issue159 【米国有米】寒假作业第17天2－12

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TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."
WORDS: 624         TIME: > 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-2-13

"Roberts have controlled our world!".This is a stereotyped dialogue in science fiction film.Though the idea is pure fictive now,it reflects our human beings' inner dread abour the future of machines.Although many assert that the human mind will always in charge of machine.I contend since the complexity of "machine brain" are getting increasingly high,the human minds may one day be surpassed by machines.

Some peopleunfairly draw the assumption that the reason why human mind will always be superior to machines is that machines are only tools for human minds.Admittedly,most of the time,tools are inferior to their inventors.But actually,it is not always the case.In  the nature world,tools are not always inferior to their inventors.Take both sides of the relationship of symbioses as a example.the two parts are mutual tools for each other,but their status are the same.The relationship of symbioses can be seen all over the animal world.Like many large mammals are interdependent with certain kind of birds.These birds are qualified to stop on the back of these mammals and eat the bugs on their skin.As a result,these mammals acquire a free bath to get rid of bugs to prevent themselves from parasites.In turn,the birds get a free delicious dinner.In this kind of relationship,it is unreasonable to say that tools are always superior to the inventors.Because sometimes tools are not invented by the other part.

When we mean by"The human mind are superior to machines",we implicitly draw the assumption that the superiority is a concept by sum up all the elements.If we compare every attribute of human mind and machines,the statement becomes unreasonable.Actually,human mind are inferior to machines in some aspects.In the attributes of memory ability,number culculating speed and accuratity,machines are definetly superior to human mind.For example,the computer memory chips can momorize information for dozens of years and when people extract the informtion from them again,the information will just come out immediately as it was memorized just now.But when we come to the memory ability of human brain,the situation will  worsen to the abyss.it is frequently that we forget other acquaintance's name days after last time meet.We even suddenly forget what we are planning to do when we enter a room.Poor memory is not the only disadvantage of our human beings.Compared to the number culculating speed and accuracy.We human beings are totally losers.One computer can culculate complex equations accurately in seconds while the smartest mathmatian may spend his whole life in it but no promise of accuracy.In this aspects,it's presumption for some people to say the always superiority of human mind over machines.

What's more,the word "always" in the assertion above is purely subjective.Actually,nothing can stay eternally.Everything has its beginning and extinction.So is the state of the superiority of human mind over machine.Lots of people's imaginary anticipation become true nowadays.telephones,televisions,vehecles,even spacecrafts nowadays are the subject matters of fictions hundreds of years ago.So is the process of surpassing of machines over human mind.Indeed,nowaday's scientists work foil and toil to make our computer more complex and more human.There is even a subject called "artificial neuron network".Scholars in this subject try to devise a computer according to the configration of human brains.Although so far machines are inferior to human brain,as the complexity of them are getting increasingly high,it is possible to see the surpassion of machines one day.it is not a good possbility for the sake of human beings.So,from now on,a sense of guarding against the abuse of advanced technology is neccessary.

To sum up,the assertion above is unreasonable in three points.First,tools are not always inferior to the inventors.Second,though human mind in sume is superior to machines,in some aspects it is not the case.Third,instead of assert subjectively that machine will never surpass human mind,it is essencial for us to admit the possibility and take positive guard against it.

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"Roberts have controlled our world!”.This is a stereotyped dialogue in science fiction film. Though the idea is purefictive now, it reflects our human beings' inner dread about the future ofmachines. Although many assert that the human mind will always in charge ofmachine. I contend since the complexity of "machine brain" aregetting increasingly high, the human minds may one day be surpassed bymachines.

Some people unfairly draw the assumption that the reason why human mind willalways be superior to machines is that machines are only tools for human minds.Admittedly, most of the time, tools are inferior to their inventors. Butactually, it is not always the case. In  the nature world, tools arenot always inferior to their inventors. Take both sides of the relationship ofsymbioses as a example. the two parts are mutual tools for each other, buttheir status are the same. The relationship of symbioses can be seen all overthe animal world. Like many large mammals are interdependent with certain kindof birds. These birds are qualified to stop on the back of these mammals andeat the bugs on their skin. As a result, these mammals acquire a free bath toget rid of bugs to prevent themselves from parasites. In turn, the birds get afree delicious dinner. In this kind of relationship, it is unreasonable to saythat tools are always superior to the inventors.Because sometimes tools are not invented by the otherpart. [你这句话不能作为前面那句话的原因，前面说的是发明者和他们发明的工具，后面解释一些工具不是被发明出来的。虽然你的这个类比很好，但是最好还是把类比运用到现实中发明物和发明者的共生关系上]

When we mean by “The human mind are superior to machines”, we implicitlydraw the assumption that the superiority is a concept by sum up all theelements.[前面半句和后半句有联系吗？]If we compare every attribute of human mind and machines, the statement [+will] becomes unreasonable. Actually, human mindare inferior to machines in some aspects. In the attributes of memory ability,number calculating speed and accurately [accuracy], machines are definitely superior to humanmind. For example, the computer memory chips can memorize information fordozens of years and[去掉然后断句] when people extract the information from them again, theinformation will just come out immediately as it was memorized just now. Butwhen we [it]come to the memory ability of human brain, the situation will  worsento the abyss. It is frequently that we forget other acquaintance's name daysafter last time meet. We even suddenly forget what we are planning to do whenwe enter a room. Poor memory is not the only disadvantage of our human beings.Compared to the number calculating speed and accuracy. We human beings aretotally losers. One computer can calculate complex equations accurately inseconds while the smartest mathematical may spend his whole life in it butno promise of accuracy.[夸张了点吧] In this aspects, it’s presumption [这里用形容词]for some people to say [+that]thealways superiority of human mind over machines.
[本段论证非常出色``HOHO]

What's more, the word "always" in the assertion above is purelysubjective. Actually, nothing can stay eternally. Everything has its beginningand extinction. So is the state of the superiority of human mind over machine.Lots of people's imaginary anticipation become true nowadays. telephones, televisions,vehicles, even spacecrafts nowadays are [were]the subject matters of fictions hundreds ofyears ago. So is the process of surpassing of machines over human mind. [根据过去的发明判断也太武断了吧]Indeed, nowadaysscientists work foil and toil to make our computer[+s]more complex and more human. There is even a subject called "artificialneuron network". Scholars in this subject try to devise a computeraccording to the configuration of human brains. Although so far machines areinferior to human brain, as the complexity of them are getting increasinglyhigh, it is possible to see the surpassion [surpassing] of machines one day. It is not a goodpossibility for the sake of human beings. So, from now on, a sense ofguarding against the abuse of advanced technology is necessary. [难道因为机器要超越人类的智慧就要阻止吗？怎么样也应该说说机器超越人类的危害吧]

To sum up, the assertion above is unreasonable in three points. First, toolsare not always inferior to the inventors. Second, though human mind in some issuperior to machines, in some aspects it is not the case. Third, instead ofassert subjectively that machine will never surpass human mind, it is essentialfor us to admit the possibility and take positive guard against it. [怎么这里写的和Argument的攻击总结一样拉，不过总体写的还是很好的]