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99"In any realm of life—whether academic, social, business, or political—the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superseded by simpler, more immediate options."


I agree with the speaker insofar as that a practical and pragmatic approach toward our goals would be conducive to succeed in short term, however, during the process of pursuing our target, we should not overlook the importance of idealism for success in any endeavor, no matter in academics, business, and politics.

In the era of high efficiency leading to promotion of people’s attention on practical efforts. Pragmatic behavior serves as the most important avenue for human being to achieve success. People concentrate on what exists on sight more than the unforeseen future. Examples in the realm of academic, social, business aptly illustrate it. First, when it comes to business arena, manufacturers, facing the scorching competition, gradually realize that pursuing maximum profits at lowest cost should serve as their primary goal. Going with expanding working hour of the employee and decreasing wages, even betraying their interests in competition. Second, in considering the academic world it might be more tempting to get higher grades for students and research papers for the scholars, regardless of obtaining how much knowledge and positive effects their fruition are to bring human being. Third, most politicians seem driven by their interest in being elected and reelected-that is surviving, rather than by any senses of mission, or obligation to their country.

However, ideal is the guidance to real life. Although encountering difficulties on the way to create new life, persistent endeavor toward ideal goal drives people to reap the success in the end. Our society, therefore, becomes democratic, free as well as prosperous. Martin Luther King, Jr., the civil-right leader, became convinced that nonviolent resistance was the most potent weapon available to oppressed people in their struggle for freedom, determining brought freedom to the black. With an unshakable belief in mind, King ended the system of segregation in the end, although facing many obstacles. After that, the United States becomes a nation of democracy, freedom and prosperity. In addition, it is because of the desire and passion for hovering in the universe of the ancient people facilitates human to discovery the cosmos without stop, human could manage to land on the moon.  

At the time we are sharing the practical and ideal idea, we should combine and balance the two factors in reality. People should endeavor toward their ideal as experiencing the rough reality, and they can avoid short-sight with a long-term ideal in mind. Nevertheless, ideal without pragmatic supports are to become vain finally.

In general, from what has been discussed above, we may find that, with practical view, we can gain pragmatic profit and result on sight and long-term and far-reaching effect on human being with ideal thought in mind. Combination of idealism and pragmatics will make our world better.

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恩,不错~

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I agree with the speaker insofar as that a practical and pragmatic approach toward our goals would be conducive to succeed in short term, however, during the process of pursuing our target, we should not overlook the importance of idealism for success in any endeavor, no matter in academics, business, and politics.

In the era of high efficiency leading to promotion of people’s attention on practical efforts.[逗号吧？] Pragmatic behavior serves as the most important avenue for human being to achieve success[to success for human being 是不是更好？]. People [加个副词修饰可能更增色]concentrate on what exists on sight more than the unforeseen future. Examples in the realm of academic, social, business aptly illustrate it. First, when it comes to business arena, manufacturers, facing the scorching competition, gradually realize that pursuing maximum profits at lowest cost should serve as[serve as 似乎不妥？] their primary goal. Going with expanding working hour of the employee and decreasing wages, even betraying their interests in competition. [此句完整？]Second, in considering the academic world it might be more tempting to get [getting?]higher grades for students and [more]research papers for the scholars, regardless of obtaining how much knowledge and positive effects their fruition are to bring human being[obtaining how much knowledge 和 positive effects their fruition are to bring human being 并列？]. Third, most politicians seem driven by their interest in being elected and reelected-that is surviving, rather than by any senses of mission, or obligation to their country. [此例被广泛应用，此句建议改良，必然增色不少]

However, ideal is the guidance to real life. Although encountering difficulties on the way to create new life, persistent endeavor toward ideal goal drives people to reap the success in the end.[此句前后主语不同，主语应该是people] Our society, therefore, becomes democratic, free as well as prosperous. Martin Luther King, Jr., the civil-right leader, became convinced that nonviolent resistance was the most potent weapon available to oppressed people in their struggle for freedom, determining brought freedom to the black. With an unshakable belief in mind, King ended the system of segregation in the end, although facing many obstacles. After that, the United States becomes a nation of democracy, freedom and prosperity. In addition, it is because of the desire and passion for hovering in the universe of the ancient people facilitates human to discovery the cosmos without stop, human could manage to land on the moon. [素材很具体，但衔接偏生硬，看似为举例而举例，需加以整合消化为己有以使论证更为流畅]  

At the time we are sharing the practical and ideal idea, we should combine and balance the two factors in reality. People should endeavor toward their ideal as experiencing the rough reality, and they can avoid short-sight[short sight] with a long-term ideal in mind. Nevertheless, ideal without pragmatic supports are to become vain finally.

In general, from what has been discussed above, we may find that, with practical view, we can gain pragmatic profit and result on sight and long-term and far-reaching effect on human being with ideal thought in mind.[有点乱，分为两句吧？] Combination of idealism and pragmatics will make our world better.
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