issue127 自己感觉有点新意，请斑竹赐教，各位同学给点意见

snowyfxUID: 189264

这是我迄今为止感觉写得最好的一篇作文，用了很长时间，因为想写好。也没管字数，太多了，考试的时候一定的精简了，考虑到自己打字太慢。
127 Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or dictates of our passions.

Do facts are stubborn things? It is really a simple but hard question to answer. Some people think so, the others, however, believe in facts alerted by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions. In my view, it is primarily up to how we cognize and understand the term of "facts" and, to my certain knowledge and understanding, facts in different realms have different meanings which is to be mentioned in my below argument-of course, I surely refer to the dictionary-and thus I strongly agree with the speaker's assert that facts are stubborn things, and they cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or the dictates of our passions.

Consider the science realm, in which we should comprehend facts as "something having real, demonstrable existence", and based on such meaning, we can clearly know that facts are stubborn thing, no matter how reluctant people are to accept them, and no matter how desirably people want to change them by wishes, inclination, or dictates of passions, nevertheless, all these depression and disappointment are invalid. A striking example is about Copernicus theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun. This theory heavily disputed the Ptolemaic system of astronomy which had been totally approbated and regarded as doxy by Christian and, consequently, the work about this theory- ...-had not been published until the year before Copernicus died, however, although it was a long way to go for the theory before being accepted, finally with many following scientists' effort, such as Galileo, Newton, etc., gradually, people accepted the fact. Another strongly supporting example is about Einstein's theory of relativity, Although his ideas in that time aroused violent controversy and irrational anger, and even the Nobel Prize selection committee had to avoid mentioning relativity and pretend the belated prize was awarded primarily for his work on the quantum theory, today people really considered relativity as one of the most accurate and basic law in physics. From above examples, we cannot help but concede that "facts" are facts that cannot be changed by our wishes, at least in science field.

Furthermore, when it comes to society, firstly, we may understand "facts" as "information presented as objective real". After a president election, when people supporting the loser got the bad news, it is no use for them to be disappointed and depressed, or even fight and parade for the unfair fact to them, they may be willing to make the loser the president, considering that he may be more friendly and peaceful, prefer to be more kindly to the public, and take problems of environment pollution and about education more seriously, and so forth. However, for them accepting the fact-his losing is the most hopeful path, because they cannot change the fact by their inclination or dictates of passions now. Secondly, we may understand "facts" as "a thing that has been done, especially a crime" in law. We all know that facts speak louder than words in law. No matter how penitential a criminal is and how heart-stricken his or her parents, the fact that he or she will be punished by law cannot be changed. Without facts, laws will be invalid, and without laws, we cannot imagine what a society will be.

In addition, on personal level, under most cases we have no other choices but accept facts, and Here we understand "facts" as "a real occurrence or an event". A politician has to accept the fact--losing an election; a poet has to accept the fact that in today society, people no longer take poems as serious things; a worker has to accept the fact-- losing the job; a student has to accept the fact-- failing in the exam and losing the opportunity of entering an university; a pair of unfortunate parents have to accept the fact--losing their beloved child in an accident, and so on. All of these are things that we are not ready to see and accept, but once these facts really happened on us, we have no other choices but accept them, in that we are not able to change them within our power, though these facts terribly contravened our wishes, inclination, or dictates of our passions.

In sum, I do not exclude other understanding about the meaning of "facts", and that people may hold the opposite view to me. I, however, surely believe that all the "facts" I above referred to are the things stubborn and cannot be alerted by our wishes. I may think that through my statement and argument above, many people may agree with me and accept my point, even if there are also a few people who stand on the opposite side, they might take into account such another understanding method about "fact" of mine.  
最后问一下：《天体运行论》这书名怎么写？谢过

snowyfxUID: 189264

自己顶一下
呵呵

davidjackyUID: 135962

Taken!

snowyfxUID: 189264

先谢谢斑竹了，也恭禧斑竹上任，呵呵

sailing_yfUID: 150982

Do facts are stubborn things? It is really a simple but hard question to answer. Some people think so, the others, however, believe in facts alerted by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions. In my view, it is primarily up to how we cognizerecognize and understand the term of "facts" and, to my certain knowledge and understanding, facts in different realms have different换个词various meanings which isare to be mentioned in my below argument-of course, I surely refer to the dictionary-and thus I strongly agree with the speaker's assert that facts are stubborn things, and they cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or the dictates of our passions.

