Issue050 【认真作文互改小组 Norman第4次作业--optional】--有拍必回！！

norman518UID: 188582

TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
WORDS: 585          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-11

I concede that it can promote the quality of instruction in certain fields of university for faculty to work outsider academic profession regarding to their majors. However, I cannot agree with the speaker's suggestion that all faculties should be required to do so. To better express my viewpoint, let me illuminate it in details.

Above all, it is impossible and even irrational for all faculties, especially in the field of basic theories and humanities, to take part in practical professions relevant to courses they teach. In these subjects of basic theories, such as theoretical mathematics and physics, astronomy, and so on, the purpose of learning and studying these disciplines is mainly related to teaching, study and further exploration in theory rather than in practical application. In this situation, there could hardly be any practical opportunities to provide for those professors to go in for. As for the humanities, such as literature and philosophy, its goals focus chiefly on the study of related theoretics or guidance to exploration and evolution of other subjects---this is the reason why many graduates of philosophy and art could not ferret out an appropriate room from employment market. On balance, what those above disciplines really need is more abstract and imaginative thinking rather than applying them into practice.

What is more, with the progress of science and technology, there are many other ways for universities and faculty to promote the quality of instruction apart from all faculties engaging in outside practical works. As for colleges, methods contributing to teaching quality involve the long-term academic accumulation, the melioration of teaching facilities, the free and tolerant academic atmosphere etc. When it comes to faculty, in their daily routines as we know, in-service faculties place their limited energy and time not only on activities of teaching and instruction but also on research, exploration, academic communication, and so forth. For the sake of harmony between theory and practice, it is effective method for professors to adopt other ways to enhance their practical experience of the related course, such as video-phone meeting, remote-cooperation, academic discussion and intercourse, and so on. Therefore, by multi-way and hi-tech methods, faculties and colleges can more effectively promote the quality of teaching than only by the speaker’s suggestion.

Admittedly, through taking part in practical works, faculties and students all can stand to gain in multi-way benefits. What a professor gets is relevant to not only his/her practical experience but also his/her academic publication and status. These first-hand and valuable experiences can make him easily to find out an appropriate theme of his/her academic paper as well as boost him to the eminent situation in his\her field. And more, those directly practical experiences can make him and his/her students more close to the current field of industry. From his\her vivid lecture with fresh or up-to-date information about personal practice, students could clearly recognize the trends of industry, and be motivated to chase their real interests as their final career. So, colleges and universities should encourage those professors in the field of the applied specialty to go out campus and apply their knowledge into practice.

In sum, without practice in the outside profession and industrial field, professors could lose the precious opportunities connecting theory with practice; with undue emphasis on the importance of outside academic profession, it must result in irrational and impractical externalism at the expense of destructing the educational quality. So, we should call for a balance between theory and practice for the sake of promoting the teaching quality.

[ 本帖最后由 norman518 于 2007-1-12 00:58 编辑 ]

lalahUID: 2215160

先顶下哈~
明天改~
加油。。。

lalahUID: 2215160

TOPIC: ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."WORDS: 585          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-11I concede that it can promote the quality of instruction in certain fields of university for faculty to work outsider academic profession regarding to their majors. (不通~for 后面是讲原因吧？) However, I cannot agree with the speaker's suggestion that all faculties should be required to do so. To better express my viewpoint, let me illuminate it in details.

Above all, it is impossible and even irrational for all faculties, especially in the field(s) of basic theories and humanities, to take part in practical professions relevant to courses they teach. In these subjects of basic theories, such as theoretical mathematics and physics, astronomy, and so on, the purpose of learning and studying these disciplines is mainly related to teaching, study and further<这个？> exploration in theory rather than in practical application. 【修改：the main purpose of learning and studying these disciplines is designed to study further and deeper exploration and explanation in theory rather than in practical application 】In this situation,(In this case,) there could hardly be any practical opportunities to provide (available) for those professors to go in for. 【这里添个连接词吧~Similarly,】As for the humanities, such as literature and philosophy, its (their) goals focus chiefly on the study of related theoretic or guidance to exploration and evolution of other subjects---this is the reason why many graduates of philosophy and art could not ferret out an appropriate room from employment market.(这个不太恰当~毕竟他们的实用性很难在经济市场体现，但art可以用为艺术设计，美工，广告等，哲学的话可以在公众演讲，编辑出版评论等。。。) On balance, what those above disciplines (disciplines above) really need is more abstract and imaginative thinking rather than applying (being applied)them (删) into practice. 总体不错~句子。。。呵呵^^^


