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fungsingUID: 195065

看来这几天大家都在很认真的复习啊！哈哈！

fmac97UID: 2164711

en, 大家加油！:victory:

eyemeiUID: 205999

大家有没有写作文阿，我们写个同主题吧
leader or member?

guozaiUID: 33200

不错，很强

原帖由 annocqu 于 2006-7-22 12:23 发表


坚持练，在听之前看看题目，这点十分重要，不然你听整个段子将比较“匡”，比较盲目、茫然。当然当你听多了之后就把握着重点了，我刚开始听的时候也是这样。

我的经验告诉我，听力（段子）的题目出现的顺序 ...

以次类推，不要求你没字都听准，实践也证明在不是每句都听清楚的情况下，可以全对的。今天上午做的听力，一边过，错1个——笑死。...

guozaiUID: 33200

仔细看了两遍，没发现什么问题，看来我真是不太会给别人判作文。
唯一就是觉得accordingly这个词用的好像有点太大了，要是我想改成As for me

Accompanied with the rapidly development of the civilization and industrialization, nowadays, people concern more about their personal health conditions. As a result of the advanced medicine science and the ameliorated living environment, the planet citizens have attained plentiful measures to maintain healthy and reach longevity. Accordingly, I do have my own way to keep healthy...

原帖由 annocqu 于 2006-7-24 19:26 发表
作文求拍 (429words)
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

164. People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health? Use specific reaso ...

annocquUID: 2127832

昨天的twe,求拍
另外 感谢 F97,eye和zai 的砖头!

121 Some people trust their first impressions about a person's character because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge a person's character quickly because they believe first impressions are often wrong. Compare these two attitudes. Which attitude do you agree with? Support your choice with specific examples.
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Since hundreds years ago, people have always been bewildered whether they should trust their judgments toward someone else by his/her first appearance, and whether their first impressions upon others are always credible. Admittedly, I am one of those persons, but, generally I prefer to estimate someone’s character through a long-term touch.

Firstly, there is a comparative amount of population in the world, who are deliberate to, or compelled to, conceal themselves behind their masks. Even though we hate to believe that we are surrounded by lies, adulations, and deceits, we have to accede that is the realistic life of every body. For instance, if someone sophisticated wants to access to you, he/she will concentrate to leave you a fascinating impression by many paths such as carefully making-up, decent dressing, and amicable utterance, and all of those will disturb one’s judgment, if based on his/her first sight. In addition, taken as another striking example, the advanced cosmetic surgery has shown its magic of transfiguration for populace, and largely challenged people’s faith that “seeing is believing”.

Secondly, man’s capabilities of discrimination and judgment depend on his refinements of knowledge, experience and sagacity. As not every one possesses all those elements, it is too harsh for them to be confident of what they saw or heard at the first time. On the other hand, with relatively developed science and technology, the world is changing every minute in a rapid speed, so even for a sage, his mind should be updated timely to catch the paces of the world, let lone the common people like me.

Albeit the first impression is not as believable as a long-term observation, there are some exceptions. For example, a specialized detective should trust his penetrating judgment, even his intuition, according to the first expression, in case he would overlook some essential clue or inkling, especially in emergency.

To sum up, for some particular persons or under some emergent situations, the first sight is convincing, but normally, we should behave as the aphorism tells us to do that “you can not judge a book from its cover”, and actually that is my philosophy.

[ 本帖最后由 annocqu 于 2006-7-28 01:03 编辑 ]

guozaiUID: 33200

一篇我觉得比较欣赏的作文

Reasons why people work other than living

Working to make a living seems to be a major reason for most people while there are still some reasons to account for a large number of people who are engaged in a life of work.

Interest is probably a good reason to explain why today so many people are busy working with a low salary even when they could live a life of a much higher quality. Doing what he likes is always more important than how much he earns. One of my friends has been working for a non-profit organization for about two years to protect wild animals. A deep affection for animals keeps him working passionately and, without any regret. Just as he said, “I am working for interest which makes me complete, not money.”

