Issue69 【CSMY作文互改小组】第四次作业

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Issue69
"Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development."
政府应该少限制科学研究和发展。

观点 平衡观点
提纲
1、现代科学飞速发展，以至于他在社会发展中起主导作用
2、但是，作为科学发展的本源，科学研究的结果是是不可预见，一方面，它可能没有达到令人满意的结果，但是，在科研过程中或多或少解决了某些科研问题；另一方面，科研成果一旦运用于有害社会公德甚至违法的用途，那将是人类的灾难，仅仅从结果上判断科研的好坏是不全面的
3、所以，政府部门不仅要很好的支持科研工作，更重要的是要规范科研秩序

For a large part of our recorded history, science has little bearing with people's daily lives. Scientific knowledge was gathered for its own sake, and it had few practical applications. However, with the dawn of the Industrial Revolution in the 18th century, this happened to change. Today, science has a profound effect on the way we live, largely through applications in its new technology. Should government place few restrictions on scientific research and development? Based on the fact above, I fundamentally agree with the speaker. Moreover, because of the opportunity costs and unpredictability research carries, we should also take some actions to supervise the whole process of research while supporting it with huge effort.

To begin with, I fundamentally agree with the speaker that government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development which will give us humans potential benefit. Today, our society is undergoing a process of unprecedented development in which science serves a leading role. Agriculture provides people with foods and clothes; architecture protects people from winds and rains; industry endows people with various industrial products; a large variety of natural and social science has made people's life beautiful and colorful. More specifically speaking, on the one hand, some fields of science play an important role in the things we use and consume everyday: research in food technology has created new ways of preserving and flavoring what we eat; research in chemical industry has created a vast range of plastics and other synthetic materials, which have thousands of uses in the home and in industry. On the other hand, science has also brought about technology which helps save people life: biochemical research is responsible for the antibiotics and vaccinations which protect people from infectious diseases; artificial valves allow suffers of coronary heart disease to return to active living kidney dialysis machines enable people to survive kidney disease which would once have proved fatal;. As a result, the majority of people on the planet now live longer and healthier lives than ever before.

When it comes to the question whether we should support the research without regarding its potential benefits, I think we should take a serious think. One significant character of research is that it is difficult for any of us to evaluate the exact results of any research. Perhaps some certain research may seem to be valuable and promising at the beginning, but once they are put into practice, they would bring few effects or vise versa. There is still so much research which has not attained the ultimate goal, while it is the process of research that has made several notable achievements that help solve some problems to some extent. For example, we have done much research on AIDS for more than tow decades, and we do not discover any effective methods to conquer this disease. Nevertheless, during this process, we have developed several successful treatments to identify, prevent, control and even mitigate this disease, which is meaningful and hopeful to eliminate the disease in the end. There is some other research developing technology which raises complex ethnic questions. The clone technology was originated from the idea of substituting the failing organ from a patient with a healthy organ which is cultivated by biological methods. Such research involving genetic engineering, cloning, and in vitro fertilization gives scientists the unprecedented power to bring about new live, or to devise new forms of living things. We have no idea of the extent to which such research will develop to harm our society in the future.

Accordingly, government should supervise the process of research from the beginning to the end, while supporting it with huge effort. Firstly, money spent on the research cannot be well invested without detailed observation of social demand. After all, expensive research always caries significant opportunity costs. Money spent on research with few social needs could be otherwise spent toward addressing pressing social problems. Equally important is the relevant abilities of research workers. Different studies demand different experts and workers, as well as the scale of research teams. Some research even requires high-end technology. Can you expect a layman in biology could obtain some achievements in biological field? Matching detailed observation of social demand and the relevant abilities of research workers supervised running of the research process is another essential factor. Up-to-date research report must be made periodically to evaluate the legality of the research process as well as the research progress. And these should be served as the verification standard of whether the research deserves further investing.

In final analysis, the speaker's assertion is not without merit that government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development. But in order to make scientific research progress more healthily and more steadily, important factors such as detailed observation of social demand, relevant abilities of research workers, and supervised running of research process should also be taken into account.



