issue5 教育类 issue第一篇

haiyaUID: 187989

写了三个小时，看了下字数700+，觉得长了点。
看了两天的帖子，终于鼓起勇气，希望被狂批一下。
一定要坚持！！

issue5
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer"

Does a nation need to require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college or allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer? In my opinion, there should be a middle road that both the same national curriculum and the different academic courses are demanded in today's education. Either of them lack results in education outdated or even disfunctioned.

The same national curriculum plays a significant role in keeping the stability of nation. As looking throughout the world, every rich and peaceful nation has a uniform education system which contains the curriculum such as the moral and virtue, the history of the nation and the mother tongue and so on. For instance, the Qin Dynasty in China ended up the breaking up and realize the first unity of China. After the establishment of the dynasty, the King applied a series of policies which includes the same national curriculum, the Confucian learning. In order to the smooth the process of the curriculum, he even burned the books of other learnings. Despite the crucial policies, as a result, the nation became stable and wealthy since the minds of people are controlled. However, the poor nations such as Palestine are often bound with the battles between different races. These are all partial brought by the ununiform ideology and religious and are followed by starvation and disease, ultimately to contabescence. It shows that the same curriculum decides the stability of the nation and, moreover, the stability of the nation is the basis for the development of the nation.

Secondly, one of the education function before students enter college is to teach them the basic knowledge. Just like constructing a building, only the fixedness of the basis can allow the imagination of architect to create beautiful  building. In my nation, the basic mathematics, Chinese, English are the three major basic curriculum for us to take. These curriculums construct a fine basis for us to study other courses, such as physics and biology. Moreover, during the study of these basic curriculum, we can form the correct study skills which is more important in studying in the college.

On the other hand, in the era of rapid technology change and information eruption, different academic courses are must things in education as well. Although the same curriculum links with the stability of the nation, the co-respect and self-preserving of culture are also relative. It calls for the different curriculums. In China, there 55 different minor folks. They have different tradition and culture. Therefore, some schools are founded especially for these folks. The students in these schools not only study the same basic curriculum but also learn the tradition of their own folk. It is meaningful to preserve the diversity of folks. However, in Australia, the nation government prompt to assimilate the culture of aborigines to the modern culture. They once abduct the children of the aborigines to a closed nursery school to teach them the same curriculum. After several years, these children grew up and lost the chance to learn their own culture. It arouse their hatred to the government, especially the white migrant. Therefore, in my eyes, the perfect approach to let a multi-folks nation peaceful is not trying to assimilate either of all but to find the common basic points and let the culture difference existence. It can also applied in education.

Furthermore, the students are in different levels in different aspects, such as intellect. Therefore, their ability to accept the new knowledge is different. Is it efficient for clever students to teach the knowledge which they master at the first sight time and time again? If the answer is "yes", it is certainly the failure of the education. In my middle and senior high school, there exit "excellent classes". In these cases, the students in the classes have the ability to acquire more knowledge besides the basic curriculum. Their interest in some fields is cultivated before they enter college. It is at least not bad for them to understand themselves more and it can supply them with the rung of the ladder to climb to the top of Mountain "Knowlege" in advance. In short, If the totally same curriculum is applied, it is obviously fallacious and disobey the aim of education, cultivating people according to their genius.

In sum, both same national curriculum and different academic courses are important in education. They are not mutual exclusive but can combine with each other. In my opinion, the core curriculum should be the same which includes the moral and value system and so on while the academic curriculum such as arts can be an addition to explore the knowledge field. Only the middle road can take the role of the education to cultivate people effectively and only either of it will result in the imbalance of the society.

haiyaUID: 187989

看到前人的帖子
第一篇要认真改
看了一下其他帖子的文章，有点启发。
自己又改了一遍。

issue5
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer"

Is the same national curriculum required until the nation’s students enter the college or the academic curriculum decided according to the need of different parts of the nations? In my opinion, there should be a middle road that both the same national curriculum and the different academic courses are demanded in today's education. Either of them lack results in education outdated or even disfunctioned.