Furthermore, some people turn such interest into another term which maybe called conviction. People working in charity help other people may best demonstrate this word. They do not work for living but for the happiness of people in bad condition. This conviction may due to their religious belief or just form the pathetic love for the world.

Obtaining knowledge and experience in a certain kind of job will also drive a lot of people to work. This is particularly true for some college students or people just at their early stage of career. To achieve a long-term goal seems somewhat tough for a beginner and thus emphasizes an importance of experience and knowledge which makes a lot of young people regardless of material things when choosing to work.

To live, maybe, sometimes to be more competent or just to be contented are reasons why people work and, at most times, you don’t have to separate them for work is complex and so are the reasons.

annocqu，感觉她的作文比你的大词套话要少很多，行文要流畅很多。
你的作文具体到每一行文字感觉很难找出什么错误，但整体感觉上要比这位同学的差一些。

annocquUID: 2127832

原帖由 guozai 于 2006-7-28 00:26 发表
一篇我觉得比较欣赏的作文

Reasons why people work other than living

Working to make a living seems to be a major reason for most people while there are still some reasons to account for a larg ...

十分感谢,每个人风格不同.我必须承认,也早已经认识到了,我的文章虽然可以满篇华丽辞藻,但总是显得空洞无物,的确是个硬伤.这一点无论是我的中文,和还是英文都共有的毛病,eyemei 在前面也提到过了.上面贴的文章虽然文字很平淡,甚至朴素,但总感觉句句有力而有分量.

我也不知道为什么,也许是平时官样文章版的report看多了,写多了,也许是从我内心深处潜藏着一种对平实生活记录的不屑,也许是在骨髓里面对于这类行文的认同,我也不知道
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其实,我也很想把文章写的饱满,真正的饱满.
同时,我也矛盾彷徨过好久,到底文章应不应该这么写,唉,扯远了,都扯到人生观了.

希望大家给点建议.
:(:(

[ 本帖最后由 annocqu 于 2006-7-28 01:26 编辑 ]

yogurt4UID: 198389

应邀前来参观

天知道加油哦^___^

genie05UID: 30358

...努力

guozaiUID: 33200

我觉得一条路走到底就prefer其中一种雇员也可以。
反正给我一个题目也经常很难做到有话可说，经常是没话找话，这时候论点偏颇也没关系，老美主要想看你写作水平如何，就是说支持论点的陈述和例子是不是组织的比较好，行文怎么样，逻辑是不是清楚。
不一定观点一定要对。

原帖由 mean2006 于 2006-7-25 18:38 发表
If you were an employer, which kind of worker would you prefer to hire:

我觉得这篇写的好,而且论证有力,但我想问一下,或者讨论一下,这篇文章是不是不应该中立呢,题目是问的prefer啊??

最近挺迷惑的,好 ...

guozaiUID: 33200

我猜测还是需要再练习吧，反正中文写的并不空洞，应该是用英文写也可以写好。
反正老美一般比较喜欢就事论事的，而且觉得例子(facts)比论述(arguments)更有说服力。所以我觉得如果从增加事例的比重入手，可能会容易在短期内改观。

反正作文写不好也不是什么大不了的，还可以提高其他TOEFL考试项目嘛，不用引申到人生观吧:L

原帖由 annocqu 于 2006-7-28 01:13 发表


十分感谢,每个人风格不同.我必须承认,也早已经认识到了,我的文章虽然可以满篇华丽辞藻,但总是显得空洞无物,的确是个硬伤.这一点无论是我的中文,和还是英文都共有的毛病,eyemei 在前面也提到过了.上面贴的文章 ...

guozaiUID: 33200

应谁邀撒？genie？

原帖由 yogurt4 于 2006-7-28 02:44 发表
应邀前来参观

天知道加油哦^___^

guozaiUID: 33200

帅哥最近话很少哦！

原帖由 genie05 于 2006-7-28 12:29 发表
...努力

eyemeiUID: 205999

感觉作文真是折腾，看了半天也没法动手
感觉考t的要求应该不是很高吧，
想走个中庸路线，成绩够用就好，
哎，真是无心恋战啊