Issue69 [METTLE小组第四次作业] by hejielady

hejieladyUID: 2282175

69"Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development".

Any government have the duty and right to induct rational scientific research, while, under some circumstances, it is more effective to place few restrictions on most research which will contribute to the progress and development of the society. Therefore, either dissipation permit of research or undue restriction on research is unfeasible.

In the era of innovation, the development and progress of a nation depend largely on scientific research and development, especially for the developed countries. Take the super country the United State as an example; the US government has always putting scientific research in an extreme important role in its nation's development. Years after years, the American authority has carried out a plenty of policy to attract talented men around the world, and large amount of financial and material resources have spent on scientific research, in order to strengthen its comprehensive national power and promote the prosperity of the society. Therefore, a government of any nation should support and encourage scientific research and development, which will benefit its nation and its people.

While pursuing the scientific research and development, some of which may jeopardize people's interest and even the national security should be forbidden. Consider, if an institution or individual is free to make scientific research on nuclear weapon, the consequence of a successful one is beyond our imagination, if it were the case, there would be no more peaceful life or a stable society left for us, and the situation may be even worse. A typical case in point, when it comes to the issue of Iran's insisting in researching uranium condensation, in order to maintain the order of the society and the security of human race, the rest nations of the world had made strong objection against the Iran government. Every effort would be made to restrict any vicious research.

Nevertheless, on the other hand, undue freedom to restriction on scientific research and development may also hamper social development and also ruin people's positive attitude toward life. As is mentioned above, there is no scientific research there is no progress of the society. Moreover, putting too much restrictions on research might kill man's sprit of innovation and enterprising. In that case, both the society and man might be always in a situation as same as the original one. If so, according to "natural selection", the argument by Darwin, that stronger species survive while weaker ones do not, we humans will not exempt from the extinction without persistent progress.

In sum, the government should place fewer restrictions and more encouragement on scientific research, and research may contribute to the progress of the society and benefit humans. On balance, nonetheless, the government should make strong efforts to control and forbid any dangerous and useless research. Only in this way can human beings will take the steps toward a strong and prosperity; our society enjoys a brighter and brighter future.

[ 本帖最后由 hejielady 于 2007-6-22 17:15 编辑 ]

drlzUID: 2329258

Any government(s) have the duty and right to induct rational scientific research, while, under some circumstances, it is more effective to place few restrictions on most research(es) which will contribute to the progress and development of the society. Therefore, either dissipation(是驱散,消散,放荡的意思,再说它名词,换个形容词,unlimited) permit(s) of research or undue restriction（s） on research is unfeasible.(我觉得这句话换成neither unlimited permits of research nor undue restrictions on research are feasible 更好点)

In the era of innovation, the development and progress of a nation depend(s) largely on scientific research and development, especially for the developed countries. Take the super country the United State(s) as an example; the US government has always(been) putting(现在完成进行时) scientific research in an extreme(修饰形容词要用副词,extremely) important role in its nation's development. Years after years(year after year), the American authority has carried out a plenty of policy (s)to attract talented men around the world, and large amount of financial and material resources have(been) spent on scientific research, in order to strengthen its comprehensive national power and promote the prosperity of the society. Therefore, a government of any nation should support and encourage scientific research and development, which will benefit its nation and its people(在短首作者提出观点:一个国家的发展和进步依赖于科学研究和发展,我觉得证明此观点的例子应该是关于科学研究发展促进一个国家发展和进步方面的,而作者举出的例子只是关于美国对科学研究的重视,而且在段尾作者提出了"benefit",所以我觉得更应该举出科学研究和发展benefit美国方面的例子才更有说服力.).

While pursuing the scientific research and development, some of which may jeopardize people's interest and even the national security should be forbidden(这句话有语法错误,由于some of which may jeopardize people's interest and even the national security是作为一个修饰成分修饰前面的 the scientific research and development,所以should be forbidden 缺少主语,可以在which 前面加一个them,them指代the scientific research and development,而which修饰them,所以some of them 作为should be forbidden 的主语). Consider, if an institution or individual is free to make scientific research on nuclear weapon, the consequence of a successful one is beyond our imagination, if it were the case, there would be no more peaceful life or a stable society left for us, and the situation may be even worse. (这句话希望作者在润色一下，有点累赘，Consider, if an institution or individual is free to make scientific research on nuclear weapon, the consequence of which is beyond our imagination,  there would be no more peaceful life or a stable society left for us.个人意见 )(句子与句子之间如果用逗号隔开的话,就要用连词把句子连起来,第二个if前面是步是可以换个别的标点符号,比如说";")A typical case in point(is Iran example), when it comes to the issue of Iran's insisting in researching uranium condensation, in order to maintain the order of the society and the security of human race, the rest nations of the world had(不应该用过去完成时,因为国际社会对伊朗的反对还在继续,用现在完成进行时吧,have been making) made（去掉） strong objection against the Iran government. Every effort would(我觉得用should更好) be made to restrict any vicious research(es).

Nevertheless, on the other hand, undue freedom to restriction (restrict)on(去掉) scientific research and development may also hamper social development and also(前面有一个,这个就重复了) ruin people's positive attitude toward life. As is mentioned above, there is no scientific research there is no progress of the society( 换成no scientific research , no progress of the society,可能更加简练点,　参考了no pains , no gains,的表达方式). Moreover, putting too much restrictions on research might kill man's sprit of innovation and enterprising（enterprise）. In that case, both the society and man might be always in a situation as same as the original (觉得换成primitive更加合适)one. If so, according to "natural selection", the argument（自然选择是达尔文提出一个理论，不是一个argument，改成theory made） by Darwin, that stronger species survive while weaker ones do not, we humans will not exempt from the extinction without persistent progress.

In sum, the government should place fewer restrictions and more encouragement on scientific research, and research( 直接换成一个which,　因为并不是每个科学研究都支持，象伊朗那种就要限制，) may contribute to the progress of the society and benefit humans. On balance, nonetheless, the government should make strong efforts to control and forbid any dangerous and useless research（es）. Only in this way can human beings will(前面的can 本来是放在beings后面的，只不过提前了，所以will多余的) take the steps toward a strong（是形容词，缺乏被它所修饰的名词） and prosperity; （在此处加个连词将会使句子与句子之间更加连贯）our society enjoys a brighter and brighter future.

总结一下吧　　希望作者要多学会用一些连词把句子连接起来，这样可以更好的表达句子与句子之间的逻辑关系，使文章看起来更加流畅，连贯．
　　　　　　　对与一些拿不准的单词用之前一定要查字典．
　　　　　　　语法有待加强，特别是时态的用法，被动的应用，名词的复数，长句子的处理
　　感谢你改我的作文，　以上的修改只是个人观点，由于知识有限，欢迎继续讨论，相互提高　　　　　　

hejieladyUID: 2282175

THANK YOU VERY MUCH, DRZL!我会好好努力的！