argument4 我的第三篇

delta496UID: 193816

The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
'Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.'

正文：
    In the argument, the author recommends that we should use Adams (A) when selling our homes. To support the recommendation the author points out that A has more estate agents and can sell houses faster and at a better price than Fitch (F). However, I find the argument logically unconvincing in several respects.
        First, the argument indicates that A has 40 real estate agents while F only has 25. Accordingly, the author assumes that A can do a better job. Yet, having more staffs does not necessarily mean working more efficiently. It is equally possible that most of the agents in A are part-time and have little experience. Without detailed information about the background of the agents in both firms, the author cannot convince us that A has an advantage in this aspect.
        Secondly, A' revenue last year does not necessarily indicate that A can achieve that every year. Perhaps in most years F can achieve higher than A. So we need to know the sale information of A in a longer period of time. Even if A has better revenue than F every year, we cannot overlook the fact that A hires more agents. Perhaps A agent actually sells fewer homes on average than F agent does. As the argument fails to account for the alternative explanations, the author cannot convince us that A has better revenue.
        The author further points out that the average price of homes sold by A is higher. Yet it provides little evidence that A can sell every house at a better price. Perhaps the houses sold by A are always in better areas and larger. Moreover, the statistic only shows the condition of last year and we have no idea about that of the longer time or in the future. In conclusion, without more information about the houses both firms sold, the author cannot conclude that A can sell a house at a better price.
        Finally, the example the author cites about his or her own experience also cannot convince us that A is better. Many factors will affect the time, which takes to sell the house. Perhaps one year ago houses were in short and easy to sell. Or perhaps the locations of the two houses are different which may be an important factor. Moreover, much change may have taken place in F over the past ten years. It is equally possible that nowadays F can sell a house even faster than A can. Without more information, the example may not be able to support the author’s claim.
        In sum, the argument is logically unsound. To strengthen it, the author should provide more evidence that A can work more efficient than B for the reason that it owns more agents, and that A can sell houses at better prices. To better evaluate the recommendation, we would also need to know the changes of F over the past ten years.

louaciUID: 159481

The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.
'Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams.'

正文：
In the argument, the author recommends that we should use Adams (A) when selling our homes. To support the recommendation the author points out that A has more estate agents and can sell houses faster and at a better price than Fitch (F). However, I find the argument logically unconvincing in several respects.
First, the argument indicates that A has 40 real estate agents while F only has 25. Accordingly, the author assumes that A can do a better job. Yet, having more staffs（应为staff） does not necessarily mean working more efficiently. It is equally possible that most of the agents in A are part-time and have little experience. Without detailed information about the background of the agents in both firms, the author cannot convince us that A has an advantage in this aspect.
Secondly, A' revenue last year does not necessarily indicate that A can achieve that every year. Perhaps in most years F can achieve higher（加上宾语revenue会不会更完整点） than A. So we need to know the sale information of A in a longer period of time. Even if A has better revenue than F every year, we cannot overlook the fact that A hires more agents. Perhaps A agent actually sells fewer homes on average than F agent does. As the argument fails to account for the alternative explanations, the author cannot convince us that A has better revenue.
The author further points out that the average price of homes sold by A is higher. Yet it provides little evidence that A can sell every house at a better price. Perhaps the houses sold by A are always in better areas and larger. Moreover, the statistic only shows the condition of last year and we have no idea about that of the longer time or in the future. In conclusion, without more information about the houses both firms sold, the author cannot conclude that A can sell a house at a better price.
Finally, the example the author cites about his or her own experience also cannot convince us that A is better. Many factors will affect the time, which takes to sell the house. Perhaps one year ago houses were in short and easy to sell. Or perhaps the locations of the two houses are different which may be an important factor. Moreover, much change may have taken place in F over the past ten years. It is equally possible that nowadays F can sell a house even faster than A can. Without more information, the example may not be able to support the author’s claim.
In sum, the argument is logically unsound. To strengthen it, the author should provide more evidence that A can work more efficient than B for the reason that it owns more agents, and that A can sell houses at better prices. To better evaluate the recommendation, we would also need to know the changes of F over the past ten years.

