Issue4 【CSMY作文互改小组】第6次作业--例子不少，但不知怎么深入论证

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outsider的问题，这个题目照理说是不难的，但总觉得自己的论述不够Insightful，还望大家多给点idea~

TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
WORDS: 431          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-20
Edited: 482

When psychologists won the Nobel Prize of Economics, when physicists introduced the experimental approaches in chemical studies, when artists involve into the design of computer systems, it completely reveals that the importance of layman to the development of a theory even an industry.

Lives or other forms of materials are interdependent in the nature. A gain of water has characteristics in chemic -- its integrant is element of H and O; characteristics in physics – liquid or solid or gaseous; also characteristics in biology -- its indispensable value for living. This cross-connection call for integrated ideas from various related disciplines to explore its essence, principles and how to utilize it. Chemists know how to purify the water, physicists could devise the containers to reserve it; biologists research how to improve its nutrition --- so that the application of water is superior to those devised by a specialist alone.

In retrospect, large portions of Nobel Prize were given to interdisciplines researches. The medical groups often include expert from genetics, medicines, and chemicals; the study on human mind always attract scholars in areas of neurology, physics, psychology, computer, and psychiatry. From the compounded words like biochemical, neurocognitive, physibiology, etc, it seems that no one is completely specialist and on one is completely outsider. Outsiders in one aspect would like to be specialists in another region, offering additional information to make the research integrated and comprehensive.

Since the professionals are immersing in a specific territories; the outsiders, like bystanders, look these studies from a novel viewpoint. An expert in operational panel design may only focus on the function, while an ergonomic could find the inappropriate arrangement of the button according to the human’s physical and psychological feature. This concern from another viewpoint would save a lot lives and promote the efficiency. Because professionals are always stubborn in a fixed thought, they may always fail to discover other possibilities. Like economists may pay total attention to the mathematical theorems, without considering the subjective judgment in consumption. Therefore, Kahnman, from the perspective of psychology, proposed the concept of decision, replacing the conventional assumption of rationalists. This manifests the flexibility of outsiders. Comparing to professionals, who takes the traditional ideas and phenomenon for granted; the outsiders easily question the premises and bring their points in. It is the fresh inspiration infused by the outsiders in the boundary of two fields that produce significant breakthrough.   

If scientists in any fields study by their own, there would never be as so many striking findings as today. Physiologists themselves could find the relationship between human behavior and brain structure; there could be no invention of multimedia under only the endeavor of computer scientist without artists; our plan of landing on the moon would be a dream forever if only astronauts involved in the activity. Any fields of study should be open to various ideas from outside to provide compensation, support and inspiration.

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TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."WORDS: 431          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-20Edited: 482

When psychologists won the Nobel Prize of Economics, when physicists introduced the experimental approaches in chemical studies, when artists involve into the design of computer systems, it completely reveals that the importance of layman（这个词用的不准确，词典中是“A man who is a nonprofessional”的意思，与主题想表达的意思相差甚远） to the development of a theory even an industry.

Lives or other forms of materials are interdependent in the nature. A gain of water has characteristics in chemic -- its integrant is element of H and O; characteristics in physics – liquid or solid or gaseous; also characteristics in biology -- its indispensable value for living. This cross-connection call for integrated ideas from various related disciplines to explore its essence, principles and how to utilize it. Chemists know how to purify the water, physicists could devise the containers to reserve it; biologists research how to improve its nutrition --- so that the application of water is superior to those devised by a specialist alone. （这里最好再加上：这些化学、物理及生物处理方法互相借用的实例。否则说服力不强，内容也不充实，甚至有走题的嫌疑。因为你只表述了水的多方面用途，以及对各领域的重要性，和主题中外来领域知识经验对本领域发展重要性好象没有什么关系！）

In retrospect, large portions of Nobel Prize were given to interdisciplines researches(researchers). The medical groups often include expert from genetics, medicines, and chemicals; the study on human mind always attract scholars in areas of neurology, physics, psychology, computer, and psychiatry. From the compounded words like biochemical, neurocognitive, physibiology, etc, it seems that no one is completely specialist and on one is completely outsider. Outsiders in one aspect would like to be specialists in another region, offering additional information to make the research integrated and comprehensive.(和上段一样，内容还是不充实，缺少实例，如果每段都这样，人家就会觉得你只是说空话。如果没有名人的例子其实可以编造自己认识的身边的人例子，不但可以避免雷同，而且可以怎么适合你的论述就怎么编！)

Since the professionals are immersing in a specific territories; the outsiders, like bystanders, look these studies from a novel viewpoint. An expert in operational panel design may only focus on the function, while an ergonomic could find the inappropriate arrangement of the button according to the human’s physical and psychological feature. This concern from another viewpoint would save a lot lives and promote the efficiency. Because professionals are always stubborn in a fixed thought, they may always fail to discover other possibilities. Like economists may pay total attention to the mathematical theorems, without considering the subjective judgment in consumption. Therefore, Kahnman, from the perspective of psychology, proposed the concept of decision, replacing the conventional assumption of rationalists. This manifests the flexibility of outsiders. Comparing to professionals, who takes the traditional ideas and phenomenon for granted; the outsiders easily question the premises and bring their points in. It is the fresh inspiration infused by the outsiders in the boundary of two fields that produce significant breakthrough.    （这段相对前面在内容方面要好些，但是又不大懂你到底要从哪个方面去证明自己的观点。是讲边缘学科和交叉学科吗？）

If scientists in any fields study by their own, there would never be as so many striking findings as today. Physiologists themselves could find the relationship between human behavior and brain structure; there could be no invention of multimedia under only the endeavor of computer scientist without artists; our plan of landing on the moon would be a dream forever if only astronauts involved in the activity. Any fields of study should be open to various ideas from outside to provide compensation, support and inspiration.（这些例子为什么不放到前面去详细论述呢？总结的时候就不要这么罗嗦了！ 还有虽然你有好的idea，但是表达方式和扩展不够。我也写了这编，但是自己写时也是感觉内容上不去，呵呵~~说起别人就头头是道！^_^ 有空也帮我拍拍~）

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