Ares站队第一次作业

renliyunUID: 2209571

renliyun的第一次作业，实在做不完了，考试太多......................
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renliyunUID: 2209571

弄了一个晚上了，电子阅览室要关门了，我我我...还有点没做完....再补吧...今天要累死了

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题目：ARGUMENT 26 - The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda.

"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."


In this memo ,the chairperson recommend MR. Charles Schade to plan and direct the general music education instructions for entire school system, and to support his recommendation, the chairperson cite some achievements of Mr.Charles ,which include cultivating a three local band competitions champion  during his employment as Steel City High School's music director, also with a remarkable improvement in the music rehearsal facilities as well as in musical instruments of that school. However, these evidences are not so convincing that can lend significant support to the chairperson's claim.
First, there is (are) a large number of possible reasons can contribute to Steel City High School's eminent three-year championship apart from the director's talent help. He or she even have not mind if their band has already monopolized this honor before Mr. Charles  tenure, due to which we can infer that this school have a traditional strength in music performance, and that the attendance of Mr .Charles only confirm this strong point. So in fact, we can even question  if there may be another teacher who is so much better that can keep this ascendant  for so long and that is consequently really worthwhile for us to compete for. We have no definite respond to this concern from the Chairperson.
Second, as the chairperson's claim of the great progress in Steel School's quality of music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments, there is(are) too much substitutable contributions besides the director, too. Those potential contributions can be such as :1)this school board make decision to  improve their music education quality and take action as cast tremendous investment so that all the former poor musical equipments have been replaced by a set of new and professional ones which make the entire musical level rises exponently;2)in recent five years, this school adds some extra musical qualified requirements in the enrollment of their new students, which objectively do good to heighten school's whole musical level. And so many efforts are likely to take effect in this conspicuous advancement that it is presumptuous to attribute it to, at least may not be completely.
Besides, the chairperson fails to take account of the differences between students from two schools, which can be a critical ingredient that determinates whether the same success can be achieved when we appoint Mr Charles as our school's director. If our school's students don't adaptable(adapt) to his special teaching patterns of musical instructions which may even cause a contradictory emotion and then the final effects may turn out to be opposite unexpectedly. Herein, we find no assurance from the chairperson to guarantee the exact accomplishment.
In conclusion, with many fallacies containing in the recommendation, the chairperson should offer a set of further detailed information for us to believe his claim. A compelling confirmation including a preclusion of other contributing reasons should be added for us to have more confidence in Mr Charles’s education skills. Besides, we have to master more about his specific attainments in musical instructions such as his idea about how to impart fundamental music knowledge that are tedious for a layman so that we can decide whether he can be competent for our position.


全文522字，完全有足够的空间展现Argument了，但是就怕短短的30分钟无法成文，推荐把字数控制在300到400字之间。各段中尤其注意了段首一句和段末一句的互相呼应；
不足在于：首尾两段，180字，占去了全文的1/3还多的篇幅，应该着重精简，否则就显得Argument的重点不够突出了。
其它的一些细节错误，在所难免，注意减少就成。

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baihe1988UID: 2203505

总算改完了~呵呵
大家去看看吧！
由于版式的问题，我就直接上传附件啦~
红色的改动的部分阿~
大家加油！坚持就是胜利！！！

[ 本帖最后由 baihe1988 于 2006-6-23 22:56 编辑 ]

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已完成对ssc_supergirl的argument和issue的修改。见本贴18#19#

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组长加我一个，我和mars说了
他推荐了，我的qq100107770
我QQ出问题了，一直加不上你，
你们的第一次作业我也写完了
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已完成对Mars的I和A的修改：〉

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51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

Whether truly effective education results from specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student? Faced with this controversial issue, we might find out that different people hold their own ideas depending on personal experiences, conflicting values and actual observations of life. In my point of view, however, I am inclined to support the idea that when education is specifically designed to satisfy the individual needs and interests, it is truly effective. In the following discussion, I would like to present several aspects to support my standpoint.

