Issue51 高频.用反方观点写的,大家多多指正

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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：42分35秒    439 words
从2005年7月23日15时22分到2005年7月23日16时62分
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Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

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Education, as the important foundation of society's development and young generation's growth, has always attracted people's attention. Talking about the suitable mode of teaching, while I agree with that student's interests should be emphasized in our education system, but as far as I am concerned, the above statement asserting that education should be designed specifically to meet each individual needs and interests would be neither proper nor necessary.

In our modern society, more and more educators have realized the importance of meeting student's needs and interests. As we often heard, interest is the best tutor. Students with interests in some subjects would be motivated naturally and the education could make process effectively. In the contrary, if a student is forced to learn something he/she has no interest at all, he/she would find it difficult to concentrate on it and the educator's effort would be proved as a waste of time.

Then, should a good educator meet every individual needs of each student unconditionally? Suppose a student in primary school thinks his only favor is playing computer games, should the teacher and parents allow him to quit the academic courses which he is not interested at all? I think most people would say no.

In my understanding, education takes on double responsibilities, which are to develop the personality of individual and to prepare our young generation of qualified citizens in society. Therefore, over-specific education would not benefit each of the purposes.

At first, it may take a long period of time for a student to find his real interest and that interest could be changed a lot while he is learning broadly. Also, some foundational curriculums, such as basic course of natural science, literature, could be necessary for all the learners in each field. In the beginning of study, the student might find it boring and lost his interest. At that time, it is the teacher's responsibility to encourage him and guide his study, but not simply meet his other claimed interest.

Furthermore, as the modern society calls for the professional people with board disciplines, over-specific education would narrow the student's ken and capability, which would lead the acclimation in their future career.  A student taught to learn only what he is interested with would lack of the sense of responsibility about what he should do. In that way the education could not benefit the development of society ultimately.

To sum up, we should admit that student-concerted mode is much more effective than the passive learning, and the educator should always be aware of the importance of arising student's interests. However, over-specification would lead our education to a dangerous extremity.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-8-24 at 00:04 ]

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Education, as the important foundation of society's development and young generation's growth, has always attracted people's attention.(不应该用完成时吧？） Talking about the suitable mode of teaching, while I agree with that student's interests should be emphasized in our education system, but（不能有两个连词吧） as far as I am concerned, the above statement asserting that education should be designed specifically to meet each individual needs and interests would be neither proper nor necessary. （个人认为应该有个承上启下且凑字数的句子，呵呵）

In our modern society, more and more educators have realized the importance of meeting student's needs and interests. As we often heard, interest is the best tutor. Students with interests in some subjects would be motivated naturally and the education could make process effectively. In the contrary, if a student is forced to learn something he/she has no interest at all, he/she would find it difficult to concentrate on it and the educator's effort would be proved as a waste of time.（从你的论点看，这一段应该是让步段吧，但是觉得你写得不像）

Then, should a good educator meet every individual needs of each student unconditionally? Suppose a student in primary school thinks his only favor is playing computer games, should the teacher and parents allow him to quit the academic courses which he is not interested at all? I think most people would say no.

In my understanding, education takes on double responsibilities, which are to develop the personality of individual and to prepare our young generation of qualified citizens in society. Therefore, over-specific education would not benefit each of the purposes.（个人认为最好解释一下什么是over-specific)

At first, it may take a long period of time for a student to find his real interest and that interest could be changed a lot while he is learning broadly. Also,（also不是连词） some foundational （fundamental) curriculums, such as basic course of natural science, literature, could be necessary for all the learners in each field. In the beginning of study, the student might find it boring and lost his interest. At that time, it is the teacher's responsibility to encourage him and guide his study, but not simply meet his other claimed interest.

Furthermore, as the modern society calls for the professional people with board disciplines, over-specific education would narrow the student's ken and capability, which would lead the acclimation in their future career.  A student taught to learn only what he is interested with would lack of the sense of responsibility about what he should do. In that way the education could not benefit the development of society ultimately
(这两个论述段太简单了，理由都可以支持你的论点，但没有组织好吧）

To sum up, we should admit that student-concerted mode is much more effective than the passive learning, and the educator should always be aware of the importance of arising student's interests. However, over-specification would lead our education to a dangerous extremity.

可以理解作者的意图，但是不够清晰。建议可以写成平行结构。

popsywinterUID: 2120302

谢谢指正！！
弱弱的问一下，平行写法什么意思？平衡写法么？