issue 51 义无反顾小组第四次作业

AnddieUID: 2135826

原帖由 kittywen_16 于 2006-5-14 16:16 发表
There always seems to be conflicts between general and specific education. Talking about this paradox, I totally hold the same view as the statement that only by specifically designing to meet the  ...

呵呵，kitty批改的好细致啊:D:D

吾该啦～～

最近正在复合句实验阶段......

[ 本帖最后由 Anddie 于 2006-5-14 18:49 编辑 ]

glxingUID: 2156425

谢谢芹菜的修改，我这次确实没有在word里改，因为写完已经很晚了，担心迟到被你亮黄牌，所以赶紧贴上去，呵呵，以后一定注意，同志们共勉。

glxingUID: 2156425

我的队友PK又没有出现，难道我rp不好，每次都找不到人批改或是找不到被批改的人。：）

yuviUID: 2169411

哈哈,小蜗牛,现在还没有到考试不用担心RP哈~~
PK的作业贴在第9楼,他的名字是jiqixueyuan :)

yuviUID: 2169411

原帖由 glxing 于 2006-5-14 19:23 发表
谢谢芹菜的修改，我这次确实没有在word里改，因为写完已经很晚了，担心迟到被你亮黄牌，所以赶紧贴上去，呵呵，以后一定注意，同志们共勉。

呵呵~~有觉悟就好..不过MS你昨天是第一个交作业的人啊..:D;P

AnddieUID: 2135826

芹菜:

态度:中立
论点:
1)兴趣是学习的基础(Bill Gates的一段话)
2)一般的教育机构很难达到为每个学生设计(身边大牛的例子,呵呵,为避免对号入座,改了他的学校和专业)
3)家长方面对于小孩兴趣规划的压力(乱编)
4)多数人只需要general的学习就可以应付将来的工作(胡扯)

Will education be truly effective when it is specifically designed to meet every individual student’s needs and interests? This question seems to be the one of the most considerable issues in today’s world. In my point of views, to find out the truly effective way for education in this modern society, people need call for a balance between students' needs and interests and the education system.

Interest has no doubt as the most necessary foundation in many study fields. Bill Gates, who is the richest and the most successful person in nowadays, left the Law School of Harvard University when he was nineteen caused by found out the real interest of his life. Gates now successful developed a wide range of computer software and they are been used in every inches of the world. He once said (and I paraphrased[呵呵]): "By putting happiness, honor, success, and wealth in one drawer, I am holding the secret key which is interest for all about them." [其实bill gates的成功最主要在于他有法律意识,虽然他也很注重兴趣] This example illustrates the point that the position of interest is definitely at a highly significant stage in some fields of the study.[感觉本段论证部分不足,除了主题句外就是一个例子,应该增加论述的内容]

Simply put, without concerning students' needs and interests, education progress might be hardly continued. While an education institution using autocratic teaching style without concerning the individual needs and interests of each student, it possibly will not be the effective way in whole teaching progress, at least, not the helpful one.

On the other hand, pay close attentions for every single student’s needs and interests might be difficult for general education institution. First, the faculties’ time and energy are limited in order to[are too limited to] catch every student’s needs and interests. Secondly, even they could find out what their students really want and attracted for, it also hardly to reach the huge amount requires in every study fields. For example, one of my best friends, who is studying organic chemistry in Stanford University at present, he[去掉] was totally attracted by chemistry while we were both in junior school. However, our school was impossible to offer the particular lab equipments for him at that time.[个人意见啊:这个例子是一个及其个别的现象,缺少说服力,如果要证明上面的两点,最好举一些general的例子或统计数据.因为不是每一个论点都适合用个别现象来证明] Therefore, to offer specifically designing to meet the individual needs and interests of each student might be a hard work challenge for education institution.

Moreover, not only for education institution, but also for the parents, it is a challenge to meeting the individual needs and interests for the students. As many recent reports, there are plenty parents were catching over attentions for the education for their children. Many of those children were been sending to various different off-school classes in order to develop their "interests" by their parents without concerning real "needs" for the them. Over the aim of specifically designed course for students' needs and interests will become a no-doubting negative effect and needs more attentions in today's society.  [例子说的是家长对孩子期望过高啊,不是家长不能满足孩子的要求吧]

Finally, to some extent, specifically designed education course is not likely to apply on a wide range of students. [这里要说明是学校还是社会还是家长apply,只是笼统的说是不复合实际的] Different students got their different needs and interests; however, the elemental knowledge is always needed here.[这句话是要证明什么?] Further, after graduation of their high school, most of the students might still need educating by general course providers for further career, like various of the universities, the colleges, and the professional institutions existing in nowadays. [只需要general学习的人就不需要满足他们的学习兴趣吗?]

