求高人指点

小馨UID: 2220777

这段是我毕业论文的摘要,怎么翻译多翻译不对,请高人指点一下,究竟应该怎样翻译?万分感谢:内容如下:
近年来，我国各地虽然对促进大城市郊区农业的发展取得了明显成效，但应当看到成效仍然是初步的、阶段性的，还存在着很多问题，突出表现在农业基础设施建设满足不了农业发展的需要；现阶段农产品尚未具备均衡生产、均衡供应的条件；绝大多数大城市缺水，加上水资源污染，严重影响着郊区农业的发展；结构性矛盾仍然存在；生产规模化，区域化和专业化发展缓慢；农业利用外资不合理等。针对上述问题，指出大城市郊区农业的发展方向应是大力发展设施农业，高产优质农业，绿色生态农业，观光旅游农业等集生产、生态、文化、观光、教育等功能于一体的现代化都市农业，并提出了加快大城市郊区农业发展的政策，例如转变职能，搞好各项服务；广泛宣传，增强发展意识；依托科技，强化典型示范；认真调研，统筹搞好规划；推行规划经营，实行专业化生产，提高规模效益；制订都市农业发展的支持政策；进一步加快农业功能的多元化等。

小馨UID: 2220777

这是我自己翻译的,请帮我看一下对吗?谢谢

In recent years, our country although promote the development of agriculture in suburban and achieved remarkable results. However, we should see the results are still preliminary.

There is also a lot of problems,outstanding performance:agricultural infrastructure can not meet the needs of agricultural development; this stage don’t have a balanced agricultural production and balanced supply; most large cities are short of water, with water pollution; structural contradictions still exist; production scale, regionalization and professional development has been slow.

TO the problems, pointing out that the direction of agricultural development should be vigorously develop agricultural infrastructure, high yield and quality of agriculture, Green Ecological Agriculture, Tourism and agriculture production, ecological, cultural, tourist and education functions of a modern urban agriculture.

We should make policies of accelerate agricultural development. for example, change their functions, providing all the necessary services;  enhance awareness; Relying on science and technology, strengthening models; careful investigations, and Manpower good plans; Planning, management, specialization in production and improve efficiency; Urban development support to the development of agriculture policy; further accelerate agricultural diversificationand so on

wxylwyUID: 2341120

好高深

flashseeUID: 174104

In recent years, our country although promote the development of agriculture in suburban and achieved remarkable results. However, we should see the results are still preliminary.

although一般放句首。
however应该删掉，可以什么都不用，如果非要用，可以用although····yet····
our country although promote·····achieved
前面好像用的是一般时，但是少s，后面又用了过去时，不一致，你自己看着改吧。

we should see删掉，没用。

flashseeUID: 174104

There is also a lot of problems 注意be动词。
突出表现可以改成‘突出表现在一下几个方面’especially in the following cases:
this stage don’t have a balanced agricultural production and balanced supply;改为
there is no balanced condition of the production and supply of the agricultural products at present

绝大多数大城市缺水，加上水资源污染，严重影响着郊区农业的发展；结构性矛盾仍然存在；生产规模化，区域化和专业化发展缓慢；农业利用外资不合理等
改为
most large cities' lack of water, as well as the water pollution badly impede the development of the agriculture in rural; structural contradictions still exists; the scalization, regionalization and profession of the production develop slow, the unreasonable use of the foreign capital, and so forth.

就翻到这吧，权当抛砖引玉了。

小馨UID: 2220777

谢谢ＬＳ的，我自己再好好看看，谢谢

小馨UID: 2220777

老师说,我下面的内容翻译的还是不够准确,请帮忙给看一下,谢谢!
针对上述问题，指出大城市郊区农业的发展方向应是大力发展设施农业，高产优质农业，绿色生态农业，观光旅游农业等集生产、生态、文化、观光、教育等功能于一体的现代化都市农业，并提出了加快大城市郊区农业发展的政策，例如转变职能，搞好各项服务；广泛宣传，增强发展意识；依托科技，强化典型示范；认真调研，统筹搞好规划；推行规划经营，实行专业化生产，提高规模效益；制订都市农业发展的支持政策；进一步加快农业功能的多元化等。
我翻译英文:TO the problems, pointing out that the direction of agricultural development should be vigorously develop agricultural infrastructure, high yield and quality of agriculture, Green Ecological Agriculture, Tourism and agriculture production, ecological, cultural, tourist and education functions of a modern urban agriculture.

We should make policies of accelerate agricultural development. for example, change their functions, providing all the necessary services;  enhance awareness; Relying on science and technology, strengthening models; careful investigations, and Manpower good plans; Planning, management, specialization in production and improve efficiency; Urban development support to the development of agriculture policy; further accelerate agricultural diversificationand so on

no_commentUID: 117770

To deal with the problems mentioned above, the paper pointed out the future direction of agricultural development in suburban areas of big cities -- a modern urban agriculture that can serve multi-purposes such as production, ecology, culture, tourism, education and etc. Specifically, the direction is the development of agricultural infrastructure, the development of agriculture with high yield and high quality, the development of ecological agriculture and the development of tourism oriented agriculture. The paper also suggested several policies to accelerate the agricultural development in suburban areas of big cities, such as changing functionalities of governments to provide better services, extensive promotion and awareness programs, optimized model demonstration programs with technology support, careful planning with intensive investigations, specialized production to improve yield and efficiency, establishing supporting policies for urban agricultural development, further diversifying agricultural functionalities, and etc.

[ 本帖最后由 no_comment 于 2007-6-6 00:15 编辑 ]

小馨UID: 2220777

LS的,真的好谢谢你呀!!:loveliness: :loveliness:

小馨UID: 2220777

又来麻烦大家,心理都不好意思了,不过我的英文水平实在有限,只能请大家帮忙了,先谢一个了,这段话老师也说我翻译的不够准确,那应该怎样翻译才准确呢,请大家赐教,内容如下:
农业现代化是我国现代化进程中的重要组成部分。天津作为东部沿海较发达地区，发展农业现代化尤为重要。本文研究了天津现代农业的发展问题，通过分析现代农业特征和天津农业发展现状及存在问题，结果表明，天津农业存在农业生产效率偏低、耕地资源利用不当、农业科技发展与推广存在矛盾、 农民文化程度偏低、农民经营管理水平不高等问题。最后，从改善农田生产条件、实施农业科技工程、组织农民培训等方面提出了几项研究对策。本研究对推动天津现代农业的发展具有一定的参考指导意义。

小馨UID: 2220777

大家帮我一下呢.这周5需要交的,谢谢了

小馨UID: 2220777

Agricultural modernization process of China's modernization of the important components. Tianjin as the more developed eastern coastal areas, the development of agricultural modernization is particularly important. This paper studies the Tianjin modern agricultural development issues, By analyzing characteristics of modern agriculture and Tianjin agricultural development and existing problems, the results show that Tianjin Agricultural exist agricultural production efficiency, low, improper use of arable land resources, agricultural technology development and the promotion of contradictions low literacy farmers, peasants management level and low. Finally, from farmland to improve production conditions and implementation of agricultural science and technology projects, organize training of farmers and so on made several countermeasures. The Tianjin to promote the development of modern agriculture with a reference guide.
这是我自己翻译的,请批评指正