[820互助]蝴蝶结:Fernando

fiaoyayaUID: 193089

Originally posted by 苹果宝宝 at 2005-8-7 19:52

GG是怎么做的捏?

偶就是拿一支铅笔,然后听一句写一句,然后就写了好多好多,现在看来好象有100多页了

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

挖咔咔~~
传说今天大暴雨，师姐菩萨心肠放偶一天假啦啦~~
刚在外面贴了TWE范文155，要下的这里
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

63. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.

In China, thousands of students take part in the Exame of College Admination （这个词，不太对吧？）every year.The exam can be called one of the most importan and difficult exams in    one’s life. When I was a high school student,I really hated it.I was sure it must be the most difficult experience in all my life.

But now,when I look back,Ifind the experience give me many things.I guess it had given so many things that I weill will be able to learn in the rest of my life.Of course,almost my classmates,friends agree with me,too. Most seemed difficult experiences in our lives will become valuable lessons for the future

First,we all cost very long time doing perparetion.During the period, we did so many exercise,found what we did not know and “fixed” that we had understood. Most difficult experience in our life such as important exams,adventures,some sports,all need us much time to ready whereas we will spend more time ,more money on them.For example,many chinese students cost more than three years and 20,000yuan for the Exame of College Admination.

Second,difficult experiences will strong our body and heart.What we can bear is more and heavier.Do not believe?After some difficult experience,we will find we can bear more stress.The reason is we can face the difficult without fear and be more confidence.

Finally,most difficult experiences in our lives are also important ones.Every time we met them and have done them well,we weill be rewarded by them,not only in money,chances,but also in our brain as well as the environments around ourselves.Sometime,we will get a better view

Life is a box of chocolates,everyone in it has its own taste.The black ones do not look pretty,just like mud,but they may be tasted very well

叫偶怎么说呢……思路太不清晰了哦~
你的观点是Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future.怎么一开头就举例子了呢？要先表明观点的说~~
body1、2、3说你的分论点，拿高考当例子支持论证
结尾引用是很好的，但是最后还要点明你的观点，老美不像咱们用个比喻让读者遐想的~
好好研究一下范文先，虽然用模板之类不好，借鉴一下看看人家思路也是好的~

[ Last edited by 蝴蝶结 on 2005-8-8 at 12:21 ]

cookUID: 181960

Originally posted by 苹果宝宝 at 2005-8-8 00:08

GG,今天是总结

总结些什么呀，我觉得需要总结，但就是不知总结什么

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

请jj帮忙改一下作文吧，自幼语文就没有学好，这篇作文不但超时还用了几回文曲星……
The government has announced that it plans to build a new university .some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university .compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community ?Use specific details in your discussion.

When it comes to building the university in our community ,I strongly support for several reasons addressed below.开头太短了，把分论点组织一下加上来
The main reason is that it will improve the economy of my community .It can give the concret concrete examples .Firt many student prefer to live in the apartment than in the dormitory .Many citizens in my community can rent their free room to get extra money .Second almost all the universities’ dining room are not good .Food is not delicious and always the same ,so there will be a lot of students to go to the restaurant around the university everyday这一段说的，不象是建大学的好处啊~比如第二点，重点放在学生可以到社区的餐馆吃饭带来餐馆的利润，比说学校食堂不好要有力一些

Another reason why I advocate the attitude of building the university in my community is that the knowledge level in our community will proress and it is beneficial for children to study .because many book shops and libruaries will be built around the university .Children will get knowledge easier than before这段不错，不止children，adult也方便了不是？

However，Building a university like any thing else ,have more than one face .they also bring ue serious problems , such as security, noisy . There will be a mass of strangers to come to our community for business？有点说不通啊~ .A few among them may be chief啥意思？ . The vehicles will increase for transport . But our community will be no longer quiet and polluted.

If all these factors are complicated the advantages of building the university  carry more weight than not building . Form what has been discussed above ,I finally draw the conclusion that building the university in my community .

看看范文是怎么写的~~

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

改作文……汗……

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

Originally posted by cook at 2005-8-8 12:02

总结些什么呀，我觉得需要总结，但就是不知总结什么

把你的错误归归类，弱项要强化，马虎的要特别注意……

LIULI0901UID: 2110320

JJ 这几天把作文提高到4分得水平难度大么？看看范文就行了么？我都有点想放弃作文了

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

Originally posted by LIULI0901 at 2005-8-8 12:36
JJ 这几天把作文提高到4分得水平难度大么？看看范文就行了么？我都有点想放弃作文了

提高没问题的，要自信的说~~
范文不是拿来背的，是研究人家的思路，先多看看找找感觉，每天练习1、2篇

LIULI0901UID: 2110320

Originally posted by 蝴蝶结 at 2005-8-8 12:41


提高没问题的，要自信的说~~
范文不是拿来背的，是研究人家的思路，先多看看找找感觉，每天练习1、2篇

185个每一个的理由都要写吗？又很多我想不出来啊！！

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

Originally posted by LIULI0901 at 2005-8-8 12:46

185个每一个的理由都要写吗？又很多我想不出来啊！！

都要写的说~
贴出来大家讨论~~

苹果宝宝UID: 2123543

Originally posted by 蝴蝶结 at 2005-8-8 11:58
63. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples  ...

恩，谢谢JJ哈
苹果想用高考引出论点的|||貌似不是很好><
不是说不可以一开头就写论点么?

FernandoUID: 157455

精华区有185个题目的思路（即理由）的

苹果宝宝UID: 2123543

PS,大家当心身体哦
苹果就发烧了.......哎~~~~

蝴蝶结UID: 195566

Originally posted by 苹果宝宝 at 2005-8-8 20:21
PS,大家当心身体哦
苹果就发烧了.......哎~~~~

生病了要多休息哦，身体是革命的本钱哈~~
JJ bless一下:call: