Argument147 是骡子是马，要拉出来溜才知道，大家评判一下吧

fhxyweiUID: 157384

Argument147: 416 words   30 minutes
The following appeared in an editorial in a business magazine.
'Although the sales of Whirlwind video games have declined over the past two years, a recent survey of video-game players suggests that this sales trend is about to be reversed. The survey asked video-game players what features they thought were most important in a video game. According to the survey, players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics, which require the most up-to-date computers. Whirlwind has just introduced several such games with an extensive advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old, the age-group most likely to play video games. It follows, then, that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months.'

In this argument, the author astonishingly deduces a conclusion that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months mainly based on a survey and an advertising campaign. Closer scrutiny to his reasoning process would reveal that this reverse is not unwarranted at all.

To begin with, I have to cast great discretion to the survey that indicates video-game players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics. How many video-game players have been researched in this survey? If there are only a small number of video game player who have participated in this survey, the result cannot represent all the players' preferences at all. It is also highly possible that the respondents of this survey are just those who have an inclination to video games with lifelike graphics. In addition, such kind of video game with lifelike graphics may just one ideal kind of game that may not be favored when it is put into practice. All that cannot guarantee that the prospective video game players will truly like this new kind of video game.

Another crucial point I want to point out in this argument is that the advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old is not effective to persuade them to buy this new kind of video game. First of all, except for the lifelike graphics in video game, other qualities such as the plot，audio design and so on are also key factors when the players decide to buy a game. Secondly, as the author refers, this new kind of game requires the up-to-date computers to support, how many video games are willing to update their computer at the expense of a large sum of money just for playing a new game? It is possible that most video players would give up this new game due to the financial hardship. How about the new game's price? It is not provided in this argument at all, if it is much higher than the common ones, few buyers would afford it

Finally, no solid evidence in this argument suggests that the video game players are those who age 10 to 25. If not, this campaign may have lost a large market which consists of video game players whose age is younger than 10 or older than 25.

In sum, whether the sales of Whirlwind video games would increase dramatically or not cannot be deduced in this argument at all. To substantiate his conclusion, the author should provide more information about the video game players' demand when they decide to buy a new game.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-19 at 17:00 ]

ahqiuUID: 207682

In this argument, the author astonishingly deduces a conclusion that the sales of Whirlwind video games are likely to increase dramatically in the next few months mainly based on a survey and an advertising campaign. Closer scrutiny to his reasoning process would reveal that this reverse is not unwarranted at all.

To begin with, I have to cast great discretion to the survey that indicates video-game players prefer games that provide lifelike graphics. How many video-game players have been researched in this survey? If there are only a small number of video game player who have participated in this survey, the result cannot represent all the players' preferences at all. It is also highly possible that the respondents of this survey are just those who have an inclination to video games with lifelike graphics. In addition, such kind of video game with lifelike graphics may just one ideal kind of game that may not be favored when it is put into practice. All that cannot guarantee that the prospective video game players will truly like this new kind of video game.
最后这句话总算把前面的东西拉到一起了，感觉有点乱，in addition后面试可以单独写得

Another crucial point I want to point out in this argument is that the advertising campaign directed at people 10 to 25 years old is not effective to persuade them to buy this new kind of video game. First of all, except for the lifelike graphics in video game, other qualities such as the plot，audio design and so on are also key factors when the players decide to buy a game. （这是不是可以和上一段的in addition一起写，而且这也没有说明你提到的ad effective的问题）Secondly, as the author refers, this new kind of game requires the up-to-date computers to support, how many video games （这是主语吗，players）are willing to update their computer at the expense of a large sum of money just for playing a new game? It is possible that most video players would give up this new game due to the financial hardship. (缺一个连接词，或者直接不要这句话了吧)How about the new game's price? It is not provided in this argument at all, if it is much higher than the common ones, few buyers would afford it
这段的条理比较差，是因为时间限制的原因吗，建议重新理一下思路
Finally, no solid evidence in this argument suggests that the video game players are those who age 10 to 25. If not, this campaign may have lost a large market which consists of video game players whose age is younger than 10 or older than 25.
这段其实可以归结在第二段，一个意思，单独写也行，就是太单薄了，一两句话。

In sum, whether the sales of Whirlwind video games would increase dramatically or not cannot be deduced in this argument at all. To substantiate his conclusion, the author should provide more information about the video game players' demand when（whether） they decide to buy a new game.
这篇argument条理不清楚哦，argument据说是很容易拿高分的，以你的实力没问题的，要好好对待阿，像是时间不够，没有认真考虑，估计以前没有看过题吧，考前都看一遍比较好，加油哦
不过这篇本来比较难写，不要被我打击了，呵呵，安慰一下！！

fhxyweiUID: 157384

我抽出来写的题目都是没看过，从分析到写都是一气喝成
1，我发现你现在拍砖现在都能拍到点子上了， 你说的几个缺陷我写的时候都想过，就是没时间来整理了，因为我是根据文章的证据的先后顺序来逐一批驳，所以内在的逻辑顺序没有处理好

2，argument题库看了100篇左右了，烦透了：）

每次都是你先跟我改，很过意不去啊：）  滴水之恩，一定涌泉相报

ahqiuUID: 207682

Originally posted by fhxywei at 2005-7-19 19:30
1，我发现你现在拍砖现在都能拍到点子上了， 你说的几个缺陷我写的时候都想过，就是没时间来整理了，因为我是根据文章的证据的先后顺序来逐一批驳，所以内在 ...

拍得多了，呵呵
:@难道以前都没拍在点子上？？

fhxyweiUID: 157384

呵呵，没有拍到点子上，或者我不同意的，我都会站出来抗议的：）