issue185 jingjingtous作业（kito）－我回来了

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TOPIC：ISSUE 185 - "Scandals-whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. They focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could."
提纲：
1 政治上的丑闻揭露隐藏在为大众服务政策之下腐败的本质，以及现有政治体制的弊端，引起人们的关注并对其进行修正和补充。
2 学术上的丑闻使人们不仅关注有争议的研究结果，更关注产生此结果的研究过程，科学的严谨得以证明。
3 商业上的丑闻同样扮演着重要角色，它常常引发经济体制的改革，并促使相关法律得以完善。
4 娱乐和体育方面的丑闻常常分散人们的注意力而不去关注那些更重要的事件，如环境污染，人口膨胀等，对名人私生活的过分关注使这些丑闻毫无意义。

Whether scandals are useful in politics, academia, or other areas-concerning they attracting our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer could, as the speaker claims? I concede that scandals, to certain degrees, actually expose some serious problems in politics, academia, and business . Otherwise, I find the speaker's position troubling. It ignores the fact that scandals such as sex scandals in entertainment and sports distract the public most attentions which should be focused on more essentially important issues.

Turning first to my agreement with the speaker's statement is that scandals always reveal the deleterious or even banal internal of one academic, political, or economical phenomena but not from its surface. In the first place, scandals in the politics realm, perhaps the most frequently happening field, are always expose the unknown greedy purpose of some illegitimate leadership, or even worse, the dirty and unbelievable dealings under some strategies seemingly serve to the public. Consider The Watergate scandal of President Nixon, whose contempt for the very legal system that afforded his forfeit of leadership. The merely scandal arouse public suspiciousness-whether the president has sufficient power to harness its own election? Why our mechanisms for president election have so many flaws? When the scandal comes out, our government pay more attentions on the president leadership and the elective process. Other words, scandals which disclose the fatal flaws of our political mechanisms encourage us to modify and revise it, ultimately leads to a revolution of politics.

In the second place, scandals from the academic field call our more focus on the detailed process of scientific research but not on the controversial results. Consider the recent scandal of Korean scientist. The guilty professor asked <Science> -one of the most famous and authorized magazine, to withdraw his current thesis which was proved that the results of his research is statistically unreliable in consideration of his usage of spurious sample during the research process. Almost all the media throughout the world reported the academic scandal, and the academic circle responded strongly to this event. After all, it is scandals that disclose the cheating behaviors in scientific field and purify it finally.   

In the third place, scandals play an indispensable role in the economic realm. They attract the public concentration on our emerging and necessary improvement on economical revolution. Consider Enron, a bankrupt company for its economic cheating behaviors as an example. It took advantage of the most arcane accounting and legal technicalities to turn deductions into earning. When the scandal was put out from the water, the government regulators immediately took actions to investigate and punish accounting violations. Moreover, the scandal arouse the energy and securities regulators to engage in the reformation in accounting rules and relevant laws, which are expected to better warrant the rights of investors.

Turn next to my contention with the speaker's statement. Nowadays, more and more scandals in entertainment and sports such as sex scandals about a famous actress or sports star, distract most our attentions from other essentially important issues. The public interests in celebrities' private lives are increasing rather than the urging environment exacerbation, energy crisis, population booming, terrorism, and etc.

To sum up, scandals unmercifully expose the internal flaws of our contemporary mechanisms in politics, economics, academia and other fields. They are also against any cheating behaviors while encouraging government regulators to reform the banal rules and relevant laws. Nevertheless, scandals that distract public attentions to celebrities' private lives render themselves meaningless. Whether scandals are beneficial to our society should be addressed on a case-by-case basis.

[ Last edited by jingjingtous on 2005-12-28 at 23:06 ]

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

我很用心写的，希望大家批的越狠越好^-^

11yaoyaoUID: 177037

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Whether scandals are useful in politics, academia, or other areas-concerning（加个that顺畅些） they attracting(attract) our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer could, as the speaker claims? I concede that scandals, to certain degrees, actually expose some serious problems in politics, academia, and business. Otherwise, I find the speaker's position troubling. It ignores the fact that scandals such as sex scandals in entertainment and sports distract the public most attentions which should be focused on more essentially important issues.

Turning first to my agreement with the speaker's statement is that scandals always reveal the deleterious or even banal internal of one（删掉，后面的是复数） academic, political, or economical phenomena but not from(删掉reveal from its surface不通) its surface（but 后都删了也能表达很好的意思）. In the first place, scandals in the politics realm, in which scandals are most focused(这里我也不会说了，再想想), are（are删掉） always expose the unknown greedy purpose of some illegitimate leadership, or even worse, the dirty and unbelievable dealings under some strategies seemingly serve to the public. Consider The Watergate scandal of President Nixon, whose contempt for the very legal system that afforded his forfeit of leadership(这个定语从句不完整). The merely（这个merely起个什么作用呢？） scandal arouse public suspiciousness-whether the president has sufficient power to harness its own election? Why our mechanisms for president election have so many flaws（用there be能顺畅点不）When the scandal comes out, our government pay（s） more attention(s） on the president leadership and the elective process. Other words, scandals which disclose the fatal flaws of our political mechanisms encourage us to modify and revise it, ultimately leads to a revolution （革命？这个有点大了）of politics.

In the second place, scandals from the academic field call our more focus on the detailed process of scientific research but not on the controversial results. Consider the recent scandal of Korean scientist. The guilty professor asked <Science> -one of the most famous and authorized magazine, to withdraw his current thesis which was proved that the results of his research is() statistically unreliable in consideration of his usage of spurious sample during the research process. Almost all the media throughout the world reported the academic scandal, and the academic circle（用field吧） responded strongly to this event. After all, it is scandals that disclose the cheating behaviors in scientific field and purify it finally.   