In conclusion, without most students’ needs and interests, education cannot truly been effective. Moreover,[不是moreover吧] specifically designing the education, were not possible for every individual student. Therefore, in my point of views, while our form of society is necessary to find out a balance between both students needs and interests and their education progress.


[总结:
1.        本文好像偏重于有条件的反对,因为只有第一个分论点是赞成的
2.        第四个分论点的确站不住脚
3.        感觉第二、三分论点都是argument。
觉得如果要反对题目的观点，应该这样入手：general的教育也可以使教学效果truly effective，然后列举其优点；而不要写specific education如何不可行。]

[ 本帖最后由 Anddie 于 2006-5-14 20:42 编辑 ]

kittywen_16UID: 2135347

今天是周末，好不容易有自己的时间，可以慢慢看Andiee的文章。不会怪我拍得狠吧。给队友批改文章自己也有收获

glxingUID: 2156425

蜗牛改PK的大部分同意．
提纲：
１．教育应该服务于社会(你的这一个观点很好，你完全可以在前面加上一些对教育的定义来充实一下)
２．支持作者的观点
TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

The author asserts that education will not be truly effective unless it has special aim to meet the individual needs and interests of each students. In my view, I agree with the author's viewpoint to large extent. However, education should be also intended to meet needs  of the whole society.

In my opinion, education is one of most chief parts in the society. Den Xiaoping, one of the greatest leaders in Chinese history, once said that the education should provide service to the whole world, and the future of the whole society, so we have reasons to believe that education is important for a society to develop. I  think that education cannot go a long distance if its aim is only designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students rather than to meet the whole society, maybe this can be supported by a professor's words in my university  that education had not any sense without aiming to offer service for society.这一段有些苍白，为什么呢？我认为是个人观点摆了很多，但都没有有效的证明。

Admittedly, education should be designed to meet most students' individual requirements and interests. In the school, students can learn a lot of knowledge  which maybe makes them obtain  jobs with well pay , students can also study the special or extracurricular courses by their interests to ingest knowledge which is very vital for them to hunt for  good jobs. 这儿怎么回事，到底哪个重要啊？if these courses can not benefit students while finding jobs, students perhaps would not like to learn them.不能找到工作-----》没有兴趣，好像不对吧。 if  students are not interested in these courses, they will not learn these courses. Li Wei, one of  my close friends, said that he would rather to play games than studied those course in which he was not interested. Another  friends of mine also said that he could not go to school to learn knowledge unless the knowledge acquired from school make him have a great competitiveness to get a well-pay job.哦，明白了，你把需要和兴趣联系起来了，嗯，有创意，我市直接把他俩放一块讨论的 。不过，建议你在把两者的关系整理一下，其实很不容易说清楚的
In sum, education should be prepared for meeting not only the individual needs and interests of each student but also the development of whole society, 看到这，我想你是不是应该把上两段的位置换一下，因为是强调后者啊if so, our society will have better stability in the near future, the students will also study hard to obtain knowledge which makes them afford very good service for the society to develop.

pk，我没有给你改语法和拼写，因为我觉得逻辑才是issue，甚至awa最重要的。
这篇文章的脉络是很清楚的，1，满足个人兴趣有用 2，也要满足社会需要，但没有很好的展开论证，比如说，第一个，你没说如果满足了个人兴趣会怎么样，缺乏正面论证（我也有这个毛病，被Anddie批评了）。第二个，你没说怎样才是满足社会需要，显得很空洞。
还有，这一次你的段落布局不是太好啊，稍微调整一下吧

最后，一个很严重的问题——————为什么不注明你是PK，还得我找了半天我的互改搭档，呵呵

AnddieUID: 2135826

原帖由 kittywen_16 于 2006-5-14 22:33 发表
今天是周末，好不容易有自己的时间，可以慢慢看Andiee的文章。不会怪我拍得狠吧。给队友批改文章自己也有收获

呵呵，没事尽管拍～～:handshake

不过......我叫Anddie...

cherrychen_0602UID: 2179415

issue51
As children of today is the promise of tomorrow, how to educate the next generation effectively has become an issue under discussion. The author claimed that it should only be designed to meet the students’ needs and interests. Whereas there is an element of truth in this argument, it ignored some students may even not know where their interest lie and gave no consideration to the demands of our society.