The same national curriculum plays a significant role in keeping the stability of nation. Nowadays, throughout the world, none prosperous and peaceful nations haven’t a uniform education system which contains the curriculum such as the moral and virtue, the history of the nation and the mother tongue and so on. Even looking back in the history of China, the case of Qin dynasty, which ended up the breaking up and realize the first unity of China illustrate the point. After the establishment of the dynasty, the King applied a series of policies which included the same national curriculum, the Confucian learning. In order to the smooth the process of the curriculum, he even burned the books of other learnings and killed the other learners. Despite policies were crucial, it prompt the nation effectively to become stable and wealthy since the minds of people are controlled. However, the poor nations such as Palestine are often bound with the battles between different races. These are all partial brought by the ununiform ideology and religious and are followed by starvation and disease, ultimately to contabescence. Therefore, the nation’s development need the stability while the nation’s stability need the uniform ideology.

On the other hand, although the same curriculum links with the stability of the nation, the co-respect and self-preserving of various cultures are also relative. It calls for the different curriculums. In China, there 55 different minor folks. They have different tradition and culture. Therefore, some schools are founded especially for these folks. The students in these schools not only study the same basic curriculum but also learn the tradition of their own folk. It is meaningful to preserve the diversity of folks because it is the human culture heritage. Unfortunately, in Australia, the nation government tried to assimilate the culture of aborigines to the modern culture. They once abducted the children of the aborigines to a closed nursery school to teach them the same curriculum. After several years, these children grew up and lost the chance to learn their own culture. Out of their expect, the program didn’t receive the appreciation of the aborigines but arouse their hatred to the government, especially to the white migrant. Therefore, in my eyes, the perfect approach to let a multi-folks nation peaceful is not trying to assimilate either of all but to find the common basic points and let the culture difference existence. It can also applied in education.

Secondly, the education function before students enter college is to teach them the basic knowledge and the study skills. The same curriculum satisfies the former need while the different courses does the latter one. For the same curriculum, just like constructing a building, only the fixedness of the basis can allow the imagination of architect to create beautiful  building. In my nation, the basic mathematics, Chinese, English are the three major basic curriculum for us to take. These curriculums construct a fine basis for us to study other courses, such as physics and biology. Furthermore, the different courses should not be omitted. The students are in different levels in different aspects, such as intellect. Therefore, their ability to accept the new knowledge is different. Is it efficient for clever students to teach the knowledge which they master at the first sight time and time again? If the answer is "yes", it is certainly the failure of the education. In my middle and senior high school, there exit "excellent classes". In these cases, the students in the classes have the ability to acquire more knowledge besides the basic curriculum. Their interest in some fields and their correct study skills are cultivated before they enter college. It is at least not bad for them to understand themselves more and it can supply them with the rung of the ladder to climb to the top of Mountain "Knowlege" in advance. In short, if the totally same curriculum is applied, it is obviously fallacious and disobey the aim of education, cultivating people according to their genius. The different academic courses are the efficient part to recruit the style of education.

In sum, both same national curriculum and different academic courses are important in education. They are not mutual exclusive but can combine with each other. From my part, the core curriculum should be same which includes the moral and value system and basic knowledge and so on while the academic curriculum such as arts can be an addition to explore the knowledge field. Only the middle road can take the role of the education to cultivate people effectively and only either of it will result in the imbalance of the society.

提纲：
1。教育需要寻求一条能融合same curriculum和 different courses 的模式。
2。same curriculum使社会稳定，发展。
3。different courses也是社会稳定之需要。
4.   same curriculum 提供学习之基础而different courses教授学习之方法。
5。总结。只有融合了same curriculum和 different couses 的教育模式才符合社会的需要。

玉面小狐狸UID: 188981

issue5
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer"

Is the same national curriculum required until the nation’s students enter the college or the academic curriculum decided according to the need of different parts of the nations? In my opinion, there should be a middle road that both the same national curriculum and the different academic courses are demanded in today's education. Either of them lack results in 应该是lack sth. result in吧，比如lack flexibility result ineducation outdated or even disfunctioned.

