Issue83 [5-up小组] 第15次作业 by 小馨

小馨UID: 2220777

83. "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."

Date:3th july             Time: three hours               Word:382
中文提纲：1 表明态度不同意
2 少数人认为这样做是对的
3 提出应该看到对荒地的开发有利于经济和社会的发展
4 国家的目的是发展经济和社会，开发荒地更有助于这个目的
5进行最后的总结
I disagree with the topic that "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people. I will present my views in the argument.

Even a few citizens may be conclude that the government should protect the wilderness areas as natural state as they wished, otherwise, it may cause serious damage to a remote wilderness area. For instances, the shopping centers or houses were built that would have been not satisfied with the only a few people because they think they can not benefit from it and the wilderness areas were destoryed.

However, they can not see the prospect of the advantage that the extremely remote areas would been exploit. For example, 哥仑布（实在抱歉，不会打哥仑布的英文名字，所以打了中文）found the new continent which is extremely remote in that eras, but as we know today it is very Prosperous now. We can image that if there is no exploitment and development on that wilderness areas, South America would not been in exsit at present. All the government of the country in South America adpot the policy to development the extremely remote ares to improve the Society and economy.

In addation, the effort of the government is Promoting the economic and social development. If one country has 80% extremely remote areas, how can this country thriving and prosperous? If one country is poor and fall behind, the citizens in this country can not satify with their level of the living condition and they may be wish to overthrow the government.

No matter the areas weather remotest or not, the government have the right to decide preserve or exploit it and which one is benefit most of the citizens, futhermore benefit all the country. Without government’s proper decision, not only can publicly owned wilderness areas remain their natural state, but also hazardous the citizens in this contry even more the all the country.
PS: 我第一次写I，请大家多多指教，我总是感觉自己无话可说，字数写不上去，极度郁闷中

[ 本帖最后由 小馨 于 2007-7-5 13:32 编辑 ]

davidsenwiseUID: 2291368

I disagree with the topic that "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people. I will present my views in the argument.

Even a few citizens may be （删除be）conclude that the government should protect the wilderness areas as natural state as they wished, otherwise, it may cause serious damage to a remote wilderness area. For instances（For instance）, the shopping centers or houses were built that would have been not satisfied with the only a few people because they think they can not benefit from it and the wilderness areas were destroyed.

However, they can not see the prospect of the advantage that the extremely remote areas would been exploit (be exploited). For example, 哥仑布（实在抱歉，不会打哥仑布的英文名字，所以打了中文）（Christopher Columbus）found the new continent which is extremely remote in that eras, but as we know today it is very Prosperous now. (这个例子根本不能说明你的观点，你显然也没有理解publicly owned wilderness areas 的意思。俄罗斯远东是荒地吧？阿拉斯加州是荒地吧？但新大陆绝对不是文中要讨论的公共拥有的荒地)We can image（imagine） that if there is no employment and development on that wilderness areas, South America would not exist at present. All the governments of the country in South America adopt the policy to develop the extremely remote areas to improve the Society and economy.你已经离题了，ISSUE主题是要讨论政府要否保护公共荒地，而不是荒地的重要性。即使你要论证开发公共荒地,你的理由也不充分.也没有论证清楚.

In addition, the effort of the government is Promoting the economic and social development. If one country has 80% extremely remote areas, how can this country thriving and prosperous? If one country is poor and falls behind other countries, the citizens in this country can not satisfy their level of the living conditions and they may be wish to overthrow the government.我实在看不出你论述了半天你要论述什么样一个观点.论述要扣题哦

No matter the areas weather remote or not, the government have the right to decide preserve or exploit it and which one can benefit most of the citizens, furthermore(这里的用法我好像不太熟悉) benefit the whole country. Without government’s proper decision, not only can publicly owned wilderness areas remain their natural state, but also hazardous the citizens in this contry even more the all the country.


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2.        语言都是其次的，最重要的是你已经离题了！你根本没有读懂题目，题目谈论的是有关保护荒地的问题，你谈论的是开发荒地相关问题。也许是你觉得不应该保护更应该开发,这好像也与题目相背.即使你论证开发,你的理由也不充分.
我觉得写ISSUE很重要的一个是以小见大,这点可以从很多北美范文ETS范文可以看出. 但你的整篇ISSUE 给人感觉是论证缺乏力度,就是你的例子缺乏,论证不深入.
3.        最后一个建议,多读多研究一些范文,ETS的和北美相关ISSUE 的范文.今天一个刚考过的同学说,即使是很平庸的观点也关系不大,关键你要会迅速破题并讲透彻,逻辑紧密.
水平有限,有些话不一定对,仅当参考!
Good luck!

[ 本帖最后由 davidsenwise 于 2007-8-3 09:07 编辑 ]

davidsenwiseUID: 2291368

PS:这里是几个G友的提纲,你可以参考一下,似乎你对题目的理解有点偏差(来自满分写作大全).
83. "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
政府应该保留国家领土中公共拥有的荒凉地区，即使这些地区往往人迹罕至。
ORANGE77:关于ISSUE,可写的角度真的很多,所以今天的这篇主要从
1.生态本来就有自然能力保持平衡,如果我们不蓄意破坏这些地区的生态,是不是就不用积极保护了呢
2.现代的PRESERVATION方式并不局限于观察和保护,政府可最大利用生物动物方式,在他们的自然生长区,增加濒临绝种物种的繁殖,(我们对熊猫就是这样做的,而且结果证明,比动物园的效果好)
3.虽然很多组织及科学家已经自发的在这些地区从事保护工作,但缺乏政府支持的话,是很难取得大进步的,而且也很危险.
Scortio
Agree:
1. the purpose of preserving wilderness areas is not just to provide resort to people, but to protect environment and wildlifes.
2. remote wilderness areas are in need of preservations as well and they can offer scientists great source of information
3. compared to those high-lighted wilderness areas, the preservation of those less accessible ones will cost relatively less investments and labor
sunnygirl8066
Nowadays, high-speed development of industry and economy causes serious environmental problems. It is emergent for our government to take measures to protect our surrounding from damage. To preserve the wilderness areas in there natural state is one of the important regulations to complement.

Firstly, such areas with uncommon plants and animals are important in ecological circle. Since the whole world’s number of people is mounting to astronomical figures without any signs at present of ceasing to rise, if we aren’t intended to keep them intact they will become another people occupied regions like our living surroundings.

Secondly, human activity has too much influence in our environment and the natural state is changed greatly by person, we should left the rare remains for our offspring. It is terrible to imagine people next to us live in the manmade world without knowing what nature means.

It can also do good to the people living there remaining simple and healthy customs without disturbing.

So it’s judicious for government to take cogent steps to keep the uncultivated lands as original form. After decades of years we can show it to our descendants telling them our ancestors are living in such environment like this. I think they are sure to be grateful to us and more aware of the importance of environmental protection.

果小冻UID: 208370

:loveliness: 看了你的83和103，觉得问题都是没有展开。希望看看我在你103后面的回帖~~

小馨UID: 2220777

谢谢果果了,我大概明白了,我现在做模拟考试的时候一般都会想到展开了,写个460个字应该不成问题了,呵呵:loveliness:

小馨UID: 2220777

另外问问果果,2楼的朋友说我的观点跑题了,是吗?谢谢