我写的第一篇作文,求拍...感谢各位大侠

yeren7722UID: 2297829

Which is more inportant for students,to understand ideas and concepts or learn facts?

When reading books ,or listening to  lectures,which ,generally speaking,contain some concepts,ideas,and facts,some students may think that to comprehend ideas and concepts is more important than to learn facts.While others probably argue that to learn facts outweighs to understand ideas and concepts.As far as I am concerned,to understand ideas and concepts takes a more important part in our life.

A persuasive point is that ideas and concepts are always breif and highly concerntrated.They describe some topics in very short words and draw a outline of a lecture or a book,and so it is easy for students to catch the main idea.For example ,when a student attempts to learn what a paper is talking about,instead of remembering the whole article ,which usually includes a large amount of facts,he just needs to understand the ideas and the concepts of the paper.On the other hand,facts often contain a great deal of details,not all of which are essential.As a case in point,a fact always describes when,where and how a matter happens,but in most cases,especially in science,students do not have to know when and where a fact happens.they just want to know the ideas and the concepts.In other words,they just need to know what happens,and the causes that stimulate the outcome of the fact.Therefore ,by understanding the ideas and concepts ,people are able to get the neccesary information effectively.

Further more,ideas and concepts , most of time ,sarmmarized from the facts, demonstrate  the comman parts of the facts.There are numerous facts in the all kinds of books,for instance,in history,in physics,so much so that people do not have adequent time to learn so many facts,then to understand ideas and concepts is a excellent method to abtain knowledge.As an illustration ,many students might have known the fact that before Edison invented the electric bulb,and he had did thounds of experiments .Should students know every experiment? The answer is obvious that students just need to know what a electric light is,and how does it works.

Though facts involve redundant information and details to some extent,they still have some advantages.The facts frequnetly depict something very picturesquely,hence,they can be  imagined and apprehended with ease.In that case ,learning facts can help people to understand revelent ideas and concepts vividly.As an example,when students learn gravity for the first time,it is more ore less a little abstract for them to understand ,however, the fact that it is gravity that have drawn the apple to Newton’s head will help students understand the gravity dramatically.

In short,ideas and concepts make up of the foundation that can improve a student’s comprehension and ablility to acquire more lore.And facts ,one the other hand ,are good supplements to those.After understanding the reasoning  above,it is quite safe to say that to learn ideas and concepts is more important than to learn facts.  

准备8月考试,第一次写作文,水平很菜,欢迎大家指点..十分感谢

yeren7722UID: 2297829

自己顶一下..

yeren7722UID: 2297829

再顶

goodgoodstudyUID: 201753

1.开头的第一句，有点琐碎，逗号太多，可以改成比较利落的句型；

2. breif-->briefly
3. in very short words问一句，这里的short指单词简单，还是说句子简明扼要？
4. a outline-->an outline
5. they just want to know-->and they just want to know还是要注意连词不能少了

6. sarmmarized from-->summarized from
7. most of time-->from most of the time
8. a excellent-->an excellent
9. so much so that 此处用much是否和你之前的there are numerous有点相悖呢？
10. and he had did thounds of experiments 这里的and反而是多余的
11. how does it works-->how it works

12. The facts-->Facts

13. quite safe好像用起来不妥当

意见：
1. 结构框架非常好，不需要改进什么；
2. 内容的比例也很好；
3. 句式很词汇量有待增强，lz很喜欢用need，just等词，显得单一化；
4. 还需要注意小节，以上挑出来的问题可能太细了，不过我眼里容不得沙子，确实是拼写错误的我没有指出，指出的可能确实是lz单词记忆错误以及句式不熟悉导致的错误；
5. 吹毛求疵的说一句，有的话不需要你去给大家总结，你可以把事实和例子说出来就好，文字表达力强，大家自然会领会，类似edison的例子可以多举一些，第二段就太说理了，不学理工科的同学是不能领会什么叫reading papers的；

tea！

yeren7722UID: 2297829

十分感谢楼上的..
第一次写,以后一定改进...多谢指点

yeren7722UID: 2297829

原帖由 goodgoodstudy 于 2007-6-1 13:57 发表
1.开头的第一句，有点琐碎，逗号太多，可以改成比较利落的句型；

2. breif-->briefly
3. in very short words问一句，这里的short指单词简单，还是说句子简明扼要？
4. a outline-->an outline
5.  ...

嗯,我的单词量确实是一个问题哈.有待提高,
3.我的意思是句子很简明扼要.,这里没注意让人误解了.
其它地方没怎么检查,错误不少..十分感谢你的意见,一定多改进..

kevinliu6883UID: 2338522

Give ample evidence to one thing required.

For the environment issue, possible reasons can be
1) environment directly affect residents' life. Air, water, food…
2) better circumstance is a favorable condition to attract invest, thus help local economy.
3) Mitigation of pollution and treatment of waist may cost money, and pose constraint on some industries like chemical engineering. For short-time span, it seems the increase of cost. But it may stimulate the development of new technology. Since the environment has long term effect, it is provident for doing it now than later.

For university,
1) increase chance for young people to receive advanced education, which is the source of invention and discovery, finally boost civilization.
2) university also provides many job opportunities. They may recruit faculty, staff, facility crew, administration and others. To build new classroom building also means job chance for construction companies.
3) University attracts many students to the city. these students need housing, dining, medical service, thus boost local small business.
4) University generally won't pollute environment.

achillisharryUID: 2277269

一个优美的或由哲理的句子能为文章增色不少