The same national curriculum plays a significant role in keeping the stability of nation. Nowadays, throughout the world, none prosperous and peaceful nations haven’t a uniform education system which contains the curriculum such as the moral and virtue, the history of the nation and the mother tongue and so on. Even looking back in the history of China, the case of Qin dynasty, which ended up the breaking up and realizerealized the first unity of China illustrate illustratesthe point. After the establishment of the dynasty, the King applied a series of policies which included the same national curriculum, the Confucian learning. In order to the smooth the process of the curriculum, he even burned the books of other learnings and killed the other learners. Despite policies were crucial, it prompt the nation effectively to become stable and wealthy since the minds of people are controlled. However, the poor nations such as Palestine are often bound with the battles between different races. These are all partial brought by the ununiform ideology and religious and are followed by starvation and disease, ultimately to contabescence. Therefore, the nation’s development need the stability while the nation’s stability need the uniform ideology.

On the other hand, although the same curriculum links with the stability of the nation, the co-respect and self-preserving of various cultures are also relative. It calls for the different curriculums. In China, there 55 different minor folks. They have different tradition and culture. Therefore, some schools are founded especially for these folks. The students in these schools not only study the same basic curriculum but also learn the tradition of their own folk. It is meaningful to preserve the diversity of folks because it is the human culture heritage. Unfortunately, in Australia, the nation government tried to assimilate the culture of aborigines to the modern culture. They once abducted the children of the aborigines to a closed nursery school to teach them the same curriculum. After several years, these children grew up and lost the chance to learn their own culture. Out of their expect, the program didn’t receive the appreciation of the aborigines but arouse their hatred to the government, especially to the white migrant. Therefore, in my eyes, the perfect approach to let a multi-folks nation peaceful is not trying to assimilate either of all but to find the common basic points and let the culture difference existence. It can also applied in education.

Secondly, the education function before students enter college is to teach them the basic knowledge and the study skills. The same curriculum satisfies the former need while the different courses does the latter one. For the same curriculum, just like constructing a building, only the fixedness of the basis can allow the imagination of architect to create beautiful building. In my nation, the basic mathematics, Chinese, English are the three major basic curriculum for us to take. These curriculums construct a fine basis for us to study other courses, such as physics and biology. Furthermore, the different courses should not be omitted. The students are in different levels in different aspects, such as intellect. Therefore, their ability to accept the new knowledge is different. Is it efficient for clever students to teach the knowledge which they master at the first sight time and time again? If the answer is "yes", it is certainly the failure of the education. In my middle and senior high school, there exit "excellent classes". In these cases, the students in the classes have the ability to acquire more knowledge besides the basic curriculum. Their interest in some fields and their correct study skills are cultivated before they enter college. It is at least not bad for them to understand themselves more and it can supply them with the rung of the ladder to climb to the top of Mountain "Knowlege" in advance. In short, if the totally same curriculum is applied, it is obviously fallacious and disobey the aim of education, cultivating people according to their genius. The different academic courses are the efficient part to recruit the style of education.

In sum, both same national curriculum and different academic courses are important in education. They are not mutual exclusive but can combine with each other. From my part, the core curriculum should be same which includes the moral and value system and basic knowledge and so on while the academic curriculum such as arts can be an addition to explore the knowledge field. Only the middle road can take the role of the education to cultivate people effectively and only either of it will result in the imbalance of the society.
总体构思不错。但确实有所点冗长，我觉得你的例子可能用得过多了，例子是辅助，讲道理是重要的，Palestine的例子可能不太确切，他们是因为宗教的各种复杂原因造成了现在局面，不是那么简单可以说清楚的。这种有点模棱两可的例子最好不要举。
另外外迁半部分好像主要是说要不要统一意识形态，但后面又讲的是没什么引申的单纯的学习，似乎有点脱节
语言上我觉得你比较偏爱长句，从句套从句好像有点多。把一些长句拆成短句会好一点吧
很佩服你的背景知识，可以举出澳大利亚那个例子。

haiyaUID: 187989

谢谢你的批改。
很开心自己第一篇issue有人回复了。
我等一下再改一下。
谢谢。

beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

issue5
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer"

