issue186 practicability 高频, 期待砖头, 自己改过

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Issue186: 394 words  40 minutes     April 1, 2005 from 11:15 to
Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world.
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In this pragmatic society, practicality has come to be one of the common words in our day-to-day life. Then should we first ask whether what we do is whether practical or not? As far as I am concerned, practical needs should be first served, yet, we should not ignore the things which might be not practical at a moment.

30Admittedly, it is obviously true to serve the practical needs in the first place. Nowdays Nowadays, though after development of millions of years, there are still hunger, and corruption, and women discrimination, ancient problems with a long history. Worse more, new pressing problems arise in our modern world--the environment pollution, for instance, including the air pollution, the water pollution, the soil pollution and etc. Any nation should deal with these pressing problems if it hopes to survive for a longer time. For example, it is crucial to build luxary luxury edifice for entertainment while multitude people are striving to make their stamoch stomach full. Efforts and resources should spared first to resolve the practical problem of the starving people. If a nation dares to ignore such pressing problems but to do something not practical, it will surely result in disaster.

18Yet, emphasis on the practical matters does mean we may blindly ignore all things that are not practical this moment. This is especially true in a peaceful country with few poor people for the government when it comes to decide whether certain scientific research should be supported. Take the medical study for example, it is ridiculous to invest in human cloning, which is against ethics as well as against morals, yet, should we completely deny the study of cloning of stem cell? Some government officials might refuse such studies bluntly since stem cell study is far from practicability for disease curing at this time of day. Yet, the value of devotion to stem cell study will not come into practice until enough pre-researches. If all studies in stem cell are inhibited, how could a patient to replace his or her organ of himself or herself, which comes from the stem cell?

Then, in our peace-dominant time, decision makers, especially the government officials should make a careful consideration on such subjects, the value of which seemes seems not practical today but may be valuable tomorrow.

To sum up, we should first and foremost spare no efforts in fighting against practical problems, such as hunger, unemployment, etc. On the other hand, we had better cast our sides forward, be careful in order not to neglect the development of such issues, not practical at this moment, thus probably bringing far-reaching indications.

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先占坐，得明天再给你改了 （:(眼睛肿得睁不开了）先歇会

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e186: 394 words 40 minutes April 1, 2005 from 11:15 to
Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world.
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In this pragmatic society, practicality has come to be one of the common words buzzwords?? in our day-to-day life. Then should we first ask whether what we do is whether practical or not?（这两个whether 用得意思都有点混乱 了） As far as I am concerned, practical needs should be first served, yet, we should not ignore the things which might be not practical at a moment.

30Admittedly, it is obviously true to serve the practical needs in the first place. Nowdays Nowadays, though after development of millions of years, there are still hunger, and corruption, and women discrimination, ancient problems with a long history. Worse more, new pressing problems arise in our modern world--the environment pollution, for instance, including the air pollution, the water pollution, the soil pollution and etc. Any nation should deal with these pressing problems if it hopes to survive for a longer time. For example, it is crucial to build luxary luxury luxury edifice for entertainment while multitude people are striving to make their stamoch stomach full. Efforts and resources should spared first to resolve the practical problem of the starving people. If a nation dares怎么用这个词?！ to ignore such pressing problems but to do something not practical, it will surely result in disaster.
我觉得这段的着手点是选得挺好的，套用了政府当务之急和长远之计来说，省事省力啊。
18Yet, emphasis on the practical matters does notmean we may blindly ignore all things that are not practical this moment. This is especially true in a peaceful country with few poor people for the government when it comes to decide whether certain scientific research should be supported. Take the medical study for example, it is ridiculous to invest in human cloning, which is against ethics as well as against morals, yet, should we completely deny the study of cloning of stem cell? 这句前面用了ridiculous这么重的词，使得后面提问和解释有逻辑上的conflicting 了Some government officials might refuse such studies bluntly since stem cell study is far from practicability for disease curing at this time of day. Yet, the value of devotion to stem cell study will not come into practice until enough pre-researches. If all studies in stem cell are inhibited, how could a patient to replace his or her organ of himself or herself, which comes from the stem cell?

