Issue111 my first issue practice

Francis07UID: 2185659

Issue111 The worldwide distribution of television programs and advertisements is seriously diminishing the differences among cultures.

(红笔为写作时写错的词，觉得例子不太好举，主题也不太好把握)
A culture of one nation is shaped by its people by hundreds of years, by one generation laying a brick upon another.  A culture of a nation is the Great Wall of China, the Arc De Triompheof France, the White House of America and the Pyramid of Egypt.  With its colorful history background, a culture of a particular nation is definitely not easy to be assimilated or even removed by another culture of a very different nation by any method, let alone televisions or advertisements.

Even when a nation is disappeared from the world, its particular culture will still remain among us.  This can be approved by the true evidences (铁证) in history that in Tsing Dynasty of Man races who defeated the Han races of Ming Dynasty and usurp the throne in Chinese history, Emperor Kangxi's best policy is to sustain the culture of Ming Dynasty and employ Han races as important administrators, such as Peigong Zhou.  This policy makes the two races with different cultures live harmoniously.  And Kangxi became the Emperor who is in office the longest (中国史上在位最长的皇帝).

Admittedly, the widespread of multimedia and fast development of IT industry is making people, even living on the different continents, closer to each other.  The invention of IPTV is even more convenience for its users to choose whatever program they would like to watch.  One could easily get information about another's culture.  It is very common to buy Chinese dumpling or Italy pasta in an American supermarket.  More and more Chinese people are changing their reserved nature to a more opening one due to the influence of Western movies and so on.

It is true that people don't care much about culture differences nowadays.  And they are curious to learn something different, interesting, thrilling and even terrifying.  It is human nature of curiosity that causes them to probe into different cultures with great interest.  But the less care for the differences among cultures does not mean that these differences will be diminished eventually.  Actually, it is the differences among cultures that help a nation culture grow mature.  And it is just the differences among cultures that make the world colorful and exiting.

Through differences, people see their advantages and disadvantages with a three-dimensional perspective on issues (立体的).  This really helps them to complement what they lack and further develop what they already advantages.  The ancient Chinese didn't realize this point and closed all its harbors for foreigner to trade, which leads to their lack of knowledge of the outside world and finally the failure of the wars against intruders.  While the Europeans developed bombs and rifles on the basis of Chinese great invention of dynamite and developed them into powerful weapons, which helped them win the wars.  It is the bravery to acknowledge the shortcomings and the efforts paid to change the circumstance that develops a nation much a stronger one.  In this aspect, Japan is a good example, who developed into the world 5th strongest commercial country even after the great destruction of the Second World War.

In a word, culture differences can never disappear/vanish/dissolve.  Questions rise up every minute in every day.  But this is never a terrible thing to accept differences among nations because a nation itself needs them.  The judge of "the world widespread multimedia is diminishing these differences" is definitely not correct.  However, this great method of multimedia which is getting people closer to each other and easier for them to contact has really helped the nations to develop faster.  People get information faster and learn the advanced knowledge of other cultures more quickly than the past days.  The internet is helping millions and thousands of scientists, politics, workers, doctors, etc. to know what's new today and improve their work and make their judge in a more serious way.

The Utopia is hard to realize.  But the harmonious atmosphere and the fierce (激烈的) rival among nations is due to these different cultures.  The distribution of multi-media is not diminishing the differences among nations but stimulating the development of them.

After all, one's deepest love from the bottom of his heart is always his love of his own nation.  Everything learnt from the differences is to develop his motherland a better place.  Then on the macro aspect, the world develops with its nation elements.