Does a nation need to require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college or allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer? In my opinion, there should be a middle road that both the same national curriculum and the different academic courses are demanded in today's education. Either of them lack results in education outdated or even disfunctioned.(此句表达的有点费解)

The same national curriculum plays a significant role in keeping the stability of nation. As looking throughout the world, every rich and peaceful nation has a uniform education system which contains the curriculum such as the moral and virtue, the history of the nation and the mother tongue and so on. For instance, the Qin Dynasty in China ended up the breaking up（what？revolution? ） and realize the first unity(first? What meaning?) of China. After the establishment of the dynasty, the King applied a series of policies which includes the same national curriculum, the Confucian learning. In order to the smooth the process of the curriculum, he even burned the books of other learnings. Despite the crucial policies, as a result, the nation became stable and wealthy since the minds of people are controlled. However, the poor nations such as Palestine are often bound with the battles between different races. These are all partial brought by the ununiform ideology and religious and are followed by starvation and disease, ultimately to contabescence. It shows that the same curriculum decides the stability of the nation and, moreover, the stability of the nation is the basis for the development of the nation.(此段基本能表达清楚目的，举例好，但是没有在 same national curriculum and the country development 之间展开辩论与说明理由。)

Secondly, one of the education function before students enter college is to teach them the basic knowledge. Just like constructing a building, only the fixedness of the basis can allow the imagination of architect to create beautiful building. In my nation, the basic mathematics, Chinese, English are the three major basic curriculum for us to take. These curriculums construct a fine basis for us to study other courses, such as physics and biology. Moreover, during the study of these basic curriculum, we can form the correct study skills which is more important in studying in the college.

On the other hand, in the era of rapid technology change and information eruption, different academic courses are must things in education as well. Although the same curriculum links with the stability of the nation, the co-respect and self-preserving of culture are also relative. It calls for the different curriculums. In China, there 55 different minor folks. They have different tradition and culture. Therefore, some schools are founded especially for these folks. The students in these schools not only study the same basic curriculum but also learn the tradition of their own folk. It is meaningful to preserve the diversity of folks. However, in Australia, the nation government prompt to assimilate the culture of aborigines to the modern culture. They once abduct the children of the aborigines to a closed nursery school to teach them the same curriculum. After several years, these children grew up and lost the chance to learn their own culture. It arouse their hatred to the government, especially the white migrant. Therefore, in my eyes, the perfect approach to let a multi-folks nation peaceful is not trying to assimilate either of all but to find the common basic points and let the culture difference existence. It can also applied in education.

Furthermore, the students are in different levels in different aspects, such as intellect. Therefore, their ability to accept the new knowledge is different. Is it efficient for clever students to teach the knowledge which they master at the first sight time and time again? If the answer is "yes", it is certainly the failure of the education. In my middle and senior high school, there exit "excellent classes". In these cases, the students in the classes have the ability to acquire more knowledge besides the basic curriculum. Their interest in some fields is cultivated before they enter college. It is at least not bad for them to understand themselves more and it can supply them with the rung of the ladder to climb to the top of Mountain "Knowlege" in advance. In short, If the totally same curriculum is applied, it is obviously fallacious and disobey the aim of education, cultivating people according to their genius.

In sum, both same national curriculum and different academic courses are important in education. They are not mutual exclusive but can combine with each other. In my opinion, the core curriculum should be the same which includes the moral and value system and so on while the academic curriculum such as arts can be an addition to explore the knowledge field. Only the middle road can take the role of the education to cultivate people effectively and only either of it will result in the imbalance of the society.


你的第一篇文章写的好。语言能力可、辩论举例基本到位。但是有几点提一下，不知对不对：
1、        首先是连接词有点混乱，段落之间的关系词好像用得不太好。
2、        段落之间的论述好像有点重复，辩论不够深入。

动笔就是进步，你的文章比我的好多啦！（欢迎修改我的文章）！

haiyaUID: 187989

先顶一下。终于~~~我的第一篇又被好心人发现了，找你的文章先：）