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TOPIC: ISSUE154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
提纲：
同意不能完全交给职业教育者，参与确实有必要也有意义，但是过度参与有害。
１．        不能完全交给职业教育者，有以下３个原因：
第一，与父母和社区相比，职业教育者很难和他们一样关注并且了解孩子。
第二，职业教育者往往是政府等决定的，那么他们很可能通过这个来灌输给孩子他们认为重要的思想和理念，可能不是很符合孩子的需要，而且至少不是那么民主。
第三，教育应该是全方位的，如果教育者和家长社区的观念大相径庭，那孩子很可能只是迷惑，根本不知道到底要怎么样，而这样的教育是没有效果的。
２．        让父母和社区参与进来，提供建议并且帮助教育者一同完成教育，即必要也有好处。
第一，父母更了解孩子可以提供好的建议，比如学科的设置和安排，作业量的大小，是不是应参与课外活动。尤其是一些试行的课程应该通过父母对孩子的观察做出决定。
第二，社区可以监督并协助学校，保证教学质量。并且给孩子提供好的环境等等。
３．        但是过分参与，连所有重要的决定权都交给父母和社区就不好了，
   毕竟父母和社区都没有受过专业训练，可能目光短浅，盲目，而且也不知道如何安排教育资源，把所有重要的决定权交给他们有害无利。举例，比如学科的设置和安排，课程及教材的选用，是否应参与课外活动等等。。。

总结，应该平衡。相互结合。

The speaker’s claim has considerable merit as it sufficiently valued the importance of getting involved the parents and community in local school, since that leaving education alone to professional educators will be not only ineffective but also harmful. Nevertheless, there is no need to go to extremes when we do everything。 I would caution that extending the proposition too far might risk undermining those objectives.

Admittedly, I agree with the speaker’s conclusion that we should not leave education solely to professional educators. This point of view has considerable merit, in three respects. First, it is hard for educators to take care of every student as much as their own parents. Given the limited time and energy, they have to equally treat every one, it is impossible and unfair to pay too much attention to an individual. Secondly, without participation of parents and community, leaving education alone to professional educators, will risk making them too autocratical to have their own quirky notions of what should and should not be taught to children. It will be even more dangerous if these educators do not have the best interests of society’s children in mind.  Thirdly, if education is leaving to faculty exclusively, children may not just lose the opportunity to get inspiration from their parents and community, which may carry more weight. What is worse students will be even more confused to see the different attitude between their teacher and their parents or community. Consider, for example, if students are told not to drink or smoke by their teachers, while their parents and community do not forbid them for this action, then it seems reasonable for them to just follow the direction which is more convenient to themselves. In this case, education is not effective any more.

Moreover, only when parents, community, and educators work together, education can be most effective, and students can benefit most. By virtue of more meticulous acknowledge about the needs of children, parents should give suggestion to educators concerning several respects, which may include the choice of curriculum, pace and schedule for learning, the quantity of homework, and so forth. Additionally, when educators experiment some new methods, parents can better report the extent of reflection from their children. At the same time, community and parents can also supervise educators and help to serve a whole educational atmosphere for our children. Only under this atmosphere, children will not jut informed knowledge and moral dogma imparted by teachers, they will also get pragmatic experience from the practice with their parents and community. Education will be more effective and vivid by virtue of this atmosphere.

However, the call for involving parents and community into education as the path to raise instruction standard is with one important caveat. Neither parents nor communities should be the final decision-maker to education’s issues. It is true that parents are more motivated to take whatever measures are needed to ensure their children receive the best possible education, however, this should not overshadow the facts that they are not necessarily best equipped to know what is best for their child when it comes to education. They may be narrow-minded, and haste to make a terrible decision. Meanwhile, without specialized training, communities cannot understand what pedagogical methods are most effective, what constitutes a balanced education, how developmental psychology affects a child’s capacity for learning at different stages and levels. They cannot make the decision too. Accordingly, only professional educators are far better capacity to ensure that students can receive a balanced, properly paced education.

In sum, as ancient Greek philosopher Plato once said,” Better be unborn than untaught, for ignorance is the root of misfortune.”, education is so important to our children, that we can never let professional educators work alone. Parents and communities should be required to provide suggestion, supervision, and cooperation, however, they should never dominate the decision-making process involving education, otherwise, our students’ education is at risk.

