issure87 求拍！（第二次作业）

gjqfishesUID: 2229321

观点：能否有新发现与是beginner还是expert无关，只是beginner的容易接受新事物的态度是成功必需的

提纲：
1、提出观点
2、 beginner和expert进行研究的3个不同之处。beginners 受以往的经验和知识的影响较少，没有思维定势，而expert往往局限于前人的经验，难以突破
3、beginner往往为出名而奋斗，而且beginner的研究过程经常有突破，更能激发兴趣和热情
4、总结，beginner和expert的优势结合起来，才最有效，最可能有新发现。

  Some people think in any field of inquiry the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries. But in my opinion, this view is partially correct. The beginners have not been  deeply influenced by the existed old mind, and they are likely to do research as their own way. However, experts advance in their knowledge and experience. Whether a researcher would make important discoveries is not related to he is an beginner or a expert, but to creative spirit like the beginners.
  Admittedly, the knowledge and experience the beginners had is quite less than  those experts. But past experiences is not sufficient enough, and sometimes may be totally wrong. First, the research methods that beginners and experts use are different. Experts always do experiment based on the ways that already been tried, for they think it is correct and just want to go father from where others arrived. Beginners do not know much about what people in the past did, and so are not constrained by them. They just try to solve the problems in all the possible ways that they could think out. Second, when the new discoveries are coming out, experts will firstly think whether there is something wrong that causes the difference, but beginners would consider it as a new discovery. For the experts always assume the existed knowledge right, they think error occurs if any result is different from the expect one. Beginners think each possible results are reasonable, and sometimes new discoveries are founded in these differences. Third, beginners have less concentration of the world than the experts. The research of the beginners will have less influence from the public. Experts, as the authorizations of an area, always have disturbances came from the society.
  Besides above, beginners would have stronger desires to find the answers to the question they have. And any result of experiments will inspire their interests to go father. The will to be famous also drives the beginner towards the new discoveries.
   As I mentioned in the first paragraph, a beginner's creative attitude is more important. It will be most possible for the famous experts who have this manner to make important discoveries. Knowledge and experiences should not be the burden but useful wealth in the research. Though what have been discussed above, we could draw a conclusion safely that beginners might make important discoveries taking advantage of their creative attitude and unrecognized identity. However, a scientist with the mind that is like the beginners and the knowledge that experts have will most likely to find new miracles

linfan68UID: 2185216

扫了一眼，发现三个always，太绝对的词还是少用，容易成为被Argue的对象

domothyUID: 2224019

一会儿帮你改
提个建议，以后最好把题目也附上
省得别人还要去找～
:)

domothyUID: 2224019

观点：能否有新发现与是beginner还是expert无关，只是beginner的容易接受新事物的态度是成功必需的

提纲：
1、提出观点
2、 beginner和expert进行研究的3个不同之处。beginners 受以往的经验和知识的影响较少，没有思维定势，而expert往往局限于前人的经验，难以突破
3、beginner往往为出名而奋斗，而且beginner的研究过程经常有突破，更能激发兴趣和热情
4、总结，beginner和expert的优势结合起来，才最有效，最可能有新发现。

  Some people think in any field of inquiry the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important discoveries. But in my opinion, this view is partially correct. The beginners have not been  deeply influenced by the existed old mind, and they are likely to do research as their own way. However, experts advance(advance不是很好吧？) in their knowledge and experience. Whether a researcher would make important discoveries is not related to（这个related to也不是很好，比如用determined by是不是好一点） he is a beginner or a expert, but to creative spirit like the beginners.
  Admittedly, the knowledge and experience the beginners had is quite less than  experts’. But past experiences is not sufficient enough(可以不用enough), and sometimes even are totally wrong. First, the research methods that beginners and experts use are different. Experts always do experiment based on the ways that already been tried, for they think it is correct and just want to go father from where others arrived. Beginners do not know much about what people in the past did, and so are not constrained by them. They just try to solve the problems in all the possible ways that they could think out. Second, when the new discoveries are coming out, experts will firstly think whether there is something wrong that causes the difference, but beginners would consider it as a new discovery. For the experts always assume the existed knowledge right, they think error occurs if any result is different from the expect one. Beginners think each possible result is reasonable, and sometimes new discoveries are founded in these differences. Third, beginners have less concentration of the world than the experts. The research of the beginners will have less influence from the public. Experts, as the authorizations of an area, always have disturbances came from the society.(这一段的论证是不是太主观了？没有论据支持。也许是有expert是你说的那样，也不都是啊！说的好像每个expert都心胸狭窄，每个beginner都勤奋自强的～而且里面的理由就像是一个意思翻来覆去的说。)
  Besides above, beginners would have stronger desires to find the answers to the question they have. And any result of experiments will inspire their interests to go father. The will to be famous also drives the beginner towards the new discoveries. （这一段就几乎没展开）
   As I mentioned in the first paragraph, a beginner's creative attitude is more important. It will be most possible for the famous experts who have this manner to make important discoveries. Knowledge and experiences should not be the burden but useful wealth in the research. Though what have been discussed above, we could draw a conclusion safely that beginners might make important discoveries taking advantage of their creative attitude and unrecognized identity. However, a scientist with the mind that is like the beginners and the knowledge that experts have will most likely to find new miracles（这是结尾段么？突然蹦出个平衡观点，再怎么也得分段阐述阐述啊～）
提纲还行，但是要充实内容，特别是例子。还有就是句式，你几乎都是单句，太单调了，像中学生在写作文。

gjqfishesUID: 2229321

感谢诸位提出的意见，非常高兴能向大家学习，在下面几篇改进咯