Consider the science realm, in which we should comprehend facts as "something having real, demonstrable existence",个人觉得后面的句子应该和前面的分开写 and based on such meaning, we can clearly know that facts are stubborn thing, no matter how reluctant people are to accept them, and no matter how desirably用形容词吧?desirable people want to change them by wishes, inclination, or dictates of passions, nevertheless, all these depression and disappointment are invalid. A striking example is about Copernicus theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun. This theory heavily disputed the Ptolemaic system of astronomy which had been totally approbated and regarded as doxy by Christian and, consequently, the work about this theory- ...-had not been published until the year before Copernicus died, however, although it was a long way to go for the theory before being accepted, finally with many following scientists' effort, such as Galileo, Newton, etc., gradually, people accepted the fact. Another strongly supporting example is about Einstein's theory of relativity, Although his ideas in that time aroused violent controversy and irrational anger, and even the Nobel Prize selection committee had to avoid mentioning relativity and pretend the belated prize was awarded primarily for his work on the quantum theory, today people really considered relativity as one of the most accurate and basic law in physics. From above examples, we cannot help but concede that "facts" are facts that cannot be changed by our wishes, at least in science field.

Furthermore, when it comes to society, firstly, we may understand "facts" as "information presented as objective real". After a president election, when people supporting the loser gotreceived the bad news, it is no use for them to be disappointed and depressed, or even fight and parade for the unfair fact to them, they may be willing to make the loser the president, considering that he may be more friendly and peaceful, prefer to be more kindly to the public, and take problems of environment pollution and about education more seriously, and so forth. However, for them accepting the fact-his losing is the most hopeful path, because they cannot change the fact by their inclination or dictates of passions now. Secondly, we may understand "facts" as "a thing that has been done, especially a crime" in law. We all know that facts speak louder than words in law. No matter how penitential a criminal is and how heart-stricken his or her parents, the fact that he or she will be punished by law cannot be changed. Without facts, laws will be invalid, and without laws, we cannot imagine what a society will be.

In addition, on personal level, under most cases we have no other choices but accept facts, and Here we understand "facts" as "a real occurrence or an event". A politician has to accept the fact--losing an election; a poet has to accept the fact that in today society, people no longer take poems as serious things; a worker has to accept the fact-- losing the job; a student has to accept the fact-- failing in the exam and losing the opportunity of entering an university; a pair of unfortunate parents have to accept the fact--losing their beloved child in an accident, and so on. All of these are things that we are not ready to see and accept, but once these facts really happened on us, we have no other choices but accept them, in that we are not able to change them within our power, though these facts terribly contravened our wishes, inclination, or dictates of our passions.

In sum, I do not exclude other understanding about the meaning of "facts", and that people may hold the opposite view to me. I, however, surely believe that all the "facts" I above referred to are the things stubborn and cannot be alerted by our wishes. I may think that through my statement and argument above, many people may agree with me and accept my point, even if there are also a few people who stand on the opposite side, they might take into account such another understanding method about "fact" of mine.

DarrenYangUID: 191179

酣畅淋漓.
尽管倒数第二段例子举得好惨啊 :P

这个题目还真是可以想很多呢.哲学的基本问题了吧....

山涧风笛UID: 196557

Nicolaus Copernicus 写的:  De Revolutionibus Orbium Coelestium
(天体运行论)
英文为:On the Revolutions of the Heavenly Spheres

好长啊,PFPF!

