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题目：The following appeared in a brochure promoting the purchase of local franchises for a national chain of gyms.

"Now is the time to invest in a Power-Lift Gym franchise so that you can profit from opening one of our gyms in your town. Consider the current trends: Power-Lift Gyms are already popular among customers in 500 locations, and national surveys indicate increasing concern with weight loss and physical fitness. Furthermore, last year's sales of books and magazines on personal health totaled more than $50 million, and purchases of home exercise equipment almost doubled. Investing now in a Power-Lift Gym franchise will guarantee a quick profit."

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In the argument, by citing some specious trend and evidence, the speaker makes a cursory conclusion that  purchasing in a Powere-Lift Gym franchise will be profitable. Actually, the speaker has made a false analogy and drew a problematic assumption, as discussed below.

The major problem involves the analogy between the national concern and local situation. Perhaps people of the city do not show much enthusiasm in physical fitness. Or perhaps, people in the city cannot afford to go to a gym. Without necessary investigation about local people's attitudes and needs, the investigators are likely to make a false conclusion right against the actual trend of the region. If that is the case, it will not be profitable to purchase the franchises.

Further, there is conflicting evidence in the argument: the purchase of home exercise equipment has been doubled. It is the very indication that people is more willing to take exercise at home, instead of the gym. Meanwhile, with the increasing sales of relating books and magazines, people can gain a myriad of professional instructions on exercising. Considering the flexibility in schedule and the convenience, even many former customers may change to exercise at home.

Even assuming people will choose to go gyms for exercises, it is unreasonable to conclude that it will make a quick profit. As we all know, profits are related to the management and services of company, and many other factors. In the argument, although PG are popular among customers in 500 different locations, no further information is provided to substantiate the profitability of the gym. As a result, we cannot omit the possibility that the attraction of gym might be its low price while the investigators actually gain little profits, and that the management of the company is not efficient enough to gain much profits as well as attracting large amount of customers. As a new PG gym is opened in the city, the cost of advertisement should also be considered. If the prices of advertisements on TV, local radio is much higher than other places in the nation and people do not accept the ideas of PG, it is a tough task to sustain PG.

Nor does the speaker mention anything about other gyms in the region besides Power-Lift Gym(PG). It is entirely possible that those gyms have been long-established and offer the same services as PG. For that matter, it will lead to a severe competition and PG, without anything special, is not likely to attract new customers and be in a disadvantaged position, not to mention profitability. Therefore, the speaker just made a problematic assumption that people will choose PG to exercise.

In conclusion, the speaker has relied on some unsounded and conflicting evidence, which makes his conclusion unconvincing. To better evaluate the conclusion, whether people in the city are interested in physical exercises and whether they have to be considered. Also, the speaker should make further investigation on the availability and profitability of the investigation.  

感觉要写的东西很多，控制不了时间，这次超了好多 :(

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argument217.The following appeared in a brochure promoting the purchase of local franchises for a national chain of gyms.

"Now is the time to invest in a Power-Lift Gym franchise so that you can profit from opening one of our gyms in your town. Consider the current trends: Power-Lift Gyms are already popular among customers in 500 locations, and national surveys indicate increasing concern with weight loss and physical fitness. Furthermore, last year's sales of books and magazines on personal health totaled more than $50 million, and purchases of home exercise equipment almost doubled. Investing now in a Power-Lift Gym franchise will guarantee a quick profit."



In this argument, the arguer draws the conclusion that investing in a Power-Lift Gym franchise is the best choice if people want to profit from opening one of our gyms in your town. While this argument seems somewhat specific and plausible at first glance, close inspection would reveal is fraught with vague, oversimplified and unwarranted claims in several aspects. (169)

To begin with, the arguer fails to convince us the cause of Power-Lift Gyms popular is that people in 500 locations likes the Power-Lift Gyms. It is presumptuous for the arguer to simply impose all the hope to the customers in the 500 locations, because numerous regions are not concerned, and maybe people in other region do not like Power-Lift Gyms. Also, the arguer falsely assume that individuals who concern with weight loss and physical fitness
will buy Power-Lift Gyms. It is entirely that they are only concerning but not really want to buy Power-Lift Gyms. Unless the arguer could recognize and rule out other possibilities relevant to situations about Power-Lift Gyms in the nation, the conclusion is quite unfounded.

Moreover, the arguer takes it for granted that the situation last year's sales of books and magazines on personal health totaled more than $50 million, and purchases of home exercise equipment almost doubled, shows the bright future of Power-Lift Gyms. He or she ignores other possible factors that may also lead to exercise equipment increasing. Perhaps, last year, most the manufactures of Gyms could sell their product at lowest price so that they sell lots of equipment, and lost very much. Therefore, the arguer's recommendation that people should invest in a Power-Lift Gym franchise is quite open to doubt.

Last but not least, there are some other factors to consider too. For instance, the arguer fails to take into account the possible differences between the different regions. For example, perhaps the attitudes towards the Power-Lift Gyms in different region are remarkably different. People in one region may would like to buy them, because they enjoy higher life conditions and want to spend money on the gyms. However, in another region, it is completely possible that people are more interest in the price and would like to exercise in the garden, or in the park. Consequently the argument is unconvincing because it is based on limited data.

To sum up the argument is neither logically sound, nor persuasive. To make the conclusion more convincing, the arguer should provide supporting evidence to rule out the other possibilities.


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In the argument, by【By是不是可省？】 citing some specious trend and evidence, the speaker makes a cursory conclusion that

purchasing in a Powere-Lift Gym franchise will be profitable. Actually【感觉上，用个转折得词比较好】, the speaker has made a

false analogy and drew a problematic assumption, as discussed below.

