Argument214 <Chasing For "6" Score 小组第一次作业>

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Argument214 <Chasing For "6" Score 小组第一次作业>
Topic：214 In each city in the region of Treehaven, the majority of the money spent on government-run public school education comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the value they place on public education. For example, Parson City typically budgets twice as much money per year as Blue City does for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. It seems clear, therefore, that Parson City residents care more about public school education than do Blue City residents.
Outline:
1. the argument fails to mention what their respective percentages of overall budgets are used to support public education.
2.the fact that both cities have about the same number of residents does not necessarily indicate  that Parson City more care of public education.
3.it is just only one aspect of supporting public education. May be the arguer lost other more important ways.
word :    575      time :  2 hours  date :2007-1-30

The argument contains several aspects that are questionable. First, Blue City budgets only half as much as Parson City for its public schools, but the argument fails to mention what their respective percentages of overall budgets are used to support public education. Second the fact that both cities have about the same number of residents does not necessarily indicate that Parson City more care of public education. Third, it is just only one aspect of supporting public education. May be the arguer lost other more important ways. I will discuss each of these facets in turn.

To begin with, the argument's conclusion that Parson City residents take more about public school education seriously than do Blue City residents seems reasonable if it rest on the assumption that Parson City's percentages of all budgets used for government-run public school education is as much as Blue City's or even more. However, the argument provide no evidence to suggest this assumption. It is highly possible that Parson  City is impoverished region and government has to spend much more time and budgets on improve residents' material conditions and enhance people's financial income rather than care about public education. So the budgets for education only was in a poor proportion in spite of amount of money used for its public school is twice as much per year as Blue City's .Without regard to each percentages of all budgets, the argument's claim is apparently unpersuasive.

In addition, even though Parson City has a larger proportion and amount of total budgets spend on its public school, there is also no guarantee that every student live in Parson City will receive a much higher education. After all, we have not known how many students are in both city. Perhaps, Blue City popularity is becoming aging and its birth rate is lower than others. Thus￡?Blue City's residents are becoming care more about limited resources of students and provide fine enough conditions such as good teachers, large-scale libraries and various of facilities for teaching. Contrarily, there are so many children lived in Parson City that present situation of its public school education fails to meet every student's need of education even it has more budgets than Blue City. To be sure, the conclusion is completely unwarranted ,without providing accurate student's proportion of all residents.

Finally, even if residents of Parson City take more about public school education seriously when it comes to much more budgets per year, it is still not the most important. Understandability，the argument deliberately ignore other factors. It is possible that residents of Blue City prefer subscribe to local school to make different kinds of funds
to support and encourage students study hard. Or it is possible that Blue City always make some good reform for education to meet students' needs and interests in order to help them enhance greatly  efficiency. As the risk of sounding cold, Blue City residents would rather send their children other cities or even courtiers because of local terrible circumstances for education.Without ruling out these and other possible factors attributable to caring for public education ,the argument seems groundless.

In sum, to make the argument be more justifiable ,the arguer should provide a clear survey about both cities' respective proportion of budgets for education and specific situation of amount of students lived in both cities. Moreover, consider more other factors about pay more attention to public school education, the argument will become more reasonable.

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The argument contains several aspects that are questionable. First, Blue City budgets only half as much as Parson City for its public schools, but the argument fails to mention what their respective percentages of overall budgets are used to support public education. Second the fact that both cities have about the same number of residents does not necessarily indicate that Parson City more care of public education. Third, it is just only one aspect of supporting public education. May be the arguer lost other more important ways. I will discuss each of these facets in turn.

To begin with, the argument's conclusion that Parson City residents take more about public school education seriously than do Blue City residents seems reasonable if it rest on the assumption that Parson City's percentages of all budgets used for government-run public school education is as much as Blue City's or even more. However, the argument provide no evidence to suggest this assumption. It is highly possible that Parson  City is impoverished region ？？那B市岂不更穷？and government has to spend much more time and budgets on improve residents' material conditions and enhance people's financial income rather than care about public education. So the budgets for education only was in a poor proportion in spite of amount of money used for its public school is twice as much per year as Blue City's .Without regard to each percentages of all budgets, the argument's claim is apparently unpersuasive.