To begin with, one of the goals of education is to foster kinds of generations in any area for out society, so we should focus our attention upon students’ interests and needs. Without interests and needs, that is to say, we will lose some potential power to do everything. We might all have similar experience that doing something is very productive with our personal interests and needs, and that we do not like do the thing we have no interests on. A typical example, Beethoven, one of the greatest composers and musicians in the world, created many famous symphonies. Astonishingly, he produced his most famous symphony with complete deafness. How could he manage that? It must be the prominent interest to music that stimulates him to struggle and thrive, thus he can even feel the beauty of music in spite of no hearing at all. In some aspects, interests could create one’s imagination and potential we are not aware before. Surprisingly, sometime, the interest can generate the super- power that you never think of such strong power to finish the interesting thing.

Furthermore, another goal of education is to obtain the knowledge. As we discussed above, with interests, one can obtain the knowledge effectively. However, schools and universities have responsibilities to bring up students’ interests and needs in that they might too young to clearly understand their own true interests and demands. Some youth may have wrong interests and needs, in that case, schools and universities must guide students to have right values and morality before interests and needs. One’s interests might influence one’s lifelong career, majority of people be successful in their work due to their enthusiasm in that area. People stick to something for a long time and make some achievement only when they have their own true interests on that kind of stuff. Therefore, if the education is designed to meet the individual interests and needs, the prospective of education will be excellent.

Admittedly, encouraging students to hold their own interests and needs do not mean schools and universities must educate according to each person’s interest and need. It is not practical to perform, complicated and cost higher compared to the education with only the same model and system. Teachers are not enough to teach students who have a lot of different interests and needs. Too much emphasis on interests and needs leads to the confusion of the education. For example, some students heat studying mathematics, but should we eliminate that subject in our education? Of course not, because it is the basic subject of other courses.

In sum, it is very likely that people will never be able to arrive at the same conclusion on this controversial issue due to there different experience, conflicting values and actual observations of life. However, taking into account all the dimensions of the issue discussed in the above analysis, there is little doubt that more and more people will come to realize that only when education is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests, it is truly effective.

没限时，word写的

argument26

In this memo, the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda recommends hiring Mr Schade, the music director at Steel City for the past five years, to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system. To support this recommendation the chairperson points out that the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions during the time when Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director. Meanwhile the chairperson also points out that the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instrument at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years during to Mr. Charles Schade’s performance. This recommendation is problematic for several reasons.

The major problem with this recommendation is that the chairperson fails to establish the casual relationship between Mr. Charles Schade’s performance and three regional band competitions. Lacking evidence to confirm this assumption, it is possible that the successes of the regional band competition are from other factors. Because there are many factors influence the band’s performance to win the regional band competitions, such as the other members of the band and the performance of the other bands that engaged the competitions. Without considering and ruling out other possible reasons why the band wan the awards the chairperson cannot convince us that the band’s achievement because of the music director.

Another flaw that weakens this recommendation is that the chairperson unfairly assumes that the action that the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years results from Mr. Schade’s efforts. The memo has no evidence to confirm this assumption, perhaps the improvement of the music facilities and musical instrument attributes the other administrations in the school. Just from the chairperson’s over simple claim, it is unreasonable to convince us to accept the hasty conclusion.

In addition, analogies draw between Steel City High and Saluda school board are highly suspect, it is possible that there are many serious differences. The chairperson fails to consider that Mr. Schade is also good for Saluda school because of his successes at Steel City High. But the chairperson do not consider other individuals, perhaps they are more suitable for Saluda school. Furthermore, it is equally possible that the two schools have different situations.

To sum up, the recommendation lacks credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument, the chairperson would have to provide more evidence concerning the performance Mr. Schade act and the successes he brought. To better evaluate the argument, we would need more information about the relationship between the two schools.

[ 本帖最后由 被遗忘的 于 2006-6-24 12:13 编辑 ]

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如题！嘿嘿！
大家加油！为了各自的梦想——fighting!

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ARGU

ssc_supergirlUID: 2210517

TOMAS的A/ I修改过了

victorduguUID: 2176422

你issue的链接不对呀，argument已经修改过了

好了，issue也改好了

[ 本帖最后由 victordugu 于 2006-6-24 16:55 编辑 ]

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原帖由 victordugu 于 2006-6-24 10:14 发表
你issue的链接不对呀，argument已经修改过了

不好意思昨天大概太急了
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