[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-23 01:46 编辑 ]

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For a large part of our recorded history, science has little bearing with people's daily lives. Scientific knowledge was gathered for its own sake, and it had few practical applications. However, with the dawn of the Industrial Revolution in the 18th century, this happened to 【be】changed. Today, science has a profound effect on the way we live, largely through applications in its new technology. Should government place few restrictions on scientific research and development? Based on the fact above, I fundamentally agree with the speaker. Moreover, because of the opportunity costs and unpredictability research carries, we should also take some actions to supervise the whole process of research while supporting it with huge effort. 【开头感觉有点拖沓，最好让人一目了然自己的观点】

To begin with, I fundamentally agree with the speaker that government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development which will give us humans potential benefit.【分段的TS怎么和issue题目一样呢？】 Today, our society is undergoing a process of unprecedented development in which science serves a leading role. Agriculture provides people with foods and clothes; architecture protects people from winds and rains; industry endows people with various industrial products; a large variety of natural and social science has made people's life beautiful and colorful. More specifically speaking, on the one hand, some fields of science play an important role in the things we use and consume everyday: research in food technology has created new ways of preserving and flavoring what we eat; research in chemical industry has created a vast range of plastics and other synthetic materials, which have thousands of uses in the home and in industry. On the other hand, science has also brought about technology which helps save people【】 life: biochemical research is responsible for the antibiotics and vaccinations which protect people from infectious diseases; artificial valves allow suffers of coronary heart disease to return to active living kidney dialysis machines enable people to survive kidney disease which would once have proved fatal;. As a result, the majority of people on the planet now live longer and healthier lives than ever before.

When it comes to the question whether we should support the research without regarding its potential benefits, I think we should take a serious think. One significant character of research is that it is difficult for any of us to evaluate the exact results of any research. Perhaps some certain research may seem to be valuable and promising at the beginning, but once they are put into practice, they would bring few effects or vise versa. There is still so much research which has not attained the ultimate goal, while it is the process of research that has made several notable achievements that help solve some problems to some extent. For example, we have done much research on AIDS for more than tow decades, and we do not discover any effective methods to conquer this disease. Nevertheless, during this process, we have developed several successful treatments to identify, prevent, control and even mitigate this disease, which is meaningful and hopeful to eliminate the disease in the end. There is some other research developing technology which raises complex ethnic questions. The clone technology was originated from the idea of substituting the failing organ from a patient with a healthy organ which is cultivated by biological methods. Such research involving genetic engineering, cloning, and in vitro fertilization gives scientists the unprecedented power to bring about new live, or to devise new forms of living things. We have no idea of the extent to which such research will develop to harm our society in the future.【这篇主要是论证是否应该限制科研发展，支持可以提，但放在B3作为补充感觉更好。你可以看看I44和这篇的区别】

Accordingly, government should supervise the process of research from the beginning to the end, while supporting it with huge effort.【这句很别扭】 Firstly, money spent on the research cannot be well invested without detailed observation of social demand. After all, expensive research always caries significant opportunity costs. Money spent on research with few social needs could be otherwise spent toward addressing pressing social problems. Equally important【中式】 is the relevant abilities of research workers. Different studies demand different experts and workers, as well as the scale of research teams. Some research even requires high-end technology【？】. Can you expect a layman in biology could obtain some achievements in biological field? Matching detailed observation of social demand and the relevant abilities of research workers supervised running of the research process is another essential factor. Up-to-date research report must be made periodically to evaluate the legality of the research process as well as the research progress. And these should be served as the verification standard of whether the research deserves further investing.

In final analysis, the speaker's assertion is not without【？】 merit that government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development. But in order to make scientific research progress more healthily and more steadily,【中式啊】 important factors such as detailed observation of social demand, relevant abilities of research workers, and supervised running of research process should also be taken into account.

条理比较清晰
很多语言有中式英语之嫌
文章主题是要讨论政府是否应该限制科学研究的发展，我觉得应该多想想政府为什么可能会限制它的发展，在什么情况下可能会限制，限制会有什么后果，完全不限制又会怎样等等问题。而你文章把是否限制几乎全部写成是否该支持，是否有离题之嫌（正好符合了I44的主题。）
还有就是不知道你花多长时间写的，要是45分钟以内写完的就好厉害！记得作文最好限时，时间不一定从一开始就限制在45分，可以由长到短慢慢来，但一定要给自己压力！

拍很了点，加油！有空帮我狠拍下！
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=602302&extra=page%3D1

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谢谢楼上的建议
我的确没有限时写，这是反复修改之后的文章，这样才有提高
关于文章分论点的问题，我觉得这样也无妨，可能是有一点问题，因为我是将Issue31、issue44和issue69当成一道题写的
issue31   https://bbs.gter.net/thread-596014-1-1.html