山坡羊UID: 169978

Do facts are stubborn things? It is really a simple but hard question to answer. Some people think so, the others, however, believe in facts alerted[altered] by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions. In my view, it is primarily up to how we cognize and understand the term of "facts" and, to my certain knowledge and understanding, facts in different realms have different meanings which is to be mentioned in my below argument-of course, I surely refer to the dictionary-and thus I strongly agree with the speaker's assert that facts are stubborn things, and they cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or the dictates of our passions.
[挺好的开头，不过稍显罗嗦]
Consider the science realm, in which we should comprehend facts as "something having real, demonstrable existence", and based on such meaning, we can clearly know that facts are stubborn thing, no matter how reluctant people are to accept them, and no matter how desirably people want to change them by wishes, inclination, or dictates of passions, nevertheless, all these depression and disappointment are invalid. A striking example is about Copernicus theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun. This theory heavily disputed the Ptolemaic system of astronomy which had been totally approbated and regarded as doxy by Christian and, consequently, the work about this theory- ...-had not been published until the year before Copernicus died, however, although it was a long way to go for the theory before being accepted, finally with many following scientists' effort, such as Galileo, Newton, etc., gradually, people accepted the fact. Another strongly supporting example is about Einstein's theory of relativity, Although his ideas in that time aroused violent controversy and irrational anger, and even the Nobel Prize selection committee had to avoid mentioning relativity and pretend the belated prize was awarded primarily for his work on the quantum theory, today people really considered relativity as one of the most accurate and basic law in physics. From above examples, we cannot help but concede that "facts" are facts that cannot be changed by our wishes, at least in science field.
[关于事实，你的论证我也不知道是否最合适，自圆其说就好了，但我自己感觉把实施分为规律和非规律的事实比较好。并且规律也不是一成不变的，规律都有实用的条件和范围。就说地球绕太阳转，很可能哪一天它将不再绕太阳转呢？
另一个事实的分类就是等于历史和现在，过去的当然不能更改，和你的观点相合。但现在的却是可以通过努力去改变的。如今天很穷的事实，明天可能很富。
但究竟怎么写好，我也没想好]
Furthermore, when it comes to society, firstly, we may understand "facts" as "information presented as objective real". After a president election, when people supporting the loser got the bad news, it is no use for them to be disappointed and depressed, or even fight and parade for the unfair fact to them, they may be willing to make the loser the president, considering that he may be more friendly and peaceful, prefer to be more kindly to the public, and take problems of environment pollution and about education more seriously, and so forth. However, for them accepting the fact-his losing is the most hopeful path, because they cannot change the fact by their inclination or dictates of passions now. Secondly, we may understand "facts" as "a thing that has been done, especially a crime" in law. We all know that facts speak louder than words in law. No matter how penitential a criminal is and how heart-stricken his or her parents, the fact that he or she will be punished by law cannot be changed. Without facts, laws will be invalid, and without laws, we cannot imagine what a society will be.
[你的文字真的不错啦，天啊，我还比你先考!]
In addition, on personal level, under most cases we have no other choices but accept facts, and Here we understand "facts" as "a real occurrence or an event". A politician has to accept the fact--losing an election; a poet has to accept the fact that in today society, people no longer take poems as serious things; a worker has to accept the fact-- losing the job; a student has to accept the fact-- failing in the exam and losing the opportunity of entering an university; a pair of unfortunate parents have to accept the fact--losing their beloved child in an accident, and so on. All of these are things that we are not ready to see and accept, but once these facts really happened on us, we have no other choices but accept them, in that we are not able to change them within our power, though these facts terribly contravened our wishes, inclination, or dictates of our passions.
[感觉例子有点多]
In sum, I do not exclude other understanding about the meaning of "facts", and that people may hold the opposite view to me. I, however, surely believe that all the "facts" I above referred to are the things stubborn and cannot be alerted[altered] by our wishes. I may think that through my statement and argument above, many people may agree with me and accept my point, even if there are also a few people who stand on the opposite side, they might take into account such another understanding method about "fact" of mine.
[觉得还是可以精简些]
最后问一下：《天体运行论》这书名怎么写？谢过
[写得很好啦，也挑不出什么错啦！你可以放心啦！现在限时如何了?]

