issue150 12月高强周五作业 ~迟交!

番茄angelaUID: 2204871

issue150 "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

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提纲：
1 毕竟自身体验是不一样的。
2 网络作为一个工具，使旅游跟以前不一样了。
3 旅游确实受到技术进步的影响。 DATE;2006-11-24
Will tourism soon become obsolete because of television and worldwide computer connections, as the statement contends? Although I agree that technologies might support people become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. Primarily because this contention accords with common sense and everyday experience as human beings. However, I strongly disagree that tourism will soon become obsolete.

It is somewhat more tempting to accept the speaker's further claim that computer connectivity will render tourism obsolete. The travel for purpose other than tourism might eventually decline, as the business world becomes increasingly dependent on Internet. As we that television and worldwide computer connections are often distinguished from other domains of human culture by it progressive nature. Products that can be find out anywhere in the world without any human travel. For example, we can purchase "FuWa" from eBay (an Internet shopping mall) which is the souvenir of 2008 Olympic Games whenever you want. Even people who do not have free time to go to the Olympic Games, they have to pick up the programs of sports what the like at home from Internet of television, and these groups of people will surely decline in the 2008. To the extent that Olympic Games travelers” play tourist" during the trips, the tourism will decline as a result. Yet it would be absorb to claim that these phenomena alone will render tourism absolute.

The speaker unfairly assumes that the purpose of tourism is simply to obtain information about other people or place and the since on the Internet can replace the real places. Absolutely, while feeling the places of historic interest and scenic beauty by themselves is totally different from capture those of pictures from Internet or television. In fact, tourism has been increasing sharply during the last few years, which has seen the advent of Internet catering exclusively to our interest in other cultures and countries. Furthermore, travel abroad when leisure is necessary to make people acknowledge the outside places easier. The more we got from Internet sources, the more extract me in vesting the places.

Additionally, Internet support a significant convenient to the people who traveling other places. While booking the airplane ticket from Internet-flight Company can save much time than stay a line in front of ticket-windows by one hour or more. Sometimes, people will get lots of good service from company which provides some information’s about the famous scenery, and tourism would like to save a great quantity of time when finding way of travel. Then, tourism is a manifestation of a basic human need for variety and for exploration. The sensory experience what seeing and hearing firsthand, even touching and smelling could motivate tourism to connect with nature beauty by traveling in a real place.

In sum, tourism is likely to increase as a result. Whole world is a wide and lovely place, especially we can use Internet to connect with global, they help tourism satisfy and human need to experience new things.

waidswUID: 2256074

Will tourism soon become obsolete because of television and worldwide computer connections, as the statement contends? Although I agree that technologies might support people become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited.（好像用familiar不是很合适）Primarily because this contention accords with common sense and everyday experience as human beings. However, I strongly disagree that tourism will soon become obsolete.

It is somewhat more tempting to accept the speaker's further claim that computer connectivity will render tourism obsolete. The travel for purpose other than tourism might eventually decline, as the business world becomes increasingly dependent on Internet. As we that television and worldwide computer connections are often distinguished from other domains of human culture by it progressive nature. （看不懂这句话）Products that can be find out anywhere in the world without any human travel. For example, we can purchase "FuWa" from eBay (an Internet shopping mall) which is the souvenir of 2008 Olympic Games whenever you want. Even people who do not have free time to go to the Olympic Games, they have to pick up the programs of sports what the like at home from Internet of television, and these groups of people will surely decline in the 2008. To the extent that Olympic Games travelers” play tourist" during the trips, the tourism will decline as a result.（太高深了，看不懂，为什么tourism会decline） Yet it would be absorb to claim that these phenomena alone will render tourism absolute.

The speaker unfairly assumes that the purpose of tourism is simply to obtain information about other people or place and the since on the Internet can replace the real places. Absolutely, while feeling the places of historic interest and scenic beauty by themselves is totally different from capture those of pictures from Internet or television. In fact, tourism has been increasing sharply during the last few years, which has seen the advent of Internet catering exclusively（为什么要用exclusive） to our interest in other cultures and countries. （楼主意思是不是网络和电视不经没有是旅游下降，发而促进了旅游，这个观点很好，展开来说的话很有说服力，因为电视和网络不能替代旅游，而电视和网络上提供的自然景观或人文景观信息激起了我们旅游冲动，这也是为什么很多景点在电视和网络上做广告的原因）Furthermore, travel abroad when leisure is necessary to make people acknowledge the outside places easier. The more we got from Internet sources, the more extract me in vesting the places.

Additionally, Internet support a significant convenient to the people who traveling other places. While booking the airplane ticket from Internet-flight Company can save much time than stay a line in front of ticket-windows by one hour or more. Sometimes, people will get lots of good service from company which provides some information’s about the famous scenery, and tourism would like to save a great quantity of time when finding way of travel. Then, tourism is a manifestation of a basic human need for variety and for exploration. The sensory experience what seeing and hearing firsthand, even touching and smelling could motivate tourism to connect with nature beauty by traveling in a real place.（该段主题句没有起到很好的概括作用）

In sum, tourism is likely to increase as a result. Whole world is a wide and lovely place, especially we can use Internet to connect with global, they help tourism satisfy and human need to experience new things

楼主，我认为tourism主要就是旅游的意思，business travels 好像不属于tourism。楼主还应该把复杂的句子变得稍微通俗易懂一点，要不然，至少对我来说，不好理解（水平有限，汗！！！）。而且结构有些散。总的来说还是不错的。楼主用了很多好词。加油啊