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145.A new study collected data that shows that people who snore are more
likely to gain weight than are people who do not snore. It is well known
that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night
for a few seconds, a condition called sleep apnea. The interruption of
breathing wakes the person-often so briefly that the waking goes
unnoticed-and can leave the person too tired during the day to exercise.
Anyone who snores, therefore, should try to eat less than the average
person and to exercise more.

一项新的调查所收集的数据显示打呼噜的人比不打呼噜的人更容易长胖。我们知道很多打呼噜的人夜间也经常有数秒钟的呼吸停顿，这种现象被称为睡眠呼吸中断。这种呼吸的停顿导致本人醒来--通常十分短暂以至于不被察觉--并且会使本人在白天很累而无力锻炼。因此，所有打呼噜的人都应该比正常人少吃多锻炼。
提纲:
1.        很多打呼噜的人夜间有呼吸停顿.人数多并不表示比例大。
2.        睡眠不良引发的疲劳，并不一定导致缺乏锻炼，可能影响工作学习，参加锻炼与否是由人的兴趣、性格、生活态度或观念决定的。
3.        发胖与否，与个人体质关系很大，有些人即使不锻炼也不发胖，比如我自己。有些人经常锻炼，注意饮食控制，也会胖，特例：肥胖症。
4.        少吃多锻炼与打呼噜不能构成因果关系，打呼应该尝试改变睡眠姿势，就医，遵医嘱服用药物或接受物理手术治疗。

The author drew a conclusion from a study about relation between snore and fatness, and indicated that people who snore should control their diet and do more exercise to avoid gain weight. That sounds logical, but is not thoroughly well-reasoned.
First of all, the presented position that "many" people who snore suffer from a disease called sleep apnea is not a precise ground of argument. "Many people" means a large number but with vague expression. Assuming 1000 is large in amount, if there are 1 million snorers, and thus, only 0.1% people are patients with sleep apnea, will you still think it is a special characteristic of the snorers? The author's deduction of snore and breathe stop is dependable, except for more convincing numbers of the survey have been given.
Second, even if the arguer could prove that most snorers sicken for sleep apnea or share terrible slump, the arguer has not adequately shown that the snorers are more likely to give up doing exercise. Considering all the alternative parameters, to take exercise or not might be determined by individual interesting, personal character and healthy notion. For instance, Sport enthusiasts, such us athletes and X-sports players, will and love to exercise in order to strengthen their body and improve their art. While, in other hand, floppy people might lie in a comfort sofa in front of the television rather than carry out a physical exercise. Both these conditions have no relationship to frequently breathe stop in sleeping.
In addition, the argument brashly suggests that it is taking less exercise and eating more that lead to overweight. As my experience, some people enjoy a healthy diet and taking enough exercise does weigh heavier than average people, however that kind of obesity may be caused by gene. In another word, other possibilities causing fatness should be eliminated for the assertion to be made.
Finally, with the reasoning above, the arguer asserts dogmatically that any snorer should try to eat less and exercise more than average people. For one thing, the situations among the snored people are various from each other, and the arguer dose not testify neither all the people who snore will gain weight, nor the diet and exercise are effective for all of them. For another thing, even the arguer’s advice is limited to the appointed snorers; the advice to eat less and do more exercise substantially puts the cart before the horse. Rather than caring about the snorer’s weight problem, that how to cure or reduce the snorer laid on a more remarkable issue. So there comes a better advice for the snorers, which is going to a doctor about snoring. According to any snorer’s detail instance, the specialist will give various treatments such as adopting a different sleeping posture, avoiding smoking or some medicine.
To sum up, this argument should provide more detail statistics about the survey to prove the universality of having sleep apnea in snored people. The arguer should also give adequate reasoning to make both the correlation between bad sleep and less exercise, and the efficiency of doing exercise to lose weight. And the arguer’s conclusion is so ludicrous that cannot be accepted by any snorer.

[ 本帖最后由 cane004 于 2006-2-27 23:02 编辑 ]

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