写作点评 - Nature or nurture ?

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Nature and nurture, which plays major role in personality lopment?


Talking of one’s personality and development, I maintain that nurture has major impact on them other than nature.

Nature is always, to some extent, considered as a gift or invariable quality which is given to one as he was born. Things are divided into different categories by their natures, like apples and oranges, it’s difficult for one to confuse them.

Interestingly, unlike the literal meaning of the famous “apples and oranges” saying, a person differs from others for an unique personality which may change with one’s growing up.

In other words, depending on factors such as affections from parents, education background, experience, self-striving and so forth as well as nature, a personality is surely the result of long-time nurture, on purpose or not sometimes. Therefore, it’s changeable and moldable. Moreover, since personalities very much decide people’s activities, they do effect their development as well. So, nurture is of great significance not only in personality but also in one’s development.

For example, American People is a mixed nationality with people from all over the world, who possess very different natures. But through a great and powerful social system which encourages individualism, freedom and fair competitions, it now has been nurtured several common spirits, values and personalities shared by its people and develop itself into a powerful country known for its creativity, democracy and technology.

In conclusion, personality is molded by nurture, which by the way is very lucky for us because it’s possible for people to decide their directions of developments by forming good personalities.

请问大概能拿几分呢？请老师提出意见




老师点评:

6分是肯定有的，至于能否拿7，还有待考证。

开头不够正式，口语式

对于本性/天性起到的作用，没有足够的阐述，有失偏颇，毕竟在这个世界上，天才也是很多的

牢记雅思是英国人的考试，不是美国人的考试，尽管老美很厉害，不过呢，有利有弊

[ Last edited by lucy_zq2002 on 2005-6-30 at 19:00 ]