1月1日，1T作文第五期同主题写作

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

加入些高级词汇和闪光句型会使你的文章在观点清晰明确的基础上更加优秀。不错，继续努力哦
另外开头一个However和but连在一起不太好，不如改为一个句子用while连接。

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

原帖由 amethyst111 于 2006-1-4 15:20 发表
看到羊羊在线，真好，呵呵，正在评着呢吧，我有希望了，呵呵，在线等羊羊的评审结果，修改之后再写下一篇

ＴＯＮＹ说的对，这是作文互改活动，而不是斑竹评审活动．我是无论如何也不可能全都看的，自己也非常忙．
我会看你的，在等着结果的期间你也看看别的同学的如何？

amethyst111UID: 2147702

会的！

amethyst111UID: 2147702

jacklove ,我正要看看你的呢，结果发现你连着发了两篇，再仔细一看下面那篇居然是我的！呵呵，谢谢啦
不过提醒你，下次评别人文章的时候记得写个标题说明是给谁的哦，呵呵

amethyst111UID: 2147702

Should university students be required to attend classes? Some people think that university students have the optional（词性） to go to classes. In my opinion, however, I agree with the policy that university students should be required to attend classes. There are three reasons to support my argument.

One of the important reasons why university should require student（是不是应该加s） to go to classes is that many distinguished professors are available in classes. These professors usually make great contributions to their fields and（这个and是不是可以去掉然后换成逗号） know a lot of information, and also know the subject’s trend. Going to their classes, students are always provided more useful and deep knowledge in relevant fields. Meanwhile, professors can offer students a wide range of knowledge and experience, not only about their fields but other fields which are tightly associated with their fields. Instead, you can miss the classes but teach yourself. It is clear that you are hard to get information that are interesting and useful from professors’ presentation. （是不是想表达这个意思：It is clear that it is hard to get information which is as interesting and useful as that from professors’ presentation.） Perhaps information teachers told are useful for the final exam, you are likely to get a low grade because of absence of classes.
Another reason is that students can discuss the problems each other, which could help them understand and grasp（是不是缺宾语，因为两个都是及物动词，再讨论一下，这一点不肯定，呵呵:handshake）. In general, professors may explain some special questions unclearly（改为unclear） for you. At this time（是不是想说at the same time，或者是我孤陋寡闻了:L） classmates can help you understand because he/she may know your question（加s） better than your teachers do. Moreover, it helps you build a fundamental friendship between（我会用among） students when you are all attending（这种时态好不？一般现在时怎么样？:O） classes.
On the other hand, if you do not attend classes, you are likely to learn a little（a little 是形容词，是不是应该加knowledge之类的东东） from textbooks in the end. Books are always abstract and tedious. When you read, it is likely that you have to resort to others’ notes to help you understand. Through this, you may take more time to learn. What’s worse, you may acquire a little.
In conclusion, I think that university students should be required to attend classes because there are many famous professors that teach students and it offer opportunities to discuss the problems to help their studies. Therefore,  attending classes （缺系动词 is） beneficial to students.

总得来讲，思路还是很清晰的，只要注意个别词句的使用就行了，呵呵
其中有几处我也不确定，个人意见，鼓励讨论！:handshake

[ 本帖最后由 amethyst111 于 2006-1-4 17:46 编辑 ]

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

首先觉得你的文章头重脚轻，一般开头都是比较简洁的，两——四行解决问题。但是你写了将近六行，而下面的每个正文段落都只是三四行，一看就不是很成比例，不太合适。仔细一看也能看出，你的观点和思路很好，但是展开的不充分。
另外看过你的作文的一个与看了别人的不一样的感觉是，你应该把立场改掉。根据你下面的思路，B1写的是有一类课是所有人都应该学的；B2是说有一类课是研究类似东东的人都应该学的。应该说这分别是基础课和专业基础课。思路是很好的。但是你不觉得用了两个最重要的段落写了两段应该学的课，而立场却说at the same time it depends on students' favor 有些莫名其妙吗。你说了at the same time，可以理解为两者同时都重要，但是首先从你分配比例来看后者明显不是像开头说的那么重视；其次从考试的具体情况来看，TWE重视的是语言而不是观点，而且时间有限，不适合写两方面的观点。还不如选择前面一个，后面就在最后让步一下就很好了。

yangmxqiluUID: 2125083

Today, more and more people have chance to go to college and the educational method of college students has become the hot discussion point. One of the most important aspects of the related problems is the relationship between students and classes. In this point, we find that some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes meanwhile others believe that going to classes should be optional for students. From the point of my view, I prefer the second side rather than the first side. The arguments that support my view will be listed as follows.