In the third place, scandals play an indispensable role in the economic realm. They attract the public concentration on our emerging and necessary improvement on economical revolution. Consider Enron, a bankrupt company for its economic cheating behaviors as an example. It took advantage of the most arcane accounting and legal technicalities to turn deductions into earning. When the scandal was put out from the water, the government regulators immediately took actions to investigate and punish accounting violations. Moreover, the scandal arouse the energy and securities regulators to engage in the reformation in accounting rules and relevant laws, which are expected to better warrant the rights of investors.

Turn next to my contention with the speaker's statement. Nowadays, more and more scandals in entertainment and sports such as sex scandals about a famous actress or sports star, distract most our attentions from other essentially important issues. The public interests in celebrities' private lives are increasing rather than the urging environment exacerbation, energy crisis, population booming, terrorism, and etc.

To sum up, scandals unmercifully expose the internal flaws of our contemporary mechanisms in politics, economics, academia and other fields. They are also against any cheating behaviors while encouraging government regulators to reform the banal rules and relevant laws. Nevertheless, scandals that distract public attentions to celebrities' private lives render themselves meaningless. Whether scandals are beneficial to our society should be addressed on a case-by-case basis.

条理很清晰哦,看得出写得很迈力啊,语言上有点牵强,咱们的问题差不多,我现在就看280呢,能学到不少东西,加油啊

leedgenUID: 160823

590字，强啊，

Whether scandals are useful in politics, academia, or other areas-concerning they attracting our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer could, as the speaker claims?（第一句话好复杂啊，我头都晕了，什么意思啊? concerning they attracting our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer could 插入成分没有谓语） I concede that scandals, to certain degrees, actually expose some serious problems in politics, academia, and business . Otherwise, I find the speaker's position troubling. It ignores the fact that scandals such as sex scandals in entertainment and sports distract the public most attentions which should be focused on more essentially important issues.感觉有点像argument

Turning first to my agreement with the speaker's statement is that scandals always reveal the deleterious or even banal internal of one academic, political, or economical phenomena but not from its surface. In the first place, scandals in the politics realm, perhaps the most frequently happening field（我觉得只是最受关注的吧）, are always expose the unknown greedy purpose of some illegitimate leadership, or even worse, the dirty and unbelievable dealings under some strategies seemingly serve to the public. Consider The Watergate scandal of President Nixon, whose contempt for the very legal system that afforded his forfeit of leadership. The merely scandal arouse public suspiciousness-whether the president has sufficient power to harness its own election? Why our mechanisms for president election have so many flaws? When the scandal comes out, our government pay more attentions on the president leadership and the elective process.（In） Other words, scandals which disclose好词 the fatal flaws of our political mechanisms encourage us to modify and revise it（them前面mechanisms是复数）, ultimately leads to （leading to）a revolution of politics.

In the second place, scandals from the academic field call our more focus on the detailed process of scientific research but not on the controversial results. Consider the recent scandal of Korean scientist. The guilty professor asked <Science> -one of the most famous and authorized magazine, to withdraw his current thesis which was proved that the results of his research is statistically unreliable in consideration of his usage of spurious sample during the research process. Almost all the media throughout the world reported the academic scandal, and the academic circle responded strongly to this event. After all, it is scandals that disclose the cheating behaviors in scientific field and purify it finally.   到底学术界的丑闻能带来什么积极的好处呢，大家讨论一下吧，我实在说不清楚

In the third place, scandals play an indispensable role in the economic realm. They attract the public concentration on our emerging and necessary improvement on economical revolution. Consider Enron, a bankrupt company for its economic cheating behaviors as an example. It took advantage of the most arcane accounting and legal technicalities to turn deductions into earning. When the scandal was put out from the water, the government regulators immediately took actions to investigate and punish accounting violations. Moreover, the scandal arouse the energy and securities regulators to engage in the reformation in accounting rules and relevant laws, which are expected to better warrant the rights of investors.

Turn next to my contention with the speaker's statement.（这里不懂，请教一下楼主） Nowadays, more and more scandals in entertainment and sports such as sex scandals about a famous actress or sports star, distract most our attentions from other essentially important issues. The public interests in celebrities' private lives are increasing rather than the urging environment exacerbation, energy crisis, population booming, terrorism, and etc.这个写的好远啊，看一些八卦丑闻怎么联系到环境，能源这么严肃的问题上去了呀，呵呵

To sum up, scandals unmercifully expose the internal flaws of our contemporary mechanisms in politics, economics, academia and other fields. They are also against any cheating behaviors while encouraging government regulators to reform the banal rules and relevant laws. Nevertheless, scandals that distract public attentions to celebrities' private lives render themselves meaningless. Whether scandals are beneficial to our society should be addressed on a case-by-case basis.

写的真是很周全，方方面面都涉及到了，可是我觉得还是攻击在表面，说了一些现象，应该更深入谈一谈。不过我也不知道怎么深入写:L

[ Last edited by leedgen on 2005-12-27 at 14:59 ]

hzyj0322UID: 2155800

开头是象ARG,不知道这样开头合格不，280都是这么开头的

hzyj0322UID: 2155800

我只能看到很表面的东西,惭愧,写作和阅读确实关系很大

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

Originally posted by 11yaoyao at 2005-12-27 14:09
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版主是说我的题目吗？谨遵教诲！

jingjingtousUID: 2164820

by leedgen: Turn next to my contention with the speaker's statement.（这里不懂，请教一下楼主）
我想是‘下面讨论一下我对作者观点的争论’，即反对作者的观点^-^
你认为可以这样写吗？