Issue41Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.
The speaker claims that nonmainstream areas of inquiry play an important role in society, for (删) which can illustrate something that mainstream science cannot do to meet human needs. I agree with the speaker that many things cannot illustrate (can not be illustrated) by science, so (hence, therefore, thereby, so比较口语化) people ask nonmainstream areas of inquiry for answers. However, it has (they have) many disadvantages in several aspects(several disadvantages) and brings (bring) adverse influence to our society. 【Though I do not oppose the view that nonmainstream areas of inquiry could give good explanation to something science can not illustrate, I tend to esteem that they also have some other disadvantages and hence lead to the negative influence to both people and society.】(首段最好简练一些吧~交待一下立场，说明下面要讲什么就行了。)
First, these nonmainstream areas of inquiry make people believe that life is destined.（既然这段的文字是从某一方面来表述盲信nonmainstream areas of inquiry是不好的，在TS中就应该表现出来。尤其是believe比较中性。）【First, people are usually confused by their blind faith of those nonmainstream areas of inquiry, and often…一些不好的假设后果。】As we all know, the future of each person is unknown, we must do everything as hard as possible to pursuit our dreams and create bright future by us.But these monmainstream areas, such as fortune-telling, tell us that they can know what the our future will be (what our future will be like).When people who believe it and ask for the answer, if the answer is bad, which will make him negative and lose heart as a result of bad future being determined whatever hard works do; even if the answer is good, which will make him negative as well, for believing that his future will be bright and it is unnecessary to work hard. (这句话有点不通~主谓呢？) These two (这里哪有两方面？不论答案好不好，总之人们都信了nonmainstream areas of inquiry，结果都是不好。如果要讲两方面的不好，应从不同的角度去分析，给人们的负面作用，人们不努力，人变得消极；社会变得松散，不发展等等。) different aspects of believe（belief） in destiny are bad (both) for the development of individual and society.
Second, astrology and fortune-telling often made (make) people pin their hope on fortune（挺好的~）. For example, when a businessman wants to invest some new field, he asks the fortune-telling man for fortune first. If the result is having large risk he will give up the plan, instead, if the result is good fortune he will do it. (这里你只讲出了人们对nonmainstream areas of inquiry的态度，及行为的选择，那行为的后果是什么？判断nonmainstream areas of inquiry的不好的及危害主要的标准还是行为后果吧，比如挫伤人们的信心，主动性，决策能力，思考能力等等。) Fortune is a little part of success, the most important thing we should do is to realize the situation, analyze the problems and make the plan, then try our best to do it. (细节化好~)【If we just believe in fortune, which seems that bad luck has put failing（failure）on our heads (有这个用法吗？) or good luck has given us the success before we do, we will lose many chances to success or do more blindfold things leading to failure.】【我翻写下这句话~ If we merely pay attention to the unknown fortune, then we are bound to trap into the dilemma that our own future are dominated by destined fate, which undoubtedly contributes to the absence of chances to the success without individual endeavor.】（小总结挺好的~）
B1和B2其实可以归为一段讲，主要是要表达人们盲信nonmainstream areas of inquiry的危害。
In addition, these nonmainstream areas illustrate (illustrating) something unscience(unscientifically)will (删) lead(s) to bad effect, which always happens in medical treatment. In some undeveloped areas, people believe (in) the (删) god（God）, so that when they have some diseases they do not believe doctors but ask some so-called paranormal person for help (therefore they ask so-called paranormal person rather than doctors for help when they are falling ill)by (by这个词意有时候挺暧昧的，建议through比较直观) praying the god for driving away the ghost which is the reason of the disease as they thinking (keep in mind, 观念已经根深蒂固了). However, they cannot heal the disease but delay the treatment, and also waste money. (leaving money and time wasted.)
B3 也是讲了nonmainstream areas of inquiry的危害，还是和上面的有重复，只是领域不一样。其实B1B2合为一段B1，讲下对个人的危害，B3为B2讲下对整个社会的危害。两者递进或并列。
However, we cannot say that there is uselessness of these nonmainstream areas of inquiry, which also have some active roles. (这句板了点。。。no one could deny that…代替we cannot say that there is) We cannot use science to explain（Nonmainstream areas of inquiry well explain） that when people die where they will go, while (as) psychic and paranormal pursuits says(say) he will go to hell if he is an evil man before die and to the paradise if he is a good man before die. It tells us that everyone should be a good person when he is alive, or he will get Nemesis even he dies. (这个理由不够充足~比如帮助给人们灌输一些终极关怀的理念，帮助维护社会的稳定，等)
In sum, we have to trust that the destiny is held in our hand and everything must do（be done）by ourselves, and trust science as well. （文章没有提到science，在总结出现有点怪~）Astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits just influence people who believe it.(不相信的人难道就不受干扰或影响吗？比如政治家们的决策，也间接地要考虑那些有nonmainstream areas of inquiry信仰的人的利益与反应，避免不必要的冲突。)
改写的句子是按你所要表达的想法进行小小的修改。
好奇怪的格式~
[ 本帖最后由 lalah 于 2007-1-31 15:59 编辑 ] | 
发表于 2007-1-30 19:51:58
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