Issue138 第7篇 相信自己，我能做得更好

glassfrogUID: 170569

Issue138 相信自己，我能做得更好

Mistakes are those unfavorable results. No one can avoid mistakes as long as he is doing affairs. There are always unexpected results since no one can control every molecule in the world. It is true that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. Since the discovery is made by dealing with something new and unknown, the unexpected results are due. How can one make discoveries with expected results?

The scientific discovery calls for mistakes. The X-ray is first observed by wrongly putting the film box in front of the cathode ray tube. Edison made thousands of mistakes to find the correct material for the bulb. Even the plastic cover used in the switch board is first fabricated by a cat that broke some test tubes and causing the solutions mix together. I can say everything in front of my eyes now, from this computer to the desktop board material, from the paper to the pencil lead that I am using, is first made by mistake. The mistakes lead to strange phenomena, which stimulate the ideas of the scientists.

The individual progress asks for mistakes. We grow up by making mistakes. I cut my finger when cooking. This mistake warns me about the danger of cutting. I took the lesson and learn from it. Nowadays I am good at cutting. I remember last quarter I was punished by turning in the homework after deadline since I have too much stuff to handle and I am inferior in organizing my time. I think the mess through during the Charismas break. As a result, I set up my schedule with Excel and time everything like the clock.

The human race progress can never avoid mistakes. For thousands of years, democracy and science wait in the dark when the people are brutal, immoral and ignorant. Two times of world war result in extensive life and wealth cost. By critical thinking through the whole history of mistakes, people have been trying to find way to a more and more democratic and peaceful world. The dictation is still prevailing in some parts of the world; the mistakes are going on, but the progress is also going on and on.

However, there is one step away between mistake and discovery or progress. The bridge between these two is the people. Mistakes are indeed discouraging. Someone may give up when it turns to be a failure. In the first place the courage is required to calm one down to face the mistake. Edison could give up at the time right before the discovery and convince himself there actually isn't any material that fits.  Secondly the mistakes could be the chance for discovery only for those well prepared brains. What is the secret behind the ultra-violet catastrophe? Why is it against the classical physics? Everyone including me is able to ask such questions at the end of the 19th century. But only Plank is able to solve the problem by proposing quantum method crazily, which marks the first step towards the foundation of quantum mechanics.

No pain, no gains. We should be courage enough to welcome the mistakes, and always trying to prepare ourselves so that we can be ready when mistake arrives. Anyway, mistakes are something unexpected, and something unexpected is a chance for change.

beilongzhuhaiUID: 175441

Issue138 相信自己，我能做得更好

Mistakes are those unfavorable results. No one can avoid mistakes as long as he is doing affairs. There are always unexpected results since no one can control every molecule in the world. It is true that only through mistakes can there be discovery or progress. Since the discovery is made by dealing with something new and unknown, the unexpected results are due. How can one make discoveries with expected results? (开头就表明自己的立场，提出观点，但是好像有点累赘，应该简练一点，把一小部分的论述留到后面的正文中)

The scientific discovery calls for mistakes. The X-ray is first observed by wrongly putting the film box in front of the cathode ray tube. Edison made thousands of mistakes to find the correct material for the bulb. Even the plastic cover used in the switch board is first fabricated by a cat that broke some test tubes and causing the solutions mix together. I can say everything in front of my eyes now, from this computer to the desktop board material, from the paper to the pencil lead that I am using, is first made by mistake. The mistakes lead to strange phenomena, which stimulate the ideas of the scientists.

The individual progress asks for mistakes. We grow up by making mistakes. I cut my finger when cooking. This mistake warns me about the danger of cutting. I took the lesson and learn from it. Nowadays I am good at cutting. I remember last quarter I was punished by turning in the homework after deadline since I have too much stuff to handle and I am inferior in organizing my time. I think the mess through during the Charismas break. As a result, I set up my schedule with Excel and time everything like the clock.

The human race progress can never avoid mistakes. For thousands of years, democracy and science wait in the dark when the people are brutal, immoral and ignorant. Two times of world war result in extensive life and wealth cost. By critical thinking through the whole history of mistakes, people have been trying to find way to a more and more democratic and peaceful world. The dictation is still prevailing in some parts of the world; the mistakes are going on, but the progress is also going on and on.

However, there is one step away between mistake and discovery or progress. The bridge between these two is the people. Mistakes are indeed discouraging. Someone may give up when it turns to be a failure. In the first place the courage is required to calm one down to face the mistake. Edison could give up at the time right before the discovery and convince himself there actually isn't any material that fits. Secondly the mistakes could be the chance for discovery only for those well prepared brains. What is the secret behind the ultra-violet catastrophe? Why is it against the classical physics? Everyone including me is able to ask such questions at the end of the 19th century. But only Plank is able to solve the problem by proposing quantum method crazily, which marks the first step towards the foundation of quantum mechanics.

No pain, no gains. We should be courage enough to welcome the mistakes, and always trying to prepare ourselves so that we can be ready when mistake arrives. Anyway, mistakes are something unexpected, and something unexpected is a chance for change.

本文的立场明确，观点突出，但是有些论述不到位，举例多于辩论与理由，觉得这是不够的地方。同时第五段好像太过强调人的重要性，盖过mistake  的重要性，有点“喧宾夺主”的感觉。


动笔就是进步，你的文章比我的好多啦！欢迎批改我的文章：
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glassfrogUID: 170569

开头：的确，第一段累赘了一些，而且第一段好像是核心的逻辑部分，后面对这种逻辑论述不多。
关于第五段，我当时的想法是本着ｉｍｏｎｇ的观点，要有发展，看样子我发展得过分了，以后还要注意呢。
谢谢你的修改。