Argument216 （12月作文高强组——好好学习，天天作文）

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1．    It fails to provide the cause of the decline of the house price and the price before .
2．    Mayor’s promise cannot contribute to the conclusion
3．    The number of the physician can not demonstrate the quality of the medical care.
4．    Other considerations.





TOPIC: ARGUMENT216 - The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.

"Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
WORDS: 468          TIME: 0:40:09          DATE: 2006-11-25

  The article above recommends Clearview to be a top choice for retirees. To support his conclusion, the author points out that the housing costs have fallen significantly during the past years and the real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. To get further, the arguer also points out that the Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. The greater number of physicians in Clearview than the national average is another evidence the arguer cites to provide his conclusion. All of those sound so appealing to people who are seeking a place to retire. However, a careful scrutiny of this argument would reveal its severe logical fallacies.
  The threshold fallacy is that the arguer fails to provide the actual housing cost in the Clearview and the cause of the housing costs decline. It is at least likely that the housing price of the Clearview is so high that thus fewer and fewer people are willing to purchase a house in Clearview. Then the housing cost has to decline and even it is still much higher than that of other towns. Besides, without stating the cause of the housing cost decline, the author hardly can convince retirees to choose Clearview. It is possible that the rate of the criminal is very high or the traffic in the Clearview is terrible. Without exclude all those possibilities, the author cannot convince people that housing conditions in Clearview worth their choices.
  Second, the Clearview's mayor's promise cannot contribute to the conclusion that the Clearview is the ideal place for retirees. As most retirees are old people, they do not pay much attention to the inprovement of schools. Furthermore, if the mayor promises to improve streets and public services in Clearview, it may mean that the streets and the public services is not very good and thus they need improvements. If true, we cannot when will the mayor's promise would become true and at least Clearview is not a proper place for retirees now.
  Last, the greater number of physicians in the Clearview than the national average would certainly mean the high health care as the author claims. As we know, the professional ability of the physicians is also very important for the quality of the medical level. Besides, the author also fails to point out that how many of the physicians can directly work for the residents of the Clearview. It is likely that there is a medical school in Clearview, and though the number of the physicians is high, how much health care that the residents can have is questionable.
  To sum up, the argument above suffers from several logical flaws. The lack of efficient evidence and comprehensive description make this article unconvincing. To lobster her/his recommendation, the arguer should provides more evidences to compensate its fallacies.

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The article above recommends Clearview to be a top choice for retirees. To support his conclusion, the author points out that the housing costs have fallen significantly during the past years and the real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. To get further, the arguer also points out that the Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. The greater number of physicians in Clearview than the national average is another evidence the arguer cites to provide his conclusion. All of those sound so appealing to people who are seeking a place to retire. However, a careful scrutiny of this argument would reveal its severe logical fallacies(这句不错).
  The threshold fallacy is that the arguer fails to provide the actual housing cost in the (the去掉)Clearview and the cause of the housing costs decline. It is at least likely that the housing price of the Clearview is so high that thus(thus去掉) fewer and fewer people are willing to purchase a house in Clearview. Then the housing cost has to decline and even it is still much higher than that of other towns. Besides, without stating the cause of the housing cost decline, the author hardly can(can hardly) convince retirees to choose Clearview. It is possible that the rate of the criminal is very high or the traffic in the Clearview is terrible. Without exclude all those possibilities, the author cannot convince people that housing conditions in Clearview worth their choices.
  Second,(secondly是不是更好) the Clearview's mayor's promise cannot contribute to the conclusion that the Clearview is the ideal place for retirees. As most retirees are old people, they do not pay much attention to the inprovement(improvement) of schools. Furthermore, if the mayor promises to improve streets and public services in Clearview, it may mean that the streets and the public services is(are) not very good and thus they need improvements. If true, we cannot(?) when will the mayor's promise would become true and at least Clearview is not a proper place for retirees now.
  Last, the greater number of physicians in the Clearview than the national average would certainly mean the high health care as the author claims. As we know, the professional ability(abilities) of the physicians is(are) also very important for the quality of the medical level. Besides, the author also fails to point out that how many of the physicians can directly work for the residents of the Clearview. It is likely that there is a medical school in Clearview, and though the number of the physicians is high, how much health care that the residents can have(how much heath care can the resident have) is questionable.
  To sum up, the argument above suffers from several logical flaws. The lack of efficient evidence and comprehensive description make this article unconvincing. To lobster her/his recommendation, the arguer should provides (provide)more evidences to compensate its fallacies.
LZ这篇写的不错,思路很清晰的
注意一下,动词的数的问题