The major problem involves the analogy between the national concern and local situation. Perhaps people of the city do not

show much enthusiasm in physical fitness. Or perhaps, people in the city cannot afford to go to a gym. Without necessary

investigation about local people's attitudes and needs, the investigators are likely to make a false conclusion right against

the actual trend of the region. If that is the case, it will not be profitable to purchase the franchises.

Further, there is conflicting evidence in the argument: the purchase of home exercise equipment has been doubled. It is the

very indication that people is more willing to take exercise at home, instead of the gym. Meanwhile, with the increasing

sales of relating books and magazines, people can gain a myriad of professional instructions on exercising. Considering the

flexibility in schedule and the convenience, even many former customers may change to exercise at home.

Even assuming people will choose to go gyms for exercises, it is unreasonable to conclude that it【指代哪个？在这一段还没有出

现呀？】 will make a quick profit. As we all know, profits are related to the management and services of 【a】company, and

many other factors. In the argument, although PG are popular among customers in 500 different locations, no further

information is provided to substantiate the profitability of the gym. As a result, we cannot omit the possibility that the

attraction of gym might be its low price while the investigators actually gain little profits, and that the management of the

company is not efficient enough to gain much【lots of还是比较保险，这里怎么前边用much，后边用复数啊】 profits as well as

attracting large amount of customers. As a new PG gym is opened in the city, the cost of advertisement should also be

considered. If the prices of advertisements on TV【少动词吧】, local radio is much higher than other places in【of】 the

nation and people do not accept the ideas of PG, it is a tough task to sustain PG.【最后一句话，有问题，可能是写乱了，怎么这

么多小句子】

Nor does the speaker mention anything about other gyms in the region besides Power-Lift Gym(PG). It is entirely possible that

those gyms have been long-established and offer the same services as PG. For that matter, it will lead to a severe

competition and PG, without anything special, is not likely to attract new customers and be in a disadvantaged position, not

to mention profitability【profit】. Therefore, the speaker just made a problematic assumption that people will【should】

choose PG to exercise.【我觉得这段写得很好，我怎么没有想到那！！】

In conclusion, the speaker has relied on some【evidence不可数】 unsounded and conflicting evidence, which makes his

conclusion unconvincing. To better evaluate the conclusion, whether people in the city are interested in physical exercises

and whether they have to be considered【把两个以whether开头得句子用and联起来，不太对吧？还是我错了，拿不准，感觉是半句话】.

Also, the speaker should make further investigation on the availability and profitability 【】of the investigation.


写得bucuo，我只是改了改语言上得小毛病

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In this argument, the arguer draws the conclusion that investing in a Power-Lift Gym franchise is the best choice if people want to profit from opening one of our gyms in your town. While this argument seems somewhat specific and plausible at first glance, close inspection would reveal is fraught with vague, oversimplified and unwarranted claims in several aspects. (169)嗯，刚开始写ARGUMENT 的时候我还觉得有点感觉的，现在都看到这样的开头就开始皱眉了，包括我自己的想用别的开头还想不出来，讨论讨论吧。但是我觉得用while 了一大段在加上at the first glance 就看得特别不难烦，还不如直接点出他犯了最最要害的错误，比如false analogy 等概括一点不要凑字数

To begin with, the arguer fails to convince us the cause of Power-Lift Gyms popular is that people in 500 locations likes the Power-Lift Gyms. It is presumptuous for the arguer to simply impose all the hope to the customers in the 500 locations, because numerous regions are not concerned, and maybe people in other region do not like Power-Lift Gyms.（这个原因我没看懂，是说虽然分店分布的地方很广但是没有谈及人们的反应么？我觉得一开始还是放最要害的错误，最好是进一步说其他错误的错误） Also, the arguer falsely assume that individuals who concern with weight loss and physical fitness
will buy应该是在PG那里锻炼并不是买了它 Power-Lift Gyms. It is entirely 漏了,probably that they are only concerning but not really want to buy Power-Lift Gyms. Unless the arguer could recognize and rule out other possibilities relevant to situations about Power-Lift Gyms in the nation, the conclusion is quite unfounded.

Moreover, the arguer takes it for granted that the situation 【the situation 可以省略】last year's sales of books and magazines on personal health totaled more than $50 million, and purchases of home exercise equipment almost doubled, shows the bright future of Power-Lift Gyms. He or she ignores other possible factors that may also lead to exercise equipment increasing.还不如直接把这句做TS Perhaps, last year, most the manufactures of Gyms could sell their product at lowest price so that they sell lots of equipment, and lost very much.????这都行啊？confusing... Therefore, the arguer's recommendation that people should invest in a Power-Lift Gym franchise is quite open to doubt.

Last but not least, there are some other factors to consider too. For instance, the arguer fails to take into account the possible differences between the different regions. For example, perhaps the attitudes towards the Power-Lift Gyms in different region are remarkably different. People in one region may would语法错 了 like to buy them, because they enjoy higher life conditions and want to spend money on the gyms. However, in another region, it is completely possible that people are more interestsensitive to the price in the price and would like to exercise in the garden, or in the park. Consequently the argument is unconvincing because it is based on limited data.

To sum up the argument is neither logically sound, nor persuasive. To make the conclusion more convincing, the arguer should provide supporting evidence to rule out the other possibilities.比如说有哪些other 呢？
感觉每个错误都似蜻蜓点水，没说到底就套句子结尾了

PS: 我最后那句（就是有两个whether并列的）是敲漏了，一看严重过时就慌慌张张地:P。
原来的意思是：whether people in the city are interested in physical exercises and whether they have the same enthusiasm in exercising in the gym should be considered in order to better evaluate the conclusion.

If the prices of advertisements on TV【少动词吧】, local radio is much higher than other places, it will be a tough task to sustain PG
意思是on TV or local radio