Issue134自我感觉很烂,过完年发现作文都不会写了,汗~求砖啊~让我化压力为动力

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Students should be encouraged to realize that mental agility and rhetorical skill must be accompanied by sincerity and the true conviction of their own beliefs.
提纲:
1 value of sincerety
2 value of conviction
3 admittedly, the importance of mental agility and rhetorical skill
感觉写的乱七八糟，堆砌了一堆例子而已，唉～
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Which is more important for the students, the mental agility and rhetorical skill, or the sincerity and conviction of one's own faith? Such question may be haunting many experts all the while. I concede that the intelligent quality and verbal trick may be somewhat indispensable to one's success, however, they should be along with the earnestness and strong confidence in one's own belief.

To begin with, the sincerity to one's belief is the pivotal ingredient in the recipe of personal success and social development. Without such sincerity to their suspicion, people may not be so defiant to challenge the authority and the creation and imagination tend to be quelled completely. Without such sincerity to their own faults, people shunning and concealing their true shortcomings and defects may easily make the same mistakes again and again and never move forward correctly. On the contrary, only with sincerity to one's heart can people take their corresponding responsibility and make improvements. Since students are the future pillars of the society, they should be taught the value of sincerity so that they can make personal progress and then push the society forward.

Secondly, the conviction of one's own faith sparks people's enthusiasm and inspiration to fight for whatever they insist. Unless people hold belief in their own thoughts, it is possible for them to defend and struggle for their own objectives and principles. Or else, they may easily give up the original ideas due to their novelty and weirdness. Bruno's persistence in heliocentric theory aptly illustrates the importance of conviction. It is also the conviction to win that inspired Edison to go on his seemingly disappointing and everlasting experiments. That is, the solid belief in one's own faith is the integral element of personal success. Human history is replete with such examples, which are not only limited in scientific field. See F.D.Roosevelt's steady exertion of the New Deal, which finally prove so effective that it not only has saved America from the verge of collapse but also paved way for its consequent prosperity. Another case would as well lend credence to the weight of conviction is that Beethoven's adherence to his new style of music bringing about the transition from classical to romantic composition. On the contrary, once people lose their belief and blindly follow what is laid in front of them without scrutiny, they would be inclined to feel confused about their destination, the future, and even the world. This puzzle would in turn produce spiritual emptiness and despair, which is very detrimental and dangerous. Therefore, the conviction of one’s belief should be required to all the students.

Admittedly, the metal agility and rhetorical skill are the reflection of a person's intelligence and ability, which may be an effective skill to success. Mental agility helps us to reason more effectively and more thoroughly in discrimination of right and wrong. Rhetorical skill makes our essays and speeches more vivid and persuasive. Nonetheless, all should be relied on the sincerity and conviction of one’s belief. If a person has no confidence in his/her faith, how could this one convince the others? If the emotion expressed in an essay or speech is disingenuous, no matter how delicate the rhetorical skill is, people would not be moved. After all, the intrinsic candor and faith is the crucial essence, while the metal agility and rhetorical skill are nothing but flamboyant appearance.

To sum up, to be a wise student, one should be clear of the necessity of sincerity and the true conviction of one’s own belief, and on this basis, pay proper attention to the metal agility and rhetorical skill.

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Which is more important for the students, the mental agility and rhetorical skill, or the sincerity and conviction of one's own faith? Such question may be haunting many experts all the while 正常人也会有这种思考，要改. I concede that the intelligent quality and verbal trick 文中是个中性的词，而这里建议不要表现出太明显的好恶。may be somewhat indispensable to one's success, however, they should be along with the earnestness and strong confidence in one's own belief.

To begin with, the sincerity to one's belief is the pivotal ingredient in the recipe of personal success and social development. Without such sincerity to their suspicion, people may not be so defiant 这个词好吗？感觉有点贬抑，question/ doubt/be a suspicion of 行吗？to challenge the authority and the creation and imagination tend to be quelled completely. Without such sincerity to their own faults, people shunning and concealing their true shortcomings and defects may easily make the same mistakes again and again and never move forward correctly. On the contrary, only with sincerity to one's heart can people take their corresponding responsibility and make improvements. Since students are the future pillars of the society, they should be taught the value of sincerity so that they can make personal progress and then push the society forward. 1。只是理论的分析缺乏具体具体的事例 2。你的关于sincerity的立论不是太高。你只是在讲个人对权威的怀疑（重点），而这不是sincerity最重要的东西。我想sincerity可以是个人拥有诚实的品质（honest）而这是做为一个优秀市民的最起码的品质。其次，当一个社会严重缺乏sincerity时，这个社会就危在旦夕。Eg：安然(Enron?)，starcom等引起的美国信用危机就是个人sincerity缺乏导致的。

