticisms of many critics bestow our society “lasting value” more than “value” offered by the single artist's one-off creation. For instance, recently, "Sunrise. Impression”, a piece of oil painting drawn by Claude Monet 130 years ago was sold in a extremely high price after a hot competition, which illustrated how did people appreciated this painter .The fact, however, is that Claude Monet did not succeed like so at his time and the disputation about him almost had continued for 50 years maybe longer, which involved so many critics with different voices that more and more people came to question the traditional painting and a number of new painting styles accordingly generated . This example illustrates the point that it is the continuous interaction, question and classifications of critics that make the art works more meaningful and give our society lots of lasting value rather than artists' separately individual creation.

The most important role of critics lies in questioning artists and their works in the unique way of critical thinking with professional knowledge and judging them from different views, which can contribute a lot to the positive development and progress of art. Not only can the constant question and criticism help to pick the false works out of the true masterpieces to restrict artists, but provide the timely feedback to encourage them to think over their works. I believe most classic music fans tend to regard Symphony No.9 of Beethoven as a great work, but few know it's hard experience to the achievement: firstly, it suffered intense question and criticism for the chaotic rhythm by music critics and after deliberating for a long time Beethoven accepted a critic's advice to fill F.Schiller’s poem "an die freunde" in his No.9, and then, a work with true lasting value came out!

Other than the function mentioned above, critics also classify and systematize the separate works in different styles through discovering the multiple meaning and connecting the works with the actuality and history of our society, providing relatively proper standards to choose and convenience for people. Consider, if someone wants to read "the best satiric fictions”, with the instructions and reviews of critics, he/she would make easier choices from the recommended list given by professional critics rather than being tired of distinguishing the masterwork from so many books. At the same time, from the divergence appearing between the past and now criticism on them, he/she may obtain some new ideas. In a sense, only have the individual works been gathered and reconstructed by critics as a integrated framework, they can make lasting sense for society.

In conclusion, artists give society something of value by their works, while by questioning and classifying artists with their works, critics extend the single work's short-term sense into long-term sense and bring a lot of lasting value to our society.

blur13_0UID: 150275

;) 差点忘了，给个好网站，里面有不少艺术介绍，有空可以看看！

http://cn.cl2000.com/subject/yishujiaoyu/monet/shengping.shtml  画家大全

zhangsx_1982UID: 176926

我最近也打算写这个题目，写完一起参考吧，羡慕有斑竹看看你的文章！

snowmanUID: 189980

初稿没看明白，最后一稿看明白了，并且把我说动了，起初我的观点与你相反。比Issue51更好。

blur13_0UID: 150275

谢谢snowman的鼓励！
等着你得下一篇啊！ ;)