In addition, even though Parson City has a larger proportion and amount of total budgets spendspending on its public school, there is also no guarantee that every student live in Parson City will receive a much higher education. After all, we have not known how many students are in both city. Perhaps, Blue City popularity is becoming aging and its birth rate is lower than others. Thus￡?Blue City's residents are becoming care more语法有误 about limited resources of students and provide fine enough conditions such as good teachers, large-scale libraries and various of facilities for teaching. Contrarily, there are so many children livedliving in Parson City that present situation of its public school education fails to meet every student's need of education even it has more budgets than Blue City. To be sure, the conclusion is completely unwarranted ,without providing accurate student's proportion of all residents.

Finally, even if residents of Parson City take more about public school education seriously可放more后面 when it comes to much more budgets per year有这种说法吗？, it is still not the most important. Understandability？？，the argument deliberately不是故意的吧？ ignore other factors. It is possible that residents of Blue City prefer subscribe to local school to make different kinds of funds
to support好观点！ and encourage students study hard. Or it is possible that Blue City always make some good reform for education to meet students' needs and interests好观点！ in order to help them enhance greatly  efficiency. As the risk of sounding cold这句话什么意思？, Blue City residents would rather send their children other cities or even courtiers because of local terrible circumstances for education.Without ruling out these and other possible factors attributable to caring for public education ,the argument seems groundless.

In sum, to make the argument be more justifiable ,the arguer should provide a clear survey about both cities' respective proportion of budgets for education and specific situation of amount of students livedliving in both cities. Moreover, consider more other factors about pay more attention to public school education有点不通吧？, the argument will become more reasonable.
很多观点、词语用得很好！不过语法句式上还有些欠缺。一起加油！

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Outline:
1. the argument fails to mention what their respective percentages of overall budgets are used to support public education.
2.the fact that both cities have about the same number of residents does not necessarily indicate  that Parson City more care of public education.
3.it is just only one aspect of supporting public education. May be the arguer lost other more important ways.
word :    575      time :  2 hours  date :2007-1-30

The argument contains several aspects that are questionable. First, Blue City budgets only half as much as Parson City for its public schools, but the argument fails to mention what their respective percentages of overall budgets are used to support public education. Second the fact that both cities have about the same number of residents does not necessarily indicate that Parson City more care of public education. Third, it is just only one aspect of supporting public education. May be the arguer lost other more important ways. I will discuss each of these facets in turn.（开头可以这么仔细的都说出来吗？）

To begin with, the argument's conclusion that Parson City residents take more about public school education seriously than do Blue City residents seems reasonable if it rest on the assumption that Parson City's percentages of all budgets used for government-run public school education is as much as Blue City's or even more. However, the argument provide（provides?） no evidence to suggest this assumption. It is highly possible that Parson  City is impoverished region and government has to spend much more time and budgets on improve residents' material conditions and enhance people's financial income rather than care about public education. So the budgets for education only was in a poor proportion in spite of amount of money used for its public school is twice as much per year as Blue City's .Without regard to each percentages of all budgets, the argument's claim is apparently unpersuasive.(这个论证的前提是百分率高，则对教育重视)

In addition, even though Parson City has a larger proportion and amount of total budgets spend on its public school, there is also no guarantee that every student live in Parson City will receive a much higher（higher?better?） education. After all, we have not known how many students are in both city. Perhaps, Blue City popularity is becoming aging and its birth rate is lower than others. Thus￡?Blue City's residents are becoming care more about limited resources of students and provide fine enough conditions such as good teachers, large-scale libraries and various of facilities for teaching. Contrarily, there are so many children lived in Parson City that present situation of its public school education fails to meet every student's need of education even it has more budgets(预算高　more?) than Blue City. To be sure, the conclusion is completely unwarranted, without providing accurate student's proportion of all residents.

Finally, even if residents of Parson City take more about public school education seriously when it comes to much more budgets per year, it is still not the most important. Understandability，the argument deliberately ignore other factors. It is possible that residents of Blue City prefer subscribe to local school to make different kinds of funds
to support and encourage students study hard. Or it is possible that Blue City always make some good reform for education to meet students' needs and interests in order to help them enhance greatly efficiency. As the risk of sounding cold, Blue City residents would rather send their children other cities or even courtiers because of local terrible circumstances for education.(是不是离题有点远) Without ruling out these and other possible factors attributable to caring for public education ,the argument seems groundless.

In sum, to make the argument be more justifiable, the arguer should provide a clear survey about both cities' respective proportion of budgets for education and specific situation of amount of students lived in both cities. Moreover, consider more other factors about pay more attention to public school education, the argument will become more reasonable.

这个Argument 我感觉写的已经很不错了。问题我找不出太多