山涧风笛UID: 196557

补充一下:
Nicolaus Copernicus was a Polish astronomer who is best known for the astronomical theory that the Sun was near the center of the universe and that the Earth and other planets rotated around the center. In 1543, he published a book called The Revolutions of the Heavenly Orbs, which argued that the Earth was not the center of the universe but was one of the planets and, like them, revolved around the sun. This model of the solar system is known as the Copernican system.

TommUID: 177042

127 Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or dictates of our passions.

Do(Do…are…?这个句子不用Do开头吧？嗯，先表扬一下，下面写的不错) facts are stubborn things? It is really a simple but hard(simple but hard这样说很别扭，可以说it is a simple and also a hard question to answer. BTW, 这样开头是不是太老套了？我看见n个人了，开头就说这个问题很复杂啊，或者这个问题很不简单啊，很多人都是这样开头的，好像聊天样的慢慢进入状态,but it is okay, whatever!) question to answer. Some people think so, the others, however, believe in facts alerted by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions(你的这句话表述有问题，它的主干是believe in facts, 然后后面的alerted by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions都是修饰facts而不是一个从句，我觉得可能应该the others believe that facts can be altered by….). In my view, it is primarily up to how we cognize and understand the term of "facts" and, to my certain knowledge and understanding, facts in different realms have(having) different meanings which is (are,应该是复数吧？) to be mentioned ( 感觉这里用will be mentioned这种将来表示法更妥当些，be to do好像多用在主动语态) in my below(following)  argument-of course, I surely (will,应该用将来时吧？) refer to the dictionary-and thus I strongly agree (强烈同意？那么说严重同意可不可以呢？)with the speaker's assert(assertion)  that facts are stubborn things, and they cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or the dictates of our passions.

(看到这里，突然感到很郁闷，心情开始变为灰色，就像北方城市的冬季的天空。这篇将是我为别人改的第三篇，而我的第一篇都只有十三个人次看，其中还有一半是我自己看的。请给点继续让我看别人文章的热情和动力吧！BTW, 这篇文章的作者有些词用的很牛啊！像什么cognize什么的，先赞一下。另外顺便问一句，那个变色工具是怎么用的？每次我把文本烤过去，然后鼠标动过去就全选了，我只想变一部分颜色啊。呵呵，我比较迟钝一点。yawning~~~，俺一郁闷俺就想睡觉，不好意思，俺明天接着帮你改吧)

Consider the science realm, in which we should comprehend facts as "something having real, demonstrable existence", and based on such meaning, we can clearly know that facts are stubborn thing, no matter how reluctant people are to accept them, and no matter how desirably people want to change them by wishes, inclination, or dictates of passions, nevertheless, all these depression and disappointment are invalid. A striking example is about Copernicus theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun. This theory heavily disputed the Ptolemaic system of astronomy which had been totally approbated and regarded as doxy(doxy，这个词俺查过了，在MerriamCollegiate里面，只有两层意思，一层是妓女，另一层是情妇，关于你的教条这层意思的说法，估计是词霸里面来的吧，而词霸里面只有简明词典里面有这个意思，我极度怀疑正确性，我觉得我们至少该用advanced的字典了吧。嗯，推荐给你一个词doctrine) by Christian and, consequently, the work about this theory- ...-had not been published until the year befo

snowyfxUID: 189264

非常非常感谢Tomm, 我们好像在staralways的作文中会过面。
你真的好仔细，真的感激涕零了。
一定好好研究你的意见，什么时候考？
好好交流一下。知道你也是个大牛。
还有澄清一点：我没有限时，所以作文的时候，用了金山词霸。
而且想到哪个句式，记不是很清楚时，就又翻了新概念四。
今天限时后发现差很多，都没自信了。

