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bqianaUID: 193168

People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People attend colleges or universities for a lot of different reasons. I believe that the three most common reasons are to prepare for a career, to have new experiences, and to increase their knowledge of themselves and the world around them.

Career preparation is becoming more and more important to young people. For many, this is the primary reason to go to college, They know that the job market is competitive. At college, they can learn new skill for careers with a lot of opportunities. This means careers, such as information technology, that are expected to need a large workforce in the coming years.

Also, students go to colleges and universities to have new experiences. This often means having the opportunity to meet people different from those in their hometowns. For most students, going to college is the first time they’ve been away from home by themselves. In additions, this is the first time they’ve had to make decisions on their own. Making these decisions increases their knowledge of themselves.

Besides looking for self-knowledge, people also attend a university or college to expand their knowledge in subjects they find interesting. For many, this will be their last chance for a long time to learn about something that doesn’t relate to their career.

I would recommend that people not be so focused on a career. They should go to college to have new experiences and learn about themselves and the world they live in.

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雨霖vineUID: 196845

呵呵，偶笨笨滴，待我先慢慢看看先……

lucy_zq2002UID: 177408

很久没碰雅思了,准备暑假考,现在慢慢拾起来~~可能说得不太好

个人觉得:
文章优点:层次分明,三个原因三段论:语法正确
    缺点:1.题目要求:Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer文中缺乏举证
         2.题中给出了三个原因,就照搬(是优点也是缺点)估计考官也看多了,很难显得出众
         3.有些表达不规范,用词比较简单

bqianaUID: 193168

终于出现了能人！佩服！望有空多多留言，发些自己写的文章。

lucy_zq2002UID: 177408

楼主客气了!不敢不敢,面红中,我是小兵拉

只是很体会你的心情,谢谢你用心良苦!写作是要多看多改的.
我只会说,要写好,还要更深的积累呢~努力中_