今天的一篇CAM1TASK1作文，大家给挑挑毛病。

yghdyUID: 94500

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart
shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people
think the costs of adult education should be shared.
Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.

here it goes:

   The charts show the reason why adults decide to study and how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

  We can see from the first chart that of all the adults surveyed,40 think the decision was based on their interests in the subject.Closely came the intention to gain qualifications voted by 38 people.This indicates that interest and obtaining qualification are the strongest motivations in adults education.Followed by the thought of "helpful for current job","to improve prospects of promotion" and "enjoy learning/studying" which the voted numbers are 22,20 and 20 respectively.Lastly,12 people think it is a great chance to be able to change jobs and 9 by thinking it  as a good chance to meet people.

  In terms of the way the costs of each course should be shared,we see from the pie chart that 40% of the costs should be shared by individual,35% of those by employer and 25% by taxpayer.

It is clear from the data given that people hold different ideas on the motivation of taking the education and how they think the costs should be shared is worth considering.

写得比较“大胆”，总是感觉有些地方比较别扭，但又想不出更好的写法，想请高手们指点一下下:handshake:D

[ Last edited by yghdy on 2005-7-10 at 17:00 ]

蜻蜓切UID: 201589

写得相当不错，不过没有图，不是很清楚。
而且那个40是百分比还是确切数据，如果是百分比，那么指代上面可能有点问题。

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