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发表于 2005-2-4 22:57:03 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
第一篇 50分钟 感觉真是很不PROFESSION啊哈哈 麻烦大家给看一下吧 如果批改费时间的花简单给打个分数 指出大的问题 让我知道一下自己的水平和改进方向就万分感谢了:)


167. "It is impossible for an effective political leader to tell the truth all the time. Complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician."

一位卓有成效的政治领导人是不可能一直都讲真话的。对于政治家来说,绝对的诚实是无用的美德。

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1. In the first place, to be completely honesty is a hard task for everyone in our real life, including the politicians.
2. In the second place, as political leader, in order to enable the security and prosperity of the whole country and its citizens, it is the adequate choice for him or her to withholding truth from the public temporarily.
3. Notwithstanding, although it is necessary for political leaders to be partly and selectively honest and withhold information to the public for some reasonable causes, it is not equal to that political leaders have the rights to be dishonest.





Does it is true that an effective political leader can not tell the truth all the time, and as the speaker mentioned, complete honesty is an invalid virtue for a politician? It is a popular and paradox topic in contemporary society. I agree with the speaker's assertion to a large extent, because the opposite statement which demand a politician to be purely honest is a somewhat difficult even unrealistic.

In the first place, to be completely honesty is a hard task for everyone in our real life, including the politicians. The society and the environment surrounding us are very complicated, which are full of paradoxes and difficult things to deal with. It is difficult to imagine a common person to be truly honest about what he or she do and what he or she say in such a situation like nowadays. I have the confidence to launch a survey about honest in our surroundings, the result most probably is that seldom people dare to say he or she never tells a lie in his or her life. Politicians confront even more complicated and difficult affairs in their political lives than average people, it is unreasonable and unrealistic to set up so demanding standards for them not to be dishonest.

In the second place, as political leader, in order to enable the security and prosperity of the whole country and its citizens, it is the adequate choice for him or her to withholding truth from the public temporarily. Although dishonesty is not a laudable habit, in some circumstances people have to withhold truth even tell lies without choice, which are worth to be forgiven. Do not tell the dying people his or her real physical situation, encourage them that they will be better soon is lying indeed, which is also understandable. So do the politicians. When being asked about the significant information such as military and national security, it is wise for a political leader chooses to be silent instead of expose. In such situations, it is obvious for everyone that to be complete honesty is a useless even harmful behavior for politicians.

Notwithstanding, although it is necessary for political leaders to be partly and selectively honest and withhold information to the public for some reasonable causes, it is not equal to that political leaders have the rights to be dishonest. (知晓权)
Public have the right to know and participate in the social and national political issues, which is the demand of democracy. As an effective political leader, he or she has vital responsibility to ensure the achievement of democracy and freedom of choice, which demands he or she to be loyal enough to the nation and citizens. If the politicians have the complete power to be unreasonable dishonest and withhold necessary information to the public, it will lead to harmful results such as low efficiency, corruption even dictator, which is conflict with the norm of democracy and is unbearable to any democratic society. To be dishonest for the politician' own sake will be surely punished by the laws even the whole society. One persuasive example is the notorious(水门事件) "Watergate" affairs in which President Nixon withhold the truth for his political sake and eventually end up with resignation. Such instance tell us to set up the supervision system in order to ensure the efficiency and loyalty of the political leaders instead of simple advocating the speaker's assertion, giving them the complete power and opportunity to be harmful to the society.

In sum up, it is essentially the truth that ask politicians to be complete honest is unrealistic for their special position and tasks. But such statement cannot become their excuse to be dishonest for their own sake even harmful to the society. As social members we have the rights and responsibilities to participate in social political issues enable then to be comparatively honest and more efficient in their leading positions.
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心虚ING  大概是个什么水平大家给指点下好吗 知道XDJM们都很忙  随便回两句话也很感激了 谢谢大家!!!!

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167. "It is impossible for an effective political leader to tell the truth all the time. Complete honesty is not a useful virtue for a politician."

一位卓有成效的政治领导人是不可能一直都讲真话的。对于政治家来说,绝对的诚实是无用的美德。

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提纲:
1. In the first place, to be completely honesty is a hard task for everyone in our real life, including the politicians.
2. In the second place, as political leader, in order to enable the security and prosperity of the whole country and its citizens, it is the adequate choice for him or her to withholding truth from the public temporarily.
3. Notwithstanding, although it is necessary for political leaders to be partly and selectively honest and withhold information to the public for some reasonable causes, it is not equal to that political leaders have the rights to be dishonest.