Admittedly, a truly university should provide a liberal atmosphere for students to pursue their education, therefore the inclusion of curriculum should be decided individually. After all, students have been full-fledged and have the rights and the ability to choose what is appropriate for them thus a university can not define the set of courses and then force its students to obey it. Moreover, common sense tells me that if a student has a keen nose on a certain subject, he will pour all his vigor and energy on it and hence is quite possible to succeed in that field. On the other hand, if he does not like what he is compelled to learn, he may become rather languid everyday and then lose hope towards future and life, ultimately may even commit suicide, although the possibility is flimsy, it does exist.

Moreover, I agree with the statement insofar as education should particularly prepare for the student's future requests, to be specific, a gratifying job as well as a promising career. The meaning of going to university will vanished if it’s graduate step into society but remains unemployed and depend on his parents financially. It is not only a shame to the student but also a heavy burden on the parents on the society. So, whereas education should instill its students a sense of responsibility and a large scope of common knowledge, it should specifically design to fulfill the anticipation for the student to live independently in the future.

However, the claim is dubious when it comes to the primary school, a special stage of education when students are too young to know themselves, let alone they can determine what is best for them while they have not access to the whole outside world full of variety and possibility. Therefore, just as most of countries in the world have implemented, students are obliged to learn basic skill and knowledge which are fundamental to their development and further education in college.

Also, education should satisfy the demands of our society. With the globalization of today, students should learn to cooperate with others, especially someone who possessed different culture, religion, belief. Thus, college should require students to choose courses on cultures, even if it is not attractive to some students, but it will be beneficial for the development our whole humankind. When gaining an understanding and tolerance to those different from us, we will find that some conflicts are gratuitous and avoidable.

In conclusion, as analyses above, truly effective should not just cater for each student's desire but also take account of the demands of our society.

ralcUID: 2206404

阿 文章血流成河啊 谢谢PK哦！
写的急 用了些专业术语
let along 好像是“ 更别说……"的意思

天边一朵云UID: 2157330

Issue 51  "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

提纲：1）按照学生兴趣教课确实有一定道理：学生的个性问题，可以省时间
      2）可行性低：学生人数多；难以考核；学生的兴趣会随心理和生理的增长而改变
      3）有更好的方法：将普通课程和特殊课程相结合
Should education be designed specifically to meet the individual needs and interest of each student so that the general effectiveness of education will be improved? This is true to some extent, however, we must be aware that since it is not as practicable as it sounds, there are some other ways to realize the truly effectiveness of education.

In the first place, students do need specifically designed education to meet the individuality. Just as the old saying goes: there are no two identical leafs in the world, so it is with people. Students studying in the same class may share different family backgrounds, different personalities and different interests towards various of subjects.   One of the most obvious results of this discrepancy is their varieties of professions when they step into the society. Therefore, the primary purpose of education is to help them become creative and inquiring people who have the will and intelligence to conquer in his or her certain field. For instance, medical science education should be provided to students who have special interests in becoming doctors so that they can pursue their career after graduation. Besides, education be specifically designed will save a lot of time by which students can concentrate on this particular subject. We can often hear students  complaining that they're wasting too much time studying curriculums that they are not interested at all. From this point of view, there do exist some advantages for education to be specifically designed.

Before we fully accept the conclusion, we must realize that the practicability is open to doubt. On one hand, there are thousands of students with all kinds of interests and needs so that it will be completely impossible for an education system to supply them with all the courses they desire for the lack of fund and teachers. On the other hand, it will also be a complicated task to assess whether these students really benefit from this designed education. Will they truly learn more and better when focused simply on one or two subjects? Will they success easier after graduation? The answer is unclear. Finally, no one can be sure what he really interested in before a certain age, for with the development of one's body and mind, his inclination will vary accordingly. Hence it is irresponsible for education system to teach them specifically. Under all these circumstances, the efficiency and effectiveness of the education will be declined instead of improved.

Besides specifically designed subjects, there are some other ways to enhance the effectiveness of education. we can combine the particular and common curriculums together and then change each one's proportions gradually so that students can have a better understanding of where their really interests lie in. For instance, when they are in elementary school and middle schools, music, painting, mathematics are required for every students. After they are enrolled in universities, they can partly choose some of the courses that attract them more while still take some which may help them in their future career.
With this kind of compound education, students will not only  have a wider range of choices when looking for a job,  but also foster a deep understanding of life and the world which perfectly carry out the purpose of education.

In sum, in order to attain its maximum effectiveness, education should provide common courses as well as specifically designed ones to help students achieve more in their lives.

补作业呀，有没有人拍拍我的？:D

ralcUID: 2206404

写得很好啊！
第二段第六行最后的那个inquiring是什么意思？

天边一朵云UID: 2157330

谢谢哦。是从孙元工具箱里抄的，我猜是有追求的意思。每写完一篇issue都是一次胜利！虽然写的时候“生不如死"。。。