issue 11 第一次作文 求拍!

CharaznablezUID: 2140987

issue11 Increasingly influence by proceeding of the globalization , the author suggests that all countries in our planet should set a globe university to deal with the world's hardest problem together.In my opinion,I am inclined to support the idea.

First of all, when viewed today's world, many nations have a great deal in common whether they are developed countries or developing countries. The environment problem caused by industrialization is a good illustration of this. Since we all live in one planet, no one can get rid of the problem and now it is getting more serious than ever before. A recent statistic shows that the ozone layer are extremely deprived which may cause not only our human races but also all other plants and animals being exposed in dangerous radiation. It is reported that most of this loss can attribute to the release of the air-conditioners and the exhaust of the vehicles. Further more, the arable land and the area of forest are suffered from serious loss .As a result, more and more species become extinct. If we don't make any measures one day it will be incapable of reversing this catastrophes. One the other hand, although we have acquired new resources such as the atomic resource to deal with the energy problem to lessen the pollution, they also bring new problems. For instance if the atomic technology is used to produce atom bomb and used in war, the end of our human being will not far away. Thus we need to combine together to deal with the common problem.

Equally important is another factor. All nations interdepended each other deeply that most of the persistent problem cannot be cope with a single nation and globe university can make the international cooperation better. The ancient Silk Road is a good example .The Silk Road, which actually is a series of trade routes combining the Might Roma Empire and the equally advanced Court China in every aspect. We can aware that from the early day different part of the world needed each other deeply. In this case, the foundation of the globe university is necessary. Because different nations have different characters and advantages can be focus all competitive advantages ,ideas and methods to focus the most hardest problem of our human race.

Furthermore, in discussing problems together in the globe university.  Students should respect each other culture.Beacuse each country have distinct characteristic ,the more we know the a culture the less misunderstanding will we get. It means not only absorbing the advantages such as technology and advanced working methods of developed countries but also take developing countries' opioions into account and never ignores them. Under this democratic atmosphere, the working will be more effective.

In conclusion, with all nation's effort to support the foundation of university and working problems together ,these problems will be more effectively solved.

CharaznablezUID: 2140987

晕.没人拍啊.自己顶一下吧

helenlhhUID: 2127690

不好意思我来迟了，之前就想帮你改，但这么重要的题，想了一下，还是等自己思路理清了之后再改

helenlhhUID: 2127690

First of all, when viewed today's world, many nations have a great deal in common nomatter they are developed countries or developing countries. The environment problem caused by industrialization is a good illustration of this. Since we all live in one planet, no one can get rid of the problem and now it is getting more serious than ever before. A recent statistic shows that the ozone layer are extremely deprived which may cause not only our human races but also all other plants and animals being exposed in dangerous radiation. It is reported that most of this loss can attribute to the release of the air-conditioners and the exhaust of the vehicles. Further more, the arable land and the area of forest are suffered from serious loss .As a result, more and more species become extinct. If we don't make any measures one day it will be incapable of reversing this catastrophes. One the other hand, although we have acquired new resources such as the atomic resource to deal with the energy problem to lessen the pollution, they also bring new problems. For instance if the atomic technology is used to produce atom bomb and used in war, the end of our human being will not far away. Thus we need to combine together to deal with the common problem. 我觉得讲了很多common problem,但是是不是应该再补两句说清楚为什么要combine together,我觉得不是很让人信服

Equally important is another factor. All nations interdepended each other deeply that most of the persistent problem cannot be cope with a single nation and globe university can make the international cooperation better. The ancient Silk Road is a good example .The Silk Road, which actually is a series of trade routes combining the Might Roma Empire and the equally advanced Court China in every aspect. We can aware that from the early day different part of the world needed each other deeply. In this case, the foundation of the globe university is necessary. Because different nations have different characters and advantages can be focus all competitive advantages ,ideas and methods to focus the most hardest problem of our human race.丝绸之路的例子放在这感觉有点不太合适

Furthermore, in discussing problems together in the globe university.  Students should respect each other culture.Beacuse each country have distinct characteristic ,the more we know the a culture the less misunderstanding will we get. It means not only absorbing the advantages such as technology and advanced working methods of developed countries but also take developing countries' opioions into account and never ignores them. Under this democratic atmosphere, the working will be more effective.

In conclusion, with all nation's effort to support the foundation of university and working problems together ,these problems will be more effectively solved.

总体思路还比较清晰，可能在例子的选择上再考虑一下。
加油！:D

helenlhhUID: 2127690

我也有一篇，帮我看看吧
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

CharaznablezUID: 2140987

谢谢。helenlhh 昨天考试今天给你看.例子我也觉得有点牵强.我在改改看吧