Then, in our peace-dominant time, decision makers, especially the government officials should make a careful consideration on such subjects, the value of which seemes seems not practical today but may be valuable tomorrow.
这段时间不够了吧？
To sum up, we should first and foremost spare no efforts in fighting against practical problems, such as hunger, unemployment, etc. On the other hand, we had better cast our sides forward, be careful in order not to neglect the development of such issues, not practical at this moment, thus probably bringing far-reaching indications.
从全篇来看好像就谈了政府的行为对practicability 的理解，虽然有一篇5分的范文也是这样只专注于写在某一个领域上了问题，但是我觉得思路打开一点的话会有更多的话可说。
另外，限时完以后自己再改一下会有收获的，起码语句读起来会通顺点，有些句子我看不太懂又不知道如何给你改。

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Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has

little value in today's world.



In this pragmatic society, practicality has come to be one of the [加most吧]common words in our day-to-day['daily' would be better] life. Then should we first ask[用ask不是很合适，可以考虑用表示检验的意思的单词，就是所谓的时常用实用的标准来检验我们的行为] whether what we do is whether[此处whether多余，] practical or not? As far as I am concerned, practical needs should be first served, yet, we should not ignore the things which might be not practical at a moment[for the moment，表示暂时的意思，应该没错，就是暂时没有实际作用不代表以后没有，当然如果真的是没有意义的事情当然是不做也罢了].

Admittedly, it is obviously true to serve the practical needs in the first place. Nowdays, though after

development of millions of years, there are still hunger, and corruption, and women discrimination, ancient problems[什么意思？ancient problems？] with a long history.[而且这句话有头轻脚中之嫌疑，不如写成：Such problems as... still bother our humans a lot.] Worse more, new pressing problems arise in our modern world--the environment pollution, for instance, including

the air pollution, the water pollution, the soil pollution and etc. Any nation should deal with these pressing problems if it[当然用they，你指的是所有的国家] hopes[wish在这里应该是对的，因为显然大家不想去享受更长久的污染，所以这里肯定是用虚拟语气啦，所以你就错了。。呵呵] to survive for a longer time. For example, it is crucial to build luxary edifice for entertainment while multitude[这个单词好像已经是名词了，呵呵，后面的people多余了] people are [still] striving to make their stamoch[stomach] full. Efforts and resources should [be]spared first to resolve the practical problem of the starving people. If a nation dares to ignore such pressing problems but[and 英语中but不是随便用的，你自己分析前面的语气和后面是一致的哦，既然已经敢于藐视了。。。] to do something not practical, it will surely result in disaster.

Yet, emphasis on the practical matters does[not] mean we may[could] blindly ignore all things that are not practical this moment[你很喜欢用moment啊，这里确实不合适]. This is especially true in a peaceful country with few poor people for the government when it comes to decide whether certain scientific research should be supported. Take the medical study for example, it is ridiculous to invest in human cloning, which is against ethics as well as against morals, yet, should we completely deny the study of cloning of stem cell?[faint,你生物怎么学的，怎么一下子就到干细胞了，两回事嘛，干细胞的克隆可以干很多事嘛，非要克隆人啊，真是的。你干脆来个祖细胞好了，不是学生物的人不是都能看懂的，你这个概念的偷换也太快了，强！] Some

government officials might refuse such studies bluntly since stem cell study is far from practicability for disease curing at

this time of day[at this time of day??太白了，中文式的]. Yet, the value of devotion to stem cell study will not come into practice until enough pre-researches. [这个问题我们要好好讨论一下，干细胞的实用现在多是在癌症的机理研究以及器官克隆，很司空见惯的，怎么说还要什么pre－reseraches？？？]If all studies in stem cell are inhibited, how could a patient to replace his or her organ of himself or herself, which comes from the stem cell?[我强烈不同意把专业的东西拿那么大的篇幅来讲，太偏了，而且你还讲的很错。。。]

Then[then不要随便用], in our peace-dominant time, decision makers, especially the government officials should make a careful consideration on such subjects, the value of which seems not practical today but may be valuable tomorrow.[这个观点不错，应该展开讲，而且应该是主要的部分]

To sum up, we should first and foremost [少to，前面两个都是形容词，呵呵] spare no efforts in fighting against practical problems, such as hunger, unemployment, etc. On the other hand, we had better cast our sides forward, be careful in order not to neglect the development of such issues, not practical at this moment, thus probably bringing far-reaching indications.


末了，看来你对then和moment有特殊的情节。
文章的结构还是有比较大的问题的，没有很好的分析重要的问题，有点偏。