ISSUE 7 互改小组 NO.4 roc 第二篇I

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题目：The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it become a more important form of documentation than written records.
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   According to the speaker, he overstates the importance of camera in recording the history. Although I agree that a video provide a more accurate and convincing record of contemporary life, the documenting still play a key role in some area.
   
   In some area, video can bring much more objective and accurate record of events than documenting. Such as the Olympic Games, a global athletic competition, only when recorded by the camera people can be directly feeling the exciting atmosphere. The same as the music concern, documenting can never recording it no matter how accurate word you used. The “911” event, which make a huge impact in the USA, without the camera recording, the next generation have to imagine the proceeding through the words. Through the recording video, we can see that how the plane crushed into the World Trade Center, how the tower collapsed, and how the people escaped from the building. Yet these are important events in contemporary life, they will be a history and recorded by both video and article. Through the video we can realize the whole events by the impacting screen while the words only can be imagined.

   The video have the advantageous much more than those describe above. In the legal profession, camera is a very important tool to record the event’s evidence. The modern approach the figure out the true in a criminal case is video, it can bring you back to the scene of crime. In that case the bands can easily impose the criminal such as the robber, murderer and so on. With the help of camera, more and more criminal have been cracked. In this area, pen can described nothing when no people in the scene.      

   Though the video can provides an accurate and objective record of the events, it was useless to documenting the mind of people, the quantitative information, and something else. As we know that, video can only reflect the outline of the solid, not describe it. In some area, we need a quantitative number do describe some event. For examples, during the War World Two, we need to comprehend how many people was death; also, we need to know how much building was destroyed and how many children lost their parents. Camera make useless in these fields. In the literary work, we just can image the world which the author described. The spirit of the novel, article, essay can not be recorded by the machine, just through the living words we can be apart of the story which happened in the virtual world. In the account, use the video to record the number is unconvinced, if we want to account how many people die during the war, how many cameras should we put in the battlefield?

         Above all, the speaker’s claim is overstates the importance of video records, at least at some area. When it comes to recording the object event, it has the advantage of accurate and convincing than words. However, when it comes to record the subjective emotion and quantitative information, the traditional tools is much more convincing.

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题目：The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it become a more important form of documentation than written records.
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   According to the speaker, he overstates the importance of camera in recording the history题目是说记录当代生活而不是历史. Although I agree that a video provideprovides a more accurate and convincing record of contemporary life, the documenting动名词主语感觉别扭，按名词讲没有意义，document materials 怎么样still play a key role in some area.
    总ts:部分肯定论题，认为尽管录像在反映现实生活中有准确和可信的优点，文字在记录现实生活上仍起重要作用
   In some area, video can bring much more objective and accurate record of events than documenting. Such as the Olympic Games, a global athletic competition, only when recorded by the camera peoplea person, people是集体名词 can be directly feeling the exciting atmosphere. The same as the music concern是想说音乐会吗? concert,  好像应该说as well as the concert, documenting can never recordingrecord it no matter how accurate word you usedno matter how accurate a word you use. The “911” event, which makemakes a huge impact in the USA, without the camera recording, the next generation have to imagine the proceeding是想说过程吗 process through the words. Through the recording video, we can see that how the plane crushed into the World Trade Center, how the tower collapsed, and how the people escaped from the building. Yet these are important events in contemporary life,少连词and they will be a history and recorded by both video and article. Through the video we can realize the whole events by the impacting screen while the words only can be imagined.最后两句好像有点逻辑问题， 第一句说作为历史由文字和录像记录下来，第二句又说文字只能去想象
      ts1: 在某些场合，录像比文字记录能更客观准确地记录发生的大事
      从录像的角度论述，支持论点前半部分
   The video have the advantageous much more than those describe described above. In the legal profession, camera is a very important tool to record the event’s evidence. The modern approach the figure out the true in a criminal case is video这句得大改Nowadays, the access to the truce in a criminal case is usually videos 改成这样如何, it can bring you back to the scene ofthe crime. In that case the bands 牧师、法官服的领饰，是这个意思吗?不太懂can easily imposeexpose the criminal such as the robber, murderer and so on. With the help of camera, more and more criminal have been cracked. In this area, pen can described nothing when no people in the scene.      
      进一步支持ts1
   Though the video can providescan 后面接原型 provide an accurate and objective record of the events, it was useless to documenting 原型 document the mind of people, the quantitative information, and something else. As we know thatthat 去掉，或者去掉逗号, video can only reflect the outline of the solid描绘事物的表象，不是实体的轮廓吧, not describe it应该说but not describe it. In some area, we need a quantitative numberdata doto describe some event. For examples, during the War World TwoWorld War Two, we need to comprehendtake statistics 进行统计 how many people was deathdead; also, we need to know how much building washow many buildings were destroyed and how many children lost their parents. Camera makewas useless in these fields. In the literary work, we just can image the world which the author described. The spirit of the novel, article, essay can not be recorded by the machine, just转折but through the living用vivid 或者 impressive是不是更好 words we can be apart of the story which happened in the virtual world. In the account这是什么意思, 加to不然有两个动词use the video to record the number is unconvinced, if we want to accountcount 计算 how many people diedied during the war, how many cameras should we put in the battlefield?
       ts2:尽管录像有准确客观反映场景事件的特点，在需要记录人物内心，统计数据等情况下，就会有自身局限性
       支持ts后半部分
         Above all, the speaker’s claim isis 去掉 overstates the importance of video records, at least at some area. When it comes to recording the object event, it has the advantage of accurate and convincing应该是名词形式 accuracy and convincement than words. However, when it comes to record recording the subjective emotion and quantitative information, the traditional tools is much more convincing.
       conclusion: 总结ts1,ts2
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