TommUID: 177042

呵呵，别介^！没什么牛不牛的，来这里的都是来拍砖或者来被拍砖的。请用砖头拍我的文章吧，至少就结构来拍我的issue啊。很郁闷的，我有时候用中文写作文也走题，更别说英文了。你用金山词霸，我也用金山词霸阿！要不然怎么知道你用金山词霸了？！我也没有限时阿，我的那篇issue写得很慢，前后用了差不多两天时间（当然，中间有人找我出去吃饭啊拜年什么的）。另外，好像在staralways之前，我就见过你，当时好像你帮别人改了一篇文章，然后我很懒，于是就站在你的肩膀上对那篇文章做了修改。后来在staralways的文章下面看见你了，你又对他的文章做了一些修改。当时就觉得你是一个好人，经常帮别人改文章，such a giver!所以我就在你的签名栏里面找到你的链接过来找你。其实~~~不好意思，我就是想说，你可不可以帮我把文章改一下啊，我的第一篇放得快腐烂了都没有人改，很郁闷~~~。
我是三月下旬考，很晕，argu还没有看。感觉时间不太足了。
恩，无论怎样，我今天迟一点把你的文章看了。你作为一个great giver也应该有回报的！
BTW, 呵呵，信心是该有的，你的基础还是很不错的，有好处又不要钱。更何况，人不自信，何以信人涅！

snowyfxUID: 189264

该文章，没问题。我只是没有用心去找，只是见到那片改哪篇，这里道歉了。
看到你的链接了，我先收下。一定给你改，好好改。（不过不一定能达到你的水平呀，实在是本人能力有限，但保证尽全力！）
我3。14考作文，现在阿狗看得也不多。所以也很急。所以我们都静静心吧，路还是要一步一步走的。赫赫

snowyfxUID: 189264

先谢斑竹davidjacky，你的建议我已收到，非常感谢。
下面一并感谢：sailing_yf, DarrenYang,山涧风笛,Tomm谢谢你们的建议和支持。现在有点苦，大家一起加油吧！
特别感谢：山涧风笛的细心，和Tomm老兄的诚恳。
加油！fighting!!

TommUID: 177042

BTW,本来该昨天给你改的，但昨天遇到点麻烦，头痛到晚上三点半。一看算了吧，才今天早上起来给你看过。
不好意思失约了~~


127 Facts are stubborn things. They cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or dictates of our passions.

Do(Do…are…?这个句子不用Do开头吧？嗯，先表扬一下，下面写的不错) facts are stubborn things? It is really a simple but hard(simple but hard这样说很别扭，可以说it is a simple and also a hard question to answer. BTW, 这样开头是不是太老套了？我看见n个人了，开头就说这个问题很复杂啊，或者这个问题很不简单啊，很多人都是这样开头的，好像聊天样的慢慢进入状态,but it is okay, whatever!) question to answer. Some people think so, the others, however, believe in facts alerted by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions(你的这句话表述有问题，它的主干是believe in facts, 然后后面的alerted by people's wishes, inclination, or dictates of their passions都是修饰facts而不是一个从句，我觉得可能应该the others believe that facts can be altered by….). In my view, it is primarily up to how we cognize and understand the term of "facts" and, to my certain knowledge and understanding, facts in different realms have(having) different meanings which is (are,应该是复数吧？语态) to be mentioned ( 感觉这里用will be mention这种将来表示法更妥当些，be to do好像多用在主动) in my below(following)  argument-of course, I surely (will,应该用将来时吧？) refer to the dictionary-and thus I strongly agree with the speaker's assert(assertion)  that facts are stubborn things, and they cannot be alerted by our wishes, our inclination, or the dictates of our passions.

