issue11天道酬勤小组7.8作业

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题目：ISSUE 11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
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Should all nations help support to develop a global university? The action is needed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. While it must be ensured that the university is for the global definite instead of be controlled by some developed countries.

To begin with, many social problems which most countries around the world is facing due to the human nature that have lasted thousands of years long. They can not be solved by the power of one country or in a short period. For example, although large numbers of countries have done function to deal with the problem but corruption is still found everyday both in the richest countries and the poorest ones. This is because the phenomenon is from the greedy nature of all human beings. As a whole, all nations have plentiful persistent problems to share.

To deal with the shared social problems, a global university can provide several kinds of benefits. First, it brings understanding between different nations by taking people all around the world together. It could diminish the disappreciation which may cause wars. Second, it offers diverse experiences thoughts, and methods from all nations. Numerous of examples from different areas and different thinking manner could expand the view sight of the students to know better about the human beings. What is more, the global university could call nation's attention to try to solve the problems together. To solve the world's most persistent social problems, a global university is significant.

To develop a global university, supporting from all nations is needed. Investigation as many forms as possible can help integrity the realization of a problem. The nation could benefit from the research result to help solving its own problems. What is more, establishing an understanding with others by solving the common problems can afford a harmonious international condition that all nations develop together. The action to take part in the university itself is to solve social problems.

However, because of the unbalance development between nations, the global countries may gradually become a implement of the developed countries. So at the same time to develop the research level of the global university, some action must be made to prevent it be controlled by the powerful countries. As long as it bring help to solve problems, it is better to have collaboration than none.

In sum, to solve some common social problems shared by all human beings, a global university is significant. It is through supporting of all nations provide to develop it.

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原帖由 DavidBoy 于 2007-7-8 15:10 发表

Should all nations help support to develop a global university? The action is needed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems. While it must be ensured that the university is for the global definite（是destination么） instead of be controlled by some developed countries.To begin with, many social problems which most countries around the world is facing due to the human nature that have lasted thousands of years long.（这句话有问题，缩写成了problem is facing，而且复合句多用带逗号的分句比较好，不然太南读了） They can not be solved by the power of one country or in a short period. For example, although large numbers of countries have done function to deal with the problem（have constantly been struggling against officials' corruption but it  ） but corruption is still found everyday both in the richest countries and the poorest ones. This is because the phenomenon is from the greedy nature of all human beings. As a whole, all nations have plentiful persistent problems to share.(你既然强调了问题后面的人性是相同的，就应该说各国的问题的表象是不同的，形成对比。但是这句和很多问题不是一个国家可以解决的不连贯）

To deal with the shared social problems, a global university can provide several kinds of benefits（merit，advantage）. First, it brings understanding between（amang） different nations by taking people all around the world together. It could diminish the disappreciation which may cause wars.(这个论点是不是走题了，标题是解决全球的顽疾，和加强交流，避免战争没关系，不过可以说成可以解决一些因为误解产生的痼疾，the Israeli-Arabic confliction，the hatred between Christain and Islam) Second, it offers diverse experiences thoughts, and methods from all nations. Numerous of examples from different areas and different thinking manner could expand the view sight of the students to know better(to have a 3-dimension view) about the human beings. What is more, （by the cooperation of student from diverse countries不然解释不过去）the global university could call nation's attention to try to solve the problems together. To solve the world's most persistent social problems, a global university is significant.To develop a global university, supporting from all nations is needed. (前面是各国的支持，后面是多种调查方式，怎么联系到一起的？)Investigation as many forms as possible can help integrity(integrate) the realization(s) of a problem. The nation could benefit from the research result to help solving its own problems. What is more, establishing an understanding with others by solving the common problems can afford a harmonious international condition that all nations develop together.(上一段不是说过了么) The action to take part in the university itself is to solve social problems.

（这一段重写吧，先明确分论点是甚么，怎么感觉四句四个论点，还有重复前文的）However, because of the unbalance development between nations, the global countries may gradually become a(the) implement of the developed countries. So at the same time to develop the research level of the global university, some action must be made to prevent it be controlled by the powerful countries. As long as it bring help to solve problems, it is better to have collaboration than none.

（However, in the light of the scholar and economic difference among different countries, the universal college might be, purposely or not, to be dominated by several developed countries in short term. If don’t take effort to avoid, the original intension will be challenged and the college will lost its specialization.）

In sum, to solve some common social problems shared（suffered） by all human beings, a global university is significant. It is through supporting of all nations provide to develop it.（看不懂）

怎么今天的语言特别差？
论点结构不清晰啊，应该是被语言所拖累，附上提纲不知道是不是好一点