[ 本帖最后由 Francis07 于 2007-7-17 15:13 编辑 ]

00夏花UID: 2211278

A culture of one nation is shaped by its people by hundreds of years, by one generation laying a brick upon another.  A culture of a nation is the Great Wall of China, the Arc De Triompheof France, the White House of America and the Pyramid of Egypt.  With its colorful history background, a culture of a particular nation is definitely not easy to be assimilated or even removed by another culture of a very different nation by any method, let alone televisions or advertisements.这一段不错，有充分却简洁的例子，最后一句也点到了题目上，提醒读者要开始讲电视和广告的影响。Even when a nation is disappeared from the world, its particular culture will still remain among us.  This can be approved by the true evidences (铁证) in history that in Tsing Dynasty of Man races who defeated the Han races of Ming Dynasty and usurp the throne in Chinese history, Emperor Kangxi's best policy is to sustain the culture of Ming Dynasty and employ Han races as important administrators, such as Peigong Zhou.  This policy makes the two races with different cultures live harmoniously.  And Kangxi became the Emperor who is in office the longest (中国史上在位最长的皇帝).  论证了一个国家或民族的文化是不会随便就磨灭掉，这里最好再具体说一下到底清朝怎样延续了汉族的文化和精神Admittedly, the widespread of multimedia and fast development of IT industry is making people, even living on the different continents, closer to each other.  The invention of IPTV is even more convenience for its users to choose whatever program they would like to watch.  One could easily get information about another's culture.  It is very common to buy Chinese dumpling or Italy pasta in an American supermarket.  买饺子跟电视和媒体的发展这之间的关系比较间接，可以在中间补充，大家从电视里了解到别的国家的吃文化，然后自己也到超市去买More and more Chinese people are changing their reserved nature to a more opening one due to the influence of Western movies and so on.这里就写得帖题It is true that people don't care much about culture differences nowadays.  And they are curious to learn something different, interesting, thrilling and even terrifying.  It is human nature of curiosity that causes them to probe into different cultures with great interest.  But the less care for the differences among cultures does not mean that these differences will be diminished eventually.  Actually, it is the differences among cultures that help a nation culture grow mature.  And it is just the differences among cultures that make the world colorful and exiting. 这一段论证得精彩，一般来讲，从人性的角度去论证，总是有深度且不会跑题的。。Through differences, people see their advantages and disadvantages with a three-dimensional perspective on issues (立体的).  This really helps them to complement what they lack and further develop what they already advantages.  The ancient Chinese didn't realize this point and closed all its harbors for foreigner to trade, which leads to their lack of knowledge of the outside world and finally the failure of the wars against intruders.  While the Europeans developed bombs and rifles on the basis of Chinese great invention of dynamite and developed them into powerful weapons, which helped them win the wars.  It is the bravery to acknowledge the shortcomings and the efforts paid to change the circumstance that develops a nation much a stronger one.  In this aspect, Japan is a good example, who developed into the world 5th strongest commercial country even after the great destruction of the Second World War.似乎这段有些离题吧。。。也许楼主是想把话题发展一下，可是题目却是TV和AD，这里似乎一点都不着边儿。我也不确定。
In a word, culture differences can never disappear/vanish/dissolve.  Questions rise up every minute in every day.  But this is never a terrible thing to accept differences among nations because a nation itself needs them.  The judge of "the world widespread multimedia is diminishing these differences" is definitely not correct.  However, this great method of multimedia which is getting people closer to each other and easier for them to contact has really helped the nations to develop faster.  People get information faster and learn the advanced knowledge of other cultures more quickly than the past days.  The internet is helping millions and thousands of scientists, politics, workers, doctors, etc. to know what's new today and improve their work and make their judge in a more serious way.总体来讲。。语言不错，就是有时候发展得过了点火，提醒楼主最好多看看题目的要求，根据题目限定的范围来论证，且论证充分

Francis07UID: 2185659

多谢夏花了，我刚刚开始还有很多要学习的地方，欢迎拍砖。
我的那段主要是想题一下各国不同文化中都有好的值得吸取的地方和不好的应该摒弃的地方，关于这一点我想不出有什么更好的例子。
我觉得例子不太好举。
总之多谢啦。