Does it is true ???这样的语法错误不应该啊!应该是Is it true that an effective political leader can not tell the truth all the time, and as the speaker mentioned, complete honesty is an invalid virtue for a politician? It is a popular and paradox topic in contemporary society. I agree with the speaker's assertion to a large extent, because the opposite statement which demand a politician to be purely honest is a 去掉a somewhat difficult even unrealistic.

In the first place, to be completely honesty is a hard task for everyone in our real life, including the politicians. The society and the environment surrounding us are very complicated, which are full of paradoxes and difficult things to deal with. It is difficult to imagine a common person to be truly honest about what he or she do and what he or she say in such a situation like nowadays. I have the confidence to launch a survey about honest in our surroundings, the result most probably is that seldom people dare to say he or she never tells a lie in his or her life. Politicians confront even more complicated and difficult affairs in their political lives than average people, it is unreasonable and unrealistic to set up so demanding standards for them not to be dishonest.

In the second place, as political leader, in order to enable the security and prosperity of the whole country and its citizens, it is the adequate choice for him or her to withholding truth from the public temporarily. Although dishonesty is not a laudable habit, in some circumstances people have to withhold truth even tell lies without choice, which are worth to be forgiven worth doing! . Do not tell the dying people his or her real physical situation, encourage them that they will be better soon is lying indeed, which is also understandable. So do the politicians. When being asked about the significant information such as military and national security, it is wise for a political leader to   chooses to be silent instead of expose. exmpose 用得不对。改成instead of disclosing all In such situations, it is obvious for everyone that to be complete honesty is a useless even harmful behavior for politicians. 例子如果分析得更详细更深入一点就好了,比如带来了什么后果

Notwithstanding, although it is necessary for political leaders to be partly and selectively honest and withhold information to --> from the public for some reasonable causes, it is not equal to that political leaders have the rights to be dishonest. (知晓权)
Public have the right to know and participate in the social and national political issues, which is the demand of democracy. As an effective political leader, he or she has vital responsibility to ensure the achievement of democracy and freedom of choice, which demands he or she to be loyal enough to the nation and citizens. If the politicians have the complete power to be unreasonable dishonest unreasonablly dishonest 这个副词修饰这个形容词感觉很奇怪,因为dishonest本来就是个贬义词 and withhold necessary information to the public, it will lead to harmful results such as low efficiency, corruption even dictator, which is conflict with the norm of democracy and is unbearable to any democratic society. To be dishonest for the politician' own sake will be surely punished by the laws even the whole society. One persuasive example is the notorious(水门事件) "Watergate" affairs in which President Nixon withhold the truth for his political sake and eventually end up with resignation. Such instance tell us to set up the supervision system in order to ensure the efficiency and loyalty of the political leaders instead of simple advocating the speaker's assertion, giving them the complete power and opportunity to be harmful to the society. 最后这句没多大意思,文章的重点和这段的落脚点都是政治家的诚实问题,而不是censorship的问题

这段对dishonest有很多定义和区分,感觉上有些混乱

In sum up, it is essentially the truth that ask politicians to be complete honest is unrealistic for their special position and tasks. But such statement cannot become their excuse to be dishonest for their own sake even harmful to the society. As social members we have the rights and responsibilities to participate in social political issues enable then to be comparatively honest and more efficient in their leading positions.

总的来说还可以,思路对头,有些语法错误和用词不当的情况存在

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发表于 2005-2-8 11:27:09 |只看该作者

3分

也就值3分!!!太恶心了, 错误那么多!!!!

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发表于 2005-2-8 11:31:39 |只看该作者
同是g友,说话这么绝情干吗?
大过年的!
谁的第1篇是范文??

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发表于 2005-2-8 11:49:58 |只看该作者

pooh真笨

pooh都考几次了???还没过啊???????

我一次过, 语文660, 数学 800, AW 5.5

Toefl 630+

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发表于 2005-2-8 12:23:59 |只看该作者
你真是骄傲得有资本啊!

gre考不好=笨 ???
pooh没过 你有证据吗???
gre是以分数高低来衡量过不过的吗?我同学gre1900 toefl570照样在哈佛大学,拿全奖,在你看来这个分数算过没过??

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发表于 2005-2-8 12:48:15 |只看该作者
哈哈,完全是注册一个马甲来找刺激。。。大过年的,恐怕没回家吧。。。别找别人的喳了,自己睡一觉也行嘛。

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发表于 2005-2-8 13:18:08 |只看该作者

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你妈个比

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发表于 2005-2-8 13:25:07 |只看该作者
主要的部分 认为leader can not be completely honest 不够突出,应该具体深入一些

第一次已经很不错的说(我写不出来)^_^

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