What is more, with the progress of science and technology, there are many other ways for universities and faculty to promote the quality of instruction apart from all faculties engaging in outside practical works. As for colleges, methods contributing to teaching quality involve the long-term academic accumulation, the melioration of teaching facilities, the free and tolerant academic atmosphere etc. When it comes to faculty, in their daily routines as we know, in-service faculties place their limited energy and time not only on activities of teaching and instruction but also on research, exploration, academic communication, and so forth.(这句有点问题~) For the sake of harmony between theory and practice, it is (an) effective method for professors to adopt other ways to enhance their practical experience of the related course, such as video-phone meeting, remote-cooperation, academic discussion and intercourse, and so on. （其实在段的TS 中，你提到的是有其他的很多方法可以提高教学质量，这里却缩小了概念，即提高相关课程的实践经验~，而在B1中你表明的是不是所有的科目都需要实践，这里的概念转变了。。。）Therefore, by multi-way and hi-tech methods, faculties and colleges can more effectively promote the quality of teaching than only by the speaker’s suggestion.

Admittedly, through taking part in practical works, faculties and students all can stand to gain in multi-way benefits.（我翻写这句话，你看下怎么样？Admittedly, both faculties and students could benefit from professors’ personal practical experience related to their courses.）What a professor gets is relevant to not only his/her practical experience but also his/her academic publication and status. These first-hand and valuable experiences can make him easily to find out an appropriate theme of his/her academic paper as well as boost him to the eminent situation in his\her field. And more, those directly practical experiences can make him and his/her students more close to the current field of industry.（实践的领域不只是工业，可以是教育领域，医学等） From his\her vivid lecture with fresh or up-to-date information about personal practice, students could clearly recognize the trends of industry,（同上） and be motivated to chase their real interests as their final career. So, colleges and universities should encourage those professors in the field of the applied specialty to go out campus and apply their knowledge into practice.

In sum, without practice in the outside profession and industrial（同上）field(s), professors could lose the precious opportunities connecting theory with practice; with undue emphasis on the importance of outside academic profession, it must result in irrational and impractical externalism at the expense of destructing the educational quality. So, we should call for a balance between theory and practice for the sake of promoting the teaching quality.( 结尾处的与开头及中文不怎么相融洽~有点偏向了需要实践经验了，B1B2，不是白讨论了吗？)

逻辑结构我认为行~
我觉得你动力挺强的！
这几天要闭关修炼了。。。
过些天再交流吧~

norman518UID: 188582

谢谢你的认真修改，你的问题：
1）for faculty to work outsider academic profession regarding to their majors.是不定式短语代替it---主语后置。
2）industry泛指“产业, 行业-- >可以指任何领域。”，具体指代时可以“工业”，industry field: “业界”
3） B1：让所有的领域/科目都参加实践性的工作是不现实的，也是不可能的。
     B2：有多种途径可以提高教学质量。如：学校可以采用的其他途径...(不过这里才是我拿不稳的：题目是说的教员提高教学质量，而我在此扩展到“学校提高教学质量---既：学校也应该为提高教学质量负责”)；教员可以采用的其他途径...
     B3：当然，在某些领域，参加实践性的工作是一个学生和教员双赢的局面！
4）结尾：我也是在学习---一种“提高、深化主题/解决问题的方案”的写法。----可能没写好，让你...confusion.

                     Wish u High Frequence of AW

[ 本帖最后由 norman518 于 2007-1-13 20:56 编辑 ]

luckychinaUID: 2131861

1．并不是所有的教员都可以找到这样的工作，比如基础学科，纯理论
2．除了出去工作，还有其他的方法
3．当然，出去工作也有很多好处

暂时没时间细看，从提纲上看还是比较新的。
有时间看看我的吧，很希望能得到norman在逻辑结构上的指导~~3Q
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