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issue154 请猛拍，必回拍


TOPIC: ISSUE154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
提纲：
同意不能完全交给职业教育者，参与确实有必要也有意义，但是过度参与有害。
１．        不能完全交给职业教育者，有以下３个原因：
第一，与父母和社区相比，职业教育者很难和他们一样关注并且了解孩子。
第二，职业教育者往往是政府等决定的，那么他们很可能通过这个来灌输给孩子他们认为重要的思想和理念，可能不是很符合孩子的需要，而且至少不是那么民主。
第三，教育应该是全方位的，如果教育者和家长社区的观念大相径庭，那孩子很可能只是迷惑，根本不知道到底要怎么样，而这样的教育是没有效果的。
２．        让父母和社区参与进来，提供建议并且帮助教育者一同完成教育，即必要也有好处。
第一，父母更了解孩子可以提供好的建议，比如学科的设置和安排，作业量的大小，是不是应参与课外活动。尤其是一些试行的课程应该通过父母对孩子的观察做出决定。
第二，社区可以监督并协助学校，保证教学质量。并且给孩子提供好的环境等等。
３．        但是过分参与，连所有重要的决定权都交给父母和社区就不好了，
   毕竟父母和社区都没有受过专业训练，可能目光短浅，盲目，而且也不知道如何安排教育资源，把所有重要的决定权交给他们有害无利。举例，比如学科的设置和安排，课程及教材的选用，是否应参与课外活动等等。。。

总结，应该平衡。相互结合。

The speaker’s claim has considerable merit as it sufficiently valued the importance of getting involved the parents and community（communities） in local school(s), since that leaving education alone to professional educators will be not only ineffective but also harmful. Nevertheless, there is no need to go to extremes when we do everything。 I would caution that extending the proposition too far might risk undermining those objectives.

Admittedly, I agree with the speaker’s conclusion that we should not leave education solely to professional educators. This point of view has considerable merit, in three respects. First, it is hard for educators to take care of every student as much as their own parents. Given the limited time and energy, they have to equally treat
every one(everyone), it is impossible and unfair to pay too much attention to an individual. Secondly, without participation of parents and community, leaving education alone to professional educators, will risk making them too autocratical (感觉词性不对)to have their own quirky notions of what should and should not be taught to children. It will be even more dangerous if these educators do not have the best interests of society’s children in mind.  Thirdly, if education is leaving to faculty exclusively, children may not just lose the opportunity to get inspiration from their parents and community（communities）, which may carry more weight. What is worse students will be even more confused to see the different attitude between their teacher and their parents or community. Consider, for example, if students are told not to drink or smoke by their teachers, while their parents and community do not forbid them for this action, then it seems reasonable for them to just follow the direction which is more convenient to themselves. In this case, education is not effective any more.

Moreover, only when parents, community, and educators work together, education can be most effective, and students can benefit (the) most. By virtue of more meticulous acknowledge about the needs of children, parents should give suggestion to educators concerning several respects, which may include the choice of curriculum, pace and schedule for learning, the quantity of homework, and so forth. Additionally, when educators experiment some new methods, parents can better report the extent of reflection from their children. At the same time, community and parents can also supervise educators and help to serve a whole educational atmosphere for our children. Only under this atmosphere, children will not jut informed knowledge and moral dogma imparted by teachers, they will also get pragmatic experience from the practice with their parents and community. Education will be more effective and vivid by virtue of this atmosphere.

However, the call for involving parents and community into education as the path to raise instruction standard is with one important caveat. Neither parents nor communities should be the final decision-maker to education’s issues. It is true that parents are more motivated to take whatever measures are needed to ensure their children receive the best possible education, however, this should not overshadow the facts that they are not necessarily best equipped to know what is best for their child when it comes to education. They may be narrow-minded, and haste to make a terrible decision. Meanwhile, without specialized training, communities cannot understand what pedagogical methods are most effective, what constitutes a balanced in education, how developmental psychology affects a child’s capacity for learning at different stages and levels. They cannot make the decision too. Accordingly, only professional educators are far better capacity to ensure that students can receive a balanced, properly paced education.

In sum, as ancient Greek philosopher Plato once said,” Better be unborn than untaught, for ignorance is the root of misfortune.”, education is so important to our children, that we can never let professional educators work alone. Parents and communities should be required to provide suggestion, supervision, and cooperation, however, they should never dominate the decision-making process involving education, otherwise, our students’ education is at risk.

总体来说，正反方面论证的都很充分。

细节上，单复数形式注意一下就好了。
内容上，
第三段在论证家长更了解孩子的论述中，说到“比如学科的设置和安排，作业量的大小”由于家长的受教育程度不一样，甚至有没有受过教育的，也由于受到教育的不同，家长对课程的设置可能并不是是十分了解。
我觉得可以从家长对孩子兴趣爱好，思想等方面来说，家长更了解孩子。

我记得，上新东方时老师说过，西方人在论述是习惯以自己的身份来表明自己的观点，中国人习惯用“我们，大家”（we , our）等来论述。我也经常犯这种毛病，不知道在判卷时是否有影响？

仅供参考，说的不对的地方，见谅!
：P