Secondly, the conviction of one's own faith sparks people's enthusiasm and inspiration to fight for whatever they insist. Unless people hold belief in their own thoughts, it is possible for them to defend and struggle for their own objectives and principles. Or else, they may easily give up the original ideas due to their novelty and weirdness. Bruno's persistence in heliocentric theory aptly illustrates the importance of conviction. It is also the conviction to win that inspired Edison to go on his seemingly disappointing and everlasting experiments. That is, the solid belief in one's own faith is the integral element of personal success. Human history is replete with such examples, which are not only limited in scientific field. See F.D.Roosevelt's steady exertion of the New Deal, which finally prove so effective that it not only has saved America from the verge of collapse but also paved way for its consequent prosperity. Another case would as well lend credence to the weight of conviction is that Beethoven's adherence to his new style of music bringing about the transition from classical to romantic composition. On the contrary, once people lose their belief and blindly follow what is laid in front of them without scrutiny, they would be inclined to feel confused about their destination, the future, and even the world. This puzzle would in turn produce spiritual emptiness and despair, which is very detrimental and dangerous. Therefore, the conviction of one’s belief should be required to all the students.举例很充分，但我想如果在举例之后在进一步分析，讲明此事成功和“the conviction of one’s own faith”的关系，这样就很具说服力

Admittedly, the metal agility and rhetorical skill are the reflection of a person's intelligence and ability, which may be an effective skill to success. Mental agility helps us to reason more effectively and more thoroughly in discrimination of right and wrong. Rhetorical skill makes our essays and speeches more vivid and persuasive. Nonetheless, all should be relied on the sincerity and conviction of one’s belief. If a person has no confidence in his/her faith, how could this one convince the others? If the emotion expressed in an essay or speech is disingenuous, no matter how delicate the rhetorical skill is, people would not be moved. After all, the intrinsic candor and faith is the crucial essence, while the metal agility and rhetorical skill are nothing but flamboyant appearance.1。还是缺乏例子的有效支持。可以具你自己的例子，很简单。2.然后，我建议你这么想。如果缺乏了相应的语言技巧和头脑的灵活性，那么，个人的信念是否能充分实践呢，很难说，因为，现在强调team work，倘若你没有足够的communication的能力，你怎么在一个team里很好的协调呢

To sum up, to be a wise student, one should be clear of the necessity of sincerity and the true conviction of one’s own belief, and on this basis, pay proper attention to the metal agility and rhetorical skill.
小结：
1。仅从本文而言还是很不错的，就是具例子和例子分析方面做的不够。
2。我想从大的结构、立论而言你目前的，不是最好的。因为题目中说A must be accompanied by B ，其实暗示你，A和B这两者都是很重要的，但缺一不行，A要做为B的辅助。但这样决不意味着A就不重要，恰恰相反，A也是很重要的，但在这点上，你从思想上就没有认识到，致使深度不够。
3。我的提纲。
POSITION:基本肯定。
B1:的确，在当今社会，灵活的头脑与犀利的言词对于个人发展是必备的素质之一。
B2:但是，在强调前者的同时，我们绝不能忽略个人的sincerity and the true conviction of their own beliefs 的决定性作用。
B3:综合考虑，只有“灵活的头脑与犀利的言词“与”sincerity and the true conviction of their own beliefs“同时具备，且让前者辅助与后者，个人才能取得最大化的成功。

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------题目------
Students should be encouraged to realize that mental agility and rhetorical skill must be accompanied by sincerity and the true conviction of their own beliefs.
提纲:
1 value of sincerety
2 value of conviction
3 admittedly, the importance of mental agility and rhetorical skill
感觉写的乱七八糟，堆砌了一堆例子而已，唉～
------正文------
Which is more important for the students, the mental agility and rhetorical skill, or the sincerity and conviction of one's own faith? Such question may be haunting many experts all the while. I concede that the intelligent quality and verbal trick may be somewhat indispensable to one's success, however, they should be along with the earnestness and strong confidence in one's own belief.

To begin with, the sincerity to one's belief is the pivotal ingredient in the recipe of personal success and social development. Without such sincerity to their suspicion, people may not be so defiant to challenge the authority and the creation and imagination tend to be quelled completely. 这句话感觉很唐突，表达得也有点不地道 Without such sincerity to their own faults, people shunning and concealing their true shortcomings and defects may easily make the same mistakes again and again and never move forward correctly. On the contrary, only with sincerity to one's heart can people take their corresponding responsibility and make improvements. Since students are the future pillars of the society, they should be taught the value of sincerity so that they can make personal progress and then push the society forward.
这段逻辑不是很清晰，东说一点西说一点

Secondly, the conviction of one's own faith sparks people's enthusiasm and inspiration to fight for whatever they insist. Unless people hold belief in their own thoughts, it is possibleimpossible for them to defend and struggle for their own objectives and principles. Or else, they may easily give up the original ideas due to their novelty and weirdness. Bruno's persistence in heliocentric theory aptly illustrates the importance of conviction. It is also the conviction to win that inspired Edison to go on his seemingly disappointing and everlasting experiments. That is, the solid belief in one's own faith is the integral element of personal success. Human history is replete with such examples, which are not only limited in scientific field. See F.D.Roosevelt's steady exertion of the New Deal, which finally prove so effective that it not only has saved America from the verge of collapse but also paved way for its consequent prosperity. Another case would as well lend credence to the weight of conviction is that Beethoven's adherence to his new style of music bringing about the transition from classical to romantic composition. On the contrary, once people lose their belief and blindly follow what is laid in front of them without scrutiny, they would be inclined to feel confused about their destination, the future, and even the world. This puzzle would in turn produce spiritual emptiness and despair, which is very detrimental and dangerous. Therefore, the conviction of one’s belief should be required to all the students.
例子有一两个就可以了，太多了也没必要，讲例子的时候不要只论述事实，要往你的tc上靠，到底conviction赋予了他们怎样的enthusiam and inspiration