总体看批驳得很齐全，很充实，窃问半个小时可以搞定么？

delta496UID: 193816

真是谢谢你啊
目前半小时搞不定，还在努力
如果把各段MOREVOER后面的去掉，我半小时就搞得定了：）而那样就太单薄了。
但这篇文章500字不到，我想句式运用熟练的话应该还是有希望30分钟完成的吧
我3.22考，努力，努力，再努力

naiba369UID: 131655

占座了

naiba369UID: 131655

In the argument, the author recommends that we should use Adams (A) when selling our homes. To support the recommendation the author points out that A has more estate agents and can sell houses faster and at a better price than Fitch (F). However, I find the argument logically unconvincing in several respects.
First, the argument indicates that A has 40 real estate agents while F only has 25. Accordingly, the author assumes that A can do a better job. Yet, having more staffs does not necessarily mean working more efficiently. It is equally possible that most of the agents in A are part-time 这里用part－time 不是太秒。本来很好的一个攻击点就被你放过去了。 应该这么说：与F的part-time 的25名员工相比，A要40名full－time agents,可见其效率之低，经验至少。人家F半天的活，你A要干一天，是不是效率低呢？然后继续攻击，选择estate firm最重要的就是效率了，反观A的效率不是很高，一次没理由选择A。此外，还要牵扯一个“service”的问题，人家的F的人是不多，但也许因此拦的活就少，走到是高端路线，从而给每个客户配备的服务人员就有可能比A多。 and have little experience. Without detailed information about the background of the agents in both firms, the author cannot convince us that A has an advantage in this aspect.

Secondly, A' revenue last year does not necessarily indicate that A can achieve that every year. Perhaps in most years F can achieve higher than A. So we need to know the sale information of A in a longer period of time. Even if A has better revenue than F every year, we cannot overlook the fact that A hires more agents. Perhaps A agent actually sells fewer homes on average than F agent does. As the argument fails to account for the alternative explanations, the author cannot convince us that A has better revenue.还有revenue并非net profit，也许由于A雇佣了40个agents，因此，它的revenue比较高，但是抛去工资成本后，也许还不如F高呢，人家1。人少，2。Part-time，工资成不不比A高。继而，不能排除F的纯利润比A高的可能性。还要就是这个数据是怎么来的，是否是科学采样的？能保证其representative吗？

The author further points out that the average price of homes sold by A is higher. Yet it provides little evidence that A can sell every house at a better price. Perhaps the houses sold by A are always in better areas and larger. 这里再深入一下，“反观F的都是poor area”Moreover, the statistic only shows the condition of last year and we have no idea about that of the longer time or in the future. In conclusion, without more information about the houses both firms sold, the author cannot conclude that A can sell a house at a better price.

Finally, the example the author cites about his or her own experience also cannot convince us that A is better. Many factors will affect the time, which takes to sell the house. Perhaps one year ago houses were in short and easy to sell. Or perhaps the locations of the two houses are different which may be an important factor. Moreover, much change may have taken place in F over the past ten years. It is equally possible that nowadays F can sell a house even faster than A can. Without more information, the example may not be able to support the author’s claim.

In sum, the argument is logically unsound. To strengthen it, the author should provide more evidence that A can work more efficient than B for the reason that it owns more agents, and that A can sell houses at better prices. To better evaluate the recommendation, we would also need to know the changes of F over the past ten years.

delta496UID: 193816

谢谢提出宝贵意见！
down下来修改ing
本来今天整理argument常用句式，心情巨郁闷，看到这个心情好多了
我的英文表达能力还是很成问题
汗～～～
洗个澡去先

poohUID: 146994

楼主，帮着mm看看吧 https://bbs.gter.net/showthread.php?s=&threadid=245874

delta496UID: 193816

这就去看，我顺便也把ARGU40写一下