Consider(considering) the science realm, in which we should comprehend facts as "something having real, demonstrable existence", and based on such meaning, we can clearly know that facts are stubborn thing, (这里可以用句号了，看看你的逗号，也太多了吧，英文不是这种习惯。)no matter how reluctant people are to accept them, and no matter how desirably(若这里用desirously, desirable用于受体,BTW，-able的结尾一般用于受体，另外为了和and前面的句子对称，这样可以显得有力度，你可以这样说and no matter how desirous people are to ….不过，desirous 一般和of连用) people want to change them by wishes, inclination, or dictates of passions, nevertheless, all these depression(depression是可数的) and disappointment are invalid. A striking example is about Copernicus(Copernicus’s) theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun. This theory heavily disputed the Ptolemaic system of astronomy(Ptolemaic system of..这个of用的别扭，你前面已经说哥白尼的例子就进入天文学的上下文了，后面再说of…有添足的感觉) which had been totally approbated and regarded as doxy(doxy，这个词俺查过了，在MerriamCollegiate里面，只有两层意思，一层是妓女，另一层是情妇，关于你的教条这层意思的说法，估计是词霸里面来的吧，而词霸里面只有简明词典里面有这个意思，我极度怀疑正确性，我觉得我们至少该用advanced的字典了吧。嗯，推荐给你一个词doctrine) by Christian(Ch~ society) and, consequently, the work about this theory- ...-had not been published until the(a) year before Copernicus died, (请不要一逗到底)however, although it was a long way to go for the theory before being accepted(a long way to go before the theory was accepted) finally with many following scientists' effort(efforts用复数), such as Galileo, Newton, etc., gradually, people accepted the fact. Another strongly supporting example is about Einstein's theory of relativity, Although his ideas in that time aroused violent controversy and irrational anger, and even the Nobel Prize selection committee had to avoid mentioning relativity and pretend (that)the belated prize was awarded primarily for his work on the quantum theory, today people really considered (你说了今天了，就不要用过去式了)relativity as one of the most accurate and basic law (one of the… LAWS)in physics. From above examples, we cannot help but concede (别用concede，好像很不情愿似的，前面那个can’t help也别用了，让人不知道你的立场到底是站在哪边)that "facts" are facts that cannot be changed by our wishes, at least in science field. (恩，表扬一句，at least 用得很严谨啊)

Furthermore, when it comes to society, firstly, we may understand "facts" as "information presented as objective real(reality)". After a president election, when people supporting the loser got the bad news(这句表述得很不好，不知道你这句的主干是什么), it is (of)no use for them to be disappointed and depressed, or even fight and parade(示威性质的游行用manifestation，parade是胜利者炫耀性的游行) for the unfair fact to them, they may be willing to make the loser the president, considering that he may be more friendly and peaceful, (prefer 前面加连接词，或者把它做定语了)prefer to be more kindly(kind) to the public, and take problems of environment pollution and about education more seriously, and so forth (说的太多了吧，别转移大伙儿的注意力啊) . However, for them(their) accepting the fact-his losing is the most hopeful path, because they cannot change the fact by their inclination or dictates of passions now. (这个例子，看看上个月的乌克兰的尤先科先生；而且，即使这个例子就算是对的，但是我觉得在逻辑上你是这样来安排的，我列出来：一候选人失利了->他的支持者们不应该示威->他们应该接受事实->因为他们无法改变事实->注意，现在你的隐藏(是结论也不该隐藏阿，因为你的观点要表现出来阿)的结论终于出现了:所以事实是无法改变的。实际上，从逻辑上从新整理一下：去掉中间的逻辑推理，只看前提结论，就是因为他们无法改变事实，所以事实无法改变。恩，想到这里，我不知道你的这个例子是解释性的还是证明性的，如果是证明性的，那么逻辑有问题；如果解释性的，那么请短一点，把中间的不相干的那些东西去掉。) Secondly, we may understand "facts" as "a thing that has been done, especially a crime" in law. We all know that facts speak louder than words in law(把in law放句首，这样就不会让人误解为是修饰words的了). No matter how penitential a criminal is and how heart-stricken his or her parents(把别人爸妈扯进来干吗？太远了吧，要知道那个什么改卷机器的评分根据之一是你文章的相关度), the fact that he or she will be punished by law cannot be changed. Without facts, laws will be invalid, and without laws(且不说这个without laws的句式的问题，你前面说laws是invalid的，意思就是存在，但无束缚力，你后面至少该说without invalid laws。另外，你要表达的意思是不是，we cannot imagine what a society without laws will be?你该不会要有法律才能想象吧？), we cannot imagine what a society will be.
(另外说一句，这些定义是你自己下的吗？呵呵，这种意识很厉害！但是，另外一方面，这样很不严谨，给人感觉像个上帝样的，let there be light! and there was light.请看你的第二个定义，…..esp. a crime，就是说事实是…，事实尤其是罪行？这样说很恐怖的哦，我就是一个很喜欢事实的人！郁闷~~一般建议，如果要给出定义，那么应该是权威性的，这样别人就不太敢和你拍砖，你如果说是从Britannica Encyclopaedia里面的定义，就算别人敢拍砖，那么就让他们和Britannica去拍吧)

