Issue103 <米国有米小组aefiter第8次作业> 欢迎指教

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TOPIC: ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

WORDS: 532          TIME: 0:41:00          DATE: 2007-1-4

Historical studies are an essential discipline for development of society. Since ancient Rome and Greek empire, historical recorders had formed an independent group of people in the society of those times. Whether the historical study is relevant to our daily lives, or is simply the idiosyncratic pursuit by some individuals for their own interests, historical study demonstrates its indispensable role as other kinds of inquiries, such as natural science, political science, and humanities.

The prominent value of historical study for humanity daily lives is primarily epitomized by its specialty to portray us contemporary people's lifestyles, political structures, and scientific development levels. These features help immensely to position people living in modern society.

For ordinary people, the education of history, either worldwide or domestic, can grant us how well we are living in a highly advanced material civilization. For people living in one thousand years ago, they may never imagine the wide use of Internet as global exchange method for information. However, by virtue of historical study, people living in contemporary ages are well informed with how our high-speed electronic industry is evolved from very primeval technology one thousand year before. This clarity of our identities has somewhat extended our scope of view, rendering us to know where our society's future lies.

Nevertheless, the criterion to evaluate the value of historical study is not singly determined by its value to our daily lives.

One of the branches of historical study -- the study of antiquities, is a typical example to demonstrate its close relationship with our daily lives. Many pursuers would calculate on one historical item's price and work assiduously to make profit out of these activities. As this business somehow adds amusement to human lives, its value to the whole society is limited. After all, the exchange of those antiquities can never bring more value to our society, but rather exhaust social resources and generate an unique profession called connoisseur.

While pursuits such as antiquity collection contributes little to the overall well-being of our society, some kinds of historical study, especially those with little bond to our daily lives, have been contributing to the social stability till now. With historical study revealing the evolution of social structure from the remote past to industrial revolution, we have opportunity to identify the schematic trajectory of society, a path from savage to civilization, from ignorance to enlightenment, and from simple exchange economic to capitalism. Today's government will know more details of how one form of social structure is overturned and the other more advanced substituted for that underdeveloped social structure. Guaranteed by this information, modern government will function more meticulously to avoid the mistakes reflected by history.

To sum up, the historical study has the palpable value to our daily lives, as we perceived from our historical education, and some recreational realm such as research of antiquities. However, the value of history is never confined to the mere information it provides to ordinary people. From a higher level, historical study will be the think tank, as well as an enormous treasury for political leaders and government, which provide caution, alarm, and advice to the future of the society, even this function are little noticed and perceived by ordinary people.

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Issue103 <米国有米小组aefiter第8次作业> 欢迎指教
TOPIC: ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

WORDS: 532          TIME: 0:41:00          DATE: 2007-1-4

Historical studies are an essential discipline for development of society. Since ancient Rome and Greek empire, historical recorders had formed an independent group of people in the society of those times. Whether the historical study is relevant to our daily lives, or is simply the idiosyncratic pursuit by some individuals for their own interests, historical study demonstrates its indispensable role as other kinds of inquiries, such as natural science, political science, and humanities.

The prominent value of historical study for humanity daily lives is primarily epitomized by its specialty to portray us contemporary people's lifestyles, political structures, and scientific development levels. [这个thesis写的很好，但后文得展开没有呼应到这个Thesis]These features help immensely to position people living in modern society.

For ordinary people, the education of history, either worldwide or domestic, can grant us how well we are living in a highly advanced material civilization. For people living in one thousand years ago, they may never imagine the wide use of Internet as global exchange method for information. However, by virtue of historical study, people living in contemporary ages are well informed with how our high-speed electronic industry is evolved from very primeval technology one thousand year before. This clarity of our identities has somewhat extended our scope of view, rendering us to know where our society's future lies.
[这段和上一段，是讲历史学习对日常生活的影响，语言非常的流畅，但有个小问题，按照西方人的写作习惯是每段一个thesis,然后展开，而作者把这两个部分分开了，不知道西方人是否会习惯这种写法。另外，对于历史学习对于日常生活的影响到底是什么，看完了还是不是很清楚，从这段来看第一感觉是在写历史对科技的影响]

Nevertheless, the criterion to evaluate the value of historical study is not singly determined by its value to our daily lives.

One of the branches of historical study -- the study of antiquities, is a typical example to demonstrate its close relationship with our daily lives.[这里有点疑惑，这段不是讲和daily lives无关得历史研究得value吗？ 怎么变成了close relationship with our daily lives] Many pursuers would calculate on one historical item's price and work assiduously to make profit out of these activities. As this business somehow adds amusement to human lives, its value to the whole society is limited. [后面不是提到了对社会稳定得作用吗？怎么这里是limited 呢？]After all, the exchange of those antiquities can never bring more value to our society, but rather exhaust social resources and generate an unique profession called connoisseur.[好句]While pursuits such as antiquity collection contributes little to the overall well-being of our society, some kinds of historical study, especially those with little bond to our daily lives, have been contributing to the social stability till now.[前面这部分得逻辑没有很看懂] With historical study revealing the evolution of social structure from the remote past to industrial revolution, we have opportunity to identify the schematic trajectory of society, a path from savage to civilization, from ignorance to enlightenment, and from simple exchange economic to capitalism. Today's government will know more details of how one form of social structure is overturned and the other more advanced substituted for that underdeveloped social structure. Guaranteed by this information, modern government will function more meticulously to avoid the mistakes reflected by history.

To sum up, the historical study has the palpable value to our daily lives, as we perceived from our historical education, and some recreational realm suAch as research of antiquities. However, the value of history is never confined to the mere information it provides to ordinary people. From a higher level, historical study will be the think tank, as well as an enormous treasury for political leaders and government, which provide caution, alarm, and advice to the future of the society, even this function are little noticed and perceived by ordinary people.[总结很好]


[作者写得太好了，只能用敬仰来形容。尤其是语言非常地道，词汇非常丰富，而且在开头和结尾得写法上摆拖了范文得影响，避免了千篇一律。在对作者几个地方得建议 也是站在一个很高得要求上。 然后有一个问题就是，文章没有按照标准得西方人写作模式来写，不知道这是一件好事还是不利，大家可以讨论一下。]

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作者语言真好！很地道，是我们组里靠近北美范文的语言牛人了！
开头和结尾都高屋建瓴，实在佩服！
看了你的作文，我都想延期了！

但是倒数第二段没怎么看明白，我理解力有待提高……

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真的要向bluecathy道歉，下次发作文一定附带提纲。