The main reason for my propensity is that the aim of the students going to college is to develop their interests, explore their ability and train their specialization. There are many differences about every college students, including personality ability, cultural background. So it is not advisable to require every college students to attend classes.

The second reason that can be seen by everyone is that most college students are adult. They could decide their own things correctly, including class choice. The college only need to provide students various classes and it is the students who have the rights to select which class should be attended.

Of course, there are some advantages for requiring college students to attend classes. For example, the requirement could supervise some students who do not want to attend class, especially those lazy students who kill their college time by entertainment. But for most clever and diligent students, the optional class will gain more effective than required class.

In a word, depending on personal experience, personality type and the aim of college, it is better for college students to choose their class than to be required.

逆风飞羊UID: 182440

你和前面有一个同学有相同的问题，开头写的好长，而中间部分却都很短，特别是Ｂ２，才三行，也太草率了．而且结尾只有那么短，颇有虎头蛇尾的感觉．如果暂时没有能力写的很多，就开头少写点，锻炼自己把中间扩展的能力．开头虽然字数多，但是很多是空话套话，也对文章没有太大的意义．

amethyst111UID: 2147702

谢谢你的建议！
首先你所说的让我选择一个，最后进行让步的说法解决了对我困惑已久的问题，就是对于这一类题目，应该如何写的问题。
同时，我明白了，观点不是最重要的，重要的是能够自圆其说，自己的思路清晰，内容充实。
最后，第一段冗长确实是个问题，马上动手修改！

[ 本帖最后由 amethyst111 于 2006-1-5 17:10 编辑 ]

amethyst111UID: 2147702

That issue whether university students should be required to attend classes provokes many arguments. There are some proponents who would say that it is necessary for college students to go to classes, while others hold that attending classes should be optional for students. As for as I am concerned, it is required for students to attend classes.
First of all, it is essential for all the university students to learn various kinds of classes, such as math. On account of math’s importance as the basic of all the other sciences, when playing games, drawing, doing lab reports and so on, we probably can't carry on without math. So it is necessary for all of us to learn math in the college. It is equally true in language classes.
Furthermore, when some students who are major in the same research field, it becomes more important for them to attend fundamental classes in their major. Take my major for example, I study city traffic planning while one of my classmates does research on railway transportation and another on freeway, but we are all required to attend the Traffic and Transportation Management class.
At the same time, students who attend classes will benefit more than those do not. Firstly, it helps students to communicate with each other timely and effectively, which not only strengthen the friendship among students but also solve lots of study problems students are faced with. In addition, some final exams are based on the note of the classes, so students might have got higher scores if they go to classes.
Of course, students also have their opportunities to choose some classes whether to go to or not relying on their interests. Some students like music, so they can choose music classes; some have a mood of physical exercises, and then they could go to gym educations.  
However, all in all, it is essential for university students to attend basic and major classes which are of great importance to them, and students could acquire lots of benefits from classes as well, so in my opinion, students should be required to attend classes.

joshua2004UID: 2173464

There is much disagreement over attending classes in universityies. Somepeople argue that the university students should be required to attend the classes. Others, however, believe that the classes should be optional for hte students. If I were forced to agree one of the two point of view, my choice would be the latter.

Why do some people believe that the students should be required to attend the classes? On one hand, the students can learn the subject systematically from the teacher in the classes. On the other hand, in the classes, if the students have some problem, they can discuss with the teacher or their classmates.

Although I agree that there are one or two advantages to require the students to attend the classes, I insist that there are more advantages to make the classes optional for the students.

To begin with, the students can learn better and more if the classes is optional. For example, the student do not have to attend the classes if he already know well about the subject. He can learn something beyond the classes with time saved from the classes. In addition, the students can develop theirself more freely if the classes if optional since they can spend more time on their own interests.

Another reason is that it is good for the student to develop their self study ability. If the classes is optional, the student can spend more time to learn by theirself. The self-study ability is very important, since in the most time in real life, teachers will not available.

In conclusion, I believe the classes should be optional for the students, not only because the students can learn more efficiently, but also because it is good for the students to increase their self-study ability.