In addition, on personal level, under most cases we have no other choices but accept facts, and Here we understand(别用understand,用take) "facts" as "a real occurrence or an event". A politician has to accept the fact--losing an election; a poet has to accept the fact that in today(~’s) society, people no longer take poems as serious things; a worker has to accept the fact-- losing the job; a student has to accept the fact-- failing in the exam and losing the opportunity of entering an university; a pair of unfortunate parents have to accept the fact--losing their beloved child in an accident, and so on. All of these are things that we are not ready to see and accept, but once these facts really happened(关于这里的虚拟语态，因本人语言修养有限，我持保留意见，因为作为条件状语，一般好像用一般态吧，比如说I am not going to the manifestation if it rains tomorrow) on us, we have no other choices but accept them, in (去掉in)that (which)we are not able to change them within our power, though these facts (may)terribly contravened our wishes, inclination, or dictates of our passions.

In sum, I do not exclude other understanding about the meaning of "facts", and that (窃窃问一句，你这里有个and，那么后面应该是一个独立的句子，那么这个that是指什么？如果是指other…那么，你前面说一句in sum给人错觉是在总结前面的东西，但是说完in sum后，你一开始就是说不排除其他的想法，引导别人去想一些其他的那些定义，从而思绪就有点散。)people may hold the opposite view to me. I, however, surely believe that all the "facts" I above referred to are the things stubborn and cannot be alerted by our wishes. I may(请查一下字典，关于may的用法) think that through my statement and argument above, many people may (别说may,说will)agree with me and accept my point, even if there are also a few people who stand on the opposite side, they might take into account such another understanding method about "fact" of mine. (such a ….别说another, 很误导人。我看到another,然后我就吓了一惊，我考，后面还有！然后我接着看，咦？怎么没了？就是这样的，请查一下another的用法。或许说a 就行了。另外，大姐，你是在写issue，不是在写一篇关于思维方法的文章。写到最后，你不是在陈述你的总结，而是在考虑哪些人同意你，哪些人不同意你，如果他们同意你，他们该怎么办，如果他们不同意你，他们又该怎么办。Sigh~ then what’s your point? )


我发现你很喜欢用逗号啊，这样很不符合英文习惯。呵呵，另外，表扬一句，你的口语不错，真的不错，在文章里面洋溢出来了。另外，再罗索一句，Issue最好是用书面语写。

文章结构从前面看下来还是蛮不错的，一开始总论，然后分几个方面讨论，就是结尾有些舒散，没有集中到你的point上。另外，你的确引入了一个新观点。但是，还是前面说的，你最好是让你的根据有权威一点。不要等别人问你从哪里查到的，你说，我是从Webster Snowyfxiem Dictionary 上查到的。哈哈，brag一下，我做毕设的时候，我们老师问，你数据哪儿来的。然后我很牛的告诉他，Britannic 的yearbook 那里来的。然后我们导师就很信服的样子。那个老师才是大牛啊！毕设他有空的时候我要考托福，我有空的时候他又被高考阅卷组关到宾馆里面了。最后我们才见了一面，他就对我的毕设说了一句话，让我如醍醐灌顶，然后对他的敬仰从此就如那滔滔江水~，源源不绝。那句话就是：你的这个论据是谁说的？


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