Admittedly, the metal agility and rhetorical skill are the reflection of a person's intelligence and ability, which may be an effective skill to success. Mental agility helps us to reason more effectively and more thoroughly in discrimination of right and wrong. Rhetorical skill makes our essays and speeches more vivid and persuasive. Nonetheless, all should be relied on the sincerity and conviction of one’s belief. If a person has no confidence in his/her faith, how could this one convince the others? If the emotion expressed in an essay or speech is disingenuous, no matter how delicate the rhetorical skill is, people would not be moved. After all, the intrinsic candor and faith is the crucial essence, while the metal agility and rhetorical skill are nothing but flamboyant appearance.
这段逻辑混乱，不知道你是想作为转折段，还是跟body1,2 顺接段。中间就转折了

To sum up, to be a wise student, one should be clear of the necessity of sincerity and the true conviction of one’s own belief, and on this basis, pay proper attention to the metal agility and rhetorical skill.

我就是给你指出了有问题的地方，body2还可以，body1和body3逻辑上不清晰，语言也不是很流畅

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谢谢大家~偶一直搞不清楚这个题目的意思,所以写的有点费劲,一直想写mental agility and rhetorical skill 对于研究方面的影响,可是有点力不从心,要是往别的方向靠一下可能好点,唉~看来这篇还得动动大手术~郁闷啊~越来越不自信了~觉得想要写好文章真是困难啊!

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Which is more important for the students, the mental agility and rhetorical skill, or the sincerity and conviction of one's own faith? Such question may be haunting many experts all the while. I concede that the intelligent quality and verbal trick may be somewhat indispensable to one's success, however, they should be along with the earnestness and strong confidence in one's own belief.

To begin with, the sincerity to one's belief is the pivotal ingredient in the recipe of personal success and social development. Without such sincerity to their suspicion, people may not be so defiant to challenge the authority and the creation and imagination tend to be quelled completely. Without such sincerity to their own faults, people shunning and concealing their true shortcomings and defects may easily make the same mistakes again and again and never move forward correctly. On the contrary, only with sincerity to one's heart can people take their corresponding responsibility and make improvements. Since students are the future pillars of the society, they should be taught the value of sincerity so that they can make personal progress and then push the society forward.

Secondly, the conviction of one's own faith sparks people's enthusiasm and inspiration to fight for whatever they insist. Unless[only?] people hold belief in their own thoughts, it is possible for them to defend and struggle for their own objectives and principles. Or else, they may easily give up the original ideas due to their novelty and weirdness. Bruno's persistence in heliocentric theory aptly illustrates the importance of conviction. It is also the conviction to win that inspired Edison to go on his seemingly disappointing and everlasting experiments. That is, the solid belief in one's own faith is the integral element of personal success. Human history is replete with such examples, which are not only limited in scientific field. See F.D.Roosevelt's steady exertion of the New Deal, which finally prove so effective that it not only has saved America from the verge of collapse but also paved way for its consequent prosperity. Another case would as well lend credence to the weight of conviction is that Beethoven's adherence to his new style of music bringing about the transition from classical to romantic composition. On the contrary, once people lose their belief and blindly follow what is laid[faced是不是更地道?不是中国人的摆在前面的政治问题是…] in front of them without scrutiny, they would be inclined to feel confused about their destination, the future, and even the world. This puzzle would in turn produce spiritual emptiness and despair, which is very detrimental and dangerous. Therefore, the conviction of one’s belief should be required to all the students.[这段结尾应更有力些,这一段例子不错]

Admittedly, the metal agility and rhetorical skill are the reflection of a person's intelligence and ability, which may be an effective skill to success. Mental agility helps us to reason more effectively and more thoroughly in discrimination of right and wrong. Rhetorical skill makes our essays and speeches more vivid and persuasive. Nonetheless, all should be relied on the sincerity and conviction of one’s belief. If a person has no confidence in his/her faith, how could this one convince the others? If the emotion expressed in an essay or speech is disingenuous, no matter how delicate the rhetorical skill is, people would not be moved. After all, the intrinsic candor and faith is the crucial essence, while the metal agility and rhetorical skill are nothing but flamboyant appearance.

To sum up, to be a wise student, one should be clear of the necessity of sincerity and the true conviction of one’s own belief, and on this basis[on this condition], pay proper attention to the metal agility and rhetorical skill.
[偶觉得可以把body1b2合成一段,b3肯定还要写1方面但这题目挺抽象的我也写不出好的提纲看看大家怎么说把]